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Tone of voice

Macmillan’s writing guidelines

Tone of Voice 1

Macmillan’s writing guidelines 1

How we write 2

Personal, inspiring, straightforward, active 2

What personal looks like 2

What inspiring looks like 3

What straightforward looks like 3

What active looks like 5

What else to consider 5

Positive yet realistic 5

Writing about people and cancer 6

Real people, real stories 9

Writing in a conversational style 10

Sight, sound, smell, taste, touch 12

Different audiences, different channels 12

Our style guide 19

The legal bits 20

Top style tips 22

Here’s some we made earlier 23

Further reading 25

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How we write

The way we write (and talk) is a key part of Macmillan’s personality – and helps to build

our brand. Our ‘voice’ is an important tool for helping people understand who we are and

what we do. It helps them to trust us, encourages them to use us, and inspires them to get

involved.

With lots of different people writing on behalf of Macmillan, it’s essential that we

demonstrate one voice – one that’s consistent, and easy to understand. So when people

read our communications they feel confident that we know what we’re talking about.

Our style is simple. We talk clearly, and honestly. We say how things really are – but

always offer ways to help. We talk as a friend would, with warmth and encouragement.

We’re also passionate – we’re speaking on behalf of millions of people and when we need

to speak out – to get attention, change minds, and raise funds – we must be loud.

Everything from the annual report to a two line email should be written in the Macmillan

style.

Personal, inspiring,

straightforward and active

Writing for Macmillan Well, we want you to think P.I.S.A. Not the city famous for its

leaning tower but our guiding principles: Personal, Inspiring, Straightforward and

Active. These principles help make Macmillan’s ‘tone of voice’.

What personal looks like

We’re inclusive. One in three people will get cancer. They’re people from all walks of life

and all cultures and we want to reach them all. We want people to know that they can get

involved with us or turn to us no matter who they are. We want them to join our gang. To

do this, we use personal language.

We treat people as individuals. Whenever we write something, we think of it as a one-toone

between us and the reader. And we think the reader’s much more likely to stay

interested in what we’re saying if we’re direct and refer to them as ‘you’. Wouldn’t you

agree So say, ‘you can make a difference’ rather than, ‘people who donate money to

Macmillan can make a difference.

We also try to bring the services we offer to life by focusing on the people who actually

provide them. That means we don’t talk about our helpline service – we talk about the

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experts on the end of the phone. And we talk about the people, not the product – this

makes it so much warmer.

We use quotes and case studies. Want your writing to paint a real picture Then use a

quote from a real person. It’s one of the best ways to make your message strikes a chord.

But it’s important to pick quotes that work hard. Look for ones that are emotive, succinct

and express personal feelings. For instance, here’s someone with cancer talking about

how he struggles to pay his heating bills:

‘You can really feel the cold when you have cancer. But often I have to leave the heating

off.’

‘I’m already wearing two pairs of trousers, two jumpers and a woolly hat indoors, and the

worst of the winter is yet to come. Sometimes I go to bed during the day rather than put

the heating on.’

To find the quote that’s right for you, just head to our online library.

What inspiring looks like

We speak from the heart. If we want to convince people to join us, then we need to speak

about what we stand for with belief, determination and conviction. We need to show what

a passionate bunch we are. We need to use inspiring language.

We are fearless. We’re never afraid to say when we think something’s fantastic and when

we think something isn’t. So don’t hold back. For instance, you could say, ‘Volunteers. We

love them. We couldn’t do what we do without them’. Or you could even say, ‘Thousands

of people with cancer are struggling to pay their fuel bills. It’s simply not fair. That’s why

we’re calling on the government to help people with cancer stay warm without the worry.’

Remember – if you’re pointing out a problem make sure you suggest a solution too.

We grab attention. We use language that’s bold, rousing and engaging. You’ll see this

style in most of our fundraising materials. For example, ‘You see, we’re not bashful. Our

services are brilliant. That’s what we’re told and that’s what we always strive for them to

be. But, and you might have seen this coming, there aren’t enough of them out there

changing people’s lives – which is where you come in.’

