Grade 4 – Personal and Fictional Narrative Rubric

Fourth Grade
Hmmm…my favorite Saturday. That’s a hard one, but I
think there’s one that reigns over all. It was about two weeks ago.
We went to Scandia, where we did minutre golf. My parents were
gone, so my babysitter took a friend and I. It was quite fun, for
many reasons. One, I lost my golfball about three times!
It was a Saturday night. I was with my babysitter, and my
sister was at a football game. So I said “I’m not going to sit here all
night doing nothing!”, then we called my friend, Brian, to see if he
could come. He could, so at about six o’clock, we headed out into
the wild world of flying golfballs.
It was only a about 15 min. drive to Scandia, so we didn’t
get to bored. I think we were all exited, because you could just
sense it. When we got there, we all pied out and began our way
over to the minutare-golf course. It was great! I especially liked
how they weren’t just regular old holes. They had bumpers, brick
walls, you name it! My favorite of them all was this one that had
bumpers on both sides of the fairway, and was a par 6!
We were having a great time. But you know whenever your
having a lot of fun, something goes wrong? Well, I was the person
all the things going wrong happened to! The thing is, I lost my ball
about three times! One time, on that hole that’s my favorite, (theres
a pond next to it too) I hit the ball right down the center really
hard…SsmmmaaccKK! The ball had curved off course, hit the last
bumper, and flew off the hole, into the water. Sploosh!
You know how I said it was hard to think of my best
Saturday? If anyone askes me that again, I think I’ll know what to
say. I mean, I got to go with my friends, all the wacky holes, and
losing my ball, I don’t think this reigns over al lthe others…I know it
reigns over all the others.
Rubric Score 4
The writer has an interesting
beginning, “Hmm…That’s a hard
one… I think there’s one that
reigns over all”.
They have a strong sense of
paragraphing, with paragraph
breaks coming at appropriate
times.
The events are reasonably well
sequenced with a focus on
relevant facts and details.
The writer makes an attempt at a
restatement conclusion strategy
when he rephrases the beginning
line, “reigns over all”.
Sentences are varied in length
and structure. The dialogue and
sound effects add interest and
reveal the writer’s personality.
The writer’s voice is expressive
with phrases like, “It is only a 15
minute drive to Scandia, so we
didn’t get bored,” or “…We
headed into the wild world of
golfballs.”
Although conventions are not
perfect, they show an effort to
use more than just the usual with
the use of ellipsis periods,
exclamation marks and
parenthesis.