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<str<strong>on</strong>g>Tips</str<strong>on</strong>g> <strong>on</strong> <strong>Improv<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>teach<strong>in</strong>g</strong> <strong>skills</strong><br />

<strong>in</strong> <strong>Sentence</strong> Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

by Stella Liao<br />

Keelung Municipal Jh<strong>on</strong>gshan Senior High School<br />

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C<strong>on</strong>tents<br />

• Introducti<strong>on</strong> of Teach<strong>in</strong>g Procedures<br />

• Read<strong>in</strong>g Activity<br />

• From Read<strong>in</strong>g to <strong>Sentence</strong> Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

• From <strong>Sentence</strong> Writ<strong>in</strong>g to Guided Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

• Ways of Correct<strong>in</strong>g <strong>Sentence</strong> Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

• Ways of Correct<strong>in</strong>g Guided Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

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Teach<strong>in</strong>g Purpose<br />

• (1) provide simple and <strong>in</strong>terest<strong>in</strong>g methods<br />

for sentence <strong>teach<strong>in</strong>g</strong> that make reluctant<br />

writers feel more comfortable <strong>in</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />

• (2) to c<strong>on</strong>nect sentence writ<strong>in</strong>g and guided<br />

writ<strong>in</strong>g with two sentence structures.<br />

• (3) provide simple ways of correct<strong>in</strong>g<br />

writ<strong>in</strong>g that reduce <strong>teach<strong>in</strong>g</strong> pressure <strong>in</strong><br />

class.<br />

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Text difficulty level:<br />

Elementary<br />

Intermediate (San-M<strong>in</strong>g Publisher, B1L3)<br />

Upper-Intermediate<br />

Advanced<br />

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<str<strong>on</strong>g>Tips</str<strong>on</strong>g> <strong>on</strong> <strong>Improv<strong>in</strong>g</strong><br />

your memory<br />

Teach<strong>in</strong>g<br />

Procedure<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong><br />

Pattern<br />

Abstract<br />

Gerunds<br />

The more..<br />

Guided<br />

Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong><br />

rewrit<strong>in</strong>g<br />

F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g<br />

mistakes<br />

Correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

<strong>Sentence</strong><br />

writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

translati<strong>on</strong>s<br />

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Read<strong>in</strong>g Activity<br />

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Present<strong>in</strong>g the Text<br />

Pre-Read<strong>in</strong>g Activity<br />

• Read a set of numbers<br />

and ask students to<br />

memorize it.<br />

• Check how many students<br />

can remember all the<br />

numbers correctly.<br />

• Bra<strong>in</strong>storm. Ss freely<br />

express “how” they<br />

memorized these items.<br />

• Share the useful memory<br />

tips from the text.<br />

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<str<strong>on</strong>g>Tips</str<strong>on</strong>g> <strong>on</strong> <strong>Improv<strong>in</strong>g</strong> your Memory<br />

□Tip 1: Set realistic goal.<br />

□ Tip 2: Stay mentally active.<br />

□ Tip 3: Cut down <strong>on</strong> activities that<br />

d<strong>on</strong>’t require you to th<strong>in</strong>k.<br />

□ Tip 4: Read more.<br />

□ Tip 5: Teach others what you know.<br />

□ Tip 6: Improve your vocabulary.<br />

□ Tip 7: Get <strong>in</strong>to the habit of tak<strong>in</strong>g<br />

notes<br />

*Check if I follow the rules <strong>in</strong> learn<strong>in</strong>g.<br />

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Dur<strong>in</strong>g Read<strong>in</strong>g Activity<br />

Theme of the less<strong>on</strong>:<br />

1. The less<strong>on</strong> describes some tips for<br />

improv<strong>in</strong>g the memory;<br />

2. another theme c<strong>on</strong>cerns how students can<br />

use these tips <strong>in</strong> their studies to make<br />

learn<strong>in</strong>g more effective.<br />

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Dur<strong>in</strong>g Read<strong>in</strong>g Activity<br />

Students’ Role:<br />

• Be <strong>in</strong> charge of <strong>on</strong>e tip for improv<strong>in</strong>g the memory,<br />