We avoid exclamation marks. They’re not big, they’re not clever. Don’t be fooled into

thinking that they’ll make your writing inspirational. As F Scott Fitzgerald once said,

exclamation marks are like laughing at your own jokes. So, use them sparingly, and only if

you’re absolutely sure you need a big effect. If in doubt, just say no.

What straightforward looks like

Oftentimes workforce members scribe in a manner that the layman may find somewhat

impenetrable.

Translation: Sometimes we write in a way that might confuse your average Joe. That’s

why it’s so important to use straightforward language.

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We understand that when people are affected by cancer it’s an extremely sensitive time. It

can also be a confusing time. That’s why we need to provide all the information they

require in the clearest and most simple way.

Just follow these handy tips and everyone will catch your drift:

Keep it simple – Always use plain English. This means using short words rather than long

ones. It’s not about dumbing-down – it’s about being easily understood.

Steer clear of jargon – Here at the big, green machine, we’re surrounded by jargon. But

the problem is, those in the know understand – the rest don’t. Anything readers don’t get

makes them feel left out. They may even stop reading. So avoid jargon such as medical

terms whenever you can.

Avoid using acronyms and abbreviations – If you really have to use them, spell them out

the first time they appear eg WBCM (The World’s Biggest Coffee Morning).

Do the Mum Test – When you’ve finished writing something, ask yourself, ‘Would my

mum understand this’ If the answer’s no, you probably need to rewrite it.

Examples

Don’t use

utilise

in order to

ascertain

give consideration to

prior to

commence

assist

at this point in time

Use

use

to

find out

consider

before

start

help

now

… You get the gist.

Don’t use – We raise more than £100m per annum.

Use – We raise more than £100m a year.

Don’t use – I’d like to advise you on our recruitment policy.

Use – I’d like to tell you about how we recruit people.

Don’t use – In the event of a fire, start panicking.

Use – If there’s a fire, start panicking.

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How readable is your writing

To find out how straightforward your copy really is, head to office.microsoft.com , search ‘Test your document’s readability’ and type a bit.

What active looks like

We want to give people energy. The energy to live with cancer. The energy to help others.

And the energy to get involved with Macmillan. A great way to do this is by using active

language.

We don’t just talk about a problem – we suggest a solution. For instance, we say things

like, ‘Two million people are living with cancer in the UK today. We aim to support every

one of them.’

We should always be positive. So don’t use, ‘The government has decided not to make

parking free for people with cancer.’ Use, ‘The government has abandoned its plans to

make parking free for people with cancer.’ Copy is more engaging if it describes

something that is happening rather than something that isn’t.

We love the active

Activity is interesting. So try to write sentences with subjects that are doing things, and not

subjects that are simply having actions done to them. Compare these two sentences:

The mat was sat upon by the cat.

The cat sat on the mat.

The first is an example of what grammar geeks call the passive voice; the second is the

active voice.

Don’t be put off – it’s really very simple.

Active voice: A does B.

Passive voice: B is done (usually by A).

The active voice will make your writing more … well … active. It’s also clearer, more

immediate and uses fewer words. So use it whenever you can.

What else to consider

Positive yet realistic

It’s vital that we are honest. People must trust us.

This means that we must never shy away from writing about things that are difficult and

upsetting. We must be realistic. People need to understand how difficult living with cancer

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can be, and people experiencing cancer need to believe that we understand how they

feel.

To help us understand what people going through cancer really experience, we have a

guide called the ‘communications platform’. It explains people’s feelings in depth and uses

their own words to describe just how difficult things are.

However, we must always – always – also explain what Macmillan, and others, can do to

help. We must never add to people’s level of fear.

Positive. Honest. Realistic. Keep these words in mind when you’re writing about cancer.

Writing about people and cancer

Our work is primarily about people, not a disease.

So when we’re writing about Macmillan, we need to demonstrate that we always put

people affected by cancer at the very heart of our work.

We almost always write about ‘people with cancer’ rather than ‘patients’. This is because

people often tell us that they don’t want to be defined by their illness. If in doubt, avoid

using the term ‘patient’.

