Literary Journal Issue#5 2011 - Cranbrook School
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<strong>Literary</strong> <strong>Journal</strong> <strong>Issue#5</strong> <strong>2011</strong>
CRANBROOK SCHOOL <strong>Literary</strong> <strong>Journal</strong> <strong>Issue#5</strong> <strong>2011</strong><br />
Published by CRANBROOK SCHOOL<br />
Editor: Jacqueline Grassmayr<br />
Fifth Edition: <strong>2011</strong><br />
Designed and produced by <strong>Cranbrook</strong> Publications<br />
Front cover: ‘Prime’ – Painting by William Solomon Year 12
Contents<br />
Editorial ..................................................................... 1<br />
Poetry ........................................................................ 3<br />
Creative Writing ...................................................... 19<br />
<strong>Literary</strong> and Cultural Criticism ................................ 61<br />
Fine Arts .................................................................. 74<br />
Languages ............................................................... 82<br />
History ..................................................................... 95
BENCHMARK<br />
Editorial<br />
Welcome to the fifth edition of Benchmark which I hope will delight<br />
and engage you over the summer months.<br />
We were privileged this year to have poet Toby Fitch work with students<br />
as part of The Red Room Company’s education program, ‘Papercuts’. Toby<br />
Fitch is a talented new poet recently featured in the Sydney Morning Herald’s<br />
‘Spectrum’. His first full length book of poems is about to be published<br />
by Puncher and Wattman. The Red Room Company is a non-profit<br />
organisation that creates, promotes and publishes new Australian poetry in<br />
imaginative, inspiring and magical ways. For more information, view their<br />
website at redroomcompany.org. Some of the poems the students created<br />
for their anthology, attempted defiance, are published here. The boys have<br />
swaggered along the more rebellious laneways of their minds and left a trail<br />
of poetic musings in their wakes. I am sure that you will agree they are<br />
edgy and thought-provoking pieces.<br />
As always, I thank Tony Ronaldson for his wise editing advice. He and<br />
I spend many hours reading the poems selected by teachers, and are always<br />
delighted to see such a wide range of topics and poetic forms. Every year we<br />
are also highly impressed by the craft and skill of the competition winners.<br />
Thanks must also go to the English teachers who challenge, guide and<br />
inspire their students to write the pieces that appear in the Poetry, Creative<br />
Writing, and <strong>Literary</strong> and Cultural Criticism sections of the journal.<br />
This year, I have published two excerpts from the ‘Write-a-Book-In-a-Day’<br />
competition. As we go into publication, we await the announcement of<br />
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EDITORIAL<br />
this year’s winners and wonder if we will match the successful entry from<br />
the 2010 Year 8 English Enrichment team. The boys must write, illustrate<br />
and publish a book within a twelve-hour time limit. The competition is<br />
a literary and fundraising initiative of the Katharine Susannah Prichard<br />
Writers Centre and Princess Margaret Hospital Foundation. This year<br />
the proceeds from NSW go to The Oncology Children’s Foundation<br />
(Westmead). For more information, you can view their website at<br />
writeabookinaday.com.<br />
Thanks also go to Anne Byrnes, Matthew Ross and Cathleen Jin for<br />
their selections in the History and Languages sections respectively.<br />
Thank you to the Art Department whose students are clearly motivated<br />
by the passion their teachers radiate. Their work is adventurous in content<br />
and professional in execution. Thank you to Rhondda Anthony, Chloe<br />
Hodgson and the members of the Publications Department for their tireless<br />
efforts in designing and producing such a beautiful journal. And, of course,<br />
thank you most of all to the boys for their contributions.<br />
This edition of Benchmark is dedicated to the memory of our dear<br />
colleague, David Ingham (1944 – <strong>2011</strong>) who gave the literary journal<br />
its title. Dave filled our lives with literary quips, poetic gems, laughter,<br />
generosity and warmth. He is greatly missed.<br />
Jacqueline Grassmayr<br />
Editor<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
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POETRY<br />
Well Groomed<br />
Ba-ding! ‘Chris Jones,’ who the …<br />
‘Hey just moved here lol probs coming to your school next term.’<br />
Four hours and facebook chat really starts to grasp your social life.<br />
Pop up. Hannah just logged on. Must. Start. Convo. Reaching for the<br />
pack, eww Ready salted. Must. Get. Water.<br />
Ba-ding. Not the new kid again.<br />
‘You still there? … QUESTION MARK, QUESTION MARK.’<br />
Can’t take it any longer …<br />
‘Hi.’<br />
Initial greeting must be subtle with slight hostility,<br />
No Xs or Os for this one just yet. Ba-ding<br />
‘How old are you? Im 16. Just moved from the country.’<br />
OH GOD a country boy. Have to tell Jess about this one.<br />
I bet this is his first time on a computer let alone the Internet.<br />
‘Yeah same im 16. So how do you know what school I go to?’<br />
Good answer. Showing interest but still slightly respectful.<br />
Wait how did he know what school I went to …<br />
info page that’s it, of course. Had me worried for a bit then.<br />
Four days in, country boy won’t. Leave. Me. Alone.<br />
Kind of growing on me. Maybe its his innocence,<br />
his vague understanding of social networking …<br />
or just his plain willingness to persist.<br />
Either way convos keep getting deeper and deeper.<br />
Jess says he’s weird. Says I shouldn’t talk to him.<br />
SCREW HER. She’s just jealous. That’s right.<br />
Back stabber can go die for all I care.<br />
<strong>School</strong> started, boring as usual.<br />
Teacher mumbles, listen, straight out the other side.<br />
Time seems to slow down like walking through a retirement home.<br />
Talked to Jess. Didn’t go so well. In short …<br />
me angry. Clench fist. Bloody nose.<br />
But we made some ground.<br />
Preliminary social contact has to mean something right.<br />
No country boy today,<br />
Weird said he’d be here.<br />
Ba-ding. ‘Sorry I wasn’t there today, I was spewin. Feel better though.<br />
Wondering if you want to meet up?’<br />
Contemplation. To meet or not to meet, that is the question.<br />
Why not? Closest thing I have to a friend at the moment.<br />
A lonely wolf amidst a pack. Sad but true.<br />
‘Where and when?’ Ba-ding. ‘Steyne Park, four?’<br />
An out guy hmm whatever floats your boat.<br />
Tonight on Nine News.<br />
Reports just in that a sixteen-year-old girl was found dead<br />
in Sydney’s east.<br />
Oliver Spence<br />
Year 10<br />
Winner of the Year 10 Poetry Prize<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
Mighty Beowulf<br />
King of the Geats<br />
Damaged and dying, Grendel disappeared into the darkness.<br />
Unaware of the threat that remained, the Danes celebrated.<br />
Yet as night fell, they felt the fury of Grendel’s mother.<br />
She came in a rage to wreak revenge<br />
and before dawn, they found Aschere, dead on the floor.<br />
‘Time lost lamenting is time wasted. Let us avenge our friend!’<br />
screamed the furious tribe.<br />
Brave Beowulf led the way to the lake<br />
where deep below, Grendel’s mother lay in wait.<br />
‘Death or destruction, I will face my fate!’<br />
cried Beowulf as he leapt to the lake.<br />
He plummeted into the gloomy green depths.<br />
The icy cold water grabbed his breath away.<br />
Suddenly something tight grabbed his chest …<br />
Beowulf was dragged into an underwater cave.<br />
Gasping and gagging, he found himself face to face with<br />
a hideous hag, Grendel’s mother.<br />
The clash of steel and the striking of claws raced<br />
through the echoing chamber.<br />
With a silver flash of the sword, Grendel’s mother<br />
was slaughtered.<br />
Her bloodied head lay crimson on the dark floor.<br />
Beowulf turned to see Grendel in shock and<br />
With one sweep of the sword Grendel’s head rolled<br />
beside her mother’s.<br />
As Grendel’s blood bubbled to the surface of the lake,<br />
Beowulf’s companions gasped in horror.<br />
Suddenly out burst Beowulf with two heads held high.<br />
The companions raised the head up on spears and cheered<br />
Mighty Beowulf, King of the Geats!<br />
Roly Storch<br />
Year 7<br />
5<br />
In Grandpa’s<br />
House<br />
My eyes shoot open in the gloomy dark,<br />
Slowly adjusting to the light.<br />
I quietly slip out of the warmth of my bed,<br />
Suppressing the urge to shiver.<br />
My bare feet touch the ancient floorboards<br />
that creak and groan; ready to bend and break.<br />
As I stumble blindly to my bedside desk,<br />
grasp a beacon of hope and<br />
switch it on and smile,<br />
my trusty flashlight is dependable.<br />
I creep towards the towering obstacle,<br />
Trying to hide my fear.<br />
Turning the knob for all eternity …<br />
until finally the door swings open.<br />
this is the night, this is the night,<br />
in Grandpa’s house,<br />
I have waited for, all my life.<br />
Poking my head out into empty space,<br />
I check the coast is clear.<br />
My body doesn’t make a sound<br />
as I step out into the corridor.<br />
I raise my flashlight to my next destination;<br />
thin beams of light cut through darkness.<br />
As I tip-toe down polished floors<br />
my heart’s thumping loudly; adrenaline pumping.<br />
Stopping in front of my second obstacle<br />
I pause to catch my breath<br />
and breathe deeply, in and out.<br />
I press my ear against Grandpa’s door, feeling the icy cold.<br />
My heart skips a beat as I hear the rumbling of the old man’s snores<br />
which guarantees my success.<br />
This is the night, this is the night,<br />
in Grandpa’s house,<br />
I have waited for, all my life.<br />
I can barely contain my excitement right now,<br />
but I need to stay focused.<br />
The hardest part dawns and looms silently<br />
in the darkness ahead.<br />
I set out into the obscurity,<br />
guided only by my flashlight.<br />
I search and search and search in the dusty corridor<br />
but I can’t seem to find it.<br />
I can almost hear the laughing now
POETRY<br />
fading in the darkness.<br />
Suddenly, something touches me!<br />
I nearly faint on the spot.<br />
But yes, oh yes. I’ve found it!<br />
The dangling cord to the attic above.<br />
This is the night, this is the night,<br />
in Grandpa’s house,<br />
I have waited for, all my life.<br />
Tugging hard with all my strength,<br />
I conquer my last challenge.<br />
The stairs come down majestically,<br />
hitting the floor with only the softest of thumps.<br />
As I grasp the hand rails, my knuckles turn white.<br />
Torch in mouth and destiny in hand,<br />
I slowly ascend into the blackness above,<br />
still not believing this is happening.<br />
I pull myself up onto the attic’s floor,<br />
dust covering my body.<br />
On all fours, I turn around,<br />
and looking, I gasp,<br />
‘I see it, I see it! It’s really here …’<br />
The forbidden door of Grandpa’s attic.<br />
This is the night, this is the night,<br />
in Grandpa’s house,<br />
I have waited for, all my life.<br />
I stand up, full height and chest broad,<br />
to Grandpa’s forbidden door.<br />
It’s a good foot bigger than me.<br />
I tingle with excitement.<br />
I see the burnished brass knob<br />
reflecting in the torchlight<br />
and I can’t help but laugh.<br />
‘I’ve fooled Grandpa, I’ve fooled Grandpa,<br />
at last I’m finally here.’<br />
I step forward and swing the door ajar …<br />
The air is still, quiet as usual, as I shine my torch to the door.<br />
But the door remains black; no light gets through!<br />
As a great roar fills my ears and my feet are pulled off the ground,<br />
I’m sucked into oblivion, falling and falling and falling.<br />
This is the night, this is the night,<br />
in Grandpa’s house,<br />
I have waited for, all my life.<br />
I’m hurled back out of the attic’s door.<br />
My body is thrown across the room.<br />
I sit up, head spinning,<br />
dizzy beyond thought<br />
and I lurch to my feet, holding the wall,<br />
not thinking clearly.<br />
I’m still in Grandpa’s attic,<br />
just the way I left it.<br />
I’ve lost my torch, but I can see.<br />
Light comes from the window.<br />
I cast the blinds open<br />
and squint in the light …<br />
And the horror seeps in that I’m caged.<br />
This is the night, this is the night,<br />
in Grandpa’s house …<br />
I had waited for,<br />
All my life …<br />
Michael Turner<br />
Year 7<br />
Winner of the Year 7 Poetry Prize<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
Living History<br />
I’ve got an aunt in Narrabri,<br />
She’s 80, and half as tall as me.<br />
I like her so; she’s very nice.<br />
She asks me ‘round for scones and tea.<br />
She tells me stories of her life,<br />
Of places she has been,<br />
Of famous people she has met<br />
And things that she has seen.<br />
I think her memory’s faulty,<br />
As she’s getting on in years,<br />
And sometimes when she talks to me,<br />
Her eyes well up with tears.<br />
‘Lost my son in Vietnam,’<br />
She’ll say and shake her head.<br />
‘I won’t forget that pointless war,’<br />
Is all she ever said.<br />
‘My husband used to work the land,<br />
For farmers near and far,<br />
But his greatest love was at the pub,<br />
Propping up the bar.’<br />
‘His tombstone’s in the churchyard,<br />
Which I rarely ever see.<br />
I couldn’t care if it was gone,<br />
Makes no difference to me.’<br />
What a line – that said it all,<br />
The life that she has led,<br />
The tough times she’s endured,<br />
Shown in things she said.<br />
Sometimes we wander round the back,<br />
To a car parked in the drive.<br />
She strokes the hood and says to me<br />
‘It’s from 1965.’<br />
‘A Thunderbird from Ford,’ she’d say<br />
‘A gift when I turned 18,<br />
I used to drive it everywhere,<br />
It’s a wonderful machine.’<br />
‘I’d like to drive again, someday.’<br />
But I know she never will.<br />
The battery’s dead, the tyres are flat<br />
And weeds grow in the grill.<br />
7<br />
And each day when it’s time to go,<br />
She says, ‘What a lovely talk.’<br />
I nod my head, I say ‘goodbye’<br />
And out the door I walk.<br />
‘Come again tomorrow,<br />
I’ll tell you something new.’<br />
I nod my head and close the gate<br />
And call out, ‘Tootle-loo!’<br />
Sadly, as I leave the house,<br />
I think, ‘Does she even know my name?’<br />
Because I know the next time I come back<br />
She’ll repeat it all again.<br />
Scott Ewart<br />
Year 9<br />
Winner of the Year 9 Poetry Prize
POETRY<br />
Study Fishing<br />
You don’t want to, but you have to<br />
Your heart sinks to your stomach<br />
You look out the window<br />
The birds sing, the sun shines<br />
Every fibre screams to be outside<br />
You glance at the papers … Maths … Oh God …<br />
Like hacking your way through weeds<br />
An eternal punishment<br />
You become restless and tired<br />
TV wanders through your mind<br />
NO YOU HAVE TO CONCENTRATE!<br />
You switch on the TV, some daily cooking show<br />
You stare at the clock, beg it to stop<br />
Time lingers<br />
Guilt, stress, anger starts to flow<br />
And eat at your soul<br />
You grunt and wriggle, your face goes dry<br />
Your mind races, you tap your feet.<br />
Your blood boils. You gnaw your pen<br />
You’re on the verge of tears<br />
Until you just yell STOP!<br />
You stare at the ceiling<br />
Swivel in your chair<br />
Your fingertips skim the ground<br />
What should you do?<br />
What should you think?<br />
You’re stuck in quicksand<br />
Sucked into a black hole<br />
Powerless<br />
You rise and step outside<br />
The sunshine skips across your face<br />
The fresh air fills your lungs<br />
Cling on, life is larger<br />
Than some dumb test<br />
Oscar Whatmore<br />
Year 10<br />
The rain beats down upon the wooden roof.<br />
We prize open our eyes, crawl from warm beds.<br />
The dawn remains aloof.<br />
Numbed fingers sift through tangled lines.<br />
Lift sinkers and floats, pack lines and rods.<br />
Leave the dog to whine.<br />
Scuffling and shuffling down the loose slate hill,<br />
Carrying tackle, bent double against the wind.<br />
Hopeful despite the chill.<br />
The rain drizzles out and the boat comes into view.<br />
Rotting bait stinks. Exhaust fumes pervade.<br />
The dawn receives its cue.<br />
The cabin folds into the coastline, the boat judders forward.<br />
The clump of rocks in sight, we wash to a halt,<br />
Lowering our lines for reward.<br />
Steaming thermosed coffee drunk with trembling fingers.<br />
Sinkers strike murky water. The boat bobs.<br />
Fish aren’t caught by malingerers.<br />
The sun arcs overhead and still no fish are caught.<br />
Our cradle rocks. Our cradle rocks.<br />
Tempers are short.<br />
The cry goes up. Fish on! Fish on!<br />
The king has bitten. The king has fallen.<br />
Tension released. He’s gone.<br />
Angus Forth<br />
Year 11<br />
Winner of the Year 11 Poetry Prize<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
The Wharf Sand<br />
Bursting out the door,<br />
Sucking in delicious warm air and<br />
the smell of the cherry blossom tree.<br />
Laughing, we run down the granite stairs<br />
and look up at the bright beautiful blue sky.<br />
The slap of our thongs rhythmical as<br />
we pass the school, cross the road, run down the street.<br />
Finally we push open the black gate.<br />
I kick off my thongs and stand on the edge.<br />
I face my friends, they pressure me on,<br />
fear pumps adrenaline through my veins,<br />
the sparkling blue calls for me,<br />
my body is frozen.<br />
I can.<br />
Suddenly the ice melts,<br />
I jump, flipping backwards.<br />
I hover hollow in the air and stare at my friends.<br />
I am weightless,<br />
I float through the warm air<br />
and feel its gentle touch rushing up through my body.<br />
Splash!<br />
The water licks my legs,<br />
sucks in my body.<br />
Salt, the taste of summer<br />
I open my eyes. The colour of joy.<br />
The sun shines on the water like golden crystals.<br />
I float in the glistening light blue<br />
and let it wash away all my thoughts.<br />
Eamon Hugh<br />
Year 8<br />
Winner of the Year 8 Poetry Prize<br />
9<br />
Water lapped at the sand,<br />
swirling and churning,<br />
filling in foot prints,<br />
making the sand once again smooth and moist.<br />
The fat man sat on his deck chair humming to himself.<br />
The small tuft of hair left on his pink head danced and<br />
swayed in the warm wind.<br />
His nostrils flared and<br />
his toes dug deep into the sand.<br />
The wind brought the scent of ice-cream and hot dogs.<br />
Over by the rocks children chirped like sea gulls,<br />
running and hopping around a flamboyant van.<br />
Six small children sat grinning,<br />
slurping creamy white ice-creams as their parents fussed,<br />
rubbing sun block into their peeling backs.<br />
The fat man rolled over and chuckled as water licked his<br />
feet over and over again,<br />
washing off the sand.<br />
How he wished he was a grain of sand,<br />
twisting and turning at high tide,<br />
crispy and golden at low,<br />
stuck between the toes of children,<br />
constantly travelling and exploring,<br />
sitting back enjoying the ride.<br />
Harry MacGibbon<br />
Year 9
POETRY<br />
Traces<br />
Vestiges<br />
Left in sand<br />
Washed up by the sweeping tide<br />
Lie in little puddles, squelching by<br />
Wind echoes on the arid coast<br />
Silence is imprisoned by the broken sea<br />
Chained<br />
Battered<br />
Discarded in an assaulting swoop<br />
Shells, fluttering on the surface<br />
Driftwood bobs on the sea<br />
Little stories<br />
Of times gone by<br />
Shipwrecks, floods, waste<br />
Vestiges<br />
Left behind.<br />
Jack Holloway<br />
Year 11<br />
Eagles<br />
They soar through the light blue,<br />
Zooming around on strings<br />
Held by unseen puppet masters.<br />
As they swim through the inverted seas,<br />
A black streak thunders toward the glossy foliage<br />
And curves back up to its glossy flock.<br />
Caught in its rusted iron hands,<br />
An expensive meal,<br />
Found only in the most exclusive of diners.<br />
At its address,<br />
A young calls to the heavens.<br />
The echo shoots through the atmosphere<br />
Striking its mother in mid-flight.<br />
Down below the airborne crowd,<br />
The avians’ actions are mirrored by scaly fish,<br />
Who are born, raised and buried,<br />
In the dark blue veins of the Earth.<br />
Tom Roche<br />
Year 8<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
Boat on the<br />
Horizon<br />
There was a boat on the horizon<br />
Endeavour<br />
An outsider<br />
A people<br />
They glow a pearly white<br />
They’re constricted by blue and red<br />
They speak in loud licks<br />
Shrill as the cockatoo<br />
Smallpox and muskets<br />
Death and destruction<br />
Thousands of years<br />
Altered in minutes<br />
They pave the land drab<br />
They fence the land jigsaw<br />
They cross the land black<br />
Terra nullius<br />
We are the nation of plenty<br />
The land of sweeping plains<br />
A people of open arms<br />
A people of deep-found fear<br />
There is a war<br />
There is persecution<br />
We are the haves<br />
They are the have-nots<br />
Inferno in Arafura<br />
Overboard at Christmas<br />
The island nation<br />
Turns a blind eye<br />
22 million<br />
6 thousand<br />
It is our decision<br />
There is a boat on the horizon<br />
James Ross<br />
Year 10<br />
Winner of the C A Bell Memorial Prize for Poetry<br />
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Perfection<br />
Ski boots tap<br />
Gloves fit snug<br />
Goggles press tight<br />
Helmet straps on<br />
Eyes scan ahead<br />
Blood gushes through<br />
Breathe in … out … in … out …<br />
Ready<br />
1, 2, 3<br />
Dropping!<br />
Blood starts to rush<br />
Skis go wider<br />
Jump looms closer<br />
Off the edge<br />
Floating in time<br />
Weightless, fearless, invincible<br />
Descending with winged feet from the realm of the gods<br />
Perfection.<br />
Spencer O’Connor<br />
Year 7
POETRY<br />
The Meet<br />
Anticipation,<br />
fear and excitement build<br />
as you arrive at a park unknown on the outskirts.<br />
Jogging the course you assess your rivals<br />
and the terrain you will be covering.<br />
Time to stretch.<br />
Starting line-up is called.<br />
You walk calmly over<br />
trying to not show your fear.<br />
Silence.<br />
Then BANG!<br />
Nerves bounce as you sprint to the first turning.<br />
You push people out of the way,<br />
fight for balance.<br />
You take the lead.<br />
The last bend.<br />
Cheers sound drugged in the back of your head.<br />
All you hear is your breathing and your competitor’s<br />
breaths.<br />
You give a push;<br />
he pushes back even harder.<br />
50 metres to go.<br />
Give it all you can.<br />
Sprint.<br />
Your competitor falls further behind.<br />
Last 5 meters.<br />
Give it all you can.<br />
Lunge forward.<br />
Your body pushes through the red ribbon then<br />
slumps<br />
with breathing problems.<br />
You shake your competitor’s hand.<br />
‘Where … did … I … ?’<br />
You gasp for air<br />
and then you see the<br />
Shield … the CAS Cross Country Shield<br />
And you know … you know you have won.<br />
George Taylor<br />
Year 9<br />
A Noisy Escape<br />
Bang! Bang!<br />
The tent is erected.<br />
Chop! Chop!<br />
The axe is at work.<br />
Swoosh! Swoosh!<br />
The wind in the trees.<br />
Ripple! Ripple!<br />
The river is running.<br />
Chirp! Chirp!<br />
The birds are here.<br />
Bounce! Bounce!<br />
The kangas are out.<br />
Crackle! Crackle!<br />
The campfire’s burning.<br />
Scream! Scream!<br />
Marshmallows on fire.<br />
Crunch! Crunch!<br />
Someone’s gone for a pee.<br />
Rustle! Rustle!<br />
Who’s rolled over?<br />
Buzz! Buzz!<br />
The dreaded mosquitoes.<br />
Zzzzzzzzzz!<br />
Dad’s started snoring.<br />
At last in the dead of night.<br />
The sound of silence.<br />
Alex Sheen<br />
Year 9<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
Sachsenhausen Hymn to Apollo<br />
I see the bodies: carcasses<br />
heaped, dead, mountainous.<br />
arms and legs like sticks, rib cages protruding from chests<br />
straining to break the skin,<br />
desperate to escape the misery and terror of their owner.<br />
I too am a skeleton, a ghost of the man I once was.<br />
I’m trapped,<br />
encircled by the grey walls, grim guns and ghastly<br />
grinning guards.<br />
Only God can help me but<br />
what God?<br />
A God who has forsaken us,<br />
who lets his people perish.<br />
Satan has won<br />
Like zombies, we work, we sleep, we work, we sleep.<br />
We are rubbish, dumped<br />
to rot en masse.<br />
We are vermin,<br />
filthy and unwanted<br />
slaves.<br />
They make us stand in the freezing cold and<br />
watch us die.<br />
Hell’s destruction could not outdo the death camp’s<br />
horrors - nothing could.<br />
We approach the building,<br />
the one with the chimney<br />
from which no one returns.<br />
Mothers screaming, children crying.<br />
I surrender.<br />
Samuel Atkinson<br />
Year 8<br />
13<br />
You chase away the clouds with piercing gaze,<br />
And we below live by your constant light.<br />
You bring what warmth there is on dying days,<br />
Yet not the earth alone does you give sight.<br />
You gave us music with your golden lyre,<br />
And oracles predict the changing flow<br />
Of fate to kings and men; yet in your ire<br />
Send plagues, strike heroes down with quick strung bow.<br />
Without your presence we would dwell in dark,<br />
And live with baser instincts holding reign.<br />
Phoebus, hear this paean, shoot your spark,<br />
Your sacred arts someday we may attain.<br />
Chased by time, a brief and fleeting shade,<br />
Are we, who by your godly chords are swayed.<br />
George Polonski<br />
Year 11
POETRY<br />
The Painter<br />
At midnight, in my dreams behind my eyes<br />
in the last fragments of sunlight-staining<br />
like a broken cathedral window,<br />
the colours dance for me.<br />
When I was young,<br />
the deep blue, the corn-field yellow, the fiery red<br />
of a setting sun<br />
tore me from my business<br />
and bade me worship<br />
with my brush.<br />
To the right, scarlet singing<br />
from the canvas with a shriek of delight<br />
meets, from the left, yellow!<br />
Up and down:<br />
Tears from the rose, warmth<br />
from the moon, serenity.<br />
Turquoise, like a fog upon a winter’s afternoon,<br />
swirls, careens, tumbles like an acrobat.<br />
Every starry night:<br />
eternity in my eyes, on my tongue<br />
my very blood, my all.<br />
But the colours are cruel.<br />
They scream at me:<br />
in every daub, a shading out of place, a mutiny.<br />
You weak, sentimental little man!<br />
We’re crying when you should’ve made us bleed.<br />
You’ve ripped us when we should be still.<br />
Your heart, your soul, your will: dependent on your needs.<br />
We’ll make you beg and kneel for release.<br />
It is too strong a rebuke<br />
