ELLP Years1-4 - ESOL - Literacy Online - Te Kete Ipurangi

This text is an example of “mirror writing”, where the learner has copied what the teacher has
written. This technique can be used with very new writers. The learner’s script is on and off the
lines, but their letter formation is clear.
Bikes (1)
Task: To write a factual description of a bike, explaining what bikes are used for and whether you
think bikes are important and why
Topic development – The writer shares their enthusiasm for bikes through a short text containing two ideas:
that the writer likes bikes and that the reader should ride one.
Sentence development
and language
structures
Vocabulary
development
– There are three sentences. The first is a simple sentence, correct except that it should
either say “bikes” or “my bike”. The second shows an attempt at expansion using the
word because. The third sentence is incomplete because it does not contain a verb.
– The learner shows an understanding of subject–verb–object word order.
– All the words are high frequency.
– The word bike is repeated several times.
– The writer attempts to use linking vocabulary (first).
Script control – Letter formation is mostly clear and on the lines.
– A lower-case f is used to begin the last sentence.
Editing, spelling, and
punctuation
– There is evidence of the writer rubbing out letters and correcting them.
– All words are spelt correctly.
– Full stops are used correctly.
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