Try not to describe people with cancer as having things done to them, as if they are

passive recipients of care and support. Instead, use empowering terms such as ‘people

living with cancer’.

Never use language that suggests people are victims or heroes, such as ‘battling cancer’.

However we do use ‘fight language’ in certain contexts.

We are using fight language because we have been mindful of how real people speak

about their cancer experiences. We’ve listened to the online community, our

professionals, the people we support, and, of course, our supporters. And the fact is that

every day, people are referring to their own experiences as a fight. It’s about restoring

agency during a disempowering time. There are some factors to think about when using

this type of language though:

We now use ‘fight’ in the context of ‘cancer is the toughest fight most of us will

ever face’ and ‘in the fight’, ‘we help PABC in the toughest fight of their lives’.

Using ‘fight’ in these ways is acceptable.

We DO NOT use fight when referring to a winning or losing situation – no one

‘wins the fight against cancer’ and we certainly do NOT wish to imply that

someone ‘lost’ because they didn’t ‘fight hard enough’ or wasn’t enough of a

‘fighter’.

Steer clear of battle, struggle and suffer language when using it to describe the

person’s attitudes or action, this can get very complicated and bogged down in the

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negative. ‘Sue’s struggles weren’t over’ or ‘when she got her blood tests back she

knew she was in for another battle’ or ‘she was ready to battle through the chemo’

are all incorrect and should be avoided.

We also don’t ever say: ‘Macmillan fights cancer’ (like Cancer Research does), it’s

only in the individual context, as in ‘cancer is the toughest fight Mary has ever

faced’ or ‘we’re here to help support Mary in the toughest fight she’ll ever face’. We

don’t fight cancer, we’re not a medical charity, we’re a people-centric charity, so

we offer support to people who are currently in the toughest fight of their lives.

So:

Don’t use

Patients (unless you’re talking about a hospital situation, for example)

Cancer victims

Cancer sufferers

People battling cancer

People fighting cancer

People struggling with cancer

‘All clear’ – as each cancer is different and each person’s recovery time will vary it is best

to avoid the phrase ‘all clear’

Use

People with cancer

People living with cancer

People affected by cancer

People living with and after cancer

People living with and beyond cancer

People getting on with life despite cancer

People with a cancer experience

People whose lives have been changed by cancer

People whose lives have been touched by cancer

Carers / people who look after someone with cancer

Use with care

Cancer survivors

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Definitions

People living with cancer/people with cancer

Those who have been diagnosed with the disease and are currently receiving treatment.

People living with and after cancer/people living with and beyond cancer

Anyone who has been diagnosed with the disease and is still alive; it doesn’t matter

whether they’re receiving treatment or their treatment has ended. This means that ‘two

million people are living with and after cancer in the UK’ can also be written as ‘two million

people living in the UK today have had a cancer diagnosis’.

People affected by cancer/people getting on with life despite cancer/people with a

cancer experience/people whose lives have been changed by cancer/people whose

lives have been touched by cancer

Anyone who is affected by a person’s cancer diagnosis, eg the person with cancer, their

partner, their children etc. If you have the space in your copy using examples of people

who are affected by cancer can often bring this to life for the reader (eg you may be a

carer, a friend, a member of the family)

Carers

A ‘carer’ is an unpaid family member, partner or friend who helps a disabled or frail

person, such as someone with cancer, to cope with daily chores. These could include

cooking meals, washing-up or grocery shopping. We don’t use ‘carer’ to describe

someone who is in a paid caring job or profession.

The term is important because carers are entitled to a range of benefits and services that

depend on them recognising themselves as carers.

It is often advisable when speaking to carers to use the phrase ‘people looking after

someone with cancer’, as evidence shows carers often do not associate themselves with

that word. In a campaign for carers awareness we defined ‘carer’ in these simple terms,

but with detailed examples of a range of typical carers’ situations, for those unaware of

their status as ‘carer’.

A word about survivorship

What is a ‘cancer survivor’ When should we use the term Does everyone know what it

means

A ‘cancer survivor’ is someone who isn’t in the terminal phase of the illness. In other

words, we mean someone living with and beyond cancer.