to plant the seeds of my destruction in meagre happiness.<br />
Too hard.<br />
I cannot but chastise myself with paint-flicked fingers<br />
and join the laughter of the villagers.<br />
There goes the mad, red-haired painter with a blinded muse,<br />
the lyrist of some one-stringed instrument that wails<br />
night and day with no relief,<br />
critiquing himself with his one torn ear.<br />
I can feel the moment when the colours speak<br />
and ecstasy fills me once again.<br />
It fills me with the raucous laughter of crows,<br />
behind their beaks a promise of grace<br />
I cannot touch or see.<br />
My soul the palette, my madness paint.<br />
Joss Deane<br />
Year 11<br />
14
BENCHMARK<br />
Pfft, Poetry:<br />
Who Needs It?<br />
I’ve never quite gotten the hang of poetry.<br />
It has never really clicked.<br />
Below are just a couple of phrases<br />
Of bad examples I have picked.<br />
Awful attempts at alliteration<br />
Are all I can achieve.<br />
And despite desperate degrees of effort<br />
My assonance is still naive.<br />
My similes don’t come to a point,<br />
They’re as nonsensical as Swedish rye bread.<br />
And as for my personification,<br />
Why, the words have simply fled.<br />
Oh the difficulty with rhyming words<br />
They never seem just right.<br />
As can be seen by my last sentence,<br />
Which doesn’t even rhyme.<br />
Edward Clarke<br />
Year 10<br />
15
POETRY<br />
The following poems were created by Year 10 Enrichment students as part of the Red Room Company’s<br />
education program, ‘Paper Cuts’. They appear in the anthology attempted defiance edited by Toby Fitch.<br />
Fly the Coop Like the Hyena<br />
Slightest breeze ruffles his hair<br />
Sandstone cracks and crumbles below foot<br />
The sun crisps his skin<br />
His wings unfold<br />
Green, grey, blue<br />
The colours of Sydney envelop him<br />
Shuffling over edge<br />
He flies the coop<br />
A moment of pure stillness<br />
He is not land<br />
Not water<br />
But it rushes through him<br />
The world accelerating<br />
Gale plasters his face<br />
Chaos reigns free<br />
Brace for impact<br />
James Ross<br />
Year 10<br />
Winner of the C A Bell Memorial Prize for Poetry<br />
He traverses suburbia<br />
Claws wrapping spray-can<br />
He slinks the fence<br />
Glances the corner<br />
Taxi coasts by like a shark<br />
He dives to ground<br />
Punches ink to Coke ad<br />
Paint oozes, blood from a gazelle<br />
Launches and scoots<br />
Success running through his veins<br />
Wild smile torn across his face<br />
Like a hyena<br />
James Ross<br />
Year 10<br />
Winner of the C A Bell Memorial Prize for Poetry<br />
16
BENCHMARK<br />
Secret Scenes<br />
There’s a picture of Justin Bieber<br />
In my drawer, on my desk, above my bed.<br />
I have all his tracks,<br />
But I pretend I hate him when<br />
My friends talk about him.<br />
***<br />
Mr Fitch asks for my homework,<br />
I tell him I handed it in<br />
Even though I forgot I even had<br />
That assignment.<br />
I convince him that he lost it.<br />
***<br />
Mum glares at me, who<br />
Took the Jack Daniels?<br />
Sweat rolls off my forehead,<br />
My legs turn to clouds<br />
I also took the cookies.<br />
***<br />
Chasing Sarah down the alleyway,<br />
Smiles break across my face,<br />
Another girl playing<br />
Hard to get.<br />
I double my efforts.<br />
***<br />
Virtual eyes follow me,<br />
The door invites me in, and I oblige,<br />
Demolishing the toilets:<br />
Bang! Bang! Bang! Walk out<br />
As if nothing happened.<br />
Jonathon Li<br />
Year 10<br />
17<br />
? Do<br />
others wonder what I think?<br />
Does an ember think about the ash?<br />
Do the waters stare at the sky, feel empty<br />
if the stars don’t show?<br />
Where will the pebble reach the bottom of the lake?<br />
Are green clouds jealous of rainfall?<br />
Do shadows always follow?<br />
What is it like to be the shiny shell in the sand?<br />
Does time have colour?<br />
Is there a reason to ask in the first place?<br />
Jack Rathie<br />
Year 10
POETRY<br />
A Rebel<br />
From the moment I wake to the second I sleep<br />
I’m suffocated by rules and caged behind the law<br />
Engulfed by the commands of others<br />
But not today no I’m taking a strike and taking a stand<br />
Saying no to being quiet in the library<br />
I’ll talk when I want and as loud as I want and you can’t<br />
reproach me<br />
Refuse to write out the question before the answer<br />
And reject washing and scrubbing what menial chores!<br />
What do I care if mould colonises the sink<br />
If we run out of plates and revert to our hands<br />
Who says I don’t know what’s best<br />
Who says that food is expired because of a date on a can<br />
These imprudent rules grip you suckers<br />
Model citizens of good hygiene upholding your cherished law<br />
You can lecture me day and night like a wretched machine<br />
But deep down I know you’re as dirty as me<br />
Finn Hugh<br />
Year 10<br />
The Frozen<br />
Moment<br />
It’s when we’ve gone under<br />
When we’re all tucked in and cosy<br />
When we lie in bed content and dreamless<br />
When the static of the day has faded<br />
Shielded from the frozen moment<br />
It’s then that he walks the streets<br />
That he confides in the moon and stars<br />
Fighting his unending war<br />
Through valleys of darkness<br />
And he wonders where the plunge began<br />
Mackenzie Baran<br />
Year 10<br />
18
BENCHMARK<br />
19
CREATIVE WRITING<br />
Write-a-Book-in-a-Day<br />
An excerpt from<br />
Terror Amongst the Trees<br />
Chapter One<br />
A cacophony of drills and machinery saturated the air<br />
around Joe. However, he was oblivious to the sounds<br />
around him, his mind singularly focused on the timber in<br />
front of him. With experienced care, he pressed the drill<br />
in again, creating whirlwinds of frayed wood with the<br />
powerful machine.<br />
Absorbed in this task, he barely noticed when his mobile<br />
phone began to ring. The vibrations, however, snapped<br />
him out of his trance. As he reached for it, his hand<br />
slipped and the drill tumbled out of his hand. As it fell,<br />
it carved out a deep channel into the timber.<br />
‘Bollocks!’ Joe shouted. He lunged for the drill as the<br />
phone bounced out of his hands and catapulted into the<br />
air. He snatched the drill out of its plunge before it could<br />
do any harm. His phone, however, did not receive the<br />
same treatment. It hit the ground and shattered into<br />
hundreds of pieces. The ringing died out. ‘Bugger!’<br />
He cursed and swept up the broken pieces with his boot.<br />
Behind him, he could feel eyes turning towards him. He<br />
tried to cover up the mess even though it was now too late.<br />
‘Mr Landers,’ a voice said behind him. He turned<br />
disgracefully around to meet his boss’ eyes. ‘My office.<br />
Now.’ Like a lamb to the slaughter, Joe did as he was told.<br />
The office was cool compared to the sweltering heat<br />
outside, the boss sat down and motioned for Joe to<br />
do likewise.<br />
‘It has come to my attention that you have been, shall we<br />
say, a little clumsy. This is not the first time but has been<br />
repeated several times over the last week. I do not want to<br />
have to make this decision, but I’m afraid that I have no<br />
choice. I would like you to look for another job,’ the boss<br />
stated. Joe was taken aback. He couldn’t believe what he<br />
was hearing.<br />
‘But I’m your best worker. I’ve been working for you for<br />
over two years now. You can’t just fire me!’<br />
‘I’m afraid we can, and we must. You have been very<br />
careless lately and have often jeopardised the project.<br />
We feel that it is time for you to move on. Our decision<br />
is final.’<br />
Broken, Joe left the office. A cloud of despair billowed<br />
behind him and followed him all the way to his<br />
apartment. It was a mess; clothes were strewn all over<br />
the floor and his bed. The only surface, a small table in<br />
the centre of the room, was littered with half-eaten food.<br />
The television was on full blast, even though Joe wasn’t<br />
watching it. The sink was leaking and dirty dishes were<br />
piled up in the sink. Solemnly, he stepped over the<br />
disgusting mess and took a can of beer from the fridge.<br />
Taking a sip, he pushed a week-old singlet off the chair<br />
and sat down in front of his computer. Joe sighed,<br />
wondering where to start. Jobs were scarce these days and<br />
he knew what trials were ahead of him to secure another<br />
occupation. Soberly, he opened up the web browser and<br />
began searching.<br />
***<br />
Three days later, after several hours searching the Internet,<br />
he heard his home phone ring.<br />
‘Joe Landers here.’<br />
‘Gerald Fitzroy. I have been looking for a builder of<br />
your qualifications for some time. There is a particular<br />
assignment I believe would be right up your alley. My<br />
aunt Elizabeth currently lives in a house of poor living<br />
standards outside Nettletown, in the Bullwinkel Woods.<br />
I need a well-experienced builder to renovate her home<br />
to a more safe design. I hope that you will be able to<br />
complete this project.’<br />
‘Why, um, yes. Certainly!’ Joe was astounded. A job offer,<br />
finally! He was ecstatic!<br />
‘I’ll email you the address now. I shall contact you later<br />
this week to sort out any complications.’<br />
Then the call ended. Joe placed down the phone, still<br />
dazed by the brilliant situation. He picked up the phone<br />
again to tell his friends of the good news.<br />
***<br />
The old house creaked and moaned against the relentless<br />
wind. Inside, however, the room was dimly lit by an open<br />
fireplace. Two figures sat opposite each other on well-worn<br />
armchairs. Eventually, one of them broke the silence.<br />
20
BENCHMARK<br />
Write-a-Book-in-a-Day<br />
An excerpt from<br />
Terror Amongst the Trees continued<br />
‘Aunty, you really cannot continue to live here. The walls<br />
are old and weathered and the floorboards have become a<br />
safety hazard,’ Gerald insisted.<br />
‘Nonsense, dear, I’m perfectly happy here and have no<br />
intention of moving,’ Elizabeth responded, ‘Besides, your<br />
uncle and I have lived here for many years now, longer<br />
than you’ve been alive, and nothing has ever happened<br />
to us in that time.’<br />
‘Albert has been dead for 15 years now.’<br />
‘He still lives here, you know. He keeps me company<br />
sometimes.’<br />
There was a long silence. Nothing could be heard except<br />
for the crackle of the fireplace. Shadows shimmered in<br />
and out of focus on the peeling walls. Outside, the<br />
gnarled branches of a tree scratched against the frosted<br />
glass of the window pane. A wolf howled in the distance.<br />
The low buzz of cicadas enveloped the quiet room. Finally,<br />
after much contemplation, the nephew spoke.<br />
‘We need to renovate this house. Perhaps some concrete<br />
beams could secure the roof …’<br />
‘Fiddlesticks! You simply don’t understand. This house<br />
means more to me than it does to you or that silly wife<br />
of yours. Modern replacements would wreck this<br />
wonderful home.’<br />
‘I’m afraid the matter has already been settled. I’ve<br />
contacted a bricklayer to strengthen your foundations.’<br />
‘That’s preposterous, dear! I simply won’t allow it. These<br />
modern bricks will wreck the atmosphere of this place.’<br />
‘I shall hear no more of the subject. Like I said, a bricklayer<br />
has been contacted and should arrive later this week. I do<br />
hope that you’ll be accommodating; he may need to stay<br />
the night.’<br />
21<br />
The young man got up to leave, then turned around.<br />
‘Of course any time you would consider moving to a<br />
retirement village I would be only too happy to help.’<br />
Then he left, leaving Elizabeth bewildered.<br />
Hal Crichton-Standish, Blake Bullwinkel, Laurence Nettleton,<br />
Jack Mowbray, Christopher Christian, Joseph Rossi<br />
Year 8 Team – Mentos in Coke
CREATIVE WRITING<br />
Write-a-Book-in-a-Day<br />
An excerpt from<br />
The Lecture<br />
‘That’s all for today. Tomorrow we’ll go over prevention<br />
of tooth decay and gum disease,’ the professor announced,<br />
adjusting his glasses upon his nose. The room let out a<br />
collective sigh of relief after a two-hour lecture.<br />
Sarah’s hand was sore from intense note taking. It wasn’t<br />
that Sarah didn’t enjoy her dentistry course; in fact she<br />
was really passionate about her studies, but hours upon<br />
hours of studying plaque had taken its toll. She was also<br />
unbelievably hungry. Her stomach was groaning and<br />
growling, pleading for food.<br />
After packing her books and returning her glasses to their<br />
case, she left the lecture hall. An animated group of girls,<br />
whom she had met a few days earlier, asked her if she<br />
wanted to grab a drink after the lecture. However she was<br />
too tired, and rejected the offer. She preferred to spend<br />
some nights alone and returned to her college room.<br />
A strong wind was building and Sarah swept the brown<br />
hair from her face. She held her books to her chest,<br />
providing warmth and a wind barrier. Her tired eyes had<br />
lost their usual blue glow, and had sunk into her head.<br />
Small red pimples had found a home on her forehead and<br />
cheeks. Late nights and little sleep were evident in her<br />
physical features.<br />
As she made her way across the university grounds, she<br />
noticed a threatening dark cloud on the horizon. It<br />
seemed to be growing in the sky as she approached the<br />
quadrangle. As she drew nearer to the quad, she noticed<br />
all the usual university activities in full flight. There were<br />
a few guys kicking a hacky sack, an alternative-looking<br />
guy playing the bongos and some couples holding hands<br />
and lovingly staring into each other’s eyes. This typical<br />
university behaviour was to be expected. What was<br />
unusual about the scene was the fact that a peculiar<br />
individual was standing on a bench, as if giving a sermon<br />
to an invisible crowd.<br />
‘I am Father Charles McGregor and I speak to you! The<br />
rapture is imminent! I have seen the way and the way is<br />
with me! Tomorrow a greater power will descend on us!<br />
Join and you will be saved! Follow the Way and you will<br />
be forgiven! Follow the Way and you will be saved from<br />
the impending doom!’<br />
He dressed top to toe in a creaseless white garment. A<br />
rugged beard flowed from his chin. He was the spitting<br />
image of one’s depiction of God. His voice echoed in the<br />
compounds of the quadrangle. A pile of leaflets stood at<br />
his feet. He was handing them out to passers-by who took<br />
one look before discarding them into the nearest bin.<br />
At first Sarah was taken aback by the unusual presence of<br />
this man. Of course, this was not an everyday occurrence<br />
in the university. Despite this, crazy people did crop up on<br />
the campus from time to time, so anything this guy said<br />
should only be taken lightly. Sarah dismissed the preacher<br />
and continued back to her dorm.<br />
***<br />
After showering, Sarah made her way to the empty dining<br />
hall to satisfy her hunger. She was too hungry to care<br />
about the quality of the meal. For the third time this week,<br />
the college chefs had prepared a hearty beef stroganoff for<br />
dinner. She took a plate of the brown mess with rice and<br />
didn’t bother to question where it came from. After a<br />
quick glance around the hall Sarah couldn’t find any of<br />
her friends, so she decided to retreat to her own room.<br />
She didn’t feel like being social anyway.<br />
The journey back to her dorm took her through the<br />
courtyard. From there she could see the dark cloud<br />
brewing, nullifying the sun and casting a foreboding<br />
shadow on the university buildings.<br />
Sarah let herself into her room and collapsed on her small<br />
bed and turned on her miniature television set. She flicked<br />
through the channels and upon finding nothing even<br />
slightly entertaining, settled for the local news broadcast.<br />
The anchors presented the mundane evening news,<br />
starting with a road accident that caused a major traffic<br />
backlog. He then continued on to sport, business and<br />
finally weather. Sarah was drifting off now, catching<br />
fragments of the report as the need for sleep began to<br />
overcome her.<br />
‘Strong wind … Dangerous storm … Unpredictable<br />
conditions are to be expected ...’<br />
That was the last she heard before she was enveloped by a<br />
dream filled sleep.<br />
Mackenzie Baran, Jonathan Li, Jack Rathie, Lewis Cooksley,<br />
Anthony McDougall<br />
Year 10 Team – Dragon Warriors 2<br />
22
BENCHMARK<br />
Jarrah<br />
In a European-dominated school in outback Australia, an<br />
aboriginal boy takes refuge behind a water tank. Regularly<br />
persecuted because of his race, he increasingly retreats into his<br />
own imaginary world. A chance encounter with another boy,<br />
bullied because of his religion, sparks the most unlikely<br />
friendship.<br />
47 Ext – watertank – day<br />
Jarrah runs into shot. We hear boys shouting in the<br />
distance. As the voices fade Jarrah wipes a tear from his<br />
eye. He leans with his back against the water tank and<br />
dejectedly slides down the side of the tank onto the<br />
ground. He wraps his arms around himself and rocks<br />
back and forth. Beads of sweat trickle down his face as<br />
he remembers the previous events.<br />
CALLUM: He doesn’t belong here …<br />
GEORGE: Can’t even speak properly …<br />
HENRY: Should’ve stayed in the bush.<br />
We hear the ticking of a clock to symbolise time passing.<br />
Voices can be heard outside.<br />
TEACHER: Where is he? You say he ran past the<br />
classrooms, then where?<br />
CALLUM: Who cares, he’s a stupid loser anyway.<br />
TEACHER: Don’t say that!<br />
CALLUM: You know it’s true!<br />
TEACHER: The principal won’t be happy. If I catch<br />
that boy …<br />
CALLUM: He doesn’t belong here, why can’t we get<br />
rid of him?<br />
TEACHER: Just get to class!<br />
We hear the sound of footsteps and the voices dissipate<br />
into the distance. Jarrah curls up into a ball. We hear the<br />
clock again, getting louder and louder …<br />
48 Int – foster home kitchen – evening<br />
Pan across to Marian cooking in the kitchen. She is<br />
a European woman in her fifties with graying hair. The<br />
kitchen is small and under-furnished, but it has a warm<br />
23<br />
feel about it. The door opens in the background and<br />
Jarrah enters with his school bag slung over one shoulder.<br />
Marian puts her cooking pot down and turns to Jarrah<br />
with her hands on her hips.<br />
MARIAN: Well?<br />
JARRAH: Well what?<br />
MARIAN: How was your first day of high school?<br />
JARRAH: Okay. I guess.<br />
He dumps his bag at the front door and is about to head<br />
up the stairs.<br />
MARIAN: Now what have I told you about property<br />
dear?<br />
Jarrah picks up his bag and places it down gently. He then<br />
races up the stairs. Marian shakes her head.<br />
MARIAN: Oh Jarrah. What am I going to do with you?<br />
But she’s smiling to herself.<br />
49 Int – foster home dining room – night<br />
Eight other children around Jarrah’s age sit with him at<br />
the table. Marian takes the seat at the head of the table.<br />
MARIAN: I have some news for you all. I am getting a bit<br />
old for all this volunteer work and have decided to leave<br />
you in the capable hands of Miss Kensington.<br />
DARREL: But you can’t leave! You’ve been here eleven<br />
years!<br />
MARIAN: I know dear, and it’s been lovely looking after<br />
you all. But I can’t look after you forever.<br />
DARREL (Muttering): I bet she’s a witch.<br />
50 Ext – schoolyard – day<br />
Jarrah walks through the school gate. As soon as he enters<br />
the school, five boys come out of the shadows. One of<br />
them is Callum. Callum is a small boy with fiery red hair<br />
and a quick temper. Jarrah tries to ignore them.<br />
CALLUM: So you’ve come back again?<br />
JARRAH: Leave me alone.
CREATIVE WRITING<br />
CALLUM: You shouldn’t be here. This is our school. We<br />
don’t take boys from the foster home.<br />
EDWARD: You’re so pathetic even Marian is leaving the<br />
foster home. She’s gotten sick of you.<br />
JARRAH: Why can’t you just drop it?<br />
CALLUM: Didn’t you hear me, idiot? We don’t take your<br />
type in here. This is our school. It was the same with your<br />
parents, wasn’t it?<br />
Jarrah stops dead in his tracks. Callum senses that he’s<br />
hit home.<br />
CALLUM: They couldn’t keep themselves out of other<br />
people’s business. No wonder they were bludgeoned; they<br />
shouldn’t have come to our church.<br />
Jarrah slowly turns around and faces Callum, clenching<br />
his fists. Callum’s friends encircle the two and a chant<br />
begins. Jarrah runs at Callum and punches him in the gut.<br />
Callum is winded.<br />
CALLUM: Stupid … abo …<br />
HENRY: Get him!<br />
The four boys close in on Jarrah, but he slips through<br />
their closing net. He runs behind the classroom block and<br />
his pursuers lose his trail. He races behind the water tank<br />
without being seen.<br />
51 Ext – watertank – day<br />
Safe behind the water tank, Jarrah begins to cry. Silently,<br />
his small body shakes uncontrollably. Callum’s voice<br />
echoes in his head.<br />
CALLUM: … They couldn’t keep themselves out of other<br />
people’s business … … they shouldn’t have come to our<br />
church …<br />
Close up on Jarrah’s eyes, smudged with tears.<br />
FLASHBACK SCENE: Jarrah’s parents laughing,<br />
holding hands.<br />
FLASHBACK: Jarrah going on picnics with his parents.<br />
FLASHBACK: Waving, as they went off to church that<br />
fateful Sunday.<br />
FLASHBACK: Television headlines the day after they died.<br />
NEWSREADER: An aboriginal family was bludgeoned<br />
to death with a crowbar due to a fierce argument …<br />
Jarrah slips into a state of semi-consciousness.<br />
Fade to an image of a bloodied crowbar on the pavement …<br />
Hal Crichton-Standish<br />
Year 8<br />
24
BENCHMARK<br />
The Watcher<br />
All there was, all there had ever been, was the window.<br />
The dripping concrete walls, the white bathroom, the iron<br />
door from which his food and his nightmares came, were<br />
irrelevant, artificial, unchangingly fake. Though this was<br />
all he could touch or move through physically, it was the<br />
world in the window that was the source of all his<br />
thoughts. Looking down upon the world that was outside<br />
the room and the tower, he watched the twisting, erratic<br />
lives of the people below. He understood that once he had<br />
been one of them, and the thought brought tears of<br />
longing to his eyes.<br />
His view of the world below was limited. He could not<br />
hear the people speak or see them when they went into<br />
buildings, save when he saw them through their windows.<br />
Understanding the purpose of their daily movements only<br />
grew more confusing the more he followed their daily<br />
lives. At first they simply seemed to move in and out of<br />
vehicles and buildings, never for any apparent purpose.<br />
After a while though, he saw that individual people<br />
followed a nearly identical pattern each day. Most would<br />
emerge from the same vehicle, enter the same building at<br />
the same time each morning and sit by the same window<br />
each day, before departing each evening for areas<br />
unknown. The reason for these routines was impossible to<br />
determine, and the small variation in behaviour puzzled<br />
him further. Yet the first decision he ever remembered<br />
making was that one day he would understand these<br />
people below him.<br />
Much of their behaviour was explained when he learnt to<br />
read. He could at first gain no meaning from the strange<br />
symbols that covered the outside world but, over the<br />
course of several months he realised there were<br />
connections between certain sequences of characters and<br />
the picture on billboards and shopfronts. After that<br />
teaching himself was easy. He would read newspapers or<br />
books over the shoulder of people in the streets. He never<br />
gave thought to his ability to distinguish the small text on<br />
the pages of the book 100 storeys below, or the fact that<br />
he could read an entire page with a glance whilst the<br />
readers below would stare at a page for several minutes,<br />
just as he never gave thought to what was in the grey soup<br />
that appeared through a slit in the iron door every day.<br />
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What he did think about was how much more he could<br />
understand through reading. He learnt so many new<br />
words and their meanings, how they related to the<br />
seemingly pointless routines of those below. He learnt<br />
about jobs and money and work. One interesting word<br />
that kept popping up was freedom. He learnt about that<br />
when he saw the two sign-wielding mobs converge on<br />
each other in the park. They seemed to be very angry<br />
and were shouting at each other. Both groups seemed to<br />
believe that the other was trying to take away their<br />
freedom, and they all considered freedom to be very<br />
important. It seemed that freedom was the ability to do<br />
what one wanted, when one wanted. So it confused him<br />
when, after the riot, everyone returned to following the<br />
exact same daily routine they had before; it seemed to<br />
defeat the point of all the shouting and waving of signs<br />
for the sake of freedom.<br />
The first of the nightmares came when he was five years<br />
old. Faceless men in white coats came through the iron<br />
door and dragged him, screaming, down the white<br />
corridors beyond. When they arrived at the glass room he<br />
was tied down to a table. The men in white coats attached<br />
tubes and machines to his body and the world disappeared<br />
into a whirlwind of shocks, lights and pure pain.<br />
He was never sure if the nightmare echoed something that<br />
had actually happened all he knew was that from then on<br />
he could follow people beyond where he could before. His<br />
eyes followed them into buildings and watched them<br />
through the walls of their homes. He saw all. There was<br />
so much that went on behind walls. He learnt of families,<br />
of work and of sex. Each explained a lot that had<br />
previously confused him about the behaviour of the<br />
people outside. Yet, at the same time, it made the world<br />
below even more complex and difficult to understand.<br />
Why did the woman who worked from dawn to dusk in<br />
the highest offices, wearing a bright smile and beautiful<br />
clothes, break into tears every time she stepped through<br />
the door of her empty apartment? Why did the man who<br />
rode the garbage-collecting truck every morning and who<br />
waited outside the shopping centre in uniform with his<br />
head hung every night, suddenly gain a spring in his step<br />
the moment he saw his children?