• Discuss the relevant examples.<br />

• Figure out the most useful tip with examples.<br />

• A spokespers<strong>on</strong> presents the results of their<br />

discussi<strong>on</strong>.<br />

The teacher’s Role<br />

• corrects errors <strong>in</strong> the presentati<strong>on</strong>s,<br />

• teaches the key ideas of the text,<br />

• <strong>in</strong>troduces essential sentence<br />

• patterns to the class.<br />

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<str<strong>on</strong>g>Tips</str<strong>on</strong>g> of<br />

Abstract<br />

self-evaluati<strong>on</strong><br />

peer-evaluati<strong>on</strong><br />

With checklist<br />

Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

highlight ma<strong>in</strong> ideas<br />

Write them down<br />

Close the book<br />

Checklists<br />

□key sentence<br />

□with proper pers<strong>on</strong><br />

□with proper tense<br />

□with transiti<strong>on</strong>al<br />

words<br />

□rewrite the sentence<br />

Rewrite<br />

Comb<strong>in</strong>e sentences<br />

With c<strong>on</strong>juncti<strong>on</strong>s<br />

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Checklists<br />

□with key sentences<br />

□with proper pers<strong>on</strong>s<br />

□with proper tenses<br />

□with transiti<strong>on</strong>al words<br />

□rewrite the sentences<br />

3 Positive commands:<br />

_______________________<br />

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<str<strong>on</strong>g>Tips</str<strong>on</strong>g> <strong>in</strong> <strong>teach<strong>in</strong>g</strong> the abstract<br />

• usage of the recycl<strong>in</strong>g paper time<br />

sav<strong>in</strong>g.<br />

• Usage of Checklists help Ss be aware<br />

of the writ<strong>in</strong>g procedure.<br />

• Usage of peer evaluati<strong>on</strong> Practice<br />

makes perfect, <strong>in</strong>stead of Correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

makes depressi<strong>on</strong><br />

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From Read<strong>in</strong>g to <strong>Sentence</strong> writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

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Teach<strong>in</strong>g<br />

Procedure<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong><br />

Patterns<br />

Gerunds<br />

The more…,<br />

The more….<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong><br />

Rewrit<strong>in</strong>g<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong><br />

mak<strong>in</strong>g<br />

F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g<br />

Mistakes Translati<strong>on</strong>s<br />

Standard<br />

of JECC<br />

Selected<br />

correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

Checklist<br />

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Ss write their favorite<br />

sentence <strong>on</strong> the board.<br />

Ss’ Learn<strong>in</strong>g<br />

Process<br />

Ss do the presentati<strong>on</strong><br />

<strong>in</strong> class.<br />

Ss fill <strong>in</strong> their answers<br />

of the worksheet with<br />

the checklist<br />

Students are tra<strong>in</strong>ed to be familiar<br />

to the use of this sentence practice.<br />

The teacher checks the<br />

exercise <strong>in</strong> open class<br />

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1.Gerund “V-<strong>in</strong>g + V+ O.”<br />

1-1.<strong>Sentence</strong> Rewrit<strong>in</strong>g<br />

• Directi<strong>on</strong>s:<br />

• 4 <strong>in</strong> <strong>on</strong>e group.<br />

• do the exercise before the class.<br />

• exchange homework.<br />

• Peer-evaluati<strong>on</strong>.(checklist)<br />

• The teacher elicits this<br />

sentence pattern<br />

expla<strong>in</strong>s the essential<br />

c<strong>on</strong>cepts.<br />

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<strong>Sentence</strong> Rewrit<strong>in</strong>g: <str<strong>on</strong>g>Tips</str<strong>on</strong>g> of the<br />