The truth is that we need to be careful when we use the words ‘survivor’ and ‘survivorship’

because not everyone knows what they mean. Some people also object to the term,

especially if they have a friend/relative who didn’t survive. But if you follow our handy dos

and don’ts below, you can’t go wrong.

Do

Try to use ‘people living with and beyond cancer’ or ‘people living with and after cancer’

rather than ‘cancer survivors’ wherever possible.

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Feel free to use ‘survivor’ and ‘survivorship’ when writing to decision makers, such as

MPs, about our ‘survivorship’ agenda.

If you use the term ‘survivorship’, explain what it means immediately and clearly.

Don’t

Use an upper case S when you write about Macmillan’s work on ‘survivorship’.

Writing about cancer

If it’s necessary to mention death, don’t shy away from it. Acknowledge the fear, pain and

confusion that people affected by cancer can feel – but never use language that might add

to that fear. And always try to explain how Macmillan and other organisations can help.

It’s fine to describe cancer as either an ‘illness’ or a ‘disease’.

But don’t assume people will understand medical terms unless you’re writing for

healthcare professionals. Instead, use common terms, eg ‘skin cancer’ rather than

‘melanoma’. For definitions of medical terms, check out our glossary .

Real people, real stories

We love using people’s quotes and stories at Macmillan. Because individuals are at the

heart of our work.

Quotes and stories help to …

add colour and character

give a personal reaction to a situation

describe feelings

illustrate bald facts

change the pace of a story.

Make sure you use real quotes from real people.

Avoid using quotes that are more than one or two paragraphs long.

For headlines 8 words in the maximum length a quote should be.

Never use a word other than ‘said’ when introducing a quote.

PS Before you use someone else’s words, it’s important that you ask for their permission.

They may have been happy for us to use their story for its original purpose. But that

doesn’t mean they’ll automatically let us use it for something else.

Run the quote past them every time you want to use it. You can do this by getting in touch

with the Macmillan person who supplied you with it. They’ll either contact the kind soul

who gave us the quote or hand you their details so you can.

The chances are they’ll say yes. But don’t forget – ask first.

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Shh! We’re in the library

To find the quote that’s right for you, visit our online library . It’s an easy-touse

stash of photos, videos and stories from people affected by cancer – why not check it

out today We promise there are no borrowing fines.

Writing in a conversational style

By now you’ve probably noticed that Macmillan writes in an informal kind of way. It’s not

just because we’re a bunch of chatterboxes (although we don’t half love a good gas). It’s

because conversational, language is easier to read, and that’s what we’re aiming for.

Follow the tips below and keeping it simple will become … well, simple.

Use contractions. Forget what your English teacher told you about saying ‘it is’ rather than

‘it’s’ and ‘they are’ rather than ‘they’re’. We’re giving you full permission to use

contractions – they’re a great way of making your writing easier to read.

Vary your sentence lengths. Short sentences are the best, so try to avoid any that use

more than 25 words. But mix it up. A combination of long sentences and short sentences

will keep your writing pacy and interesting.

Start sentences with conjunctions. It’s okay, you’re allowed. Beginning a sentence with

‘and’, ‘but’ or ‘so’ is a fantastic way to keep your writing flowing. And it can also make a

sentence stand out. So why not give it a go

Keep it real. Use descriptive words that people can relate to – words that are accessible,

down-to-earth and chatty. Sprinkle your writing with everyday feelings, sounds, tastes and

colours and watch it come to life.

Read what you’ve written out loud. Does it sound natural when you say it Does it flow

easily Is it the sort of language you’d use to chat with a friend If any of these answers

are no, then make a few tweaks and repeat the process.

Advice on adjectives

Keith Waterhouse, the veteran Daily Mirror and Daily Mail columnist, once said,

‘Adjectives should not be allowed unless they have something to say. An adjective should

not raise questions in the reader’s mind, it should answer them. Angry informs. Tall invites

the question, how tall The well-worn phrase: his expensive tastes ran to fast cars simply

whets the appetite for examples of the expensive tastes and the makes and capacity of

the fast cars.’