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He could now hear them too. It was difficult, often, to<br />
find interesting talk over the incessant buzz of millions<br />
of people gossiping about nothing but he found that the<br />
more serious and interesting conversations, few as they<br />
were, were generally had privately, and sounded generally<br />
more hesitant, as if talking about something serious was<br />
something to be ashamed of. He also learnt the power<br />
words had over people. Over several weeks he saw a man<br />
beat a woman each night, each night she picked herself<br />
off the ground, seemingly unchanged. One night he heard<br />
her speak, screaming words like ‘failure’ and ‘nothing’.<br />
The man had turned without a word, ascended the<br />
stairwell of their apartment building and flung himself<br />
from the roof. Then there was the young olive-skinned<br />
girl in the headscarf who laughed when she spoke and<br />
skipped when she walked until she first came to one of<br />
the buildings the people called schools. The Child in the<br />
tower heard taunts of ‘Paki’ and ‘terrorist,’ follow her<br />
through the day. He never saw her laugh again.<br />
The second nightmare came three years after the first.<br />
Once more the figures in white coats took him through<br />
the iron door. This time the glass room was occupied<br />
by a great whirring machine in which was embedded a<br />
chair. Remembering the pain of before he struggled and<br />
scratched and bit at the men, but they would not let go,<br />
and forced him into the chair. As the machine began to<br />
move around him he started to hear whispers coming<br />
from everywhere and nowhere. He looked out but the<br />
men in white coats had their lips sealed. The whispering<br />
grew louder until it screamed through his mind, blotting<br />
out everything. Yet each individual whisper sounded no<br />
louder than it had before. It was like more and more tiny<br />
voices were beginning to speak, asking for something,<br />
anything, but he could not hear what. After the whispering<br />
came the feeling and it was like nothing else in the world.<br />
Each whisper came with an emotion, a taste, and as he felt<br />
them he understood them. Longing, despair, pity, sadness,<br />
hope-ambition-anger-joy-jealousy-lovehatesatisfactionlustfearcarewantdisgusthelplessnessavaricealienation<br />
… It was<br />
too much. The last thing he saw before he fell into blissful<br />
nothingness were the burning, black eyes of one of the<br />
men in white coats, the last whisper he heard was, ‘Soon.’<br />
When he woke in his room, deathly cold and aching, the<br />
whispering and feeling still remained, just weaker. When<br />
he looked down from the window he found that it was the<br />
people below who were whispering. Whispering without<br />
moving their lips, even as they said aloud something<br />
completely unlike what they whispered, whilst their<br />
emotions rose from them like a scent.<br />
He understood. This was what was in each person’s<br />
mind. That was when he knew the world was wrong.<br />
The people’s spoken words rarely, if ever, matched the<br />
whispers and the feelings. It was clear too that no one<br />
knew what they wanted, let alone what would make<br />
them happy. All around him he felt warm sparks of love,<br />
contentment, resolve or hope rise up, only to disappear<br />
with the reading of a report from a teacher, a conversation<br />
with an employer, a phone call from a lover, a headline in<br />
the papers or an announcement from a judge. And there<br />
were so many who were just so wrong in what they<br />
thought they wanted. Office workers infuriated him. Each<br />
person had a feeling of something missing, and believed<br />
they could find it in one of the offices on the floor above.<br />
The strange thing was, those in the offices above felt<br />
exactly the same about the offices above them, only<br />
the feeling of emptiness seemed for the most part even<br />
stronger. He did not like looking into the hearts of the<br />
men who sat at the long tables at the top of the office<br />
towers. They were completely empty, often cruel or<br />
miserable; and seemed to want to eat everything. And yet<br />
everyone below them seemed desperate to become like<br />
them. The boy in the tower pitied these people the most.<br />
Yet they were everywhere, sucking the life from<br />
themselves and others; in the offices, in homes, in the<br />
parliament building, everywhere.<br />
On 21 December in the year 2012, at dawn, the boy in<br />
the tower had a visitor. The iron door opened once more.<br />
The Child was not afraid; he had felt the fear of billions<br />
and knew what was worth fearing and what was not. The<br />
man with the black eyes greeted him. The Child heard<br />
every thought in his head before he said it. The man<br />
spoke with the feverish excitement of one whose entire life<br />
had been dedicated to that moment. ‘You understand now,<br />
why we did this to you? We needed someone who saw<br />
what we saw even more clearly than we did, one who<br />
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The Watcher continued<br />
could find the answer. The world is broken, and must be<br />
fixed. Do you know what must be done?’ The Child<br />
looked down on the suffering world below him and for<br />
the first time in his life, he spoke. His voice was like a<br />
great crowd speaking in unison, telling of an end and a<br />
beginning, radiating terrible knowledge and an utter,<br />
terrifying power. The man with the burning black eyes<br />
shivered as a single word reverberated through the room,<br />
shattering every window, reducing the iron door to dust.<br />
‘Yes.’<br />
Nick Pether<br />
Year 11<br />
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CREATIVE WRITING<br />
The Unseen Foe<br />
Amun turned his head from the harsh sting of the desert<br />
wind, his dark, powerful legs shifting painfully in the<br />
sand with each laboured step he took. Sucking the dry<br />
air through his coarse tunic, relief overcame Amun as the<br />
steady rattle of heavily laden saddles finally ceased, the<br />
weary camels squatting in the golden sand to let down<br />
their riders and rest what were undoubtedly exhausted<br />
legs. Slumping to the ground like the animals, Amun<br />
emptied the last of what had once been a bulging<br />
waterskin into is mouth, his parched throat throbbing<br />
with pain as he swallowed and observed the other men.<br />
Garbed in the dark blue robes of the royal warriors, the<br />
eight men stood tall; black silhouettes against the distant<br />
sun, their ghostly shadows streaked across the desert as<br />
they exchanged glances, waiting grimly by their respective<br />
animals. Only one camel remained on its feet, its golden<br />
saddle glinting with the touch of loose rays of sunlight, its<br />
rider perched seemingly motionless atop its humped back.<br />
Engrossed by what appeared to be a thin, tattered scroll<br />
and its miniscule glyphs, the King’s eyes scanned the page<br />
with intense fixation, as if searching for some crucial<br />
detail he’d missed the last million times. Comparing the<br />
gaping, stone entrance to one of the faded symbols, the<br />
King dismounted, smiling as he rolled the fragile paper<br />
up for the first time in many days.<br />
The life of a slave was not, traditionally, an adventurous<br />
one, and looking back at the vast horizon that extended as<br />
far as the eye could see, Amun was acutely aware of how<br />
far the King’s journey had taken them from the land they<br />
called home. Though the kingdom held little opportunity<br />
for Amun, the familiarity of his simple room and palace<br />
duties were daily comforts he was learning to live without.<br />
As one of the luckier royal slaves, Amun was to be at the<br />
beck and call of the divine Prince, and had seen the<br />
younger man grow up into the strong and admired King<br />
he had become. Although nobody knew with certainty,<br />
some speculated that the King and his leading slave had<br />
developed a relationship, over the course of years, which<br />
was almost akin to friendship. Though merely rumour,<br />
just the notion of befriending a slave, let alone one of dark<br />
skin, was enough to trigger a strong sense of disapproval<br />
amongst various members of the community. Amun was<br />
regularly insulted when the King’s back was turned, and<br />
had long grown to be grateful for his just master’s<br />
unwavering sense of integrity.<br />
Only when thinking back to those days gone by,<br />
remembering the young King and their close friendship,<br />
did Amun appreciate how much had changed as they’d<br />
matured. Despite the King’s broader shoulders and ageing<br />
face, Amun was one of the few to see that the greatest<br />
changes were invisible to the eye, observing his friend on<br />
a daily basis. The signs had been subtle at first: a declined<br />
meal or a sad glance at his reflection. Yet it wasn’t long<br />
before the shroud of mystery was raised from Amun’s eyes.<br />
Known as a great and fearless warrior, it seemed that there<br />
was no foe that struck fear in the heart of the King, but<br />
Amun was astute enough to know that not all foes rode in<br />
speeding chariots, spears brandished high. For some, the<br />
enemy took the form of the setting sun, the passing of<br />
numbered days, and the feeling of time slowly slipping away<br />
like sand in an hourglass. Time was the foe which even the<br />
fiercest warrior and wisest king were subject to; a concept<br />
that Amun could see his friend struggling to accept.<br />
Even as his youth inevitably took flight, the King pursued<br />
it valiantly, remaining impressively fit and perceptive,<br />
while meeting regularly with his healers and priests.<br />
Though the King had been able to slow down the clock,<br />
Amun could see that he knew he was fighting a losing<br />
battle. Though it was not in the nature of their<br />
relationship to talk about such issues, Amun often<br />
wondered if the obsession with youth stemmed from the<br />
absence of children in the King’s life, a respected son or<br />
a beautiful daughter. Though he had held many titles,<br />
‘Father’ had never been one of them. Whatever the source<br />
was, Amun would look into his friend’s eyes more and<br />
more to find defeat, and too often would he hear him<br />
speaking about what would become of the kingdom<br />
without him. Though Amun had seen otherwise, the<br />
King assured him that his worry was for the people and<br />
the future of the kingdom, not for himself. So grew an<br />
increasing curiosity in immortality, and cheating the bite<br />
of death.<br />
Seeing his once lively friend withdraw into himself, Amun<br />
refused to help his master for the first time, as the King<br />
searched the palace archives, uncharacteristically<br />
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The Unseen Foe continued<br />
frantic, for an ancient scroll that promised saviour<br />
from sure doom. Awoken one night, by the echo of a<br />
triumphant cry, Amun’s memory was still burnt with the<br />
image of the deranged King, his crazed eyes wide open<br />
with hungry focus, on his knees, filthy robes sticking to<br />
his clammy skin. His eyes darted across the scroll’s tiny<br />
lines of symbols. The royal warriors had been summoned<br />
at once, to prepare for a journey that was to commence<br />
the next morning.<br />
‘This is it Amun. The solution is within reach,’ the King<br />
said and his voice filled with hope, ‘You must come Amun,<br />
This marks a new era in the kingdom’s history!’<br />
‘I will not, Master,’ replied Amun, his deep voice<br />
brimming with conviction, his heavy brow framing<br />
firm eyes.<br />
‘You will not?’ hissed the King with feigned hurt, ‘I think<br />
you forget your place, Amun.’<br />
‘As a friend, I cannot condone this, Master. That which<br />
you desire can only lead to evil,’ Amun murmured,<br />
disturbed by the mocking tone in his friend’s voice.<br />
‘You misunderstand Amun. You WILL come,’ the King<br />
interrupted bitterly, his bearded face creased with disbelief.<br />
‘Remember you are first my slave, and second my friend,’<br />
he finished dismissively, turning his back on Amun.<br />
Stunned by the King’s outburst, Amun silenced himself,<br />
sensing that this was not the man he had once known and<br />
called brother. The next morning, no warm citizens, or<br />
grand spectacles saw them off, but only the dappled light<br />
of the rising dawn sun. The company of ten left in secret,<br />
a silent string of camels disappearing into the distance on<br />
the scroll’s bearing. Unworthy to command his own steed,<br />
Amun had grudgingly agreed to take turns riding with<br />
the warriors, silently wondering what was in store for<br />
the company.<br />
Woken from memory by the sharp whistle of a muscular<br />
solider, Amun raised himself from the sand, steadying<br />
himself on a nearby camel as he saw the King take the<br />
first step into the ominous, columned entrance.<br />
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‘You will stay here mud-skin!’ the solider barked cruelly, as<br />
Amun also began to walk towards the entrance. ‘Stay with<br />
the animals, where you belong.’<br />
Ignoring the insults, Amun obeyed the order, waiting<br />
until the glow of torches had completely disappeared<br />
into the blackness before pursuing them with tired legs.<br />
Padding into the recess, the rough, stone ground was cold<br />
and hard against Amun’s bare, calloused feet, as he<br />
followed the echo of men’s voices. Turning a corner,<br />
Amun saw light appear as the narrow tunnel arced out<br />
into a vast, empty cavern. Cutting the blackness, a wide<br />
beam of light cascaded from what must have been a hole<br />
at the top of the chamber, illuminating a small silver altar<br />
which the King and royal warriors approached, dropping<br />
their torches. Tempted to emerge from the shadows,<br />
Amun controlled the impulse, muscles tensed as he waited<br />
to see what would unfold. As the blue warriors backed<br />
away, the King approached the altar slowly and seized<br />
the small, shining orb that floated above it. His eyes filled<br />
with blatant awe, the King gazed into the orb, his<br />
reflection distorted by his desires as he looked into the<br />
eyes of a younger version of himself.<br />
‘Youth,’ the King said, the word barely floating from his<br />
open mouth as the orb began to glow, its light reflected in<br />
his glazed eyes.<br />
Amazed, Amun watched on speechlessly as the orb burned<br />
with the intensity of the sun, filling the vast cavern with<br />
bright, golden light. As a current of wind began to circle<br />
around him, the King could feel warmth spreading<br />
through his body, as he felt the weight of age lift from his<br />
shoulders. Overcome with astonishment, Amun barely<br />
dared believe his eyes as he saw the King’s golden skin<br />
tightening over his muscular frame, and his greying hair<br />
return to its original black, catching the light like the<br />
midnight sky. Then, turning his eyes to the eight warriors,<br />
Amun witnessed the horror which the obsessed King had<br />
been blinded. Their eyes wide with shock, embedded in<br />
sagging eye sockets, the warriors wheezed with pain as<br />
their youth was sapped by the glowing orbs and<br />
channelled into the King. With their athletic bodies<br />
thinning with rapid age, the warriors fell one by one<br />
collapsing into dusty husks of their former selves, as
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Amun finally burst from the shadows and the glow of the<br />
orb began to fade.<br />
Eyes filled with the glow of youth, the King’s hypnosis<br />
was shattered by the slapping of bare feet against smooth,<br />
black stone. Absorbing the scene around him, the joy<br />
faded from the King’s eyes as he dropped the orb. Amun<br />
came to rest by his side and placed a comforting hand on<br />
his shoulder. Falling to his knees the King’s eyes brimmed<br />
with sorrow, as he stared into the hollow eyes of his<br />
obsession’s victims. Having conquered his unseen foe, the<br />
King felt no joy in victory as he was overcome with a guilt<br />
that remained as fresh as his youthful body for many<br />
years to come.<br />
Nicholas Bucci<br />
Year 11<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
An After Dinner Speech<br />
Soon after the party had gathered in the drawing room<br />
and the footmen had gone to work returning the dining<br />
room to its usual appearance. After the men had smoked<br />
their cigars and indulged in a post-prandial brandy. It may<br />
seem strange that this was not just a house party but the<br />
scene of a murder, but of course the victim was an<br />
Englishman, and the last thing he would have wanted was<br />
to make a scene, especially in someone else’s house. And<br />
so the guests and the servants carried on as usual, the fires<br />
were lit, the pheasants were shot, and at breakfast, the<br />
morning after the body had been discovered, the eggs and<br />
kippers were laid down on the sideboard.<br />
The only change had been the presence of an extra man<br />
around the house, neither servant nor guest, destroying<br />
the rather feudal comfort of the guests upstairs,<br />
reminding them of the changes of the world outside.<br />
Tonight this detective, dispatched from the local<br />
constabulary, having shuffled around behind the curtains,<br />
inquiring and investigating, took centre stage. He had, he<br />
believed, arrived at a conclusion; after just a few days of<br />
feverish work he knew the identity of the murderer.<br />
It was a fairly ordinary group that weekend at Mulcaster<br />
Hall. Earl Montfort, our host sat closest to the fire, his<br />
wife Countess Montfort was perched on the sofa, her<br />
brother, had rather inconveniently died from the shot of<br />
a pistol through the head. Next to Lady Montfort on the<br />
sofa was the Honourable George Standish, who had<br />
brought his wife, Constance to the shoot. Charlie<br />
Carmody was admiring a Gainsborough, as Mr Meeks,<br />
a Fellow at Worcester College, Oxford, a mathematician<br />
and an amateur historian who was writing a history of<br />
Mulcaster Hall, tried to tell him some story about the 4th<br />
Earl, who evidently had suffered from gout. Lady Honoria,<br />
the Earl’s daughter sat at an angle to a mirror, glancing at<br />
herself when she felt she wasn’t being watched. The final<br />
guests Sir Richard Jenkins and Lady Pamela sat opposite<br />
their hostess.<br />
At the centre stood Inspector Johnson, an impressive man,<br />
with a great mane of brown hair, and the assured<br />
confidence of one who believes himself to be eminently<br />
capable. ‘I think it’s time I began.’ The assorted guests<br />
took their place, Lady Honoria checked her watch, and<br />
Mr Meeks lowered himself slowly onto a padded footrest<br />
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and placed his hands in his pockets as he sat, rather<br />
awkwardly.<br />
‘As you know, three days ago Mr John Beechman, the<br />
Oxford Don, and brother of Lady Montfort was shot<br />
through the head as he read a copy of Country Life. Mr<br />
Beechman was a noted scholar of mathematics, a pillar<br />
of his local parish and yet at the very prime of his life this<br />
fine gentleman was cut down, as he enjoyed a solitary<br />
moment, in this very house.’<br />
‘Could we do away with the melodrama, Johnson? We<br />
know who he was.’ Sir Richard was known as a man with<br />
a low tolerance for time wasting after nine o’clock, when<br />
his bed beckoned.<br />
‘Of course Sir Richard, of course, yes, right, I was just<br />
about to … yes. Ladies and gentleman those of you<br />
familiar with the sort of work I do will know that the<br />
detective looks for motive and means. And while the<br />
murder weapon has yet to be found, and no one was seen<br />
around Mr Beechman’s room at the time of his death<br />
these are all we are left, with which to consider.’<br />
‘Then who do you suppose to be the murderer, Mr<br />
Johnson?’ Lady Montfort tilted her head slightly to one<br />
side as she spoke to the man standing in front of her.<br />
‘Well, if I may say so Your Ladyship, you have struck at the<br />
very heart of the matter. I don’t think that it is a secret<br />
that Lady Montfort and her brother are the only children<br />
of a Mr Robert Beechman, a man born to limited means<br />
who established himself in South Africa, built up a great<br />
shipping company and at the time of his death was<br />
rumoured to be worth millions of pounds.’<br />
‘What of it, Mr Johnson?’ Lord Montfort spoke slowly as<br />
he queried the police man.<br />
‘Well, my Lord, many of those here would know that your<br />
wife’s money came very much in handy at the time when<br />
your father’s death duties had to be paid.’<br />
‘I would prefer it Johnson if you did not discuss my private<br />
financial affairs, in my own drawing room, in front of<br />
my guests.’<br />
‘It pains me to say it Lord Montfort but I must continue.<br />
It was in a conversation with Mr Standish that I
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discovered that your lordship has in recent times, despite<br />
the wealth of your wife, been caught out.’<br />
‘I beg your pardon?’<br />
‘I’m sorry my Lord, this is difficult but apparently through<br />
a combination of bad luck on the horses and the recent<br />
troubles on the stock exchange, you have found yourself<br />
rather short of cash.’<br />
‘You vulgar, little man …’<br />
‘But your brother-in-law was a bachelor, and as a result<br />
of his father’s industry, a man of considerable means. Is<br />
it not true that your wife was the heiress to his wealth?’<br />
‘You’re not seriously suggesting that I would murder my<br />
wife’s husband?’<br />
‘Sir, you have a strong motive, and as you keep a<br />
considerable collection of guns in the house, you have<br />
the means.’<br />
‘Well, ask the gamekeeper, he has the key, ask if I’ve taken<br />
a gun out in the last few days.’<br />
‘A man employed by you sir. Hardly a reliable witness, I<br />
think you’ll agree.’<br />
‘This is truly ridiculous. I wouldn’t kill a man and what’s<br />
more I’m not in any serious trouble on the markets, just<br />
down a few beans. What would Standish know anyway?’<br />
‘I’m sorry sir but you have means, and you have motives.<br />
You must understand my situation,’ as he spoke Inspector<br />
Johnson slowly moved towards the supposed murderer.<br />
‘I’m afraid that I have …’<br />
‘He couldn’t have murdered John,’ from beside her<br />
husband Constance Standish said in a squeaking voice,<br />
‘He couldn’t have.’<br />
‘Why not? May I ask …’ the inspector had stopped<br />
midstride.<br />
‘Because, because, that night he was with me.’ An uneasy<br />
silence settled over the room, Constance maintained eye<br />
contact with Inspector Johnson, Lord Montfort studied<br />
the ceiling, and his wife her nails. Finally Johnson spoke.<br />
‘I see, I see … the whole evening?’ Mrs Standish, with a<br />
tiny motion nodded. Beside her, her husband shook, but<br />
remained silent.<br />
‘Well, Lord Montfort, I apologise.’<br />
‘What’s more, Uncle John didn’t have any money did he<br />
Daddy?’ Lady Honoria said to her father, ‘Mummy’s<br />
father left him nothing after he went into mathematics,<br />
rather than shipping.’<br />
‘Well then, well then, it appears I was wrong. I can only<br />
apologise again Lord Montfort, and of course to you<br />
Lady Montfort.’<br />
‘It appears you will need more time Mr Johnson, or<br />
perhaps it would be for the best if another detective were<br />
to continue this case.’ Lord Montfort addressed the<br />
portrait of his ancestor on the wall as he spoke.<br />
‘Perhaps that would be for the best my Lord.’ Once again<br />
silence returned to the room, as the unpleasantness settled<br />
among the guests. Only Mr Meeks seemed oblivious to it,<br />
turning from face to face, trying to make eye contact, to<br />
read unspoken words. Soon he began to stand up.<br />
‘Well what an odd evening, an odd evening indeed. It<br />
rather reminds me of that story about the sixth Earl after<br />
the Battle of Waterloo. Do you recall it Lord Montfort?’<br />
As he spoke he removed his hands from his pockets, and<br />
with them a small revolver fell to the ground.<br />
Luca Moretti<br />
Year 12<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
Chess<br />
A short gasp, then the crowd, as one, exhaled. It had only<br />
been a matter of time before Vladimir Aronian yielded,<br />
before he ended his own misery, and now the time had<br />
come. Again Thomas Adams, the British Champion, had<br />
played brilliantly against his Russian opponent, and with<br />
checkmate imminent, Aronian ungraciously resigned,<br />
murmuring ‘game,’ resetting his king, then swiftly<br />
departing the floodlit stage. Adams had an enormous 5–1<br />
lead in the best of twelve games of the World Chess<br />
Championship final: an hour later, he was dead.<br />
At the post match news-conference, journalists launched<br />
into extravagant comparisons with Bobby Fischer, focusing<br />
on Adams’ place among the greatest of all time.<br />
‘It’s been said that your play has brought in a whole new era<br />
of chess,’ said one. ‘Would you agree?’<br />
Thomas Adams opened his bottle of water and drank, as<br />
much to give himself time to think as to quench his thirst.<br />
He took a long draught, and then froze. The bottle slipped<br />
from his hand and crashed onto the table and, as though in<br />
slow motion, he slumped forward. That was the image<br />
flashed around the globe by the world’s news media. First<br />
reports speculated that Adams had died of a heart attack.<br />
It took less than twenty-four hours to discover that he had<br />
been poisoned.<br />
Scotland Yard’s Chief Inspector Richard Dadswell was<br />
given the case after an autopsy revealed that Adams<br />
favourite water bottle had been laced with a lethal quantity<br />
of hydrogen peroxide, a colourless, odourless substance<br />
often found in common bleach.<br />
Dadswell had little more than a rudimentary<br />
understanding of chess. He knew, of course, the<br />
Championship was underway at London’s plush<br />
Savoy Hotel.<br />
He soon discovered it was a much grander affair than he<br />
had realised, taking place on a specially constructed stage<br />
in the hotel’s grandiose ballroom, viewed by hundreds of<br />
people who paid good money to watch. There were just<br />
three men on the stage, Adams, Aronian and a nervous<br />
little East-European gentleman who was the Arbiter.<br />
Each move was projected onto a huge screen behind the<br />
competitors, and there was serious betting on the outcome.<br />
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Aronian was hostile when Dadswell spoke to him.<br />
‘Adams is a fraud, a pompous patzer. So far he has won<br />
four games and we have drawn two. But he is not that good.<br />
I know he is not. I am glad he is dead because he doesn’t<br />
deserve to be World Champion. I know.’<br />
‘Winning means so much to you?’<br />
‘Of course. It is my whole life. I am a chess player and this<br />
is the World Championship. But, I did not kill Adams. I<br />
would like to shake the hand of the man who did, though.’<br />
Dadswell got little further with the Arbiter who seemed<br />
terrified but at least gave him some background into the<br />
event.<br />
A chess game could take up to six or seven hours, he told<br />
Dadswell. Between moves the players, accompanied by a<br />
security guard, could retire to their own rooms for comfort<br />
breaks, food or even just to get away from the bright lights.<br />
They were forbidden, however, to talk to anyone or to<br />
access any electronic devices.<br />
Dadswell’s chat with the security guard produced its own<br />
shocking revelation: Aronian was right: Adams was a cheat.<br />
‘I’m only telling you this because if I get done for cheating,<br />
well that’s one thing, but I had nothing to do with his<br />
murder,’ Emma Jacks told Dadswell.<br />
‘How did he cheat?’<br />
‘A few days before the match, his manager, Albert Tindall,<br />
offered me a lot of money to pass on information to Adams.<br />
You see Tindall was working with a computer and would<br />
text me moves. I’d write them down on toilet paper for<br />
Adams who read them and then flushed them away.<br />
Tindall was betting on the games and raking in millions.<br />
Funny thing is that I don’t think Adams was all that<br />
interested in the money. He cared about winning.’<br />
‘Who else was in on the scam?’<br />
‘Adam’s playing partner, Tim Keene may have been, but<br />
I don’t think so. He’s always short of money.’<br />
‘One last thing. Who had access to Adams’ water bottle?’