checklist Edit<br />

Ss do the pre-tests of<br />

sentence patterns.<br />

The teacher comb<strong>in</strong>es the<br />

general grammar mistakes<br />

of Ss.<br />

Checklist of Gerunds:<br />

Group: Name: No. ___<br />

Excellent Good Below Average<br />

□ □ □ VV<strong>in</strong>g<br />

□ □ □ V-<strong>in</strong>g+<br />

S<strong>in</strong>gle verb +O.(or S+V+ V-<strong>in</strong>g)<br />

□ □ □ <strong>Sentence</strong><br />

complete with high level of<br />

understand<strong>in</strong>g.<br />

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1-1.Handout:<br />

Explanati<strong>on</strong>s of Gerunds<br />

• 動 名 詞 是 由 「 原 形 動 詞 ┼V<strong>in</strong>g」, 如 runn<strong>in</strong>g,<br />

talk<strong>in</strong>g.<br />

• 動 名 詞 與 不 定 詞 都 是 動 詞 的 演 變 , 雖 有 動 詞 的<br />

樣 子 , 但 已 經 不 再 是 動 詞 , 而 是 「 名 詞 」。<br />

• 基 本 出 現 位 置 : 當 主 詞 、 受 詞 、 與 補 語 。<br />

Learn<strong>in</strong>g danc<strong>in</strong>g is fun. (S)<br />

• 動 名 詞 與 不 定 詞 作 為 名 詞 時 , 都 接 單 數 動 詞 。<br />

E.g. Chatt<strong>in</strong>g to with them improves my m<strong>in</strong>d.<br />

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1-1. Handout:<br />

Examples:<br />

Explanati<strong>on</strong>s of Gerunds<br />

• I must _____ mak<strong>in</strong>g mistakes aga<strong>in</strong>.<br />

• He _____ hav<strong>in</strong>g seen the man before.<br />

• 他 延 遲 回 信 。<br />

• 他 把 訪 友 的 事 延 後 。<br />

• 我 們 正 考 慮 要 去 參 加 一 些 課 外 活 動 。<br />

• 我 再 也 抗 拒 不 了 了 , 所 以 決 定 打 一 下 午 的 電 動<br />

遊 戲 。<br />

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<strong>Sentence</strong><br />

Rewrit<strong>in</strong>g:<br />

Part C<br />

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1.Gerund “V-<strong>in</strong>g + V+ O.”<br />

1-2. Mak<strong>in</strong>g up <strong>Sentence</strong>s<br />

• Directi<strong>on</strong>s:<br />

• 1. Ss fill <strong>in</strong> their answers of the worksheet<br />

with the checklist <strong>in</strong> class.<br />

• 2. Ss write their favorite sentence <strong>on</strong> the<br />

board.<br />

• 5. The teacher checks the exercise <strong>in</strong> open<br />

class, ask<strong>in</strong>g learners to justify their<br />

answers by the reference <strong>on</strong> their<br />

worksheets.<br />

• 6. Students are tra<strong>in</strong>ed to be familiar to the<br />

use of this sentence practice <strong>in</strong> handy.<br />

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1.Gerund “V-<strong>in</strong>g + V+ O.”<br />

1-2. Mak<strong>in</strong>g up <strong>Sentence</strong>s<br />

Checklist: Name________ No.__<br />

Excellent Good Below Average<br />

□ □ □ V<strong>in</strong>g + s<strong>in</strong>gle verb + O.<br />

□ □ □ The verb tense is c<strong>on</strong>sistent.<br />

□ □ □ <strong>Sentence</strong>s are complete<br />

□ □<br />

of Understand<strong>in</strong>g.<br />

□ <strong>Sentence</strong>s show a high level<br />

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Mak<strong>in</strong>g up<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong>s<br />

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1.Gerund “V-<strong>in</strong>g + V+ O.”<br />

The E-factors<br />

• Ec<strong>on</strong>omy: Checklists help Ss be aware of<br />

the rule directly.<br />

• Efficiency: Ss preview the background<br />

knowledge by do<strong>in</strong>g the exercise at home.<br />

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2.“the more…, the more….”:<br />

2-1.F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g mistakes : Directi<strong>on</strong>s<br />

The teacher deduces<br />

all the sentences<br />

with the target<br />

pattern from the text<br />

Students discuss the<br />

sentences with each other to<br />

f<strong>in</strong>d errors <strong>in</strong> the usage of<br />

the pattern .<br />

The teacher elicits sentence patterns from<br />

the class and corrects errors written<br />

<strong>on</strong> the board by students.<br />

The teacher goes<br />

around the class to help<br />

<strong>in</strong>dividual students with<br />

their problems.<br />

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Error<br />

Modificati<strong>on</strong><br />

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2.“the more…, the more….”:<br />

