Mini-lesson Writing Dialogue - Maupin House Publishing
Mini-lesson Writing Dialogue - Maupin House Publishing
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<strong>Writing</strong> <strong>Dialogue</strong><br />
“said” stoppers<br />
<strong>Mini</strong>-<strong>lesson</strong><br />
Using the word said too often in your dialogue gets boring—fast! Spice up your dialogue using<br />
words other than said. Characters can reply, state, mumble, shout, respond—the number of words<br />
you can use is surprisingly large. Match the words you use to describe dialogue to the emotion<br />
of the character’s words. An angry person would yell, but not whisper. Also, remember that in<br />
dialogue between two people, it isn’t necessary to use a said word after each line. Since the speakers<br />
are taking turns, the reader knows who is speaking by whose turn it is.<br />
WATCH how it’s done.<br />
original dialogue, using said:<br />
“I’m really getting angry,” I said.<br />
“Really? I couldn’t tell by your red face,” she said.<br />
“Stop it!” I said.<br />
“You stop looking like a tomato first,” she said.<br />
revised dialogue, using words other than said:<br />
“I’m really getting angry,” I growled.<br />
“Really? I couldn’t tell by your red face,” she teased.<br />
“Stop it!”<br />
“You stop looking like a tomato first,” she laughed.<br />
HELP<br />
with this dialogue:<br />
original dialogue, using said:<br />
“I’m so late! What time is it?” I said.<br />
“Oh my. It’s 6 o’clock. You really are late,” she said.<br />
“What am I going to do?” I said.<br />
“I’d hurry up if I were you,” she said.<br />
revised dialogue, using words other than said:<br />
APPLY<br />
this skill in your writing notebook. Write ten lines of dialogue. Try to use the word said<br />
no more than one time.<br />
MASTER this skill in your workstation.<br />
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<strong>Writing</strong> <strong>Dialogue</strong><br />
“said” stoppers<br />
Composing Techniques: Target Skill Lessons and Workstation Tasks<br />
Workstation<br />
Using the word said too often in your dialogue gets boring—fast! Spice up your dialogue using<br />
words other than said. Characters can reply, state, mumble, shout, respond—the number of words<br />
you can use is surprisingly large. Match the words you use to describe dialogue to the emotion<br />
of the character’s words. An angry person would yell, but not whisper. Also, remember that in<br />
dialogue between two people, it isn’t necessary to use a said word after each line. Since the speakers<br />
are taking turns, the reader knows who is speaking by whose turn it is.<br />
original dialogue, using said:<br />
“I’m really getting angry,” I said.<br />
“Really? I couldn’t tell by your red face,” she said.<br />
“Stop it!” I said.<br />
“You stop looking like a tomato first,” she said.<br />
revised dialogue, using words other than said:<br />
“I’m really getting angry,” I growled.<br />
“Really? I couldn’t tell by your red face,” she teased.<br />
“Stop it!”<br />
“You stop looking like a tomato first,” she laughed.<br />
TASK A<br />
TASK B<br />
TASK C<br />
TASK D<br />
Go through your reading book, and record as many other-than-said words as you can<br />
find. Make a list for yourself to use in the future.<br />
Write two lines of dialogue for each of the following emotions: joy, sorrow, fear,<br />
anger, disgust. Use other-than-said words that match the emotion in your dialogue. For<br />
example, if the emotion is love, you might write “You’ve got the cutest eyes,” she cooed.<br />
Write an imaginary dialogue between two people who are having an argument. In the<br />
first five lines of dialogue, have the characters speak angrily with each other. In the<br />
last five lines, have them begin to make up. Remember that in dialogue between two<br />
people, it isn’t necessary to point out who is speaking in every line.<br />
Select a piece from your draft folder or your notebook that could be improved by<br />
changing some other-than-said words in the dialogue or by eliminating such words<br />
from dialogue where it’s already clear who is speaking.<br />
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