Thesis statement examples - Writing Center - Walden University
Thesis statement examples - Writing Center - Walden University
Thesis statement examples - Writing Center - Walden University
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Practical Skills: <strong>Thesis</strong> Statements<br />
Live Practice<br />
By the <strong>Walden</strong> <strong>University</strong> <strong>Writing</strong> <strong>Center</strong><br />
Responses to <strong>Thesis</strong> Example 1<br />
Although they might find cheaper prices at large chain stores outside of town, residents who<br />
shop at smaller neighborhood stores support the local economy of the community.<br />
[A bit more specific here than the original—it specifies that this supports the local economy.]<br />
Shopping in small neighborhood stores contributes to the vibrancy of local community based<br />
businesses.<br />
[Different claim: contribution is to the vibrancy of the community. The how of this, though,<br />
could be made more specific.]<br />
Although they might find cheaper prices at large chain stores outside of town, residents who<br />
shop at smaller neighborhood stores support their local communities by making purchases<br />
within the local communities by supporting them economically.<br />
[The how here could be a little bit clearer and more concise, but the author is on the right track<br />
with this thesis.]<br />
Responses to <strong>Thesis</strong> Example 2<br />
Using Boswell's ethical framework, the nurse in the case study is able to evaluate a confusing<br />
ethical situation. This will provide a mechanism to determine a course of action thus avoiding<br />
potential negative outcomes.<br />
[Mentions a specific framework and has a clear claim. Uses two sentences, which is perfectly<br />
okay! Sentence two could be a bit more specific (especially regarding the pronoun This) but<br />
otherwise does a great job of completing the thesis.]
The nurse in this case study is able to evaluate a confusing ethical situation and determine a<br />
course of action; I will show that by drawing an ethical framework reveals a variety of reliable<br />
sources to avoid potential negative outcomes.<br />
[Could be a bit more concise, but it uses a smart strategy: breaking the thesis up into smaller<br />
pieces.]<br />
Responses to <strong>Thesis</strong> Example 3<br />
In this paper, it will be shown how water management agreements by the governors of the<br />
desert states of California, Nevada, Arizona, and New Mexico have been reached which limit<br />
use and guide the sharing of the resource.<br />
[Could more clearly connect the what with the how. Could also be made a little more concise<br />
with the use of active voice. The fundamentals here are strong, though!]<br />
Scarce water resources in California, Arizona, Nevada, and New Mexico have encouraged<br />
collaborations between the Governors that will manage and allocate water supplies in order to<br />
ensure long-term sustainability.<br />
[Really concise: does what it needs to in few words!]