In other words, if an adjective adds to your copy, it can stay. If not, ditch it. Too many

writers believe that adjectives inevitably add colour and style. Vague ones add nothing.

‘Use specific words (red and blue),’ says Waterhouse, ‘not general ones (brightly

coloured).’

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Advice on abstract nouns

Abstract nouns are things that our five senses can’t detect. We can’t see, hear, taste,

touch or smell them. Try to avoid using abstract nouns as they tend to make writing sound

dry.

Examples of abstract nouns include:

relation

recommendation

improvement

observation

reference

application

development

achievement

Rather than using an abstract noun, try to use the verb root of the noun instead:

relate instead of relation

recommend instead of recommendation

improve instead of improvement

observe instead of observation

refer instead of reference

apply instead of application

develop instead of development

achieve instead of achievement

‘We recommend that you take part’ sounds much livelier than ‘Our recommendation is that

you take part.’

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Sight, sound, smell, touch, taste

Your English teacher may have given you dodgy advice about where a literature degree

could get you. But she had a good point when she said, ‘Liven up your writing by referring

to the senses.’

Try describing what things look, sound, feel, smell and taste like. This is a great way to

paint a picture with your copy, especially if it’s a quote.

Example

‘I was dangerously underweight because of my cancer, so I started drinking special

milkshakes to put on the pounds. But they had a revolting metallic taste which made me

feel sick. Fortunately, my Mac nurse gave me the idea of mixing nutritional powder into

delicious raspberry jelly. Thanks to her, I got back to a healthy weight in no time.’ Linda,

support group member

Different audiences, different channels

We have one tone of voice, and its core principals – personal, inspiring, straightforward,

active – apply to everything we do.

However, there are some variations for different audiences.

For example, when fundraising or campaigning, we write in an inspiring and active way –

demanding action, expecting change. With people affected by cancer, our writing is still

authoritative – so people trust us – but more straightforward.

Specific guidelines – different audiences

People affected by cancer

Clarity is paramount. Keep your copy as straightforward as possible. Imagine you are

speaking to someone.

Pay special attention to sentence length and structure. When a sentence has lots of

numbers, be wary. It may be clearer to break the sentence down. For example: You will

usually be given 2–3 tablets, containing 30mg of the drug, three times a day for 5–6

months would be better as You will be given a dose of tablets three times a day for 5–6

months. Each dose will be 2–3 tablets, each tablet containing 30mg of the drug.

Be sensitive. We write about delicate issues and often need to be gentle and reassuring.

Our normal style encourages the use of ‘you’. In writing about cancer, it’s appropriate to

use a mixture of first and third person, depending on what’s being said. So for difficult

topics, we might say ‘some people find’ rather than ‘you may find’.

Similarly our style discourages use of the passive. However, it may be less frightening –

and more accurate - to sometimes use the passive. So for example ‘a CT scan may be

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used to guide the needle to the right place’ is better than ‘you will have a CT scan to guide

the needle to the right place’.

Macmillan’s house style avoids jargon and acronyms – this is especially important when

talking about health care. Terms such as palliative care aren’t universally understood.

Similarly avoid words that are rarely true: unique (rare is safer), prove (show or

demonstrate), best (define, by what measure) and most of all in a medical context, safe

(no drug is totally safe (use, e.g., fewer side effects)) and cure (consider defining, e.g.

living longer than five years after treatment).

Writing for people at Macmillan

We’re a pretty chilled bunch at Macmillan. So when you’re writing internal

communications, try to sound as though you’re chatting to a mate down the pub – except

without all the swearing.

Example – Staff Stuff poster

Copy

Too old Pah. You try doing what I do. S. Claus

Not many people can pull an all-nighter like Santa. The guy hits the sherry, scoffs mince

pies and still flies around the world, all the while carrying a massive sack on his back. And

to think, because of his age, he could be one of the people told he’s too old for treatment.

Unbelievable, huh So please help us right this wrong by pledging your support for The

Age Old Excuse campaign from 18 December at macmillan.org.uk/ageoldexcuse

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Parliamentarians and policy makers

Our style should be just as clear, and universal. And even more passionate. However, we

also need to acknowledge how important these audiences are to us – and thank them for

what they’ve done.