CREATIVE WRITING<br />
‘That water bottle! They say sportsmen are superstitious.<br />
Well, Adams was too. He always had to have that particular<br />
water bottle. Anyone in his room after the day’s play could<br />
have picked it up.’<br />
Dadswell shook his head meditatively as he left the security<br />
guard in the charge of a uniformed officer. Chess players<br />
were difficult people. He knew how they could predict<br />
moves in advance; he only wished that he could do the<br />
same. He understood what to look for, however, and what<br />
types of evidence to use. Whenever he was given an<br />
unusual assignment, Dadswell often found that the best<br />
place to start was with the basics, those elements that are<br />
present in every crime … An idea came to him and the<br />
detective made a quick phone call to his office before<br />
interviewing Adams’ playing partner, Tim Keene.<br />
‘I was told that you left the room about an hour before the<br />
end. Why was that?’ Dadswell asked.<br />
‘My job was to help Adams prepare. I could see that he was<br />
going to win that game, and I wanted to get ready for the<br />
next one.’<br />
‘What about the betting and cheating?’<br />
‘You know about that?’<br />
‘The guard confessed’<br />
‘Tindall was the only one betting. Adams just wanted to<br />
win. In fact before yesterday’s game they had a big blow-up<br />
about it. Adams wanted Tindall to stop betting in case<br />
someone found out about the cheating. They were really<br />
vicious.’<br />
‘Where were you after the game?’<br />
‘In Adams’ room. We all were.’<br />
When Dadswell confronted Tindall with the cheating<br />
allegation he denied it vehemently, even threatening to sue<br />
if such accusations were made public. When Dadswell<br />
made it plain that both Emma Jacks and Tim Keene had<br />
confessed, he changed his tune.<br />
‘Don’t make it public. Please. That will end my career in the<br />
chess world. I was never a great player, but I am a good<br />
manager. This could finish me.’<br />
‘This will be public and you won’t just be finished. You will<br />
be in jail,’ came Dadswell’s reply. ‘At this stage a charge of<br />
murder is likely to be added too.’<br />
‘Okay. We cheated and I made money. But I didn’t kill him.<br />
How would that help me?’<br />
‘Keene said that Adams promised to lose the last game if<br />
you didn’t stop betting.’<br />
‘I knew Adams wouldn’t do that. I know him well. He cared<br />
too much about winning to do that. He would never throw<br />
a game. But how did Keene hear him? I didn’t even know<br />
that he knew about the betting.’<br />
‘Of course, of course …!’ Dadswell slammed the table with<br />
his fist.<br />
Picking up the telephone he called his office again, barking<br />
out a few quick orders. Dadswell could sense the important<br />
pieces of evidence: some fitted together, others stood out<br />
and seemed incongruous. He needed some final<br />
information, he needed to confirm his suspicions, but if he<br />
was right, he would be able to form the whole picture. Then<br />
he turned to Tindall.<br />
‘A uniformed officer is outside your room. You will stay here<br />
under guard until my investigation is complete.’<br />
With a certain sense of theatre, Dadswell gathered all<br />
concerned in the murder beneath the chandeliers of the<br />
Savoy Hotel’s ballroom. He always took care in his<br />
denouement: he found it important to describe the case bit<br />
by bit, teasing out the solution for his audience with shrewd<br />
logic. Thomas Adams’ team was there, as was Vladimir<br />
Aronian’s, although not all by choice.<br />
‘Firstly, I am charging Albert Tindall, Emma Jacks and Tim<br />
Keene with illegally profiting from cheating on the World<br />
Chess Championships.’<br />
‘I knew it,’ shouted Aronian. ‘I said he was a swindler.’<br />
Dadswell raised his voice.<br />
‘I am also charging Tim Keene with the murder of Thomas<br />
Adams. A few days ago Adams had an argument with<br />
Tindall about him betting on the games, and demanded<br />
that he stop. He threatened to lose his next game if it didn’t<br />
cease. He was worried that there would be a money<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
Chess continued<br />
trail leading back to the team. Keene only heard that part<br />
of the conversation, and he doesn’t know Adams the way<br />
Tindall does. Tindall knew that game was too important<br />
for Adams to throw, but Keene borrowed a large sum to put<br />
on a bet against Adams. It seemed like a good way of<br />
making money since Aronian was at such long odds to win.<br />
It was only when he realised that Adams was going to win,<br />
he was enraged because he thought he’d been tricked, and<br />
wanted revenge. Keene left before the game ended. CCTV<br />
footage shows him entering a convenience store at Charing<br />
Cross station and buying a bottle of bleach. After that it<br />
was a simple matter of pouring a deadly amount into<br />
Adams’ favourite water bottle. Your entire team was<br />
involved in a daring gambit, but Adams is dead and you<br />
three are going to jail.’<br />
Rupert Coy<br />
Year 12<br />
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CREATIVE WRITING<br />
An excerpt from<br />
The First Branch<br />
Coke wasn’t the right choice. Apparently neither was<br />
Schweppes or Pepsi, as the customer, Jack, kept opening<br />
and closing doors, and pacing about the back corner of<br />
the shop. He was nervous, that was plain enough, with<br />
sweat starting to bead on his face and the beginnings of a<br />
twitch. The dark jacket he wore wasn’t helping. It was<br />
barely reasonable to be wearing even a shirt in the heat, let<br />
alone something like that. It was one of those modern<br />
attempts at innovation. This one had ended up with the<br />
zipper at a slant. After a while the shopkeeper lost interest<br />
and turned back to his newspaper, certain that if<br />
something was stolen the cameras would record it.<br />
The surprise came when the man ripped the newspaper<br />
away from the shopkeeper and started to make demands.<br />
‘Give me all the money in the till!’ Jack tried to follow this<br />
with a threatening glare. It amounted to a scrunched face<br />
and didn’t help him hide his desperation.<br />
The man behind the counter faced two opposing<br />
reactions: the urge to laugh, or to recoil in shock. The<br />
result was a look of confusion. He was not particularly<br />
worried. There were no weapons waving at him, and his<br />
father’s bed time stories of the ‘old country’ had prepared<br />
him for worse than this. Company policy was to just hand<br />
over the money in the till and let the insurance worry<br />
about the consequences. It was cheaper than hospital bills,<br />
or worse, the legal nightmare of a court case. However, he<br />
couldn’t help but imagine the reaction his grandfather<br />
would have had in his position. No manager’s lesson about<br />
occupational health and safety would have stopped him<br />
from slamming the rude stranger’s face into the counter<br />
and making a story that would tour the local bars. But the<br />
shopkeeper was a different man, and this was a different<br />
age: he was dressed in a neat uniform, with a name badge<br />
that said ‘Yuri’ in elegant blue writing, sucking away all<br />
feelings of aggression he might have had as defender of<br />
the shop. Even his sculpted beard looked ridiculous in the<br />
outfit. That was the worst of it.<br />
‘Well? Are you going to give me all the money that<br />
Armaguard van dropped off, or will I have to make you?’<br />
Jack prodded again, struggling to maintain some<br />
semblance of a serious threat. The mantra ran through his<br />
balding head: Be confident, be confident, this is your<br />
chance.<br />
The younger man behind the counter rolled his eyes and<br />
began to open the cash register, while thinking about the<br />
notes in his back pocket. A few months ago he had<br />
decided to start anew. His family had been close enough<br />
to people like Ratko Mladic in Bosnia to induce a conflict<br />
of loyalty in an Australianised boy. Mentioning the war<br />
was extremely taboo, but the same madness was buried in<br />
the family’s daily habits. It’s not that they practised<br />
genocide on bunnies or anything, but that the way they<br />
looked at the world, at justice, was different to everyone<br />
else, and even most of their homeland. The two<br />
perspectives could simply not merge. At first, Yuri hadn’t<br />
been sure how he might avoid his likely fate. He’d only<br />
ever worked as a manual labourer, shovelling, stacking,<br />
performing jobs that presumably helped keep society<br />
running, and it seemed that all escape routes had been<br />
barricaded at birth. But one day a gun fell into his hands,<br />
and he knew it was time to leave. He hadn’t been near a<br />
gun since.<br />
He made a trip to Melbourne to find the place called<br />
Craigieburn where Australia’s banknotes are printed and,<br />
after quite a lot of explaining, and more than a little luck,<br />
he got a set of freshly printed denominations. He then<br />
moved to Sydney with his sister, and used a pin to poke a<br />
tiny hole through each bill in exactly the same place, a<br />
mark of ownership. His theory had been that since he now<br />
owned a symbol for opportunity, money, he was, in some<br />
way closer to owning opportunity itself, and being in<br />
control of his own life. No one he’d explained it to<br />
understood why.<br />
Although this act was purely symbolic and sentimental, it<br />
had proved to be powerful enough to help him into a new<br />
stage of his life. He had changed his friends, met his wife,<br />
found this job, and occasionally, along the way, had given<br />
out notes from his collection to those he cared about,<br />
hoping to pass on his good fortune. There were only two<br />
left, the fifty and hundred dollar bills. The robber was<br />
impatient, but managed a smile when all the shop’s cash<br />
was put into a plastic bag and handed over. He wasn’t sure<br />
how to react to the ease with which it seemed to be<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
An excerpt from<br />
The First Branch continued<br />
going, but habit found him in his moment of need.<br />
‘Thank you.’ As soon as he’d said this the absurdity of the<br />
situation struck him and he blushed. At this the employee<br />
was convinced of the man’s need, and brought out the $50<br />
bill, holding it for the stranger to take. ‘Take this. I know<br />
it’s just money, but it helped me when I needed it. It can<br />
become your chance at the life you want. Please, just<br />
think about it.’<br />
‘What…?’ Jack said, intrigued that his own mantra was<br />
coming from a stranger. He stifled the rest of his reply,<br />
realising that the more time he wasted, the more likely<br />
jail became.<br />
Hurriedly, the robber took the note, said goodbye and<br />
walked out of the shop as casually as he could. He paced<br />
up towards the intersection the enormous Coca-Cola sign<br />
guarded, considering what had just happened. Jack looked<br />
at the note, then over his shoulder at the convenience<br />
store’s employee. He’d come out of the shop’s door to<br />
watch Jack’s getaway. The man looked confident and<br />
relaxed, much more than he could say for himself. To run<br />
would be foolish, so Jack kept his pace and tried to<br />
understand Yuri the shopkeeper. Maybe there was<br />
something to this ‘gift’? What was more sobering was<br />
Jack’s certainty that no police had been alerted and thus<br />
no one would punish him for this crime; all from the eye<br />
contact they’d shared.<br />
The corner came and went, leaving it all to memory.<br />
The next corners after that did the same, until Jack found<br />
himself on a bench in a park. There were so many parks<br />
around Sydney that the novelty of somewhere colourfully<br />
peaceful amidst the dense throng of urban concerns was<br />
lost. This one had the characteristic grass, trees, neat<br />
design, but was all on top of a car-park.<br />
Oliver Lotz<br />
Year 12 English Extension 2 Major Work<br />
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CREATIVE WRITING<br />
Conversations with Jane<br />
Part 1<br />
Lachlan Macquarie, a young and ambitious Scot, enjoyed a<br />
meteoric rise in the British Army. Despite humble beginnings,<br />
by the age of 38 he was a Major at the battle of Seringapatam<br />
near Bombay in 1799.<br />
1<br />
‘She was laid to rest on the 16th day of January 1797. To<br />
those who knew her modest worth no panegyric can be<br />
necessary: and to those unacquainted with her, suffice it<br />
to say that she possessed in a most eminent degree all the<br />
virtues that adorn the female character and render it<br />
worthy of universal admiration. In her manners, she was<br />
mild, affable and polite; in her disposition sweet and even;<br />
in her opinions, liberal; and in her appearance elegant<br />
without extravagance. True Christianity gave a superior<br />
lustre to all her virtues: and those of her sex who make her<br />
their pattern may with confidence anticipate a glorious<br />
immortality – and look forward with pleasure to virtue’s<br />
best reward – the applauding smile of Heaven’.<br />
Jane Jarvis Macquarie’s tomb inscription, 1797<br />
2<br />
Smoke swirled from the walls of the rebel fortress. Grey<br />
with debris, the cloud engulfed the red stone castle. The<br />
smell of charred wood and blood hung thick in the air as<br />
the heavy artillery powdered the weakest part of the wall.<br />
It had to fall at some point. It was only a matter of time.<br />
The familiar squares of red-coated British soldiers pushed<br />
forward. They appeared to swallow the ground over<br />
which they remorselessly advanced. Their Indian<br />
opponents fought without fear, but were losing their will.<br />
Many disappeared under the slow moving red mass as if<br />
they had dissolved into the earth itself. Lord have mercy.<br />
Tippoo Sahib, Sultan of Mysore, the Indian rebel leader<br />
who had eluded capture through a number of temporary<br />
treaties and lucky escapes, had finally been cornered.<br />
Crouching behind the walls of the fortress, he had to<br />
know that it was not long until his final defences would<br />
be undone. The storm of sound, a combination of gunners<br />
firing at the stone battlements and soldiers screaming<br />
directions or crying out in anguish, grew louder and<br />
louder in Tippoo’s ears.<br />
Under the tall black regimental cap and above the stiff red<br />
collar of his tunic, Major Lachlan Macquarie squinted as<br />
the rays of sunlight fell on his face. His large frame cast a<br />
long shadow on the hill from where he watched the battle.<br />
Here he was, only able to ‘observe,’ as his prized British<br />
forces tried to take the stronghold of Seringapatam from<br />
Tippoo’s rebels. Seven long years had passed since the last<br />
time he had stood here, and it was eight years since he first<br />
set foot upon the soil of India. This time, however, he was<br />
not a low ranking Lieutenant, having control of fewer<br />
than two hundred soldiers. Now he was a Major,<br />
reporting to Cornwallis himself, the Commander-in-<br />
Chief of the entire army. He would surely be rewarded<br />
with a large share of the booty from this great victory that<br />
was soon to be won. He should have been satisfied, yet<br />
still he sighed.<br />
‘I am only a spectator,’ he thought. ‘A mere spectator.’<br />
Another dry, heaving fit of coughs racked him.<br />
‘It looks as if we have the upper hand. Don’t you agree,<br />
Macquarie?’<br />
Arthur Wellesley, the zealous Colonel who had been<br />
grazed on the knee by a rebel bullet a week earlier, had<br />
been advised by his doctors not to take part in any<br />
fighting. Noticing his friend’s heaves, Wellesley continued<br />
before Macquarie could answer, ‘Are you quite well,<br />
Major?’<br />
Macquarie nodded and fixed his gaze on the battlefield.<br />
His eyes locked onto Major General David Baird leading<br />
his men closer to the walls of Tippoo’s final refuge. How<br />
he envied him. Baird’s raised sword shone as he urged on<br />
his men. The bright steel was a beacon. His men<br />
responded by surging forward, surrounding their<br />
blood-splattered leader as he slew yet another rebel.<br />
‘He may be a scoundrel, but there is nowhere found a<br />
better fellow to have in battle,’ said Macquarie.<br />
Wellesley snorted. ‘I have been informed that even his<br />
own sweet mother doesn’t defend his name.’<br />
The two men laughed.<br />
Macquarie gazed beyond the battle below, to the dry<br />
Indian landscape. The rough footpaths in the distant hills<br />
brought back painful memories of the labour he had<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
Conversations with Jane continued<br />
been assigned in 1792, the last time the British had<br />
attempted to defeat the rebels. His company had gouged<br />
makeshift roads for heavy artillery up the rough<br />
escarpment. It had seemed an endless challenge: to carve<br />
a flat surface into the rock hard land. It had taken them<br />
weeks. At times Macquarie had felt the task was<br />
insurmountable.<br />
The roads had been for more than just the soldiers<br />
heading into battle. Thousands of camp followers made<br />
the trip from Bombay to the fortress. Each soldier had a<br />
convoy of servants, chefs and families, as well as all the<br />
materials that they would require for war: cannons and<br />
canvas, gunpowder and swords. Continual rain and<br />
several unannounced attacks from small groups of Indian<br />
rebels had made the journey arduous and nigh on<br />
impossible. But Macquarie, with his band of sixty men,<br />
had brought glory to themselves and England.<br />
He remembered with pride when he was entrusted with<br />
the duty to build a battery base from which eighteen<br />
pounders could fire onto Fort Avery, which they had<br />
encountered on their way to Seringapatam. Without any<br />
weaponry and the majority of his men being<br />
inexperienced soldiers, he had the battery built in one<br />
night and by morning the fort had been taken. The young<br />
men had worked exceptionally well, obeying all of his<br />
commands without hesitation. It was the day he truly felt<br />
he had become a leading officer. All night the rebel<br />
musketeers had hurled heavy assaults at Macquarie’s men,<br />
and only one soul was lost. Laying the final sandbags onto<br />
the battery emplacement, a young sepoy he knew only as<br />
William was mortally wounded. Upon his return to the<br />
main column, Macquarie’s superior officers told him not<br />
to worry about the young Indian: he was expendable. But<br />
Macquarie had mourned when the boy died of his wounds<br />
early that following morning.<br />
Macquarie continued to scan the landscape above the<br />
tumult and his eye drifted onto the tall trees in the<br />
distance. They reminded him of Macao, where he had<br />
spent his last moments with Jane.<br />
Beautiful Jane.<br />
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The very thought of her made Macquarie step back and<br />
compose himself. It had been three years but his loneliness<br />
and depression were still with him, the hurt still sharp.<br />
When they had first arrived in Macao, Jane had seemed so<br />
joyful. Yet there had been little hope. Her doctors had<br />
recommended the voyage, assuring him that the clean,<br />
crisp sea wind would be beneficial to her consumption.<br />
Macquarie had hoped that perhaps it was the heavy<br />
Bombay air that was promoting her disease. But he had<br />
been wrong. In truth, even before they had advised them<br />
to embark the doctors probably suspected the worst.<br />
Macquarie did not resent them for lying; they were just<br />
trying to offer him a chance that she could recover. In<br />
retrospect, he was thankful that they had not told him<br />
that the consumption had already done its worst. Had he<br />
known, he might not have been able to bear her last days.<br />
He never left her bedside. He did not sleep. He missed<br />
meals. Friends urged him to go swimming or riding –<br />
anything for a few hours respite. But he could not leave<br />
Jane. Not until the night that took his love had passed.<br />
Only then had he left her side.<br />
It still hurt in his bones when he thought about her death.<br />
Most nights as he lay in bed, Macquarie wondered<br />
whether he’d ever recover. And now to his depression were<br />
added angst and frustration because he was not on the<br />
battlefield with his men. He had waited so long for this<br />
opportunity. There was little glory in what he was doing<br />
now; standing here, watching from a hill, safe from<br />
danger. He felt like a child who was not allowed to go on<br />
an adventure with his more courageous brothers. He<br />
touched the black armband on his left arm. He still<br />
couldn’t take it off. His friends had even stopped<br />
mentioning it.<br />
‘Is it my fault you’re not out there?’ Jane’s voice was soft.<br />
Although it had been three years, he could still imagine<br />
her voice perfectly. And he still heard it, always when he<br />
needed her most. He realised that if he told anyone about<br />
her visitations they’d think his mind addled. But what<br />
could he do? He never wanted her to leave.<br />
‘Of course not. I’m just ill, my dear. The doctors thought<br />
it best that I not take part.’
CREATIVE WRITING<br />
‘Then why are you filled with such anger?’<br />
It was true. As he watched his comrades win glory, waves<br />
of fury swirled and spun in his stomach. They threatened<br />
to burst out like they had that first night when he had<br />
cursed the doctors after they demanded he not lead his<br />
men into battle.<br />
‘Because … because I want to fight.’<br />
Macquarie stared into the distance and Wellesley noticed<br />
that he was preoccupied. ‘Are you sure you’re feeling well,<br />
Major? I can summon your doctors if you like.’<br />
‘I’m fine.’ Macquarie nodded absentmindedly. Wellesley<br />
was sweating profusely as Macquarie turned to him. He<br />
looked uncomfortable.<br />
‘There are some trees over …’<br />
‘ … I’m fine. I assure you.’<br />
‘Well,’ Wellesley pointed out. ‘I am most certainly not.<br />
The heat is scalding. I need to find shade before I expire.’<br />
Macquarie nodded as the Colonel left. He hadn’t really<br />
noticed the heat until Wellesley mentioned it. He tried to<br />
pick out Baird in the fighting but the smoke blocked his<br />
view, his mind wandering away again, as it often had in<br />
the years since Jane’s death. In an instant, he was back<br />
with her, on her favourite chair, as he wrote in his journal.<br />
His loose, almost illegible scrawl constantly interrupted as<br />
she asked him questions about Scotland and about the<br />
war and about whatever her young mind was interested in.<br />
She had travelled more than most people he knew. She<br />
was well educated and yet still knew very little about the<br />
world. But it was this very naivety, this innocence that<br />
Macquarie remembered and cherished. She had always<br />
believed the world a place of goodness just as she<br />
had always believed she would return to health. Even<br />
when there was no hope left, she had still seemed bright<br />
and angelic.<br />
When the sickness first struck, they had both thought she<br />
was pregnant and carrying their first child. Macquarie<br />
had been full of joy and passed an entire day writing in<br />
his journal. But his happiness soon soured into his worst<br />
fear. His sadness compounded by the fact that he had also<br />
lost the dream of a child he so desired.<br />
‘Please forgive me,’ Jane whispered from her bed once she<br />
knew of her condition.<br />
‘Of course, my love. Nothing to forgive. Nothing.’<br />
The days when she didn’t have the strength to walk or<br />
even rise from bed had been the most heart-rending. She<br />
tried so hard to prove to Lachlan that she was getting<br />
better. But the tears welled in her eyes when she didn’t<br />
have the ability to stand and Macquarie’s spirit broke<br />
every time he saw it. For months after her death, he never<br />
wrote in his journal, his thoughts too grim to be allowed<br />
to share the pages with the entries before she passed. And<br />
even if he had written, the tear stains that would have<br />
marked the journal would have meant his already hurried<br />
scrawl was even more difficult to read.<br />
Just as he was about to sink further into melancholic<br />
daydreams, an almighty crash shook him and he looked<br />
up. The artillery had finally broken through the walls of<br />
Tippoo’s castle. The shrieking English soldiers stormed<br />
the fortress, earning the glory that Macquarie and Jane<br />
had dreamed of. He would still receive wealth and earn<br />
reputation from the success of this conflict but they<br />
weren’t the things that he, or the most honourable of men<br />
in England, valued. He wasn’t gaining the glory that came<br />
with leading the charge into battle. No one had ever<br />
doubted his courage but since he had not been able to<br />
fight, this would leave its mark in years to come when<br />
people debated his involvement in the war.<br />
‘Oh yes … he was there, I think,’ they would say back in<br />
England. ‘But he didn’t take part in the storming of the<br />
castle, did he? I wonder why?’<br />
Macquarie knew this would be their response to his lack<br />
of involvement and there was not anything he could do to<br />
stop them from entertaining such thoughts. The English<br />
are honourable people, but they are also very critical.<br />
Especially to one not born into rank or wealth.<br />
‘Is it over, sir?’<br />
George ran up the hill as fast as he could, his eyes<br />
glistening with excitement. Macquarie looked down at<br />
his young servant. He was clever, especially for an Indian<br />
boy, and Macquarie was glad that he had chosen to<br />
purchase him.<br />
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‘I believe so,’ Macquarie whispered, so quietly that the boy<br />
was not quite certain what he had said. But out of<br />
courtesy, and also some fear, he didn’t ask the Major to<br />
repeat himself. Macquarie had never been angry with him,<br />
but George had seen him argue with others. His master’s<br />
temper was quick to begin and ferocious once released.<br />
A messenger stumbled up behind Macquarie and George,<br />
knocking the boy over out of ungainliness but also a little<br />
on purpose, showing the dominance he assumed over the<br />
small Indian boy.<br />
This infuriated Macquarie. ‘Watch your step, soldier,’ he<br />
said with calm ferocity. ‘What have you come to tell me?’<br />
Red-faced, the messenger stammered out his response,<br />
‘Ti - Tip - Tippoo has been killed, sir. The r - rebels have<br />
laid down their arms and the battle is c - concluded.’<br />
Macquarie turned and muttered to himself, ‘Victory is<br />
ours, Jane.’<br />
Only George heard him.<br />
Macquarie never got the large share of the winning spoils<br />
that he had hoped for after Serigapatam. He received only<br />
1300 pounds, almost 1000 less than what he expected.<br />
After India, he spent time in Egypt fighting under Baird<br />
for a few years, before returning to England to find a new<br />
wife.<br />
Part 2<br />
Macquarie was ordered to New South Wales in 1809 and<br />
was selected as Governor in 1810. His first six years were the<br />
most successful in the colony’s history and Macquarie’s policies<br />
towards convicts and Aboriginals were unique and liberal.<br />
But in 1816 a violent disturbance from a group of natives<br />
had forced Macquarie’s hand.<br />
He had to react to what they had done.<br />
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‘I therefore very unwillingly felt myself compelled from a<br />
paramount sense of public duty, to come to the painful<br />
resolution of chastising these hostile tribes, and to inflict<br />
terrible and exemplary punishments upon them. I have<br />
this day ordered three separate military detachments to<br />
march into the interior and remote parts of the colony, for<br />
the purpose of punishing the hostile natives, by clearing<br />
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the country of them entirely, and driving them across the<br />
mountains. In the event of the natives making the<br />
smallest show of resistance or refusing to surrender when<br />
called upon so to do, the officers commanding the<br />
military parties have been authorised to fire on them to<br />
compel them to surrender; hanging up on trees the bodies<br />
of such natives as may be killed on such occasions, in<br />
order to strike the greater terror into the survivors.’<br />
Macquarie laid down his quill, closed the leather cover of<br />
his journal and leaned back in his chair.<br />
2<br />
Macquarie stumbled through the maize fields; the vibrant<br />
yellow ears of grain pattered against his thighs and tickled<br />
his side gently. He let his arms dangle slightly so that the<br />
taut skin on his palms could glide across the silky tips of<br />
the stalks. He was not looking forward to what he was<br />
about to see. As he went further, red blotches stained the<br />
yellow of the corn and a crimson tinge seemed to fill the<br />
air. Fifty metres ahead Captain Wallis stood.<br />
‘Over here, sir.’<br />
The maize that had been brought from Europe was<br />
stained with the natives’ blood. Just as he was now stained.<br />
The irony was not lost on Macquarie.<br />
He took a deep breath, pressed his handkerchief, which<br />
was drenched with sweat from his hand, to his mouth and<br />
preceded onwards. The smell hit him well before the<br />
actual sight; it engulfed him and made it nearly<br />
impossible to move. He saw a child’s arm to his left, a<br />
woman’s dismembered corpse next to it, and through a<br />
clearing in the corn, a group of bodies, some headless and<br />
covered in flies. They were huddled together as if<br />
searching for warmth. Strangely, they seemed peaceful<br />
amidst the savagery.<br />
And for some reason, Macquarie thought of Jane.<br />
‘Their heads have been taken to Sydney to be exhibited as<br />
an example of what befalls those who break the law, sir.<br />
You made the right choice, these black savages deserved it.’<br />
‘Deserved this?’ Macquarie fumbled for words. ‘Why, in<br />
God’s name, did you take the heads?’<br />
‘You asked for severe punishment, Governor.’
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‘Yes. But ... ’<br />
‘They killed a British family. This is what they deserved.’<br />
‘But these natives did nothing,’ Macquarie pointed at the<br />
dead women and children lying in the maize, the blood in<br />
pools around them. ‘It was a small, rebellious group of<br />
men who murdered the family. I only wanted those<br />
natives to be ...’ He ran out of words.<br />
‘You wanted an example to be set. That’s what you said.<br />
That’s what we’ve done, sir.’<br />
Macquarie turned and walked away, the sight too<br />
gruesome for him to contemplate any further. He felt the<br />
dull weight of regret fill his spine and entomb his whole<br />
body. He gazed out towards the cliff that formed the<br />
boundary to the farm. He thought he heard a griefstricken<br />
moan from over the edge, but dared not look to<br />
see if anyone was actually there.<br />
3<br />
Macquarie slouched in his chair and pushed back his<br />
silvery hair. He felt the leather upholstery and ran his<br />
hands over the red bumps, allowing his fingers to drift<br />
over the contours. It was two hours since he had returned<br />
to Government House and still his mind was preoccupied.<br />
He had hoped that getting back to his study, his most<br />
cherished room, would give him clarity and clear his<br />
thoughts. But it had not.<br />
‘George!’<br />
The servant walked in, his Indian skin almost black<br />
against the crisp white of his shirt. ‘Yes, sir?’<br />
George, whom Macquarie had ‘bought’ as a boy in<br />
Bombay, was now a man and his de facto secretary. They<br />
had been together for twenty years but their relationship<br />
remained formal - one of master and servant.<br />
‘How many … of the natives perished?’ Macquarie was<br />
barely able to form the words. He knew the answer was<br />
certain to disgust him.<br />
‘Thirteen bodies have been found, but no one has been<br />
able to get a clear view from the top of the cliff so …’<br />
George’s voice trailed off.<br />
‘So it’s more than thirteen?’<br />
‘I would only be guessing, sir.’ Macquarie shot the younger<br />
man a look. He didn’t like people talking in roundabout<br />
ways. ‘Yes. I would imagine quite a few more, Your<br />
Excellency.’<br />
‘Quite a few?’<br />
‘At least as many as have already been found. One of the<br />
soldiers said that he saw only half of the blacks escape.’<br />
‘Thank you, George.’<br />
The young man exited as Macquarie pondered his<br />
dilemma. A family of colonists dead, and their crops<br />
raided. What else could he have done? He had always<br />
been an advocate for the fair treatment of the natives, but<br />
he had been forced to action. If he had done nothing then<br />
there would no doubt have been scores of letters from<br />
settlers to Lord Bathurst, the Colonial Secretary in<br />
London. Angry words. Threats and righteous indignation.<br />
Red-faced and shocked politicians.<br />
Yes, he had acted.<br />
But every link of trust he had gained with the Aborigines<br />
was now broken. He was no longer sure if he could repair<br />
the relations he had formed with them. When he had<br />
taken the helm in New South Wales, Macquarie was<br />
aware that the natives were suspicious of him, of all white<br />
men. But his generosity, especially when compared to<br />
previous Governors, had surprised the black inhabitants.<br />
They had slowly cooperated and slowly learnt to trust him.<br />
There had been a significant decrease in violent incidents<br />
with freed settlers.<br />
And now this.<br />
A group of six Aborigines had attacked a good, Christian<br />
family. Brutally. Not even the three small children had<br />
been spared. Why?<br />
Perhaps they were simply not an intelligent race. Perhaps<br />
they were capable of behaving irrationally for no reason<br />
and without remorse. That is what Reverend Marsden<br />
preached, right from the beginning, and he was already<br />
gloating about it. Before Macquarie had become Governor,<br />
Marsden had attempted to ‘civilise’ the Aborigines but<br />
had been frustrated by their lack of interest in trying<br />
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to better themselves. To own a horse or a house, they did<br />
not want to own anything.<br />
‘I told you there was no hope for them,’ Marsden had said<br />
the day after the colonists were killed, his face filled with<br />
satisfaction. ‘They don’t accept responsibility or<br />
ownership. They will never be able to live alongside us.’<br />
‘I refuse to believe that! The man is a fool, an arrogant<br />
fool,’ Macquarie thought angrily, and then shook in his<br />
chair when a soft response came from the empty corner of<br />
the room.<br />
‘Calm down, Lachlan. Anger has never helped you.’<br />
Jane had not appeared to Macquarie in a long time.<br />
Before the maize field he had almost stopped thinking<br />
about her. Almost.<br />
‘I don’t know what to do, Jane. It feels like … everything’s<br />
gone backward.’<br />
‘Maybe try treating the natives as you would one of the<br />
settlers.’<br />
‘I tried that as best I could. As best as would be accepted.<br />
And look what happened.’<br />
‘Don’t lose faith. Try again.’<br />
Macquarie turned away as he heard footsteps from the<br />
hall. His new wife, Elizabeth, entered the room and stood<br />
next to him.<br />
‘It will be all right, dear,’ she said, consolingly. ‘I know<br />
how you had such hope for these natives. But we must put<br />
the issue behind us now. You know it will cause nothing<br />
but conflict with Marsden if you still try to reconcile with<br />
them.’<br />
Macquarie hummed in agreement and rested his head<br />
against his wife’s waist. She was right, but he was not sure<br />
if he agreed with her council. She was an intelligent and<br />
modern woman, and very sweet. In many ways she was<br />
similar to Jane. But she had harder facets to her character<br />
that blinded her judgement on some matters. He knew<br />
that Jane’s reaction would have been different to<br />
Elizabeth’s. Softer. She always managed to see the best in<br />
people, as she had with the natives in India. A very naïve<br />
young woman to be sure, but she had schooled Macquarie.<br />
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Ever since meeting her, he had tried to treat all people as<br />
equally as he could, however foreign the notion seemed to<br />
the world.<br />
He wondered if her innocence had rubbed off on him.<br />
4<br />
Two weeks later, as they walked through the garden,<br />
Reverend Marsden told Macquarie, ‘Your men did an<br />
exemplary job in Appin, Your Excellency.’<br />
‘I suppose they did.’<br />
Marsden did not pick up the regret in Macquarie’s voice.<br />
Marsden had invited him to his estate to discuss the<br />
colony and what had transpired at Appin. Macquarie was<br />
surprised when Marsden had asked him to visit. He had<br />
never done so before.<br />
The response to the Appin affair from the other powerful<br />
families in the colony had been just as positive as<br />
Marsden’s. They had all praised Macquarie for the acts of<br />
butchery and violence, which Captain Wallis and his men<br />
had conducted on his order. Macquarie had expected<br />
praise but was surprised by their joy. It made him so angry.<br />
At least a score of natives killed, relations shattered. The<br />
Aborigines of course no longer ventured close to the farms<br />
as they once did. How could anyone find joy in that?<br />
Macquarie took in his surroundings as he stood in the<br />
Reverend’s garden, the great eucalypts rising to his right<br />
and left, their chipped and weary bark contrasting against<br />
the pale green of the grass. The dry leaves of the towering<br />
trees cracked in the heat. Macquarie felt one in his hand.<br />
It had the same feel as an old builder’s hand, rough and<br />
warm from years of handling wooden planks and stone<br />
bricks. It was comforting.<br />
On most everything that should be done within the<br />
colony Macquarie had often held similar views to<br />
Marsden. They agreed on decisions involving the settlers,<br />
and on land distribution and religion and construction.<br />
But not about the natives. On the Aborigine they rarely<br />
agreed. Macquarie was frustrated by Marsden’s inability<br />
to treat the natives with any kind of respect. Marsden was<br />
convinced they could never be trusted. And Macquarie
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was beginning to realise that most of the influential men<br />
in England agreed in full with the Reverend.<br />
This was a delicate issue and Macquarie was sure to tread<br />
cautiously whenever he spoke to his superior about the<br />
natives. He knew that Marsden held great influence in<br />
Britain and could put the Governor’s job in jeopardy if he<br />
saw fit.<br />
‘You’ve done a great deal while you have been here,<br />
Lachlan,’ Marsden stressed the word great. Still, there was<br />
criticism not well hidden in his tone. He could never give<br />
Macquarie the unfettered congratulations that he truly<br />
deserved. ‘But there is more to be done. You know this as<br />
well as any man.’<br />
‘There is always more to be done,’ thought Macquarie.<br />
But he held his tongue and stayed silent as Marden<br />
continued to wander through his garden.<br />
Macquarie could never admit to liking Marsden. The<br />
Reverend was a firm and stubborn old man, rarely offering<br />
praise and quick to ‘enlighten’ someone of their faults. But<br />
he had many friends in England, as most wealthy free<br />
settlers did, and would often tell Macquarie of his deep<br />
longing to return to his homeland and spend his last years<br />
with them.<br />
‘But I have too great a responsibility in this new land, to<br />
these new settlers,’ he had told Macquarie more times<br />
than he cared to remember. ‘For the good of these people,<br />
for the good of King George, I will sacrifice my own<br />
pleasures.’<br />
In truth, Marsden did little for the colonists now but still<br />
he received the accolades from England for the good work<br />
that was being accomplished in New South Wales.<br />
Accolades that Macquarie deserved. The Governor tried<br />
not to let this jealousy poison him. He was content with<br />
the certain knowledge in his heart that he was making<br />
a difference.<br />
Marsden had started to talk again and Macquarie had<br />
missed the first few words, ‘... after that crook Bligh,<br />
you’ve been a needed change for the colony. We required<br />
a stable Governor, especially for the welfare of the free<br />
settlers. They had begun to lose trust in me.’<br />
Governor Bligh had preceded Macquarie as Governor and<br />
stirred up an enormous amount of trouble. He had fought<br />
too hard for the rights of the poorer settlers and taken<br />
away the privileges of the wealthier families. Macquarie<br />
agreed that inequality in the colony was rife, but Bligh<br />
had been much too aggressive in his approach. He had<br />
alienated his superiors. Macquarie hoped not to do the<br />
same.<br />
‘When Bligh was deposed in 1808 there were calls for a<br />
sensible leader, with the right ‘values and ideals’ to come<br />
in and take over as Governor,’ Marsden continued. ‘You<br />
were the right man for the time.’<br />
As Marsden spoke unrelentingly, Macquarie remembered<br />
everything that he had done since becoming Governor.<br />
Roads were no longer uneven and crooked. The monetary<br />
system had improved tenfold, and the way of life was no<br />
longer as harsh. All these things were because of his doing,<br />
and Sydney was now a desirable place to live. But he had<br />
heard of whispers back in England that Lord Bathurst and<br />
his superiors were complaining, saying that the colony<br />
was now too prosperous.<br />
‘Try not to make things too good here, rather,’ Marsden<br />
said, ‘Lord Bathurst sent me a letter which I received a<br />
month ago. I’m surprised he did not send it to you. I know<br />
he trusts my judgement, but you are the Governor.<br />
Apparently there has been an increase in crime in England<br />
so people can come here and start a new life. We must<br />
stop this thinking. What would be the end if we did not?<br />
A land of criminals.’<br />
‘Yes, sir,’ Macquarie responded, once he realised that the<br />
other man was finally done talking. He tried to smile. ‘I’ll<br />
try not to make the colony too appealing.’<br />
‘You can’t win, even when you’re winning,’ thought<br />
Macquarie.<br />
He shook his head and looked up to the sky. He began to<br />
wonder why he had ever respected Marsden and the men<br />
of his ilk so much.<br />
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Part 3<br />
Macquarie’s tenure as Governor had run into its toughest<br />
period. He had been drawing criticism from influential men<br />
in both Australia and England and was getting tired of his<br />
life as Governor. In late 1819 tensions came to a head.<br />
1<br />
‘It will be impossible for us all to become a reformed<br />
people, unless time be given us to breathe, contemplate<br />
and amend … I cannot avoid saying that this country<br />
should be made the home and a HAPPY HOME to every<br />
emancipated convict who deserves it. But now my time<br />
here is done.’<br />
Macquarie in a letter to Lord Bathurst, 1821<br />
2<br />
Macquarie looked out the window. The sky blackened,<br />
sparks of electricity jumped from cloud to cloud,<br />
mirroring the frustration that grew inside him. He looked<br />
down the length of Bridge Street as far as he could see; the<br />
weather-beaten track was abandoned except for a cart that<br />
Macquarie presumed had been forgotten. He was tired of<br />
arguing. He was tired of fighting stubborn men who knew<br />
nothing of justice or acceptance. His friend, Doctor<br />
William Redfern, sat in an armchair across from him and<br />
rubbed his eyes wearily. His black coat was unbuttoned.<br />
From Macquarie’s perspective it seemed he had already<br />
accepted defeat, no longer willing to push for what he<br />
deserved, for what he wanted.<br />
‘They can’t take this position away from you, William.<br />
I’ll find a means to make sure they agree with my decision.<br />
You will be a magistrate.’<br />
‘I know you’ll try, but I don’t think even you can promise<br />
me that. These foolish men will not budge. You know it as<br />
well as I. Their sense of pride,’ Redfern stressed the word<br />
and paused, ‘it … will never allow them to concede,<br />
Lachlan.’<br />
Lord Bathurst, Reverend Samuel Marsden and many free<br />
settlers had never been supportive of freed convicts. They<br />
did not believe that these men could transform their lives,<br />
nor would they admit that the crimes many had been<br />
exiled here for were petty and not worthy of life long<br />
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penalty. Doctor Redfern had been sent to the new land<br />
after taking part in the mutiny on the HMS Standard. He<br />
had never drawn a weapon. He had merely encouraged<br />
the sailors to be independent. But the judges in the courts<br />
of England had not received this news well. Through the<br />
influence of his friends in London, Dr Redfern had barely<br />
escaped the death penalty and had been banished to the<br />
new land as punishment.<br />
Even with the knowledge of his past crime, on the journey<br />
to New South Wales, he had been awarded the position of<br />
doctor after the Captain realised his talents. He was one<br />
of only a few doctors in the new country and his skill and<br />
dedication had proved invaluable on countless occasions.<br />
He had served the state for fifteen years and only last year<br />
was nominated to become Surgeon-General. D’Arcy<br />
Wentworth had retired and Redfern had been his assistant<br />
for ten years. His appointment should have been the<br />
natural choice. A worthy man making the next logical<br />
step. But Dr Redfern had been impeded from the<br />
beginning.<br />
Macquarie had been forced to offer his friend the inferior<br />
position of magistrate as consolation for all the service he<br />
had done for the colony. But the same men, who had<br />
prevented Redfern becoming Surgeon General, were now<br />
trying to stop this selection. Marsden and Macarthur<br />
were at the forefront. The irony of Macarthur arguing<br />
against his appointment almost made Macquarie laugh.<br />
Dr Redfern had saved the life of Macarthur’s most<br />
treasured daughter, Elizabeth, from a strange form of<br />
consumption. At the time the thankful father had<br />
commented on how he hoped he could repay the doctor<br />
for what he had done. And now fourteen years later, he<br />
had forgotten that debt and was wilfully making sure that<br />
Dr Redfern did not get what he deserved. No, it was not<br />
humorous. The irony was sickening.<br />
Macquarie felt deeply sorry for his friend. They had<br />
worked together for years. Dr Redfern had delivered<br />
Macquarie’s first son. He was a loyal, honourable man<br />
who deserved more. Yet Macquarie knew he would need<br />
to fight as hard as he could to convince the others to allow<br />
Redfern to be a magistrate.
