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A-E-C Paragraph Sample stuff for Miley CyrusAssertion: Is too simple, not enough depthThe Onion imitates the CNN news show type format because….Assertion: Wrong info.The ONN segment about Miley Cyrus uses imitation to makefun of CNN.Assertion blends into evidence (but the evidence seems toomuch like a summary instead of evidence). Commentary isineffective without the evidence it’s commenting on.The Onion newscast about the Miley Cyrus depletionimitates the CNN format by bringing in the experts to talkabout the devastating effects of overusing Miley as anentertainment resource. Bringing in the “experts” makes onethink about all of the numerous useless organizations that thegovernment funds that do not need to exist. These experts alsobring attention to all of the people who go on news shows and….

Listing lots of evidence without any commentaryASSERTION. 1.It imitates a CNN broadcast in the way of itsserious, professional tone that informs people. NEEDSCOMMENTARY 2. It imitates by using fake charts and graphsthat look legitimate but are actually goofy. NEEDSCOMMENTARY 3. The so-called “expert”, Dr. Canty wasanother form of imitation. He pretended to be an expert onMiley Cyrus and talked about how the world is overusing herand she will be depleted by 2013. NEEDS COMMENTARY.Commentary not connected to the EvidenceASSERTION. He said, “Miley is a potent entertainmentresource, but we are overusing her at unprecedented levels.”This proves that teen idol fans are obsessed and naïve. DisneyChannel over-exploits Miley, and sooner or later, people will getbored of her and move on to the next big teen idol star.Evidence isn’t specific enough; commentary doesn’t explainHOW the evidence does what it does.ASSERTION. The Onion interviews fake expert, Dr. JustinCanty, to exaggerate the seriousness of the issue. This makesfun of the fans of Miley and other teen icons who care too muchabout the lives of celebrities. This also makes fun of the peoplewho make themselves experts on things, like Miley Cyrus, thatdon’t really have any real value.

All the evidence is thrown together in one sentence (not specificenough). So the commentary is vague because it tries to explaineverything.ASSERTION. A couple ways that the Onion does this is by 1.analyzing facts and statistics by using graphs, 2. projectedimages behind the news anchor, 3. and switched off from thenews report to interview an “expert” on the subject. All thesetechniques make the viewer pay attention and make them believethis is a very serious situation.DO:AECEC…NOT:AEEEC

GREAT:The Onion News Network special report on Miley Cyrususes imitation to make fun of so-called experts. One way theONN does this is by creating a graph that shows how long it willtake until Miley becomes “too wild.” This graph is there toback up what the “expert” is saying, but it’s actually quiteridiculous. It makes fun of these so-called experts who alwayshave graphs and charts to prove their point no matter howridiculous it may sound. It makes fun of the way experts wantpeople to believe that if there’s a graph, it’s true. Another waythe ONN makes fun of so-called experts is by creating afictitious book. The book created is called the Impending MileyCyrus Crisis, and it tells about all the things that will happenwhen Miley burns out. By creating a book they make fun of allthese so-called experts who think that just because they knowinformation about one topic, they’re automatically experts onthe subject and that they can write a book about it. This mocksexperts who waste time and money on absurd topics just to gainfame and fortune.

The ONN uses jargon to satirize Miley Cyrus’s exposure inthe media by using terms that make it seem as if MileyCyrus is a resource. The reporters on the ONN do this byclaiming that “Within two years, she’ll be little more than awithered, desiccated husk, incapable of causing anyone anyamusement at all.” By using this terminology, they make acomparison between Miley Cyrus and actual resources like oil,saying that she will eventually burn out and won’t be worthanything. It makes fun of the point that Miley’s fans obsess waytoo much about her and that over time, they will get sick of herand discard her. The ONN also uses jargon to satirize otherteen icons, by saying that “they were bountiful entertainmentresources that our over-consumption reduced to smolderingremnants. But we are burning through Miley at a far moreaggressive rate.” Wording their statement this way makes thecomparison that these former teen stars have all been overusedand exhausted, just a resource would be. This makes ithumorous because it’s ridiculous to compare people to tangibleresources, but in this case it applies so well that it’s funny.