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Missing person<br />
Lesson focus<br />
Teachers notes<br />
Punctuation<br />
• Capital letters for proper nouns<br />
• Colons in offset lists<br />
Grammar<br />
• Adjectives<br />
Spelling<br />
• Confused words: fore/for, blue/blew,<br />
by/buy, too/to, scene/seen<br />
• Misspelt words<br />
Vocabulary<br />
• Shortened forms<br />
Writing<br />
Teacher information<br />
• Double negatives<br />
A description describes the characteristics, components or functions of living or non-living things.<br />
Answers<br />
Police are concerned for the safety of VANESSA<br />
HOYLE. Vanessa was last seen two weeks ago near her<br />
home in Blakeville, Queensl<strong>and</strong>.<br />
Vanessa:<br />
• is 20 years old<br />
• is 172 centimetres tall <strong>and</strong> has a slim build<br />
• has olive skin, short black hair <strong>and</strong> brown eyes<br />
• speaks with an American accent<br />
• was wearing blue jeans <strong>and</strong> a white T-shirt<br />
with a picture of a cat on it<br />
at the time of her disappearance<br />
• may stop at a pharmacy to buy the medicine<br />
she needs to treat her asthma<br />
• didn’t tell anyone that she planned to leave home.<br />
If anyone has seen Vanessa, please contact the<br />
police. Phone: 18 00 62.<br />
for<br />
weeks<br />
Queensl<strong>and</strong><br />
: (colon)<br />
years<br />
centimetres<br />
olive<br />
accent<br />
blue<br />
picture<br />
disappearance<br />
buy<br />
to<br />
planned<br />
seen<br />
Phone<br />
1. Missing punctuation is in bold type.<br />
2. (i) slim (ii) white (iii) olive (iv) blue<br />
3. Spelling errors are in italic type.<br />
(a) for, blue, buy, to, seen<br />
(b) olive, accent, picture, disappearance, planned<br />
4. (a) Abbreviation answers are underlined.<br />
weeks, Queensl<strong>and</strong>, years, centimetres, Phone<br />
5. (a) One way of correcting the double negative has been underlined in bold.<br />
didn’t tell anyone that she planned to leave home; told no-one that she planned to leave home<br />
76 <strong>Editing</strong> skills R.I.C. Publications ® www.ricgroup.com.au