2-2.Do<strong>in</strong>g Translati<strong>on</strong>s<br />

• Translati<strong>on</strong> <strong>in</strong> Series<br />

• 1 你 愈 了 解 他 , 你 就 會 愈 喜 歡 他 。<br />

• The more you realize him, the more you<br />

like him.<br />

• 2. 一 個 人 的 年 紀 愈 大 , 記 性 就 愈 差 。<br />

• The older a pers<strong>on</strong> grows, the poorer<br />

memory he will have.<br />

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2-3.Def<strong>in</strong>iti<strong>on</strong> of <strong>Sentence</strong> Errors<br />

• Lexical errors: <strong>in</strong>clude<br />

the wr<strong>on</strong>g word order<br />

(Sett<strong>in</strong>g realistic goal is<br />

good for your lie.life)<br />

• Grammar errors:<br />

<strong>in</strong>clude the mistakes <strong>in</strong><br />

verb form, tense, or<br />

adjectives<br />

(Stay<strong>in</strong>g mentally active<br />

makes us more sharp.<br />

shaper)<br />

Lower-leveled Ss<br />

Discourse errors:<br />

relate to the way<br />

sentence are<br />

organized and liked<br />

<strong>in</strong> order to make a<br />

complete text<br />

(Sett<strong>in</strong>g realistic helps<br />

us to do quickly. <br />

everyth<strong>in</strong>g)<br />

Higher-leveled Ss<br />

Freshmen make more<br />

mistakes of lexical and<br />

grammar errors <strong>in</strong> general. 32


<strong>Sentence</strong> Patterns<br />

The E-factors<br />

• Ease: the same format of the geographic<br />

organizer expand<strong>in</strong>g learn<strong>in</strong>g ease the<br />

<strong>teach<strong>in</strong>g</strong> load. (1-2 Mak<strong>in</strong>g up sentences)<br />

• Efficiency: the background knowledge<br />

from the text the new sentence<br />

pattern.<br />

(1-1 sentence rewrit<strong>in</strong>g, 2-1 F<strong>in</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g Errors)<br />

• Ec<strong>on</strong>omy: students can transfer<br />

the sentence pattern to<br />

daily life usage.<br />

(1-2 Mak<strong>in</strong>g up <strong>Sentence</strong>s, 2-2 Do<strong>in</strong>g Translati<strong>on</strong>s)<br />

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From <strong>Sentence</strong> Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

to Guided Writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

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3. Guided Writ<strong>in</strong>g: Self-Introducti<strong>on</strong><br />

• students represent their work, with the<br />

power-po<strong>in</strong>t or the poster, <strong>in</strong> fr<strong>on</strong>t of<br />

the class.<br />

•The teacher hands out an<br />

autobiography table designed to<br />

assist students to write the essay.<br />

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3. Guided Writ<strong>in</strong>g:<br />

Self-Introducti<strong>on</strong><br />

• Directi<strong>on</strong>s:<br />

• Take notes<br />

• Do the group discussi<strong>on</strong><br />

• F<strong>in</strong>ish the first draft after<br />

class.<br />

• Do the modificati<strong>on</strong> and<br />

turns <strong>in</strong> the f<strong>in</strong>ished essay.<br />

• corrects the essay and<br />

commands the general<br />

mistakes.<br />

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Ways of correct<strong>in</strong>g<br />

sentence writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

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How to resp<strong>on</strong>d to students’ works<br />

• Teacher’s Role : the exam<strong>in</strong>er, the audience, the<br />

evaluator, or the c<strong>on</strong>sultant.<br />

• Ways of resp<strong>on</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g:<br />

1.self-correcti<strong>on</strong>,<br />

2. peer-evaluati<strong>on</strong>,<br />

3. group discussi<strong>on</strong><br />

the teacher uses self-correcti<strong>on</strong>, peer-evaluati<strong>on</strong>,<br />

and group discussi<strong>on</strong> effectively <strong>in</strong> class, po<strong>in</strong>t<strong>in</strong>g<br />

out grammar errors from groups, and further us<strong>in</strong>g<br />

these errors to make impromptu <strong>teach<strong>in</strong>g</strong> po<strong>in</strong>ts<br />

for the whole class.<br />

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Advantages<br />

• these practices arouse students’<br />

learn<strong>in</strong>g motivati<strong>on</strong><br />

• provide an ec<strong>on</strong>omical means of<br />

giv<strong>in</strong>g feedback from the teacher.<br />

• ease the workload of the teacher<br />

<strong>in</strong> correct<strong>in</strong>g students’ <strong>in</strong>dividual<br />

assignments.<br />

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2. Ways of correct<strong>in</strong>g sentence writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