We also need to use even more facts and figures for this audience – it’s what they

respond to and helps us drive forward our arguments to change things for the better.

And we may use terms such as ‘survivorship’ that this audience fully understand.

Professionals

Like parliamentarians – we can use terms that this audience fully knows and understands,

like palliative care. But it’s a good idea to explain the term, or put it in context, to ensure

every reader is clear. When talking to professionals it’s a good idea to imagine we’re

talking to a business partner as opposed to having a chat with a friend. That means

dialling down the inspiring and personal tone in our writing and dialling up the

straightforward.

Specific guidelines – different channels

Writing for the web

Ready to put cursor to screen Before you start chiselling away at sub-clauses and

semicolons, have a quick squiz at our handy hints …

There are some quick and easy tips to remember that can help improve your web writing

skills. For example, people tend to read website pages in an F-shaped pattern. So make

sure you put all your important info first.

And keep your copy as short and as sharp as possible – stick to 250 words or fewer per

page.

Remember: short paragraphs = good – long paragraphs = bad. One-sentence paras are

fine for the web.

Bullet points, lists and subheadings are a great way to break up your web copy.

And, finally, don’t use boring old ‘click here’ to direct people to another page.

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News and feature articles

News article intros

As Tony Harcup puts it in Journalism, Principles and Practice, ‘A well-written intro will

encourage the reader to stay with you on the strength of the information and the angle you

have started with.’

Your intro needs to engage the reader instantly and sum up what your story is about.

A good intro should announce the most important, newest, most interesting, most

attention-grabbing aspect of your story.

It’s not a summary of everything yet to come. The best intros contain two or three facts

max.

Example

A police officer is under investigation after he lost a gun when he drove off with it still on

the roof of his car.

The rest of your story

Once you’ve nailed your intro, it’s time to amplify your story, adding new info, providing

detail and using quotes.

Journalism students are taught about the five Ws: who, what, when, where and why.

These are a handy tool to check you’ve covered all the bases.

Feature article intros

These will often set the scene, rather than giving a solid reason why the reader should be

interested (the hook or angle).

Example

Is the Royal Veterinary College café the weirdest in Britain Jonathan Glancey has a

delightful cuppa surrounded by the skulls and bones of dead animals.

The rest of your story

Feature articles often provide more atmosphere, emotion and colour than news articles.

They can paint a picture and take the reader to the scene of events.

Features often include the following elements:

an analysis of news, eg an article about healthcare cuts

detailed description to give readers an insight into something they don’t have firsthand

experience of, eg a heart-rending description of someone suffering in a

hospital

a different slant on something the reader will already know, eg a view from Ciarán

in a Macmillan newsletter

a summing up at the end, often looking to the future and calling for action.

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Here’s some we made earlier

Freeze out fuel poverty campaign

Here, the headline immediately grabs the reader’s attention. And the design – a hot water

bottle and a thermometer that actually measures the temperature – brings the copy to life.

Using the thermometer helps the writer clearly explain, and demonstrate in a tangible way,

the impact that the cold can have such on those living with cancer. The leaflet lets people

know, simply and clearly, that if you’re one of the people affected then we are there for

you.

In the flyer to promote the campaign there’s the all-important quote. Our advice is, use

quotes sparingly but powerfully, keeping them short and to-the-point. Which is exactly

what the writer does here. The quote doesn’t repeat information already provided in the

flyer. Rather, it paints an emotive picture, using details such as what George wears to

really hook the reader.

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Example – ‘Not Alone’ campaign ads

Our new brand ads are all about spreading the message that ‘no one should face cancer

alone’. And it asks everyone to join the Macmillan team and help make sure no one has

to.

The simple but emotive language of the ads works well with the everyday nature of the

items used to show how cancer affects our everyday lives. Making it personal by

mentioning people the reader may know powerfully gets across the message that, from

best friends to work friends, we want to be there for everyone affected by cancer.

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It’s also good to note how effectively the writer uses devices such as repetition to really

engage the reader.