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Macquarie smiled, his expression as confident as he could<br />
muster. ‘Do not worry, William. They will not be able to<br />
deny me.’<br />
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‘No! He is just not trustworthy, Governor.’<br />
‘But the man is perfect for the position,’ Macquarie<br />
pleaded his friend’s case to Commissioner Bigge, the man<br />
who had been sent by Lord Bathurst to report on how the<br />
New South Wales government was performing.<br />
Macquarie felt the anger he knew so well rise within him.<br />
Bigge was younger than Macquarie by twenty years and<br />
this frustrated the Governor. So young and so sure of<br />
himself. So youthful looking in truth that Macquarie had<br />
thought he was Bigge’s son when he first saw him. Not the<br />
man himself. Macquarie tried to breathe slowly.<br />
‘I’m afraid I don’t agree, Governor. He is not trustworthy.<br />
First there was the incident on the Standard that got him<br />
sent here. And then there was that incident with Bligh’s<br />
daughter …’<br />
‘What incident?’<br />
‘He … ‘consoled’ her when her father was being rightfully<br />
removed from his position. He consoled the daughter of a<br />
proven scoundrel and a liar. It demonstrates the company<br />
he surrounds himself with.’<br />
‘Just because she was Bligh’s daughter, it doesn’t mean she<br />
is undeserving of human sympathy,’ Macquarie replied<br />
incredulously.<br />
‘I think a bad seed runs in families. I’ve seen it often. If the<br />
father is a cad, it is always passed on to the children.’<br />
Macquarie was about to shout his reply when George<br />
appeared at the doorway of the study. He coughed.<br />
‘Excuse me, Your Excellency. Mrs Macquarie begs to<br />
remind you that dinner is upon us.’<br />
Elizabeth had organised one of her highly anticipated<br />
parties. Macquarie had dragged Bigge up to his study<br />
fifteen minutes earlier to discuss Redfern.<br />
Bigge smiled. ‘I think our lovely hostess is to be obeyed. I<br />
am no longer inclined to discuss this. We shall talk more<br />
on it tomorrow … if you insist.’<br />
It was Bigge’s sense of complete confidence in everything<br />
he said that infuriated Macquarie. He didn’t trust this<br />
young man, and was worried about the report that he was<br />
scheduled to give to Bathurst at the end of the year. If he<br />
wanted, Bigge could tarnish Macquarie’s reputation,<br />
something the Governor could not let happen.<br />
‘We will see, we will see,’ Macquarie muttered to himself<br />
as he followed the Commissioner downstairs to the dining<br />
room.<br />
Elizabeth hurried forward as they reached the bottom of<br />
the staircase. ‘What were you discussing? Surely nothing<br />
too serious, I hope.’<br />
‘Nothing of any importance. The issue has been resolved,’<br />
Bigge replied as he moved into the dining room, greeting<br />
with a bow some of Sydney’s elite.<br />
‘In truth, is everything fine?’ Elizabeth whispered to<br />
Macquarie, as they lingered at the foot of the stairs.<br />
She could sense her husband was angry.<br />
‘That man is a fool. He will not listen to reason.’<br />
‘Is he still opposing Doctor Redfern’s appointment?’<br />
Macquarie nodded. Elizabeth sighed and patted her<br />
husband on the shoulder, ‘Please, Lachlan, no arguments.<br />
Not tonight. For me.’<br />
He knew she had to return to her guests and he had to act<br />
as host. He smiled as she turned and gestured for one of<br />
her servants to announce that everyone should assume<br />
their seats. Dinner was prepared. Guests admired the<br />
portrait of the host on the front wall of the dining room<br />
as they walked inside.<br />
‘You look so young, Governor,’ the architect and<br />
emancipist Francis Greenway said, smiling. ‘And much<br />
leaner. When did you have this painted?’<br />
Elizabeth answered before her husband even realised the<br />
question was asked. ‘In 1805, back in London. A<br />
wonderful artist named John Opie did it on the request of<br />
my mother.’<br />
Greenway nodded and then lead his wife to her chair.<br />
Seeing that everyone had sat down Macquarie composed<br />
himself and took his place at the table.<br />
But he was not finished with Bigge.<br />
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Conversations with Jane continued<br />
4<br />
Macquarie knew there were many things that Bigge could<br />
write that would shock people in England. Macquarie’s<br />
fraternising with the natives and his ‘weak’ policies<br />
towards the convicts could certainly be exploited in<br />
Bigge’s report to denigrate the Governor’s<br />
accomplishments. Macquarie could not let this happen.<br />
He had overseen the modernisation of the colony in a way<br />
no previous Governor had even attempted. He had built<br />
the Military Hospital, and had laid down hundreds of<br />
roads throughout Sydney. He had improved the system of<br />
currency and had turned the colony into a respectable and<br />
comfortable place to live. But that might mean nothing<br />
to Bigge.<br />
He felt the anger again. The possibility of Bigge writing<br />
an unfair report swirled around his head like a thousand<br />
buzzing flies. He knew he had drunk too much wine at<br />
dinner. And now as he glanced across the table at Bigge<br />
who smiled and spoke warmly to Reverend Marsden,<br />
Macquarie wanted nothing more than to continue the<br />
conversation they had been having earlier. He knew he<br />
should not speak. And yet, he did.<br />
‘Commissioner Bigge,’ Macquarie called out. ‘I would like<br />
to confer with you once more in my study.’<br />
Bigge mumbled to Marsden and then turned. He shot the<br />
Governor a dark look as he placed his glass on the table<br />
and followed Macquarie up the stairs again to the second<br />
floor of Government House.<br />
‘There is no point arguing any more tonight, Governor. I<br />
said we shall speak of Redfern tomorrow. If that is what<br />
you wanted to discuss now then there is nothing more to<br />
be said.’<br />
Macquarie bit his tongue and allowed the rage to trickle<br />
away before responding. ‘I can assure you there is no bad<br />
seed in Dr Redfern’s case.’<br />
‘Well … I have spoken with the man on many occasions<br />
and in my opinion he always seemed …’ Bigge paused, his<br />
lips moving as if trying to find the word he was looking<br />
for floating in the air, ‘… a little off.’<br />
‘A little off?’ Macquarie felt the buzzing begin to return<br />
but once again composed himself. ‘I am not ashamed to<br />
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admit it, Mr Bigge. Dr William Redfern is one of my<br />
dearest friends, and I can again assure you that he is the<br />
most respectable and trustworthy fellow I have ever met.<br />
Bar none.’<br />
Bigge’s eyes lit up when he heard Macquarie and he took<br />
the comment as a personal offence. Unlike Macquarie,<br />
Bigge now held nothing back, ‘In my opinion this doctor<br />
does not deserve to hold any position in this colony nor in<br />
any colony within the British Empire. I cannot stop you<br />
from making this unworthy man a magistrate, as it is your<br />
obligation to choose them. But if you will not listen to my<br />
advice, do not believe that I will forget this day when I<br />
write my report for Lord Bathurst.’<br />
There it was. The threat was out.<br />
Bigge stormed out of the study and left Government<br />
House, red with indignation, before dessert and port.<br />
Macquarie felt like chasing the young man and cursing<br />
him for his inability to be fair. He almost got up to do so<br />
when a voice seemed to force him down into his chair.<br />
‘It shows weakness, Lachlan. If you want people to respect<br />
you and treat you with deference … you must change.<br />
Not pursue them … like an animal on a hunt.’<br />
Macquarie nodded. He hadn’t seen Jane since Appin.<br />
‘You won’t be able to help the colony if Bigge gets you<br />
deposed. Try to reason with him.’<br />
‘I’ve given this colony ten years of my life! I’m not sure I<br />
can give it anymore.’<br />
‘But Lachlan, it is your life.’<br />
And with that, she was gone. As quickly as she had<br />
appeared<br />
‘What happened, Lachlan? Mr Bigge is not one to forgo<br />
his port.’ Elizabeth’s face was worried as she hurried into<br />
his study, ‘You did not …’<br />
‘No, my pet. No need to worry. All is fine’<br />
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‘Congratulations, Dr Redfern. You are the newest<br />
magistrate of his Majesty’s colony, New South Wales,’
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Macquarie offered his hand to his friend after the small<br />
ceremony had concluded.<br />
‘Thank you, Lachlan. I know how much you risked for<br />
me,’ the doctor replied as he entered the carriage<br />
Macquarie had organised to take him home.<br />
‘I did nothing. You were the best man for the position.’<br />
The Governor waved goodbye to his friend as the carriage<br />
rattled away. It was 1819 and he had just sent his third<br />
request for resignation to Lord Bathurst, the previous two<br />
having been denied over the course of the last three years.<br />
Macquarie was sure this time it would be accepted. Bigge<br />
had been trying to push him out for months. Bigge, of<br />
course, had been at the ceremony today. He had come<br />
with Reverend Marsden and John MacArthur to watch<br />
the Governor bestow on his friend a position they all<br />
swore he did not deserve. They had smiled and acted as if<br />
they believed him to be the most justifiable choice. It had<br />
amused Macquarie to listen to their congratulatory<br />
speeches as they contradicted everything they had said<br />
over the last three months.<br />
Macquarie wandered back through the maze of rooms<br />
that made up Government House. He found his way into<br />
his study and took up his well-worn journal. He let his<br />
hand run over the cover. Flipping it open, he was again<br />
surprised by the messiness of his scrawl. He read the first<br />
few lines of an entry and understood why it had been even<br />
more illegible than usual. It was written years ago, after<br />
an argument with Marsden over his treatment of the<br />
convicts. Macquarie had allowed some to be made<br />
freedmen only a year after they arrived at the colony.<br />
Marsden, of course, did not agree. He had offered the<br />
tired, oft-heard argument that men were now purposely<br />
committing petty crimes back home so they could be sent<br />
to live in the comfort of New South Wales. Comfort<br />
indeed. This land was still harsh and soon proved the<br />
worth of any man. Macquarie’s entry that night again<br />
demonstrated how passionate he had been. He truly<br />
believed everyone deserved a second chance.<br />
Macquarie looked up. Through all the turmoil and<br />
discontent, he had survived. But he looked forward now<br />
to returning home with his family. Raising his sons to be<br />
good men, and leaving them with money to start a life<br />
when they grew older.<br />
He closed his eyes, finally at peace. He had fought against<br />
men he once believed to be truthful. Men who were<br />
stubborn and could not forget traditions. He had fought<br />
for new ideas in a New World.<br />
‘And we won, Jane. We won.’<br />
Lachlan Macquarie returned to England in 1822 where a<br />
scathing report from Bigge had already sullied his reputation.<br />
As a result, the pension he received was considerably less than<br />
expected. In classic Macquarie style, he challenged the report’s<br />
findings and eventually proved that his Governorship in New<br />
South Wales had been a success.<br />
But it took a toll on him. Macquarie died in 1824, leaving<br />
behind only a relatively small sum of money to his family,<br />
and, in his lifetime, having never received the true<br />
recognition he deserved.<br />
Macquarie was the Prince of men!<br />
Australia’s pride and joy!<br />
We ne’er shall see his like again;<br />
Bring back the OLD VICEROY!<br />
Song sung at Founders’ Day celebrations in Sydney in 1828<br />
Zach Monjo<br />
Year 12 English Extension 2 Major Work<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
The Detective and Me<br />
This story is about Sherlock Holmes, but if you’ll forgive<br />
me I’m not going to talk about him yet. Right now I’m<br />
going to talk about Superman.<br />
In 1992 Superman died, exchanging blows with a<br />
terrifying villain by the name of Doomsday. But a year<br />
later The Man of Steel was back, standing for Truth,<br />
Justice and the American Way in his amazing four colour<br />
escapades. Granted, there was a need for a miracle<br />
regeneration pod and a few people with amnesia, but he<br />
was back! Thereby making the entire saga practically<br />
redundant. The only thing that ended up actually<br />
changing was a massive increase in issue sales for the Man<br />
of Steel. But it didn’t stop there. Since then almost every<br />
man or woman in a cape, from Batman to Green Arrow,<br />
has died only to rise from the grave.<br />
Death always leads to popularity, even in the real world.<br />
How many artists’ record sales have gone through the roof<br />
shortly after their unfortunate demise? But with fiction,<br />
readers fall into grief and despair over someone who<br />
wasn’t real. If the character was never real, who’s to say<br />
that the death was?<br />
In 1891 Sherlock Holmes died, falling off Reinbeck Falls<br />
while locked in struggle with his nemesis; Professor<br />
Moriarty. Strangely, his so-called nemesis was only<br />
introduced in the same six-page story in which he died.<br />
That was how Arthur Conan Doyle bid one of the world’s<br />
most popular characters farewell, with a six-page story<br />
and a nemesis who came out of the blue. The reader<br />
wasn’t even given the courtesy of witnessing his death; it<br />
was merely assumed that an empty cliff meant his demise.<br />
Unlike Superman, Holmes didn’t have a secret stasis pod<br />
to bring him back to life. In fact, Doyle intended for the<br />
detective to remain dead simply because he had grown<br />
tired of writing about him. Because his author didn’t have<br />
the stomach for continuing with one of the world’s most<br />
popular characters, Sherlock died.<br />
But Doyle couldn’t keep him dead. There was a public<br />
outcry against his decision to kill his own character.<br />
Meanwhile, his other works lacked the same success.<br />
Bringing Holmes back became the only option.<br />
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Fiction sometimes becomes inescapably real.<br />
***<br />
My involvement within this strange escapade was not<br />
chosen, but rather thrust upon me by unknown fates.<br />
Technically it would remain entirely voluntary. I needed<br />
to settle some affairs at the Charge Office when I<br />
discovered that we held a new prisoner within our holding<br />
cells. Upon enquiring of Sergeant Winston, the officer<br />
who processes every suspect who comes in, I found out<br />
that the man had been brought in, not only for theft, but<br />
also for interfering with police business, and intruding on<br />
a crime scene.<br />
‘What was the manner of his intervention?’ I asked.<br />
‘You’ll need to ask Williams. He wouldn’t tell me much<br />
about the case, but apparently it’s a bit of a queer one.’<br />
Winston sparked my curiosity, so I decided to find<br />
Williams and see what kind of a case he was dealing with,<br />
and the nature of this stranger’s intrusion. He proved easy<br />
enough to find. A visit to the first Circular Quay pub I<br />
came across yielded success. As decent an officer as<br />
Williams was, upon entering the tavern I was reminded of<br />
his fatal flaw. Williams sat with a drink in his hand,<br />
reasonably inebriated, bragging to an interested group of<br />
dockworkers who were feeding him a steady stream of<br />
whiskey to ensure the completion of his story. As I walked<br />
in, the stevedores began to fall silent one by one. Williams<br />
himself continued to tell his yarn until he realised the<br />
spirits of the pub had dropped. Upon seeing the cause he<br />
too fell silent.<br />
‘Sergeant McMurphy,’ said he, trying to keep his good<br />
spirits despite the obvious potential peril to his career.<br />
‘Good morning to you.’<br />
‘Constable Williams,’ I replied, as the other patrons of the<br />
bar began to retreat to darker sections of the tavern,<br />
‘might I remind you of the seventh rule of the New South<br />
Wales Police Code of Practice?’<br />
‘I am aware of the …’<br />
‘An officer must practise most complete sobriety,’ I said,<br />
quoting the wooden plaque mounted on the entrance of
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the office. ‘One instance of drunkenness will leave an<br />
officer liable for dismissal.’<br />
Williams looked down at his feet. He pushed his drink<br />
away from him in the vain hope of hiding his<br />
misdemeanour. ‘However, you are in luck,’ said I, ‘I<br />
haven’t come to lecture you on the police code of conduct,<br />
but rather to learn a little about our friend in the holding<br />
cells.’<br />
Williams stared at me in shock, before chuckling<br />
nervously. ‘Well, sarge, it all began earlier this morning,<br />
when I was called out to Watsons Bay …’<br />
***<br />
There’s an international organisation with chapters all<br />
around the world, which pays worship to a single godlike<br />
figure. This nefarious cult has successfully infiltrated<br />
every nation, while its books and manifestos have been<br />
systematically placed into every library and bookstore on<br />
earth. In front of me lies the Sydney cell of this sinister<br />
group: the Sydney Passengers, a chapter of a much larger<br />
worldwide Sherlock Holmes enthusiast organisation.<br />
The horror.<br />
I’m here in Headland Park overlooking the old submarine<br />
base, to penetrate the seedy underworld of literary<br />
enthusiasts. They have gathered here today to celebrate<br />
the birthday of their idol. Unfortunately due to the<br />
foreboding threat of rain only six people showed up.<br />
‘Usually there are twenty to thirty people,’ a woman by<br />
the name of Katherine tells me, ‘and we’re the less<br />
neurotic ones.’<br />
The people I’m sitting with have been sleeper cells for<br />
years. Almost all of them discovered Sherlock when they<br />
were around seventeen, making some of them long time<br />
devotees. These are the ones who won’t let go. There’s<br />
something about the character of Holmes that makes<br />
them need to reach out for more, even when the pages run<br />
out. Almost every member of the Holmes society has<br />
written an adventure of his or her own. Mandy, sitting to<br />
my right, with her husband and excited dog, has even had<br />
a book published. These are the plunderers of the public<br />
domain. Like Victor Frankenstein they reach out for any<br />
piece of the Great Detective that they can get their hands<br />
on, to create a monster of their own.<br />
Except for me, of course. Looking around the group, I<br />
know what sets me apart from them. Aside from a few<br />
abridged versions I picked up when I was little, I’ve never<br />
read a Holmes story. I’m not interested in the fictional;<br />
I’m a serious journalist. Which is why I’m meeting with a<br />
literary enthusiasts group, to publish my column in a<br />
magazine for people to read with their coffee when they<br />
get sick of the heavy stuff in the real newspapers. That’s<br />
the fourth estate at work, ladies and gentleman.<br />
I did do a bit of reading before I came. Maybe I can push<br />
these people’s buttons a bit. First I dip my toe in the<br />
waters and ask a watered-down version of the unforgivable.<br />
‘Is there anything about Conan Doyle’s’ writing that you<br />
don’t like?’ A fairly simple question, but of course I need<br />
to start out with subtlety.<br />
Shock grips the group, and they are slow to come up with<br />
an answer. Some suggestions do arise. Katherine begins by<br />
mentioning the obvious, the dreaded Reichenbach Falls,<br />
which is met with a groan, followed by nods of agreement<br />
from the group while I rub my palms in excitement.<br />
Mandy then admits, ‘It was so uncharacteristic of Holmes<br />
to leave Watson alone on the cliff and then simply appear<br />
after letting Watson think he was dead for three years.’<br />
This is good, very good. These poor brainwashed fools can’t<br />
be pulled out of their state of mind in an instant. They<br />
need to gradually wake up to what they’ve submitted to.<br />
This could make a very interesting article indeed. ‘Lone<br />
Reporter Liberates Brainwashed Holmes Fans’. To hell<br />
with my editor’s desire for a ‘mild account,’ this is real life<br />
damn it!<br />
But this hope is crushed when Mandy becomes the voice<br />
of reason. ‘Really, you’re not permitted to have a grievance.<br />
The fact remains that he did it the way he did. If you’re a<br />
fan, you like what you’re reading.’<br />
The smile drops from my face. These aren’t the radicals<br />
I thought they could be, they’re fans of Arthur Conan<br />
Doyle’s Sherlock Holmes, and to them that means being<br />
a fan of Arthur Conan Doyle.<br />
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The Detective and Me continued<br />
‘You’re wrong!’ I want to tell them. ‘You could do better!<br />
Arthur Conan Doyle has let you down! Readers of the<br />
world rise up!’<br />
However, I don’t. If these people are to regain their senses,<br />
they’ll need to do so on their own terms. I merely sit and<br />
eat my cake, feeling pity for these sheep. In the distance a<br />
kookaburra cackles. The sun beats down.<br />
I get up to visit the public toilet and when I return, the<br />
subject of their discussion has moved from literature to<br />
the real world. I suppose there is still hope. As I retake my<br />
seat, their attention returns to me.<br />
‘So are you much of a Sherlock Holmes fan?’ asks an<br />
elderly woman by the name of Patricia.<br />
Now what? I don’t want to offend these people, but sooner<br />
or later they’ll realise where I stand.<br />
‘As much as I can be, without having read any of the<br />
books,’ I say.<br />
‘Oh well, that’s a shame,’ she replies.<br />
The illusion of comfort has been shattered. They’re now<br />
aware that an outsider, a potential heretic, is amongst<br />
them. I don’t have nearly enough for the column but I<br />
can’t think of a single question I actually want answered.<br />
I decide not to whip a dead horse, so I finish my cake,<br />
and then I leave.<br />
***<br />
‘As you know, these past few days brought an ungodly<br />
storm; winds, rain and lightning the like of which I’d<br />
never before experienced, but by this morning it had<br />
subsided. I arrived at the Watsons Bay Catholic Church,<br />
where around the base of its looming steeple a crowd had<br />
gathered, whipped up into a fury more powerful than that<br />
of a Pentecostal Church. The crowd had formed a circle,<br />
and in the middle of the circle lay the body of a priest in<br />
dog-collar and black surplice. He was on his back in a<br />
pool of blood. My immediate conclusion was that this<br />
man had committed suicide, an act not uncommon to the<br />
location. Now, I was lucky that none of the onlookers had<br />
moved the body, and so when I turned the body onto its<br />
side, everyone present, myself included, was shocked by<br />
the revelation.<br />
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Along the back of the body was a long sickle-shaped burn<br />
mark, scorched through his clothing and onto his back,<br />
leaving one conclusion; this priest had been struck by<br />
lightning. It was as I looked upon the body that he<br />
showed up; the man whom you are no doubt eager to<br />
meet. He was dishevelled and obviously insane. He barged<br />
his way in and, bludgeoning me with insults, demanded<br />
access to the body. I was prepared to let him off with a<br />
warning, but then as I escorted him out, I noticed the<br />
contents of his pockets. They were filled with syringes,<br />
making me recall the recent barrage of reports we had<br />
received, of a thief who had been nicking medical supplies,<br />
namely cocaine, from medical practices. Indeed, it made<br />
sense that this was the sort of desperate man who would<br />
steal to feed his own addiction. This man was guilty, not<br />
only of intervening with police business, but also theft.<br />
Thus, I had just cause to arrest him.’<br />
***<br />
I walk out of the park and through the leaf-covered<br />
footpath. This was a pointless assignment. ‘Do an article<br />
on literary societies,’ my editor instructed me. With riots,<br />
terrorist attacks and new civil wars breaking out once<br />
every five minutes, I had a choice between covering a<br />
meeting of either the Charles Dickens, Jane Austen or<br />
Sherlock Holmes Society. Then it turned out the Dickens<br />
Society was cancelling its meeting that week, so my only<br />
real option was the Sherlock Holmes Society. To hell with<br />
the landed gentry.<br />
That’s what happens when you’re a columnist, not a<br />
journalist.<br />
I wouldn’t be here if it wasn’t for that bastard in the red<br />
cape. People always say ‘do what you’re good at,’ and so,<br />
fresh out of university, I decided to do an article on him.<br />
‘Lies, Injustice and the American Way,’ it was titled. An<br />
eight-thousand-word rant on modern pop-culture<br />
breeding ultra-nationalism. The editor read it, laughed<br />
and hired me. Now, what I wanted was a soapbox, where<br />
I could enlighten the neo-conservative right-wing fascist<br />
media with the truth! But no, my editor had something<br />
different in mind. He stuck me on the literature column,<br />
since ‘I could write so eloquently about fiction’. But I had
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to keep the stories inoffensive, and I couldn’t write about<br />
comics since they ‘don’t count as literature’.<br />
My job is to be the man on the inside. I get the scoop on<br />
the future of the latest young adult series, or how this<br />
year’s pop-culture-fest is looking. I look at how fan bases<br />
react to their favourite characters being killed off, what<br />
current sales tell us about the teen vampire trend and<br />
who’s suddenly getting angry over a rumour about their<br />
favourite series. And yes, during a slow week I write about<br />
literature enthusiasts’ meetings.<br />
At first it was easy. Hell, it was even kind of fun. Within<br />
my columns existed a world I controlled. I wrote about<br />
the fans, while knowing more about the business than<br />
they did. Of course, the movie was going to be made.<br />
Of course, publishers aren’t going to fund another book.<br />
Of course, some major character was going to die just to<br />
improve book sales. It’s just the way the business works.<br />
But then I realised that nothing changed. Sure, the titles<br />
were different and the fads came and went, but the stories<br />
stayed the same. That’s because the people I write about<br />
are all the same. They’re like the Sydney Passengers; they<br />
can’t let go. My columns worked and I was good at what<br />
I did. My readers didn’t seem to notice the cycles and<br />
repetition, just wanting something bland and inoffensive<br />
to digest with their morning coffee. So, like in an old<br />
Three Stooges episode, instead of passing through the<br />
door, I got wedged in.<br />
As I walk, my musings of self-pity are interrupted when<br />
I bump shoulders with a man whose presence I had barely<br />
acknowledged, and vice-versa. ‘Oh excuse me,’ he mutters.<br />
I prepare to drift back into my train of thought when he<br />
interrupts me once again, ‘This is Headland Park, isn’t it?’<br />
‘Yeah,’ I reply. Looking at him, I can recognise another<br />
poor fool. ‘Are you looking for the Sydney Passengers<br />
meeting?’<br />
‘Yes I am. Why?’<br />
‘I was with them a couple of minutes ago; they just packed<br />
up.’ They’re probably still there, but I’m doing him a<br />
favour in the long term. He looks at me curiously.<br />
‘Oh, I’m sorry, I didn’t recognise you, or are you a new<br />
member?’<br />
I desperately want to tell the man that I’m actually an<br />
investigative reporter following a group of international<br />
arms smugglers posing as literary societies. It might get an<br />
interesting reaction. Then again, I would end up with a<br />
story too tempting not to publish, but provocative enough<br />
to instantly get me fired.<br />
‘Actually I’m a columnist writing about the society.’<br />
‘Oh, how’s that working out?’<br />
‘About as well as I pictured,’ I admit.<br />
‘Oh, are you the one who writes the literary reviews in<br />
The Chronicler?’<br />
‘Well, actually I don’t review the books, I just … write<br />
articles about them.’ Right now I feel like a lawyer whose<br />
client just took a swing at the judge. The career that could<br />
go nowhere but down is now taking a full-blown final<br />
nose-dive. Meanwhile I’m talking to a man without the<br />
respect to even acknowledge the name of my column<br />
(Page by Page, page 42 of the Sunday Chronicler, behind<br />
the cooking tips).<br />
The man’s eyes suddenly and inexplicably dart from side<br />
to side before he says, ‘I need to see if there’s anyone still<br />
at the meeting but I have a proposal for you.’ He decides<br />
to keep me brimming with anticipation by telling me he’ll<br />
send me an email. Then he rushes off.<br />
***<br />
When Williams had finished his tale, I was stunned. I<br />
hadn’t expected such a bizarre escapade. I left Williams<br />
and proceeded back to the charge office, before reaching<br />
the cells. I unlocked the iron door and pulled it open to<br />
find the stranger sitting upon his bed in the far corner.<br />
Williams was correct in labelling this man as dishevelled,<br />
for everything about him suggested that he had no care<br />
about his appearance. He was a tall man. However, he was<br />
pale and sickly looking, as if he were on the verge of<br />
starving. His hair and beard were short, yet scruffy and<br />
unkempt and while he had strong cheekbones and a<br />
curved hawk-like nose, his eyes betrayed any sense of<br />
strength in his character. They were bloodshot, with<br />
shrunken pupils and dark circles underneath. It seemed as<br />
if this man had been locked away for months, instead of<br />
mere hours, which would also explain the poor<br />
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The Detective and Me continued<br />