1. standards for sentence correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

from CEEC (College Entrance<br />

Exam<strong>in</strong>ati<strong>on</strong> Center)<br />

2. Selective correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

3. Us<strong>in</strong>g checklists with peer<br />

evaluati<strong>on</strong><br />

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2-1. Standard of sentence correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

from CECE<br />

• each sentence is divided<br />

<strong>in</strong>to two clauses<br />

• each error will be counted<br />

per time, with no repeated<br />

count<strong>in</strong>g .<br />

• the same spell<strong>in</strong>g error is<br />

counted <strong>on</strong>e time <strong>on</strong>ly.<br />

Errors <strong>in</strong> punctuati<strong>on</strong> are<br />

<strong>on</strong>ly counted <strong>on</strong>ce.<br />

大 學 入 學 考 試 中 心 英 文 科 評<br />

分 標 準 :<br />

(1) 本 大 題 總 分 8 分 , 每 小<br />

題 滿 分 4 分 。<br />

(2) 每 個 錯 誤 扣 0.5 分 , 扣<br />

完 為 止 。<br />

(3) 相 同 之 拼 字 錯 誤 只 扣 分<br />

一 次 。<br />

(4) 句 首 未 大 寫 或 標 點 符 號<br />

不 妥 , 各 扣 0.5 分 , 只 扣 一<br />

次 。<br />

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Advantages & Disadvantages<br />

• Advantages: students can become aware of<br />

how to get high scores by c<strong>on</strong>form<strong>in</strong>g to the<br />

correcti<strong>on</strong> standards <strong>on</strong> tests .<br />

• Disadvantages:<br />

1. students might still f<strong>in</strong>d that their work<br />

quickly becomes covered <strong>in</strong> red <strong>in</strong>k.<br />

2. this k<strong>in</strong>d of correcti<strong>on</strong> is extremely timec<strong>on</strong>sum<strong>in</strong>g<br />

for the teacher .<br />

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2-2. Selective correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

• students usually make mistakes “more happier” or<br />

“more fatter” <strong>in</strong> practic<strong>in</strong>g the sentence pattern,<br />

“the + adj-er…, the + adj-er…”<br />

• the teacher can provide sentences c<strong>on</strong>ta<strong>in</strong><strong>in</strong>g these<br />

types of errors <strong>on</strong> worksheets to help them avoid<br />

such grammar mistakes.<br />

• ask<strong>in</strong>g students to keep a log of errors can<br />

assist them to avoid repeat<strong>in</strong>g the same<br />

errors <strong>on</strong> their next assignment.<br />

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2-3. Us<strong>in</strong>g checklists with peer<br />

evaluati<strong>on</strong><br />

• It encourages students to work<br />

collaboratively and ga<strong>in</strong> knowledge <strong>in</strong> a<br />

supportive atmosphere .<br />

• students are tra<strong>in</strong>ed to use the checklist to<br />

evaluate each other’s work and give<br />

professi<strong>on</strong>al comments, which helps them<br />

to achieve a better level <strong>in</strong> their own writ<strong>in</strong>g.<br />

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3.Ways of correct<strong>in</strong>g essay writ<strong>in</strong>g<br />

• 1. Us<strong>in</strong>g rubrics<br />

• 2. Referr<strong>in</strong>g students<br />

to a dicti<strong>on</strong>ary or a<br />

grammar book<br />

• 3. Resp<strong>on</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g by<br />

written comment<br />

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3.Essay Writ<strong>in</strong>g Correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