Repetition can give structure to your writing. Repetition taps into the part of our brain that

loves rhyme and meter. Repetition pulls the reader into the flow of your copy, here with

the word ‘no’. Repetition isn’t difficult to use. But … repetition is annoying if overused.

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Writing headlines

A headline is the first thing a reader sees so it needs to command attention. It needs to

make someone read on. It needs to be written with care.

Whether you’re writing an ad or a flyer, a web page or a letter, your headline should be

captivating and it should scream Macmillan. But how do you do it Follow the tips below

and you won’t go far wrong.

Make verbs your friends. Beginning a headline with an active verb will make it dynamic

and involving as well as encouraging the reader to act. For instance, ‘Do something

amazing. Join us.’

Ask a question. If you want to instantly engage your reader, why not turn your headline

into a question For example, this headline was used on a brochure for people planning

their wedding: ‘Want your big day to give more good days to people affected by cancer’

Surprise with stats. We’ve got some mind-boggling numbers knocking around at

Macmillan. Statistics can often create intrigue, so why not include one in your headline

For example, here’s a headline for the Longest Day Golf Challenge: ‘72 holes. 300 shots.

20 miles. Have you got what it takes’

Keep it short and sweet. We don’t want our readers to get bored. If a headline’s long or

complicated, they may lose interest and head off to look at something else. So it has to be

short, succinct and snappy. For example, the headline for an article about a challenge

event was, ‘Blood, sweat and cheers.’

Be provocative. We want people to read our writing and stop in their tracks. A great way to

do this is by using a shocking headline. One staff poster which encouraged people to take

heed of health and safety rules said, ‘Warning! Setting fire to your colleagues can be

hazardous’. It divided opinion, but it was a great headline because people stopped what

they were doing to read it.

Our style guide

As a leading charity, people listen to what we say. If we make mistakes, or are

inconsistent, it’ll have an impact on our credibility.

That’s why we have a ‘house style’. This includes how to write certain words and phrases,

how to show numbers and dates, and when to use capital letters and other useful

information.

It also explains why we avoid certain words in our general language – such as ‘patient’,

‘heroism’, ‘remission’ or ‘cure’.

Don’t worry, you don’t have to remember it all. We’ve put together a fabulous guide to all

things wordy – from abbreviations to the spelling of zeitgeist, our style guide has the

answers.

You can access the style guide here.

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The legal bits

Using our name, charity numbers, and company details

The first time you write our name in a communication, write it in full: Macmillan Cancer

Support. After that, you can just use Macmillan. (Never abbreviate to MCS.)

You must put Macmillan's full name and registered charity numbers on all communication

materials and resources:

Macmillan Cancer Support, registered charity in England and Wales (261017), Scotland

(SC039907) and the Isle of Man (604).

Here’s our full legal statement and registered company information. We need to put this

on websites, emails (this is done automatically for you), letterheads and faxes, as well as

on all official, financial and legal items, e.g. purchase orders and annual reports.

You may not use only the English number. All numbers must be used at every use.

Macmillan Cancer Support, registered charity in England and Wales (261017), Scotland

(SC039907) and the Isle of Man (604). A company limited by guarantee. Registered

company in England and Wales (2400969) and the Isle of Man (4694F). Registered office:

89 Albert Embankment, London SE1 7UQ. (Welsh translation available.)

If you need help deciding whether your material should contain the statement, please

email legal@macmillan.org.uk

Copyright

All Macmillan publications should carry a copyright statement. This includes the copyright

symbol, our full name and the month and year of publication.

© Macmillan Cancer Support, July 2012

Gift Aid

Gift Aid is a scheme that enables charities to claim, from HM Revenue & Customs, the tax

that supporters have paid on their donations. Whenever you ask people to give money,

you should ask them to confirm they are taxpayers and ‘Gift Aid it’.

This is the latest Gift Aid text to use in your communications:

Do you pay tax If so your gift will be worth almost a quarter more to us – at no extra cost

to you.

All you have to do is tick the box below, and the tax office will give 25p for every pound

you give. We will only use your details to claim Gift Aid.