condition of his dirty brown cloak. He squinted at me<br />
with bloodshot eyes.<br />
‘Who are you?’ he murmured.<br />
‘My name is Sergeant McMurphy, and I’m here to<br />
understand why you thought it was in your place to<br />
meddle in the business of the New South Wales police.’<br />
‘I pray that you’re not all as incompetent as your associate.’<br />
As he said this I recognised his accent. ‘Are you English?’<br />
‘Yes, I am,’ he replied, ‘but right now, that’s not important.<br />
In fact, I’m not important. What’s important is this: I’m<br />
the only one who can solve this little mystery of ours.’<br />
This comment took me by surprise. So too did the next<br />
thing he said.<br />
‘Tell me, Sergeant McMurphy, would your associate by<br />
any chance be a drunkard?’<br />
‘How would you assume that?’<br />
‘You know, sandstone truly is a funny thing, I marvel at<br />
how widely you people seem to choose it over the<br />
brick-and-mortar typical of England. The peculiar thing<br />
about sandstone is its ability to trap and reflect within a<br />
room. Sounds and smells have a unique tendency to travel<br />
within it. The footsteps that signalled your exit from the<br />
front office could easily be heard less than ten minutes<br />
ago. Also, your shoes have been caked with a layer of mud<br />
and sand. Finally, I can smell the distinctive scent of beer<br />
and whisky that tends to linger around one after their<br />
departure from a pub. So I know that you have recently<br />
paid a visit to a tavern, one that is close and near the<br />
harbour, most likely in Circular Quay, and upon hearing<br />
your conversation with the sergeant at the front desk, it is<br />
apparent that you embarked upon this journey after<br />
gaining an interest in my intervention in the case of your<br />
partner.’<br />
I was left in awe. ‘How did you do that?’ I stammered.<br />
‘Elementary, my dear Sergeant,’ he replied, a smile<br />
appearing on his face.<br />
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***<br />
I’ve found myself in a very odd meeting place, faced with<br />
an equally strange proposal. We agreed to meet in the<br />
Sydney Crime Museum, built out of the old Charge<br />
Office. It still contains a preserved front office as well as a<br />
series of holding cells. My waiting was timed by a small<br />
clock mounted on the wall, and as naïve as it sounds, I<br />
couldn’t help but wonder whether this is a clock that has<br />
been ticking since the turn of the century.<br />
When the man, who had earlier introduced himself as<br />
Derrick, arrives and makes his proposition I am taken by<br />
surprise. It was reasonably simple really. I needed<br />
something to write about and he needed something to fill<br />
his apparently monumental amount of free time, and so<br />
we could easily help each other out. His proposal was that<br />
we write a Sherlock Holmes story ourselves, or to be more<br />
specific, I write his.<br />
I want to tell him that the idea is absurd. I’m a journalist<br />
(well, columnist) not a novelist! Bad enough I’ve been<br />
sidetracked into writing about fiction, now I have to<br />
actually write it.<br />
‘I’m not sure about that,’ was all I actually said.<br />
‘But you need to hear me out,’ Derrick said, ‘I’ve read<br />
some of your articles and with all due respect, they’re just<br />
not that good. I know how you could do better.’<br />
‘All right how?’ I ask, angered at this little bastard’s<br />
arrogance.<br />
‘What you need is immersion. You can’t just be some<br />
bored observer occasionally chiming in with questions;<br />
you need to be part of the story.’<br />
‘You’re asking me to defy the laws of journalism,’ I<br />
interject with my best holier-than-thou tone. ‘I’m meant<br />
to be the detached observer simply recording the events.’<br />
‘But you’re not a journalist.’ As he says this I keep on<br />
expecting some kind of a sly smile on his face, but he<br />
offers none. Hurt, I decide to just ignore the comment.<br />
For a few minutes we just sit there, neither of us able to<br />
think of anything to say. ‘Well, I’m not a novelist either.’<br />
I say, hoping my lengthened dramatic pause hasn’t<br />
disrupted the flow of the conversation.
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‘You don’t need to be,’ Derrick says, perking up with the<br />
same enthusiasm he had at the start of the meeting. His<br />
eyes have a strange glazed look as they stare wide open at<br />
me, like when a dog pays more attention to you than he<br />
should. ‘I have the idea for the story already. Every plot<br />
point, characterisation, twist and turn is mapped out,’ he<br />
says, tapping the side of his bald head.<br />
Christ, I probably should have said something about this<br />
guy. He’s bald, I’ve already established that, but in a<br />
respectable shaved way. He has a five o’clock shadow that<br />
looks more fashionable than unkempt. Otherwise, he’s<br />
reasonably bland looking; pale skin, casual clothing and a<br />
reasonably cheap looking wristwatch. Not exactly the<br />
saviour I had always dreamed would come in and rescue<br />
my career. Unless this story will require us to infiltrate a<br />
biker ring, or actually solve a murder, this probably won’t<br />
end well.<br />
‘All you need to do is take the notes I give you and turn<br />
them into prose; that’s why I brought you here. This is<br />
where it’ll all begin.’<br />
‘But why would you want to do this?’<br />
‘Simple. I think I, that is to say we, can do it better.’<br />
‘Do what better?’<br />
‘Sherlock Holmes.’<br />
Now this is getting a bit interesting. Has this man been<br />
de-programmed?<br />
‘You do know about The Final Problem, don’t you?’<br />
‘I suppose it was a disappointment.’<br />
‘Disappointment? It was a disgrace. After five years, two<br />
books and twenty-three stories, it all ends with a<br />
showdown that we don’t even get to see.’<br />
I feel a strange apathy. All this would have been a bit<br />
useful back during the Passengers Meeting, but now I just<br />
don’t care anymore.<br />
‘But he did come back …’ In saying this, I am interrupted<br />
by Derrick’s smirk. ‘You don’t think Doyle managed to<br />
undo his mistake?’<br />
‘You can’t undo the irredeemable.’<br />
Maybe I’ll just push him a little bit. ‘So you think that<br />
you can do better?’<br />
‘No, I know we can do it better. We’ll make Sherlock the<br />
kind of character he should have been. We can make him<br />
darker, more complex; for once he won’t always land on<br />
his feet. Arthur Conan Doyle has lost his right to write<br />
Sherlock’s stories. Now it’s our turn.’<br />
‘But why don’t you just write the story yourself?’ He<br />
pauses when I ask this, trembling a little.<br />
‘Because this could be an actual story,’ he finally replies.<br />
‘You write so many articles about other writers. Now you<br />
could shift the focus onto yourself. Gonzo journalism!<br />
Where you are the story ...’<br />
Gonzo journalism. As he mentions those words, I fear my<br />
eyes will widen and my pupils will dilate like in some<br />
cartoon. Maybe I was wrong to judge him. This could<br />
revolutionise my bland and pointless column. It could<br />
actually be a story, and I could actually be a journalist.<br />
***<br />
I don’t know what overcame me that day, perhaps it was<br />
amusement, or perhaps I truly was swayed by his display<br />
of skill and intuition. Whatever the reason, I had decided<br />
to humour him and take him to the scene. We had no<br />
idea where to go now. So it seemed like there was nothing<br />
to lose.<br />
‘It was the bells.’<br />
‘What?’<br />
‘That’s the one detail that your partner failed to notice.<br />
When he interviewed the first man on the scene of the<br />
crime, a butcher by the name of Will Harris, it was<br />
revealed that the bells had rung for five minutes that<br />
morning. However, your partner chose to ignore this<br />
detail. If he was struck by lightning as you two seem to<br />
believe, why on earth would the bells ring for five<br />
minutes? The lightning might have caused a seizure but<br />
that wouldn’t have caused him to continue ringing the<br />
bell for another five minutes then take a step backwards<br />
off the steeple.’<br />
‘So what do you propose?’<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
The Detective and Me continued<br />
‘Well, for one thing, the nose is broken,’ the man gestured<br />
to the body where, sure enough, his nose was misshapen<br />
and of a dark blue pallor. ‘Now why would his nose by<br />
broken if he landed on his back?’<br />
‘Perhaps the bell hit him in the face after he was struck<br />
by lightning.’<br />
‘Perhaps, but what about his perspiration?’ As he said this<br />
I looked and could see a cluster of water droplets on the<br />
priest’s face. ‘Now if this was a death that occurred in an<br />
instant, why was he sweating like that? The fact that<br />
droplets remain on his face, after a fall and the pathetic<br />
manhandling that idiot gave him; shows that he must<br />
have been sweating tremendously. Granted that might<br />
have been caused by the seizure, but then we have<br />
seemingly three different causes of death that just so<br />
happened to occur simultaneously and none of which<br />
explain the ringing bells.’<br />
As I looked at the man, I realised that he had a strange<br />
way of responding to the excitement of the case. He was<br />
trembling, to the point of his shakes becoming violent.<br />
Indeed, it seemed he could not keep a single muscle still.<br />
The man walked to the body, turned it to its side, bent<br />
down and inspected the burns. He reached into his dirty<br />
coat and brought out a smudged magnifying glass. He<br />
then breathed on it and wiped it on his coat before<br />
bringing it to the burns.’<br />
As he inspected the body, his shakes became more and<br />
more violent.<br />
‘Are you all right?’ I asked.<br />
He paused, and stood up, his skinny legs wobbling as if<br />
they would not support the weight of his body.<br />
‘Don’t worry,’ he said, ‘I have a solution for this.’<br />
At this, he pulled off his shoe and ripped out the sole.<br />
Embedded within the sole was a syringe. I then realised<br />
that this was indeed, not only a man of great skills, but<br />
also of tremendous weakness.<br />
***<br />
It was weird, writing someone else’s story for them.<br />
Derrick sent me the story chunk by chunk, but I could see<br />
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it all from the beginning. It’s the basic story of<br />
redemption; the seemingly unstoppable protagonist fallen<br />
from grace, now in need of those he once scorned to help<br />
him rise back up. We start out with a middle finger to<br />
Arthur Conan Doyle. Holmes survived and rather than<br />
having all those weird and convoluted escapades in India,<br />
he goes into hiding in Australia. This seems like the<br />
perfect place to lie low, but then Holmes falls off the<br />
wagon a bit. A year has passed and now he’s suffered a<br />
complete remission to his drug addiction. Derrick’s plan<br />
merely said, ‘Holmes is introduced in a dishevelled state,<br />
stumbles into crime scene’. When I wrote this part I<br />
remembered all those Sydney Passengers and wanted to<br />
create an incarnation not even they could love; an insane<br />
drug-addict rudely intruding on police business. All the<br />
dark thoughts I felt towards all my damned readers began<br />
to flow through my fingertips. I wanted Sherlock to fall<br />
further into the abyss, commit acts that go beyond moral<br />
greyness, past the point where the reader could still define<br />
him as a hero. Derrick decided to give me the notes piece<br />
by piece, and so I still don’t know where this story is<br />
headed but I know that he wants some neat wrap-up to<br />
the story. The bad guy goes to jail, our hero gets better, he<br />
goes back to England and everyone lives happily ever after.<br />
But perhaps I can guide this story myself. I think, one way<br />
or another, Holmes’ will not leave Australia with a clear<br />
conscience.<br />
I didn’t want him in my house, and I could only imagine<br />
the kind of home Derrick lived in. So we agreed to meet<br />
in a small café, mostly empty café. Sitting here and<br />
waiting for him, I’m genuinely excited. This story’s<br />
actually getting interesting. ‘Ambitious Columnist<br />
Destroys Beloved Public Domain Character’: great<br />
headline. Then again, the actual Holmes story itself could<br />
get some attention. Rather than their usual garbage,<br />
readers could get a taste of my ‘Counter-Literature’. This<br />
could be the beginning of a new stage of my career: fiction<br />
and journalism simultaneously. The destructive, selfreflective<br />
journalist with a bone to pick with public<br />
domain fiction. No character is safe!<br />
When Derrick finally shows up, he doesn’t seem to share<br />
my enthusiasm. In fact he looks slightly nervous.
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‘Did you get my email?’ I ask him, to which he nods.<br />
‘So you read the first few parts of the story?’<br />
He nods again, pausing and thinking about what to say.<br />
‘It’s … not exactly what I thought it would be.’<br />
‘Well, of course it’s not, I wrote it after all.’<br />
‘Yeah, I guess you did,’ he says, glancing around nervously.<br />
Sensing something wrong, I ask the question, ‘Did you<br />
like it?’<br />
He stares at me. ‘Well, like I said, it’s not what I was<br />
expecting.’ He then leans over the table and whispers to<br />
me, ‘You made him a drug addict.’<br />
‘No I didn’t. He was already an addict,’ I say, ignoring his<br />
strange desire for secrecy. Derrick looks at me confused.<br />
‘He wasn’t an addict. He took cocaine but he wasn’t an<br />
addict.’<br />
‘But you said in your own notes.’ At this I actually took<br />
them out, ‘Holmes enters scene, trying to recover from his<br />
bout with drug addiction and sees the case as potential for<br />
redemption.’<br />
‘Yes, and when I wrote that, I meant that he was actually<br />
recovering from the addiction. He was meant to enter as a<br />
man who had overcome his demons and was ready for his<br />
old adventures.’<br />
I can’t believe what I’m hearing; this man has no idea<br />
what he wants. He said he wanted Sherlock Holmes to<br />
be darker and more complex. Yet now he’s appalled by<br />
my sacrilege.<br />
He wants the harm to be heard of but not actually seen.<br />
Doesn’t he know that you’re supposed to ‘show not tell’<br />
when writing?<br />
‘But you said it yourself; you didn’t want him to land on<br />
his feet.’<br />
‘Yes, but you had him land flat on his face. Look, I’ve<br />
thought about and I know what you can do. I’ve picked<br />
some of the original stories where Sherlock actually takes<br />
cocaine. If you actually start reading some of the stories<br />
you’ll have an idea of how he deals with the drug.’<br />
‘Research? But doesn’t that defeat the purpose of …’ I’m<br />
suddenly left speechless as I realise why he wanted me to<br />
write this story.<br />
‘Do you just want another Arthur Conan Doyle story?’<br />
I ask. He looks at me with shock.<br />
‘No, of course not. That’s why we we’re doing this whole<br />
project, because we want to write a story that’s better than<br />
anything he could’ve done.’<br />
‘That’s not what I mean. Did you want this story to be one<br />
of the real ones?’ It all makes sense. He wants a story that<br />
meets his specifications. But if he writes it, he would know<br />
it isn’t real. I’ve just been the scribe for a weird fanatic.<br />
‘You’ve wanted this story for a while haven’t you? A new<br />
Sherlock mystery which followed all your personal<br />
prerequisites. But if you actually wrote it, all the joy and<br />
mystery would be gone.’ Derrick is speechless; I can see<br />
him start to shake, attracting the attention of a few<br />
couples in the café. ‘So you were prepared to lie to<br />
yourself. So what if you might have inspired the story’s<br />
creation? Even better. Then it would be a testament to the<br />
one man who actually understands Sherlock Holmes.’<br />
And he almost got away with it too.<br />
Derrick leans back into his chair, closing his eyes then<br />
glaring at me. ‘What’s wrong with that?’ he finally asks<br />
me, leaning in. ‘Let me tell you something. On 221 Baker<br />
Street there used to be a bank, and in that bank there was<br />
a man whose sole job was to reply to all the letters that<br />
they received addressed to the building’s previous<br />
occupant; you-know-who. So why did they go to all that<br />
effort? Hiring someone just to humour the poor saps who<br />
refused to accept what wasn’t real?’ Derrick leans closer<br />
and smiles. His focus is making me uncomfortable.<br />
‘Because, there was something beautiful about it. Those<br />
people who wrote the letters knew they were just sending<br />
them to a bank, but playing along was something too easy<br />
to get swept up in.’<br />
I take on his glare; leaning in and looking him in the eyes.<br />
‘But then why do it? Why all the clubs? Why all the fan<br />
fiction? Why all the dedication to a lie?’<br />
‘Because it’s a lie we can believe in. Why do you have such<br />
a problem with that?’<br />
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BENCHMARK<br />
The Detective and Me continued<br />
I can’t believe I let this man use me for his sick, sad<br />
delusion. ‘Because I’m sick of humouring you people. If<br />
you believe in the illusion and are so desperate to preserve<br />
it, that’s fine. But I’m not going to write just to satisfy<br />
your kind. To hell with your delusions. I want you to<br />
realise that you’re not the only one with ulterior motives.’<br />
Now Derrick looks scared. I have no idea why. I’m acting<br />
perfectly reasonable. He’s the obsessive one.<br />
‘You can’t write without me. I haven’t even given you the<br />
rest of the plot.’<br />
‘Just because I don’t know where you want the story to go,<br />
doesn’t mean I can’t do something interesting with it.’<br />
‘So, what are your motives?’<br />
Why should I reveal everything to him? If he’s allowed<br />
to keep secrets, so am I. ‘To create the story I’ve wanted<br />
to read for a while, maybe the kind that you’ve always<br />
dreaded.’<br />
I get up and walk away with that mischievous grin on<br />
my face.<br />
‘But you can’t do that,’ Derrick shouts from the table,<br />
his voice echoing throughout the nearly empty café.<br />
‘It’s my story!’<br />
‘I don’t see your name on it,’ I reply, before taking<br />
my leave.<br />
***<br />
I had received a wire from Holmes demanding my<br />
presence. So I made my way to the provided address with<br />
utmost haste. The address was a hovel on the edge of the<br />
Sydney Naval Yards. I opened the door and was instantly<br />
confronted with a rank odour. Inside the barely lit room I<br />
could see Holmes lying on the floor next to a man sitting<br />
on a chair. As I approached the duo I arrived at three<br />
conclusions. First: Holmes was enslaved to his substance<br />
addiction, made apparent by the needle, which I presume<br />
was originally filled with stolen cocaine, lying on the floor<br />
next to him. Second: the man on the chair was also<br />
restrained by rope. Third: the man had been shot in the<br />
head. The sight didn’t horrify me. However, I decided to<br />
leave the room before I became nauseous. As I started to<br />
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make my way out, Holmes lifted himself off the floor.<br />
‘What happened?’ asked he, with slightly slurred speech.<br />
‘I think I should be asking you that.’<br />
‘Oh!’ said he, finally recognising me, ‘This man is a<br />
suspect in the case. I believe that the priest was murdered<br />
because of his involvement in a drug smuggling syndicate,<br />
The White Tigers. You see, the members all carry the<br />
same tattoo of their namesake. In my investigations I<br />
came across this.’ Saying this he pointed to the man’s<br />
ankle, which did indeed depict a fierce white tiger on the<br />
verge of attack. ‘So I brought him here for interrogation.’<br />
‘Then why is he dead?’<br />
‘I decided to use fear as the tool for interrogation. The<br />
trick is simple; have him believe I mean only to kill him,<br />
bring an empty gun to his head and fire. Then, pretend<br />
that the gun accidentally misfired and proceed to<br />
interrogate the suspect. In his state of terror and<br />
adrenaline he’ll be willing to divulge anything.’<br />
Already I could see why his plan had gone awry; the gun<br />
was loaded.<br />
‘Did you get anything out of him?’<br />
‘No.’<br />
‘Then why are you doing this?’<br />
***<br />
Why am I doing this?<br />
It’s stopped being fun. The more I write, the more I feel<br />
like a parody of myself. The story’s dissolved into a series<br />
of pointless incidents obstructing the actual plot as<br />
Holmes tries to solve this mystery. I’m the worst kind<br />
of writer; the kind with a short attention span. Did I<br />
mention that I decided to keep him as a drug addict?<br />
He’s also now borderline insane. After the meeting with<br />
Derrick, I felt like going further and further with the<br />
story. This story was originally being written out of spite<br />
towards Arthur Conan Doyle. Now it’s being written out<br />
of spite towards someone who’s actually alive. Well,<br />
actually it’s being written out of spite towards a general<br />
kind of person alive. The mystery itself isn’t going<br />
anywhere. Holmes ends up killing one of the witnesses
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who fled the crime scene. So they’re back to square one.<br />
I still haven’t heard any word back from Derrick. I keep<br />
sending him segments from my story, a constant journal<br />
of my destruction. But I think Holmes has won. I can’t<br />
write a story that destroys the character, I can only write<br />
one that reflects badly on myself. Bad writer, bad story.<br />
Then one day an epiphany strikes. I check my email<br />
hoping to see an anguished reply from Derrick, possibly<br />
even a plea for me to stop my torture. All the while, I<br />
avoid the messages from my editor. By the time I finish<br />
this story, I’ll have lost my column. It will be missed.<br />
Then I stumble upon an email from my old friends, the<br />
Sydney Passengers. Maybe they caught wind of my little<br />
act of sabotage and tried to stop me. However, the email<br />
isn’t directed to me personally. It’s a newsletter for all the<br />
members, which they must have sent me for the article I<br />
should still be writing.<br />
How nice of them.<br />
The newsletter mainly just gives some reviews for new<br />
Sherlock pastiches and essays, as well as a few articles on<br />
Arthur Conan Doyle by the Passengers themselves. But<br />
something catches my eye; a little box on the last page<br />
listing notable anniversaries. The last date catches my<br />
attention. Twenty-one years ago to this day the Sydney<br />
Passengers had their only claim to fame. According to the<br />
section, they protested against the 1989 film Without a<br />
Clue, for the inexcusable crime of portraying Holmes as a<br />
bumbling idiot. My initial reaction is excitement. I can<br />
improve my assault on their beloved character by learning<br />
from those that have done it well. One more nail for their<br />
coffin. I instantly send an email to one of the members,<br />
practically demanding information about the protest.<br />
Their response doesn’t exactly meet my hopes. While the<br />
group did indeed picket outside the theatre, there was no<br />
malice behind this act. They were actually trying to<br />
parody the protests against The Last Temptation of<br />
Christ, which had occurred that same year. As Bill writes<br />
‘It was all pretty tongue in cheek’.<br />
It takes me a while to comprehend this revelation. These<br />
people actually have a sense of humour, about both<br />
themselves and the man they revere. This makes no sense.<br />
They can somehow take their passion and make a public<br />
display out of it for pure fun. That means they know it’s<br />
all just fiction. There’s no illusion present.<br />
So why does Derrick take it to a degree of humourless<br />
obsession? Then a new revelation burns in my mind,<br />
leaving me incapable of action.<br />
Why do I take it even further?<br />
Suddenly an email pops up, from Derrick. ‘Meet me at<br />
Reichenbach, midnight’ it says. He’s referring to the Gap,<br />
where Sherlock was due for his showdown with the<br />
murderer. I feel uneasy. I have an idea of what this lunatic<br />
is planning. Maybe I should just ignore him, or maybe I<br />
should call the police. But when I look at it, this is my<br />
fault. Whatever toxic obsession Derrick has, I’ve only<br />
made it worse. The standard code of practice for a<br />
journalist is objective detachment from a story. Simply<br />
report on the event, and then let it play its course. But I<br />
have a personal responsibility to Derrick, as a columnist.<br />
***<br />
He knew that confrontation was the only option, he had<br />
been called out to the hazardous cliffs, and now a<br />
showdown awaited Sherlock Holmes.<br />
***<br />
It’s a bright night when I arrive at the cliffs. The stars and<br />
moon illuminate the deserted cliff and surrounding park.<br />
A little to my left stands the lighthouse. Illuminated by<br />
ground lights, it stands as an orange obelisk casting light<br />
out onto the ocean. As I walk, the dark outline of a man<br />
in a deerstalker hat is visible. The light glow from his pipe<br />
illuminates his face. He is standing on the opposite side of<br />
the safety fence that separates the park from the cliffs.<br />
I walk up to the fence and lean on it. ‘You know, he never<br />
actually wore the hat,’ I say. He continues to stare off into<br />
the grey ocean below us, as I climb over the fence.<br />
Derrick takes the pipe out of his mouth. ‘I think it looks<br />
better this way.’<br />
I’m still tightly gripping the fence; only a few metres lie<br />
between its safety and a long fall. ‘Derrick, I’m done with<br />
the story.’ He stands at the very edge and still refuses to<br />
turn around. He wants me to come closer. I let go<br />
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of the fence and take slow, careful steps towards the man.<br />
‘I’m sorry.’<br />
‘Don’t be. You’re an angry bitter man, and you wrote an<br />
angry bitter story,’ he says, before pausing. ‘I always<br />
wondered about Moriarty, the nemesis who only stepped in<br />
to end the detective’s life. Some of the Passengers think that<br />
he was just a cocaine-induced hallucination, others call him<br />
lazy writing on Doyle’s behalf. I think he was necessary.’<br />
‘Necessary? I thought you hated the death of Holmes.’<br />
‘Indeed I do. But Holmes needed a nemesis, someone who<br />
could truly pose a challenge, if only so that Holmes could<br />
stand victorious as the great detective that he is. Moriarty<br />
should have been the beginning, not the end. Maybe he<br />
still could be.’<br />
I had feared as much. Obsession has breached into<br />
delusion. ‘Are you the detective?’ I ask.<br />
‘No, I’m not. But what’s stopping me? A boring job? A<br />
monotonous daily routine? A series of unfulfilled dreams?<br />
There always comes a time when we accept that whatever<br />
plans we had for the future won’t come into fruition. We<br />
won’t be rock stars, or politicians or astronauts.’<br />
‘Or detectives,’ I add.<br />
‘We won’t become famous and we definitely won’t change<br />
the world. We’ll just wind up another boring face in the<br />
crowd. We’ll be ordinary.’ Derrick finally turns around<br />
and stares at me with a terrifying passion in his eyes. The<br />
face I originally thought bland now holds terrifying<br />
determination. ‘So we write stories. We put our dreams on<br />
paper in the hope that somehow they’ll become real. If<br />
there’s someone who actually has managed to reach the<br />
fruition of our dreams, we latch onto them. But that’s not<br />
real enough.’<br />
‘So that’s why we’re here. You want to pick up where he<br />
left off.’<br />
‘Imagine it like method acting,’ he says, as he starts to<br />
approach me. ‘I’ll be Sherlock, and you’ll be my nemesis.’<br />
‘For the love of God, just stop this,’ I shout. ‘You can’t live<br />
your life believing in fiction.’<br />
‘Then why do you?’ he asks.<br />
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Before I can take a moment to contemplate the insult,<br />
Derrick drops the pipe and runs towards me.<br />
***<br />
I watched, as Holmes and the killer stood on the cliff’s<br />
edge as thunder crackled around them.<br />
‘How did you know?’ the killer asked.<br />
‘Simple,’ replied Holmes. ‘When I inspected the priest’s<br />
broken nose I realised that the blood around it didn’t<br />
belong to a human but rather a cow. It had been left on<br />
your boot when you kicked the priest while he was down,<br />
breaking his nose. And who else, other than a butcher,<br />
would have encountered cow blood recently enough for it<br />
to be left on his shoe? The same butcher who had<br />
originally reported the murder, so as to scare the future<br />
victims.’ I found myself in awe of his conclusion. It all<br />
made sense and made me feel shame for doubting him.<br />
‘You knew, and yet you waited for a week to catch me?’<br />
The detective smiled, ‘I had to confirm my hypothesis.<br />
My run-in with your associate confirmed the conspiracy.<br />
He pulled out a note stained with cow’s blood. You really<br />
ought to wash after you work,’ said he.<br />
The butcher took some steps towards him, and Holmes<br />
realised his mistake. This man had a knife, and Holmes<br />
had come unprepared. He only had one option. As the<br />
butcher approached, a bright light suddenly shone upon<br />
him from the lighthouse, blinding him for a second. This<br />
second was all that was needed. The butcher made a<br />
misstep and lost his footing. In an instant he slipped and<br />
fell off the cliff. A crack was then heard, that was not<br />
thunder. The man’s fall had been broken by a low-lying<br />
rock. So too had his spine. I couldn’t believe it. Holmes<br />
had done it. He had solved the case!<br />
***<br />
So now we’ve reached the end of this strange story; well,<br />
both of them. Sherlock Holmes returned to England and,<br />
after a brief (four-page) reconciliation with Watson to<br />
account for the three years of absence, continued his<br />
adventures.<br />
Then of course, there’s the matter of Derrick.