3-1. Us<strong>in</strong>g rubrics<br />

3 2 1 comments<br />

Format<br />

Structure<br />

The first l<strong>in</strong>e of the paragraph is<br />

<strong>in</strong>dented 5 spaces.<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong>s fit <strong>in</strong>side the marg<strong>in</strong>s<br />

given <strong>in</strong> the assignment.<br />

Paragraphs average 4 to 8 sentences<br />

<strong>in</strong> length.<br />

Each paragraph has <strong>on</strong>e, and <strong>on</strong>ly<br />

<strong>on</strong>e, ma<strong>in</strong> idea.<br />

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3.Essay Writ<strong>in</strong>g Correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

3-1. Us<strong>in</strong>g rubrics<br />

Structure<br />

Grammar<br />

3 2 1 comments<br />

All detail sentences relate to the ma<strong>in</strong> idea<br />

of each paragraph.<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong>s are free of spell<strong>in</strong>g errors.<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong>s fit the grammatical structure<br />

“S+V+O.”<br />

The tense is c<strong>on</strong>sistent throughout the<br />

paper and especially with<strong>in</strong> a paragraph.<br />

<strong>Sentence</strong> Pattern <strong>in</strong> the autobiography fits<br />

the syntax, “The adj-er…, the adj-er…”<br />

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3.Essay Writ<strong>in</strong>g Correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

3-2.Us<strong>in</strong>g a dicti<strong>on</strong>ary or a grammar book<br />

• ask students to c<strong>on</strong>sult a grammar book to<br />

compare correct and <strong>in</strong>correct sentences <strong>in</strong><br />

their writ<strong>in</strong>g .<br />

• ask the student to c<strong>on</strong>sult a grammar book<br />

to see if they made a lexical error, grammar<br />

error, or discourse error .<br />

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3.Essay Writ<strong>in</strong>g Correcti<strong>on</strong><br />

3-3. Resp<strong>on</strong>d<strong>in</strong>g by written comment<br />

• the teacher can both use the mark<strong>in</strong>g scale<br />

and written comments to suggest students<br />

do better <strong>in</strong> their f<strong>in</strong>al essay.<br />

• it is vital to be encourag<strong>in</strong>g and helpful<br />

rather than judgmental.<br />

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4.Student’s Work:<br />

My name is Yu Hsuan Li. I was<br />

born <strong>in</strong> December and my star sign<br />

at birth is Sagittarius. This star<br />

sign presents full of energy and<br />

be<strong>in</strong>g active. But these<br />

pers<strong>on</strong>alities <strong>on</strong>ly appear when I<br />

get al<strong>on</strong>g with my close friend. My<br />

favorite color is blue because it<br />

makes me fell sooth<strong>in</strong>g.<br />

• At school, I am good at Ch<strong>in</strong>ese;<br />

therefore, the more time I spend<br />

<strong>on</strong> read<strong>in</strong>g, the more clear my<br />

bra<strong>in</strong> becomes. In the free time, I<br />

like read<strong>in</strong>g fantastic novels. The<br />

more often I read fantastic novels,<br />

the more imag<strong>in</strong>ative I become.<br />

The seas<strong>on</strong> that <strong>in</strong>fluences me the<br />

most is w<strong>in</strong>ter because the cold air<br />

always makes me headache and<br />

have a runn<strong>in</strong>g nose. Someday, I<br />

hope to be a screenwriter.<br />

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Teacher’s written comments:<br />

• I enjoyed your self<strong>in</strong>troducti<strong>on</strong><br />

very much.<br />

• I liked the descripti<strong>on</strong> of your<br />

pers<strong>on</strong>alities. They <strong>in</strong>deed<br />

represent your<br />

characteristics.<br />

• I have <strong>on</strong>e or two suggesti<strong>on</strong>s<br />

to make:<br />

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Teacher’s written comments:<br />

1. How about giv<strong>in</strong>g more examples to describe<br />

more about your pers<strong>on</strong>alities<br />

It would be a good way to know you <strong>in</strong><br />

different angles.<br />

2. I wouldn’t <strong>in</strong>clude the bit about your favorite<br />

seas<strong>on</strong> s<strong>in</strong>ce it gets <strong>in</strong> the way of your<br />

autobiography.<br />

3. Be careful with your use of adjectives, the<br />

+adj.+er.<br />

Check the grammar book of the usage.<br />

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On Exhibiti<strong>on</strong>s<br />

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