Please treat all the donations I make or have made to Macmillan Cancer Support in the

last 4 years as Gift Aid donations, until I notify you otherwise.

I confirm I have paid or will pay an amount of Income Tax and/or Capital Gains Tax in

each tax year, that is at least equal to the tax that Charities & CASCs I donate to will

reclaim on my gifts. I understand that other taxes such as VAT and Council Tax do not

qualify and that Macmillan Cancer Support will reclaim 25p of tax on every £1 that I give.

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If you need any more information on Gift Aid such as when to use it or how to use it,

please contact Macmillan’s Supporter Services department (email

supporterservices@macmillan.org.uk|), your regional Gift Aid Champion, or see the Gift

Aid section on the green rooms (Macmillan’s intranet).

Data Protection

We all have the right to know how our personal contact details will be stored and used. So

don't forget to feature Macmillan's data protection statement on any

communication/resource that asks for someone’s name, address and/or phone details.

For more information on data protection, and the correct statements to use, please

contact Macmillan’s Supporter Services department (email

supporterservices@macmillan.org.uk|), or see the Data Protection section on the green

rooms (Macmillan’s intranet).

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Top style tips

Hold your horses – before you start typing away, have a think about what your reader

wants to know – not just what you want to tell them.

Sort out your sentences – Avoid using more than 25 words per sentence. And you’ll need

to mix it up to keep it interesting, so vary the length of your sentences and the words they

begin with too.

It’s all about you – Try to call your reader ‘you’, even if you’re talking to more than one

person. Eg say ‘you can get involved’ rather than ‘supporters can get involved’.

Don’t forget contractions – Words such as ‘won’t’, ‘you’ll’ and ‘we’ll’ will make your copy

sound friendlier.

Looking good – subheadings, quotes, bullet points and boxes of text draw people into the

page and make it look more interesting.

Three is the magic number – Humans are predisposed to like the number three. We

dunno why – they just are. So when you write, list things in threes to make your words

easy on the ear.

And finally – it’s fine to start sentences with joining words such as ‘and’, ‘but’ and ‘so’.

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Here’s some we made earlier

Example – The little green book of fundraising ideas

The little green book of fundraising ideas knocked everyone’s socks off when it was

published, and was showered with industry awards. Well, technically, just the one award,

but who’s counting

And why did it make such an impact Well, just look at the copy. It’s fun and it’s

unexpected. For instance, it says, ‘It has loads of information about how to turn you event

into a bobby dazzler.’ And when it comes to describing things, the writer has chosen to

avoid tired clichés and be original, for example, ‘Have a read through and jot down any

ideas that sound more fun than Christmas morning for a five-year-old and look like

potential money-spinners.’

Spending a little time making your writing descriptive and fun really pays off – it keeps

people reading and stops them dozing off. So don’t always go for the obvious option. Try

to use language that stands out. If in doubt, just think ‘bobby dazzler’.

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Example – Pass it on card

Simplicity and positivity – that’s Macmillan all over. And this little Pass it on card

demonstrates it admirably. Designed to fit snugly into our cute Macmillan Support Line

travel wallet, the copy had to be short, sweet and effective.

It achieves this through using simple language that doesn’t go over the top. For example,

it says what the Macmillan Support Line does, no more, no less. Then it appeals directly

to the reader (‘you’), saying how they can help make a difference. It feels like a real oneto-one

between the writer and the reader. And the pièce de résistance The subtly-written

– yet hard-hitting – final line that makes the reader feel like a key part of our movement:

‘Together, we can make a real difference’.

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Further reading

In a crowded field, these stand out:

The Guardian style guide

The Plain English Campaign

Essential English for Journalists, Editors and Writers, Harold Evans

Eats, Shoots & Leaves: The Zero Tolerance Approach to Punctuation, Lynn Truss

Confessions of an Advertising Man, David Ogilvy

Write to Sell: The Ultimate Guide to Great Copywriting, Andy Maslen

The Copy Book, Alastair Crompton

Journalism Principles and Practice, Tiny Harcup

The Universal Journalist, David Randall

Happy reading!

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