CREATIVE WRITING<br />
When Charles Dickens wrote his Great Expectations, it<br />
originally ended with heartbreak and loneliness for Pip,<br />
the protagonist. Dickens then gave the story an alternate,<br />
and happier, ending. This ending became more popular<br />
and even Dickens would admit that he thought Pip<br />
deserved the happier ending. However, both endings exist<br />
and in the end, who’s to say which one’s real? They are<br />
both fictional, after all.<br />
I decided this time, to take a page out of Dickens’ book.<br />
Derrick died in hospital that night; I decided not to go to<br />
his funeral. Or maybe he pulled through and is currently<br />
recovering, and hopefully rethinking his life’s direction.<br />
In the end, it doesn’t really matter. This story, just like the<br />
death of Superman, and the happiness of Pip, and the<br />
death and resurrection of Sherlock Holmes, is just a<br />
collection of words on a page. That’s all you’ll ever find,<br />
and there’s no point in hoping for more. That’s the one<br />
lesson I’ve learnt from this insane experience. I’m done<br />
with writing fiction and I’m done with believing in it.<br />
Whatever you decide to take away from my strange<br />
exploits, I’ll still be here, writing every week. You can find<br />
me on page 42, tucked behind the cooking tips.<br />
Charlie Martin<br />
Year 12 English Extension 2 Major Work<br />
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LITERARY AND CULTURAL CRITICISM<br />
The Real Inspector Hound Essay<br />
Crime writing, perhaps more than works of any other<br />
genre, is famous for the degree to which it obeys generic<br />
conventions and formulae. This makes it a particularly ripe<br />
target for subversion and parody, and Tom Stoppard’s play<br />
The Real Inspector Hound is a prime example of this. It is<br />
heavily based on The Mousetrap, a play written by the most<br />
famous of all the Golden Age writers, Agatha Christie, and<br />
has echoes of Conan Doyle’s The Hound of the Baskervilles,<br />
one of the most famous crime texts of all time. Its unique<br />
blend of parody, absurdism and existentialism is a clearly<br />
identifiable product of the tumultuous time in which it was<br />
created, and it represents both a break from and evolution<br />
of the conventions of the crime genre, combining a parody<br />
of the traditional elements of the genre with commentary<br />
on contemporary issues.<br />
In order to understand how The Real Inspector Hound<br />
subverted the crime genre, it is first necessary to<br />
understand the state of crime fiction, and society in<br />
general, at the time. When this play was written in 1968<br />
there were two established branches of crime writing;<br />
Golden Age writing, based in Britain and hard-boiled,<br />
based in USA. Other styles, such as spy fiction, were just<br />
being developed. Since this is a British play, however, it is<br />
Golden Age and, to a lesser extent, classic crime writing<br />
that is relevant. Golden Age crime writing was and is<br />
known for its highly formulaic style, specifically its<br />
stereotypical, almost cartoonish characters, its closed<br />
setting and its extremely contrived plots that hinge on a<br />
string of coincidences. Above all, it is connected with<br />
escapism and the British gentry. These features are<br />
themselves derived from classic crime fiction, which is less<br />
escapist and isolated but features even more convoluted<br />
plots. The writers of these styles, particularly Sir Arthur<br />
Conan Doyle, Agatha Christie and Dorothy L Sayers<br />
(who is herself mentioned in the play alongside the likes of<br />
Shakespeare and Dante) were towering figures in British<br />
crime fiction, and most crime fiction stuck to the<br />
guidelines these writers had laid down as closely as<br />
possible.<br />
This was, nevertheless, a time of political upheaval in the<br />
western world, particularly in Britain. Establishment<br />
values were being undermined both by mass movements<br />
and by intellectuals. Various movements were developing<br />
amongst the young, whilst postmodernism and associated<br />
schools of thought were becoming increasingly influential<br />
in artistic and literary circles. Government control of the<br />
arts, either direct or indirect, was being reduced; in<br />
Britain for example the Lord Chamberlain’s office lost the<br />
power of censorship over theatre in the same year that The<br />
Real Inspector Hound was published. This issue of change<br />
was particularly acute in Britain which, unlike Australia<br />
or the US which were enjoying great booms, was in the<br />
midst of a prolonged period of decline. In particular the<br />
loss of the empire made the traditional upper classes seem<br />
to be irrelevant anachronisms, whilst the arrival of large<br />
numbers of non-white migrants was beginning to change<br />
the social dynamic. The result of these changes was that<br />
the sort of people who played leading roles in earlier crime<br />
writing particularly the Golden Age, and the world in<br />
which they existed now seemed out-of-date. Between the<br />
wars the readership had known that such people did exist,<br />
and thus the stories were loosely connected to reality but<br />
by the 1960s texts about such people seemed to be<br />
complete fantasies, historical texts or comedies.<br />
It is into this last category that The Real Inspector Hound<br />
loosely fits. Its central premise, that of the audience<br />
becoming involved in the crime story itself, is a<br />
challenging and innovative idea that nevertheless is<br />
perhaps more suited to crime fiction, which always relied<br />
on audience involvement to some extent, in that they had<br />
to try and solve the crime, than other genres. By<br />
establishing not one but two realities which are clearly<br />
fantastical, Stoppard mocks the pretension of realism that<br />
is contained within so much of the preceding fiction of<br />
the genre; whereas Doyle has Holmes develop ridiculously<br />
complicated ‘logical’ solutions to bizarre crimes, Stoppard<br />
has a nonsensical solution to a nonsensical crime.<br />
Stoppard heightens this sense of unreality, and thus the<br />
subversion of the norms of crime fiction, by exaggerating<br />
the silliness of both the play within the play and the<br />
critics, for example Moon and Birdboot’s detailed<br />
discussion of chocolate and Mrs Drudge’s speaking style,<br />
which sometimes seems to mimic stage directions: ‘Hello,<br />
the drawing room of Lady Muldoon’s country residence<br />
one morning in early spring?’<br />
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Such characters, together with the plot of the play, give it<br />
a strongly absurdist element. Absurdism was a movement<br />
that had developed during the previous 60 or so years,<br />
including movements such as Dadaism. Its incorporation<br />
into a work of crime fiction represents a substantial<br />
challenge to the conventions of the genre, which is<br />
supposedly based upon fact. By mixing these two,<br />
Stoppard shows how improbable many of the contrivances<br />
included in the average crime story actually are. Examples<br />
in this play include the amount of time it takes for the<br />
body to be discovered and ‘the strangely inaccessible<br />
house’ in which the action occurs. Of course the most<br />
absurdist aspect of the whole play is the reversal of roles<br />
between critic and actor, which itself causes the viewer to<br />
question some of the fundamental assumptions of crime<br />
genre, such as how the audience is supposed to solve the<br />
crime using only the invariably inadequate information<br />
that the author chooses to provide, or, indeed, why the<br />
audience should care.<br />
For all this subversion of the crime genre, this play also<br />
represents an evolution of the genre. For one thing, the<br />
idea of humour is more or less foreign to earlier crime<br />
texts, and yet it abounds on many levels in this text, from<br />
a parody of pretentious critics to double entendres:<br />
Cynthia: Did I hear you say you saw Felicity last night,<br />
Simon?<br />
Simon: Did I? – Ah yes, yes quite – your turn, Felicity.<br />
Felicity: I’ve had my turn, haven’t I, Simon? – now, it<br />
seems, it’s Cynthia’s turn.<br />
The influence that this humour has had can be seen in<br />
recent adaptations of pre-Stoppard texts, which introduce<br />
humour through banter between the detective and his<br />
offsider or something similar. In addition, the characters<br />
in many modern crime texts are no longer simply<br />
stereotypes, as they were in the Golden Age and classic<br />
crime fiction, but are rather parodies of stereotypes, so<br />
stereotypical that they are humorous. The Real Inspector<br />
Hound is full of such characters, and was one of the first<br />
crime texts to be so. Far more important, however, is the<br />
idea of embedding social or political criticism within a<br />
crime text. This is something which was studiously<br />
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avoided by earlier texts which were mostly just escapist<br />
fantasies, particularly the Golden Age work. In this play<br />
however, critics are portrayed in a very harsh light – they<br />
have affairs with actresses, review each other’s reviews and<br />
so on – and some of the elements of contemporary<br />
intellectual thought such as existentialism are somewhat<br />
tainted by their association with the critics, and in<br />
particular their arrogance and verbosity, especially in<br />
Moon’s rants about his relationship with Higgs and<br />
Puckeridge. The importance of this idea of commentary<br />
from within the text is evident today, when even those<br />
texts which are fairly close to being direct descendents of<br />
the Golden Age, such as Midsommer Murders, seem<br />
compelled to offer comment on contemporary issues.<br />
Thus, through texts like this play, the crime fiction genre<br />
went from being apolitical to political.<br />
The Real Inspector Hound is far removed from the typical<br />
crime text, and is remarkable for the way that by<br />
subverting the crime fiction genre it manages to<br />
simultaneously parody and evolve that genre. Through its<br />
inclusion of ridiculously stereotypical characters and a<br />
nonsensical plot, elements reflective of the dynamic time<br />
in which it was created, it parodies the strict and intricate<br />
conventions of earlier crime writing, particularly that of<br />
the Golden Age, and yet at the same time some of its<br />
innovations, such as the introduction of humour and<br />
comment on contemporary issues – in this case the<br />
pretension and egotism of critics and intellectuals in<br />
general – are hallmarks of much modern crime writing.<br />
Thus a subversion of the crime genre actually contributed<br />
to its evolution.<br />
Peter Richardson<br />
Year 12
LITERARY AND CULTURAL CRITICISM<br />
An excerpt from<br />
Critical Analysis of Sufjan<br />
Stevens’ Illinois<br />
In 2005, prolific American musician, lyricist and poet<br />
Sufjan Stevens produced a successful and significant<br />
album entitled Illinois. In terms of concept, lyrical ability<br />
and musicology, Stevens excels, and Illinois is considered<br />
the greatest of all ten of his albums. As a concept album,<br />
every song is unified by, and relates to, the state of Illinois.<br />
The success of the album is testament to his versatility as a<br />
musician and poet. In fact, he wrote and provided lead<br />
vocals for every song, played 24 of the instruments heard,<br />
and even produced the album. However, his evocative,<br />
dense and allusive lyrics more than match the aural<br />
aspects of the album and give it its literary significance.<br />
The album’s great popularity is reflected in the fan<br />
phenomenon that its release sparked. Music videos of<br />
outstanding quality were produced by people unassociated<br />
with Stevens and these complemented a controversial,<br />
cheeky album cover. Illinois illustrates how a musician can<br />
be heavily influenced and affected by historical context.<br />
Stevens pulls an array of events into his web of<br />
storytelling. A number of personal and historical tales are<br />
told, including that of the complicated death of a lover,<br />
that of a notorious serial killer and those of long-forgotten<br />
ghost towns. In some pieces, Stevens adopts a melancholic,<br />
reflective tone, whilst in others an ecstatic nostalgia is<br />
expressed through joyful vocals. Stevens feels a<br />
connection to the state of Illinois, for both the pleasant<br />
and the unsavoury aspects; its great beauty and glory, but<br />
also the murders and tragic deaths. The album is a<br />
celebration, and an act of expiation. It is also an exposé of<br />
the dark side of human experience.<br />
Music critic Jimmy Newlin described the record as:<br />
‘Practically overwhelming, Illinois’ 22 tracks make for a<br />
forager’s dream come true, whether rediscovering the<br />
quiet folk confessional ‘Casimir Pulaski Day’ or getting<br />
lost in the bombast of ‘Chicago’ or ‘The Man of<br />
Metropolis steals our Hearts’. Fun as hell and damned<br />
difficult, Illinois is like a gigantic anthology of short<br />
stories you’ll never finish but leaf through year after year.’ 1<br />
1 Jimmy Newlin, Best of the Aughts Albums, last modified February 1, 2010<br />
http://www.slantmagazine.com/music/feature/best-of-the-aughts-albums<br />
Mr Newlin’s perceptive views are supported by numerous<br />
other renowned musical critics, radio stations and<br />
magazines. In 2005, Illinois was National Public Radio’s<br />
‘Best Album of 2005’. This critical response will argue that<br />
Stevens is a major poetic lyricist, musician and chronicler<br />
of his times, and will emphasise the literary and cultural<br />
significance of the artist.<br />
***<br />
‘Casimir Pulaski Day’ is a sad, quietly furious song that<br />
tells of the late winter death of Stevens’ previous girlfriend.<br />
The song offers multiple viewpoints on love, loss and<br />
religion that are sometimes conflicting, and sometimes<br />
complementary. Although Stevens chooses to omit the<br />
topic of religion from his interviews, he is Christian. It<br />
can be assumed therefore that he follows a God and a<br />
bible, both of which are referenced in several songs on<br />
Illinois including ‘Casimir Pulaski Day’. In a gutwrenching<br />
exclamation, Stevens questions God’s actions<br />
and existence at the death of his lover. Ultimately he<br />
allows aspects of his personal history to shape his creative<br />
lyrical process. However, Stevens insists he is not affected<br />
by ‘place,’ but rather by the events that occur in that place.<br />
He confirms this idea in an interview after his Detroit<br />
show. 2 He states, ‘I live in Detroit, but I don’t have a<br />
‘Detroit’ sound.’ This song is very personal, and is shown<br />
through the subjective nature of his poetry. However, the<br />
themes of heartbreak, loneliness and betrayal, portrayed<br />
through subtle and shifting perspectives, are universal.<br />
Perhaps this universality accounts for the huge popularity<br />
of the song, and the album as a whole.<br />
‘Casimir Pulaski Day’ perfectly captures the way Stevens<br />
can flaunt his lyrical proficiency in such an intimate song,<br />
and still manage to allow it to be accessible to others.<br />
Stevens wastes no time setting the sombre mood of the<br />
piece as he sings the first lyrics in a low mournful tone …<br />
‘Golden rod and the 4-H stone, the things I brought you<br />
when I found out you had cancer of the bone.’ Although<br />
Stevens’ tone then appears to shift to a quiet joy, as the<br />
song progresses a pained cynicism begins to emerge.<br />
2 TheBoss2332, Sufjan Stevens – Interview, 2007,<br />
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gKctxZ68y0w<br />
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Critical Analysis of Sufjan Stevens’ Illinois continued<br />
The simple vocals serve to amplify the aching sense of<br />
deep mourning for a lost one. This insistent sense of loss<br />
is not all that Stevens attempts to convey to listeners: a<br />
paradoxical sense of nostalgia is also created. Stevens<br />
clearly yearns for the past while simultaneously being<br />
deeply pained by its association with his lover’s death.<br />
Stevens creates warm memories that remind him of the<br />
life he used to share with this woman. But the listener<br />
cannot help but feel there are two sides to this nostalgia …<br />
‘In the morning, at the top of the stairs, when your father<br />
found out what we did that night.’ A joyful sense of<br />
innocent mischief is followed by the bitter aftertaste that<br />
comes with the insistent idea of her death. This ability to<br />
evoke a dichotomy of conflicting emotions is typical of<br />
Stevens. As Amanda Petrusich, a senior writer for<br />
Pitchfork Magazine states, ‘Stevens has a remarkable habit<br />
of being rousing and distressing at the same time,<br />
prodding disparate emotional centres until it’s unclear<br />
whether it’s best to grab your party shoes or a box of<br />
tissues.’ 3<br />
A consistent theme that crops up in ‘Casimir Pulaski Day’<br />
is the unreliable nature of God’s protection. At first,<br />
Stevens appears to have great confidence in the<br />
unconditional protection that God offers his followers.<br />
The biblical diction of the opening chorus expresses<br />
Stevens’ faith in God, despite his knowledge of his<br />
partner’s fatal condition: ‘Oh the glory, that the lord has<br />
made.’ Stevens goes on, ‘Tuesday night at the bible study,<br />
we lift our hands, and pray over your body but nothing<br />
ever happens.’ The contrast in diction between this<br />
laconic phrase and the previous chorus expresses Stevens’<br />
sense of frustration towards God. Stevens regains his<br />
composure and clings to the comforting nostalgia of old<br />
memories. He sings, ‘I remember at Michael’s house, in<br />
the living room where you kissed my neck, and I almost<br />
touched your blouse.’ This anecdotal phrase is so strongly<br />
subjective it almost forces the listener to sympathise with<br />
3 Amanda Petrusich, Sufjan Stevens – Illinois (July 4, 2005) Pitchfork Media<br />
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Stevens’ attempt at escaping God and religion, and fleeing<br />
to the darkest, cosiest part of his mind where he can bask<br />
in the happiness of the past.<br />
Maintaining his structure of emotional alternation in the<br />
song, Stevens pushes on into the next chorus: ‘In the<br />
morning when you finally go, and the nurse runs in with<br />
her head hung low, and the cardinal hits the window.’<br />
Any listener who has experienced the death of a friend<br />
will instantly be able to empathise with Stevens. Stevens<br />
dramatises a shift from belief in God to a sense of<br />
unguided liberty. Additionally, the euphemistic phrase<br />
‘when you finally go’ paradoxically underlines the<br />
significance of the death. By attempting to make the<br />
death sound softer, in light of the memories Stevens has<br />
imparted to the audience, it feels as though her passing<br />
requires a larger surge of emotion. The audience has now<br />
become attached to this woman, and to have her suddenly<br />
‘go’ perhaps makes the listener also feel a sense of<br />
heartache. Finally, the image of the cardinal bird hitting<br />
‘the window,’ portrays a sense of shocked, static stillness.<br />
The Cardinal is also the state bird of Illinois, and in it<br />
‘hitting the window,’ it could represent the personally<br />
tragic side of Illinois that this song conveys. It is the ability<br />
to pull the audience into his songs, and convey a brutal<br />
pair of opposing perspectives that shows Stevens lyrical<br />
genius in ‘Casimir Pulaski Day.’ It is no wonder that<br />
it led to great success and popularity for the song and<br />
the album.<br />
Aidan de Lorenzo<br />
Year 12 English Extension 2 Major Work
LITERARY AND CULTURAL CRITICISM<br />
Sir Philip Sidney … and other<br />
heroes of that kidney<br />
A discussion of the conflict between English and Continental<br />
influences in the work of a forgotten hero of English verse<br />
We take it entirely for granted that the greatest love poetry<br />
was written by a bunch of men in tights, from a soggy<br />
island during the reign of a Virgin Queen. For ten years<br />
at the end of Elizabeth I’s reign the sonnet enjoyed a<br />
remarkable ascendancy. Thousands of poems were written<br />
in a great literary boom that began with the publication of<br />
the first sonnet sequence in English, Sir Philip Sidney’s<br />
Astrophil and Stella, that returned English language to the<br />
top flight of European poetry. Often, the way in which an<br />
Italian invention became the mouthpiece of English genius<br />
goes unconsidered. This critical response explores the idea<br />
that the English sonnet became, not just a vehicle for the<br />
expression of love but also of national identity. While<br />
appreciating European culture and literature Sidney<br />
desired to celebrate Englishness, and the English language.<br />
This division was resolved in Astrophil and Stella by the use<br />
of European forms, techniques and ideas in English, for<br />
the distinct purpose of honouring English.<br />
Remarkably this English literary renaissance was preceded<br />
by an era in which very little great writing was produced.<br />
Indeed Muir wrote of English poetry, in his biography of<br />
Sidney 1 that ‘In spite of Wyatt, Surrey and Skelton in the<br />
first half of the century, there was a barren period between<br />
the death of Henry VIII and the accession of Elizabeth I.<br />
Indeed … little memorable verse was written during the<br />
first twenty years of Elizabeth’s reign’. Of course English<br />
had great poets in its past, notably Chaucer but by the end<br />
of the 1500s his language could no longer be read naturally<br />
by English speakers. 2 English verse was at a crossroads.<br />
In stark contrast, on the Continent there was no paucity<br />
of great poetry. Not only were there the great classical<br />
poets, Homer and Virgil, the 13th and 14th century<br />
Italians, Dante and Petrarch, but also exciting new French<br />
sonneteers, known as La Pléiade, the principal members of<br />
1 Muir, Kenneth. Sir Philip Sidney. [London]: Published for the British Council<br />
by Longmans, Green, 1960, p. 25<br />
2 Bragg, Melvyn. The Adventure of English: 500AD to 2000: The Biography of a<br />
Language. London: Hodder & Stoughton, 2003, p. 131<br />
which were Pierre de Ronsard, Joachim du Bellay and<br />
Jean-Antoine de Baïf. 3<br />
No English poet in 1580 would have failed to notice<br />
the divergence in quality of verse in French and English.<br />
It would be impossible to explain all the causes of this<br />
subsequent literary boom in a critical response. However,<br />
around 1580, a new self-confidence emerged in English<br />
poets as they overcame a strong sense of cultural cringe 4<br />
that had developed among writers of English, with the<br />
language viewed as mercantile and inferior to the<br />
Continental languages. Instead they believed that the<br />
English language could be as impressive as the English<br />
nation. 5 Divided from Europe by religion, England was<br />
nonetheless relatively peaceful, prosperous and free. Many<br />
poets wished to celebrate Englishness, to produce great<br />
works in English for the purpose of honouring the<br />
language. The English language itself was a topic for<br />
academic discussion. The English were self-conscious<br />
about their language, which, combined with the national<br />
pride of the 1580s resulted in the desire to enrich English<br />
with remarkable literature.<br />
Sidney embodied the conflict between English national<br />
pride and European cultural influence that found<br />
expression in the sonnet. He was raised at one of England’s<br />
grandest houses, Penshurst Place, Kent, and his family<br />
were aristocratic and at the very heart of the English Court<br />
and government. 6 Sidney was also stridently Protestant,<br />
as a result of his upbringing and his witnessing of the St<br />
Bartholomew’s Day Massacres in Paris 7. Indeed Sidney<br />
died in the Netherlands, at the Battle of Zutphen fighting<br />
the Spanish in the English campaign to assist Dutch<br />
Protestant independence. As Sidney lay dying from a shot<br />
in the thigh, it is said, probably apocryphally, that he<br />
3 Lagarde, André, and Laurent Michard. XVIe Siècle: Les Grands Auteurs<br />
Français Du Programme. Paris: Bordas, 1965. Print. Translated with assistance<br />
from P. Hipwell and R. Brennan<br />
4 A term first used in Philips, A. A. ‘The Cultural Cringe.’ Meanjin vol. 4 (1950)<br />
5 Bateson, F.W. English Poetry and the English Language. Clarendon Press, Oxford,<br />
1934, p. 31<br />
6 Fox Bourne, H.R. Sir Philip Sidney: Type of English Chivalry in the Elizabethan<br />
Age. London: G.P. Putnam’s Sons, 1891, p.15<br />
7 Boas, Frederick. Sir Philip Sidney, Representative Elizabethan: His Life and<br />
Writings. London: Russell & Russell, 1970, p. 23<br />
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gave his water to another wounded soldier, with the words<br />
‘Thy necessity is yet greater than mine.’ 8 This story typifies<br />
the mythologizing that occurred after his death. Sidney<br />
became, in death, the very model of an English gentleman,<br />
courtier, and soldier. Spenser wrote a great elegy ‘Astrophel.<br />
A Pastorall Elegie upon the death of the most Noble and<br />
valorous Knight, Sir Philip Sidney,’ while Yeats referred<br />
to ‘our Sidney, and our perfect man’. 9<br />
Sidney was not just an English patriot and militant<br />
Protestant, he was a true Renaissance Man: An Englishman<br />
who travelled in Europe, and returned not a Europhile but<br />
nonetheless a connoisseur of Continental poetry and<br />
philosophy. 10 His deep understanding of foreign poetry<br />
emerged in Astrophil and Stella. In his journeys as a<br />
diplomat and courtier he travelled extensively in Europe.<br />
Sidney visited modern France, Germany, Austria,<br />
Hungary, Poland, and Italy. He was named after Philip II<br />
of Spain, who was his godfather. And in Venice had his<br />
portrait painted by Veronese. He met intellectuals and<br />
rulers, both Protestant, Hubert Languet and William of<br />
Orange, and Catholic, Edmund Campion and Don John<br />
of Austria. He spoke Latin, French, Italian, Spanish,<br />
Greek, and some German. 11 This poet-soldier was a<br />
remarkable pioneer for English scholarship in Renaissance<br />
Europe; his discussions of Machiavelli and Epicurean<br />
philosophy are some of the earliest in the English<br />
language. 12 Sidney was so much more than just the<br />
forerunner to modern day football hooligans, rampaging<br />
through Holland.<br />
Sidney was ideally suited to adapt the sonnet and show<br />
that English was capable of expressing the most tender of<br />
emotions. In fact he wrote in his treatise The Defence of<br />
Poesy: ‘Nature never set forth the earth in so rich tapestry<br />
as diverse poets have done; neither with so pleasant rivers,<br />
8 Greville, Fulke. The Life of the Renowned Sir Philip Sidney: 1652. Delmar, NY:<br />
Scholars’ Facs. & Repr., 1984<br />
9 Yeats, W.B. ‘In Memory of Major Robert Gregory,’ 1919<br />
10 Wilson, Mona. Astrophel and Stella. The Nonesuch Press, 1931, p. viii<br />
11 Stump, Donald. ‘History of Sidney Scholarship, Introduction: Sidney as a<br />
Rennaisance Man.’ Bibliographies at Saint Louis University. Web. 10 June <strong>2011</strong>.<br />
<br />
12 Ibid.<br />
