Thesis statement examples - Writing Center - Walden University

The nurse in this case study is able to evaluate a confusing ethical situation and determine a
course of action; I will show that by drawing an ethical framework reveals a variety of reliable
sources to avoid potential negative outcomes.
[Could be a bit more concise, but it uses a smart strategy: breaking the thesis up into smaller
pieces.]
Responses to Thesis Example 3
In this paper, it will be shown how water management agreements by the governors of the
desert states of California, Nevada, Arizona, and New Mexico have been reached which limit
use and guide the sharing of the resource.
[Could more clearly connect the what with the how. Could also be made a little more concise
with the use of active voice. The fundamentals here are strong, though!]
Scarce water resources in California, Arizona, Nevada, and New Mexico have encouraged
collaborations between the Governors that will manage and allocate water supplies in order to
ensure long-term sustainability.
[Really concise: does what it needs to in few words!]