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fruitful trees, sweet-smelling flowers, nor whatsoever else<br />
may make the too much loved earth more lovely. Her<br />
world is brazen, the poets only deliver a golden.’ 13 Any<br />
man who declares that the beauty of poetry exceeds that<br />
of the natural world is undoubtedly passionate, and he<br />
describes verse as ‘the first light-giver to ignorance, and<br />
first nurse, whose milk little by little enabled them to feed<br />
afterwards of tougher knowledges’. 14 In this important<br />
work of prose, Sidney does more than celebrate poetry,<br />
he maps out its role ‘to beautify our mother tongue …’ 15<br />
Sidney felt strongly connected to the English language,<br />
both because of its intrinsic qualities and his own sense<br />
of belonging to England. He writes in The Defence of<br />
Poesy; ‘never was the Albion nation without poetry,’ 16 and<br />
then goes on to declare English’s suitability for poetry:<br />
‘Now of versifying there are two sorts, the one ancient,<br />
the other modern: the ancient marked the quantity of<br />
each syllable … the modern, observing only number …<br />
Truly the English before any vulgar language I know,<br />
is fit for both sorts.’ 17 Here Sidney refers to the difference<br />
between quantitative and qualitative metre, while<br />
English-language poetry features stressed syllables at<br />
regular intervals, for example ‘With how sad steps, oh<br />
Moon, thou climb’st the skies,’ 18 in iambic pentameter.<br />
Lines of poetry in classical languages however are made<br />
up of feet that follow certain patterns according to syllable<br />
weight. Take as an example the first line of the Aeneid,<br />
written in dactylic hexameter:<br />
Arma virumque cano, Troiae qui primus ab oris 19<br />
Sidney describes English as suitable for poetry in both<br />
forms of metre, a flattering evaluation of the capabilities<br />
of English.<br />
13 Sidney, Philip. The Defence of Poesy. Sir Philip Sidney. Ed. Katherine<br />
Duncan-Jones. Oxford: Oxford UP, 1989, p. 216<br />
14 Ibid. at p. 213<br />
15 Ibid.<br />
16 Ibid. at p. 237<br />
17 Ibid. at p.248<br />
18 Sidney, Philip. Astrophil and Stella. Sonnet XXXI<br />
19 Vergil, the Aeneid. Book I : ‘I sing of arms and a man, who came first from<br />
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Sidney, however, believed that English poetry had fallen<br />
on hard times, and describes the relationship between a<br />
nation and the poetry of her language: ‘that poesy, thus<br />
embraced in all other places, should find in our time<br />
a hard welcome in England, I think the very earth<br />
lamenteth it, and therefore decketh our soil with fewer<br />
laurels than it was accustomed’. 20<br />
For Sidney the lack of great modern English poetry, is a<br />
national failing the language of a great nation is worthy<br />
of great writing ‘our tongue is most fit to honour poesy,<br />
and to be honoured by poesy’. 21 However, Sidney was<br />
not advocating the writing of what we might now call<br />
patriotic or nationalistic verse. The Defence of Poesy<br />
suggests that a sense of belonging to the English nation<br />
served as a primary motivation to write poetry.<br />
As to the type of poetry he wanted to write, even the<br />
type of English he wanted to celebrate the logical model<br />
was Chaucer. Indeed Sidney writes that Chaucer ‘did<br />
excellently in his Troilus and Criseyde’. 22 Unlike Spenser he<br />
didn’t feel that modern English poetry needed to replicate<br />
13th century language. Sidney belonged to a broader<br />
European cultural tradition. Sidney would write what<br />
Stephen Fry has called the ‘Goldilocks form … the sonnet<br />
is always just right’. 23<br />
Sidney was not the first Englishman to write sonnets.<br />
Chaucer had admired the works of Petrarch 24, but in<br />
1581–2 when Sidney wrote Astrophil and Stella the form<br />
was not fashionable in England. This was despite the<br />
work of Surrey, and his contemporary Wyatt, who wrote<br />
sonnets during the reign of Henry VIII that were more or<br />
less translations from Petrarch. Before Sidney, the word<br />
‘sonnet’ often took on a wider meaning than just the strict<br />
fourteen line poem, 25 which we know today. Like<br />
20 Ibid. 13 at p. 241<br />
21 Ibid. at p. 249<br />
22 Ibid. at p. 242<br />
23 Fry, Stephen. The Ode Less Travelled: Unlocking the Poet within. New York:<br />
Gotham, 2006, p. 281<br />
24 Pearson, Lu Emily. Elizabethan Love Conventions. University of California Press,<br />
1933, p. 14<br />
25 Spiller, Michael R. G. ‘’I Am Not I’: The Sonnets of Sidney.’ The Development of<br />
the Sonnet: An Introduction. London: Routledge, 1992, p. 102<br />
Petrarch’s Il Canzoniere, Astrophil and Stella is an<br />
extended series of poems, 108 sonnets and 11 songs<br />
dedicated to one woman. Stella, the object of desire, ‘star’<br />
in Latin: Astrophil, the besotted poet is ‘star-lover’ in<br />
Greek. The sequence is semi-autobiographical, Astrophil<br />
is Sidney, while Stella is Penelope Devereux, the sister of<br />
Elizabeth’s favourite, Robert Devereux, 2nd Earl of Essex.<br />
Sidney wasn’t married at the time of writing, but Penelope<br />
Devereux was, to Robert, Lord Rich. Indeed in Sonnet<br />
XXIV Sidney plays upon Rich’s name; ‘Rich fools there<br />
be,’ in much the same way that Petrarch puns on his<br />
lover’s name Laura, who was also married. 26 The greatness<br />
of Sidney’s sonnets, Petrarchan yet original lies in their<br />
lyricism and subtle exploration of lust, virtue and beauty.<br />
They would establish the sonnet in English.<br />
The balance between Continental inspiration and<br />
celebration of Englishness is reflected in the sonnets<br />
themselves. Sidney adopts the literary features of<br />
continental sonnets and their thematic concerns, but he<br />
adapts and extends both of these elements. The very idea<br />
of a sequence of sonnets like Astrophil and Stella is pure<br />
Petrarchan, and from the very first sonnet the mimetic<br />
features are clear.<br />
Sidney adopts both the conventions and the themes<br />
of Petrarchanism but his subtle adaptation allows the<br />
development of an English poetry. Petrarch’s sonnets<br />
feature the voice of an infatuated lover, a devoted servant<br />
to the object of his desire, whose cold heart causes him<br />
pain. Petrarchanism is almost masochistic in this sense27 and so in Sonnet I of Astrophil and Stella we read ‘That<br />
she (dear she) might take some pleasure of my pain;’ but<br />
then Sidney goes further describing his predicament as<br />
‘the blackest face of woe’. This introduces the theme of<br />
love as suffering that continues in other sonnets with<br />
references like ‘my hell’ 28 and ‘Alas, have I not pain<br />
26 Sonnet V, Il Canzoniere: ‘Cosí LAUdare et REverire insegna’<br />
27 Waller, Gary F. ‘The Rewriting of Petrarch: Sidney and the Languages of<br />
Sixteenth-Century Poetry.’ Sir Philip Sidney and the Interpretation of<br />
Renaissance Culture: the Poet in His Time and in Ours: A Collection of<br />
Critical and Scholarly Essays. Ed. Michael D. Moore. London: Croom Helm,<br />
1984, p. 72<br />
28 Sidney, Philip. Astrophil and Stella. Sonnet II<br />
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enough’. 29 The tone of this sonnet also captures the anguish,<br />
a hallmark of the Petrarchan poet. This is a poem about a<br />
man trying to decide upon the words to use to convince a<br />
woman that he loves her. As he describes the effect he hopes<br />
his writing will have, we can almost feel his angst.<br />
Throughout the sequence, anxiety and oscillating feelings<br />
constantly plague Astrophil. These doubts and pains seem<br />
to affect not only Astrophil, the lover, but also Sidney, the<br />
poet. In this sonnet there is frustration, not only because<br />
Stella has not yet been won, but because the poet is<br />
struggling to find the words to express his feelings. Perhaps<br />
this is why he is ‘Oft turning others’ leaves’ and attempting<br />
to find inspiration in the works of others. This elaborate<br />
Petrarchan mask of self-deprecation is for the purpose of<br />
seduction, but on another level it shows the anxiety of a<br />
poet who feels a responsibility to develop the English<br />
language.<br />
This sonnet, and twelve others in the sequence, deals<br />
self-consciously with the creation of the poem itself.<br />
This degree of meta-fiction is not found in Petrarch.<br />
Certainly some of the great Italian’s poems include<br />
writing:<br />
donna, per me vostra bellezza in rima …<br />
Più volte incominciai di scriver versi;<br />
ma la penna e la mano e l’intelletto<br />
rimaser vinti nel primier assalto. 30<br />
Sidney goes beyond just saying that Astrophil is so<br />
overcome by Stella’s beauty that he is unable to write.<br />
Rather the first sonnet is a sophisticated discussion of the<br />
difficulties of writing a sonnet, a genuinely meta-fictional<br />
piece. 31 That Sidney places this sonnet at the very<br />
beginning of the sequence suggests that he was well aware<br />
of what he was doing. His anxiety is conveyed by the<br />
29 Sidney, Philip. Astrophil and Stella. Sonnet XIV<br />
30 Sonnet XX: Lady, though your rare beauties prompt my rhyme…<br />
And oft have I the tender verse essay’d,<br />
But still in vain; pen, hand, and intellect<br />
In the first effort conquer’d are and check’d.<br />
MACGREGOR<br />
Petrarca, Francesco. ‘Sonnet XX.’ The Sonnets, Triumphs, and Other Poems of<br />
Petrarch. Ed. Thomas Campbell. Trans. Robert Guthrie MacGregor. London:<br />
G. Bell and Sons, 1879<br />
31 Ibid. 27, at p. 112<br />
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halting feeling of the poem, which is emphasised by the<br />
frequent use of punctuation, for example ‘Thus, great<br />
with child to speak, and helpless in my throes, /Biting my<br />
truant pen, beating myself for spite’. 32 In other sonnets in<br />
the sequence Sidney demonstrates a masterful command<br />
of enjambment some ten years before it was effectively<br />
utilised by English dramatists to get across a similar idea<br />
of hesitance of speech. 33<br />
The meta-fictional exploration in this sonnet runs deeper<br />
than just a description of writing a poem: the first line<br />
strikes at a central poetic question. How is it that a poet<br />
goes about ‘Loving in truth, and fain(ing) in verse my love<br />
to show’? It’s important to note that for the Elizabethans<br />
‘feigning’ did not mean pretending but rather inventing.<br />
And so, in the very first line of the sequence Sidney raises<br />
an important and difficult question for writers of love<br />
poetry. He shows that this work is not just one of the<br />
many derivative English poems that came before and after<br />
but an extension of one of Petrarch’s ideas. Sidney’s<br />
complex sense of belonging, his love of both English and<br />
Continental poetry results in the adaptation rather than<br />
imitation of a Petrarchan theme.<br />
Similarly, classical rhetorical techniques are featured in<br />
this poem, but their use is central to the establishment of<br />
an ironic tone. What follows the first line in the octet is a<br />
playful rhetorical display, Astrophil is ‘fein(ing)’ love<br />
using classical devices. The repetition of words,<br />
subjunctives and parallel phrases, for example ‘Knowledge<br />
might pity win, and pity grace obtain’: additionally<br />
alliteration, the metaphor of the book, in place of poetic<br />
knowledge, and the imagery of ‘fresh and fruitful showers’<br />
all feature as Astrophil leaps towards the volta. At this<br />
point, Astrophil seems to suggest that plain speech is the<br />
order of the day, but nonetheless the sestet features an<br />
abundance of rhetoric, including prosopopoeia, as<br />
Astrophil’s Muse speaks to him, as well as metaphors:<br />
‘nature’s child,’ and aposiopesis, the lack of a proper<br />
conclusion, in the final sentence. The final, famous line<br />
is only reached after an extensive display of classical<br />
32 Sidney, Philip. Astrophil and Stella. Sonnet I<br />
33 Ibid., p. 119
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rhetorical technique, almost ironic in tone. This<br />
playfulness and feel for irony created the new, and<br />
distinctively English voice Sidney brought to sonnets.<br />
However, our attention is repeatedly drawn to the<br />
problem of expressing love in poetry when great poetry<br />
requires artificial constructs. Anxiety in writing is not just<br />
the result of love but Sidney’s belief that a poet owes it to<br />
his language to write well. Sidney expresses the burden of<br />
the ideas he espoused in The Defence of Poesy, and is<br />
deeply aware of his responsibility in writing.<br />
Everyone knows that a sonnet is a fourteen-line poem,<br />
with ten syllables in each line, and yet the first sonnet in<br />
one of the greatest sequences in the English language has<br />
twelve in each. A line with twelve syllables is an<br />
Alexandrine, in this case Sidney attempts iambic<br />
hexameter. Alexandrines, though quite common in<br />
English drama before Marlowe and Shakespeare, are<br />
notoriously difficult to write well in English, and seem<br />
clumsy to those of us so accustomed to the almost<br />
conversational effect of pentameter. This notoriety is clear<br />
in the works of other poets. The American James Russell<br />
Lowell called it ‘the droning old alexandrine’ 34 while<br />
Alexander Pope made his views clear more poetically<br />
in his Essay on Criticism: A needless Alexandrine ends<br />
the song ‘That, like a wounded snake, drags its slow<br />
length along’. 35<br />
Though it may be unpopular among poets in the English<br />
language, the alexandrine is French’s iambic pentameter. 36<br />
The poets of La Pléiade had established the dodecasyllable<br />
as the dominant poetic metre in French sonnets. For<br />
example Ronsard’s famous ‘Quand vous serez bien vieille,<br />
au soir, à la chandelle’. 37 Sidney’s adoption of the<br />
alexandrine in this very first sonnet, and in five<br />
subsequent poems makes clear his Continental influences,<br />
in this case not Petrarch but the French sonnet writers.<br />
Though there had been sonnets in alexandrines before,<br />
34 Lowell, James Russell. The English Poets. London. W. Scott, 1888, p. 41<br />
35 Pope, Alexander. ‘An Essay on Criticism,’ 1711, vol. ii, l. 152<br />
36 Hipwell, Peter B. ‘Alexandrine.’ Letter to Luca Moretti. 21 Mar. <strong>2011</strong><br />
37 Ronsard, Pierre du. Sonnets pour Hélène Book II: XLIII, 1578<br />
most notably those of Thomas Wyatt 38 (1503–1542), they<br />
were still unusual and certainly represented an interest in<br />
French poetic style. This sonnet and others in the<br />
sequence are rare examples of fluent English poems of this<br />
form. 39 Clearly this unusual metrical form represents the<br />
poet taking points from the finest European poems, and<br />
experimenting in English, to see if he could find success.<br />
That Sidney does is a credit to his talent, but his<br />
motivation, once again, is to write great poems in English,<br />
and to show that English was capable of the sort of poetry<br />
being produced in Europe.<br />
However throughout Astrophil and Stella, Petrarch<br />
remains Sidney’s guiding light. In particular the early<br />
sonnets are very much in harmony with Petrarch’s<br />
descriptions of Laura, for example Sonnet IX is almost an<br />
archetype of the Petrarchan blazon. In this sonnet all the<br />
traditional descriptions of a mistress’ beauty are brought<br />
out; the extended metaphor of rare goods, in place of<br />
facial features ‘alabaster pure,’ ‘Gold in the covering,’<br />
‘Red porphyr’ and ‘lock of pearl’. This sort of Petrarchan<br />
hyperbole was common in sonnets of the time and is<br />
taken straight from Il Canzoniere:<br />
‘La testa òr fino, e calda neve il vólto,<br />
ebbeno i cigli, e gli occhi eran due stelle,’ 40<br />
Sonnet CLVII<br />
In Il Canzoniere it seems that not a poem goes by without<br />
a reference to Laura’s golden hair, but then again maybe it<br />
was a rarity in thirteenth century Italy before the days of<br />
peroxide. Petrarch’s followers were no less enthusiastic in<br />
comparing their lovers to precious metals and exotic<br />
stones. You can’t help but feel that all of these stony<br />
38 Foxwell, Agnes Kate. A Study of Sir Thomas Wyatt’s Poems: Being Part I of a<br />
Thesis Approved for the Degree of Master of Arts in the University of London, June<br />
1910. London: Published for the University of London by Hodder & Stoughton,<br />
1911, p. 18<br />
39 Baum, Paul F. The Principles of English Versification. Cambridge: Harvard UP;<br />
etc., 1922, p. 85<br />
40 Fine gold her hair, her face as sunlit snow,<br />
Her brows and lashes jet, twin stars her eyes,<br />
MACGREGOR<br />
Petrarca, Francesco. ‘Sonnet XX.’ The Sonnets, Triumphs, and Other Poems of<br />
Petrarch. Ed. Thomas Campbell. Trans. Robert Guthrie MacGregor. London:<br />
G. Bell and Sons, 1879<br />
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women must have been quite frightening. It seems that<br />
Cleo and Vogue did not invent unrealistic standards for<br />
women’s bodies.<br />
These aren’t the only Petrarchan ‘clichés’ that Sidney<br />
adopts and in English gives new purpose, as the<br />
Cambridge History of English Literature notes, ‘The appeals<br />
to sleep, to the nightingale, to the moon, to his bed, to his<br />
mistress’s dog, which form the staple of much of Sidney’s<br />
poetry, resemble the apostrophes of foreign sonneteers…’ 41<br />
Indeed, Sidney uses apostrophes in sixty-two sonnets,<br />
according to Spiller, far more than any other English<br />
sonneteer. However, it would be wrong to suggest that<br />
Sidney’s affection for this favourite device of Petrarch is<br />
purely derivative. Once again, Sidney extends rather than<br />
mimics a Petrarchan feature. Whereas the Italian used<br />
apostrophes to invoke great powers; Love, Death, and<br />
Laura, Sidney seems to address almost anything, as he<br />
turns from subject to subject. The effect is not the<br />
solemnity of Petrarch’s apostrophes but the frisson and<br />
emotional turbulence of a lover 42 and a poet.<br />
In these early sonnets Astrophil also abides by the<br />
Petrarchan notion that his idolised lover is not only the<br />
embodiment of beauty but also virtue. Stella’s face is<br />
‘Queen Virtue’s court’. This is an important element of the<br />
Petrarchan sonnet. Montgomery writes that ‘ethical and<br />
emotional conflict … defines Petrarchism as a system of<br />
balanced and unresolved moral tension … Dialectically<br />
the demands of desire implied the destruction of virtue.’ 43<br />
In Petrarch’s sonnets then, the male lover is a distant<br />
admirer of a beautiful and virtuous woman. His poems<br />
were written to celebrate rather than seduce. In the early<br />
sonnets of Astrophil and Stella Sidney maintains this role<br />
for Astrophil, but soon introduces an overtly sexual tone,<br />
which is not found in Petrarch.<br />
41 Ibid. 6, at p. 255<br />
42 Ibid. 25, at p.116<br />
43 Montgomery, Robert L. ‘Astrophil’s Stella and Stella’s Astrophil.’ Sir Philip<br />
Sidney and the Interpretation of Renaissance Culture: The Poet in His Time and<br />
in Ours : A Collection of Critical and Scholarly Essays. Ed. Gary F. Waller and<br />
Michael D. Moore. London: Croom Helm, 1984, p. 45<br />
71<br />
What starts as the sensual language of Sonnet XII: ‘Cupid,<br />
because thou shin’st in Stella’s eyes,/That from her locks,<br />
thy day-nets, none ‘scapes free,/That those lips swell, so<br />
full of thee they be,/That her sweet breath makes oft thy<br />
flames to rise,’ soon becomes what Katherine Duncan-<br />
Jones has called ‘lewd innuendo’. 44 The best example of<br />
this being the final line of Sonnet LXXVI when Astrophil<br />
‘Pray(s) that my sun go down with meeker beams to bed.’<br />
Here Sidney has abandoned the model of Petrarch.<br />
Instead he looks to the overt sensuality of the French<br />
writers, who were inspired by the Greek lyric poets<br />
and Ovid. 45<br />
And so when, in Sonnet LXXII the conflict between<br />
virtue and beauty, the Petrarchan conflict reaches its<br />
climax, as the poet asks ‘How virtue may best lodged<br />
in beauty be,’ Sidney’s final lines and rhyming couplet<br />
underscore his amalgamation of Petrarchan and French<br />
styles; ‘As fast thy virtue bends that love to good. /But<br />
ah, desire still cries: ‘Give me some food.’’ This tightly<br />
constructed sonnet, deals with what the Elizabethans<br />
believed to be a paradox: that virtue could reside in<br />
beauty. And so Sidney presents the Petrarchan ideal;<br />
‘those fair lines which true beauty show.’ And uses the<br />
metaphor of light to represent virtue in both the octet<br />
and the sestet, but then in the final line he introduces a<br />
new character: lust. The entire discussion is now framed<br />
cleverly in terms of desire, rather than beauty. Once again<br />
Sidney demonstrates a knowledge of both European<br />
method and matter but he combines ideas and techniques<br />
in new and clever ways, and he extends the conventions as<br />
he transfers them into English.<br />
It is interesting also to consider the rhyme schemes of the<br />
sonnets at this point because here as well Sidney adopts<br />
from the Europeans and adapts for the English language.<br />
Sonnet IX follows Sidney’s favourite scheme abba abba<br />
cdcd ee, which is found in fifty-nine or sixty sonnets (the<br />
numbers change depending upon different interpretations<br />
44 Duncan-Jones, Katherine. ‘Philip Sidney’s Toys.’ Proceedings of the British<br />
Academy, 1980. Included in Sir Philip Sidney: an Anthology of Modern Criticism.<br />
Ed. Dennis Kay. Oxford, Oxfordshire: Clarendon, 1987, p. 76<br />
45 Ibid. 25, at p. 114
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of the sounds of words). 46 Generally, though, it can be said<br />
that Sidney’s rhyme schemes are more European than<br />
any other English sonneteer. While most of his sonnets<br />
feature the final rhyming couplet, the most celebrated<br />
development of the English sonnet, twenty-three go<br />
without. Additionally Sidney adopts the Italian octet<br />
scheme of abba abba in seventy-five sonnets (including<br />
Sonnet LXXI). This scheme was abandoned by many<br />
English sonnet writers because, as Stephen Fry writes<br />
‘While this is a breeze in Italian where every other word<br />
seems to end in -ino or -ella, it can be the very deuce in<br />
English’. 47 Sidney, is therefore the most European of the<br />
great English sonneteers at the end of the sixteenth<br />
century, combining an Italian octet, with an English<br />
sestet in the majority of cases. However, it is important<br />
to remember that Sidney did use many rhyming couplets<br />
and Astrophil and Stella does include some of the first<br />
examples of the structure we would call the<br />
Shakespearean sonnet with its rhyme scheme of abab cdcd<br />
efef gg. The most famous such sonnet in Astrophil and<br />
Stella is Sonnet XXXIX ‘Come sleep, O sleep, the certain<br />
knot of peace’. In his experimentation with rhyme<br />
schemes we can see Sidney’s place as a disciple of the<br />
Italian sonneteers, but also as an innovator, adapting this<br />
form of poetry to suit the cadences of spoken English.<br />
Perhaps the most important element that Sidney<br />
introduced to sonnet writing was a sense of playfulness.<br />
While at times Sidney achieves the sort of intensity of<br />
emotion that made Petrarch so admired among poets,<br />
in many of the sonnets we are struck by his colloquialism,<br />
irony, or even humour. Take as an example Sonnet XX,<br />
in which Sidney entreats his friends to ‘See there that boy,<br />
that murth’ring boy I say,’ and describes the wound that is<br />
his love for Stella. And yet throughout the poem a sense<br />
of energy and playfulness pervades and emerges in the<br />
repeated alliteration of ‘bloody bullet’ and polyptoton of<br />
‘Poor passenger, pass’. Or indeed the melodramatic and<br />
46 Whigam, R. G., and O. F. Emerson. Sonnet Structure in Sidney’s Astrophel and<br />
Stella Studies in Philology 18.3 (1921). University of North Carolina Press: 347-5,<br />
p. 348<br />
47 Ibid. 23, at p. 284<br />
slightly sarcastic opening line ‘Fly, fly, my friends, I have<br />
my death wound, fly.’<br />
Sidney makes references to classical figures constantly,<br />
in Astrophil and Stella. Cupid is frequently mentioned,<br />
and often the purpose of these allusions is to separate<br />
Astrophil from his love, depicting it as not something he<br />
can control, but rather an irrational entity. 48 In this sonnet<br />
Sidney takes the well-worn story of Cupid and his arrow<br />
and subverts it cleverly. Cupid is no longer the son of<br />
Venus, he is one of the urchins, who wandered the streets<br />
in Tudor London. It is this sort of clever, witty writing<br />
that gives voice to the poems and distinguishes them from<br />
the very serious Italian and French sonnets. Sidney’s<br />
fondness for irony and lightness make his poems enjoyable<br />
to read, and sometimes, if you’re in the right mood they<br />
can even be downright funny. This voice that Sidney<br />
developed was carried on by other sonnet writers,<br />
Shakespeare being the foremost example. Some have<br />
argued that the Bard’s entire sequence of sonnets is a<br />
parody of the Petrarchan tradition. Certainly Sonnet 130,<br />
‘My mistress’ eyes are nothing like the sun;’ supports that<br />
interpretation. In this regard, and many others,<br />
Shakespeare owes a great debt to Sidney.<br />
Penelope Devereux’s was really the face that launched a<br />
thousand sonnets because it was after the publication of<br />
Astrophil and Stella in 1591, five years after Sidney’s death<br />
that the sonnet boom really took off. Countless poems<br />
were written, most of them derivative and unoriginal, but<br />
a very small minority were truly remarkable. Sidney was a<br />
pioneer for all writers of English sonnets. He established a<br />
standard, and showed that great sonnets could be written<br />
in English. That he would be surpassed by Shakespeare,<br />
writing in a rhyme scheme that he pioneered was, in part,<br />
a testament to the strength of the foundations that Sidney<br />
laid down. As a body of work the great English sonnets<br />
did what Sidney had hoped English poets would do, they<br />
proved that English was a valid vehicle for great<br />
48 Campbell, Marion, ‘Unending Desire: Sidney’s Reinvention of Petrarchan<br />
Form in Astrophil and Stella’ Sir Philip Sidney and the Interpretation of<br />
Renaissance Culture: The Poet in His Time and in Ours : A Collection of Critical<br />
and Scholarly Essays. Ed. Gary F. Waller and Michael D. Moore. London:<br />
Croom Helm, 1984, p. 88<br />
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Sir Philip Sidney … and other heroes of that kidney continued<br />
poetry. In truth, the sonnets did more than that; these<br />
poems gave English some of the greatest literature ever<br />
written, in any language. Furthermore, these poems gave<br />
the language, itself new forms of expression and idioms.<br />
Sidney alone gave us ‘dumb stricken,’ ‘miniature’ for a<br />
small picture, ‘conversation’ in the sense we know it and<br />
‘my better half’. 49 He was particularly fond of compound<br />
adjectives, an idea taken from the French. 50<br />
Sidney was a true Englishman, a poet with a deep sense<br />
of belonging to his nation and he had been motivated<br />
to write great works in English to demonstrate the<br />
possibilities of the English language, which he believed<br />
to be one of the great achievements of the English people.<br />
At the same time, he was an educated and well-travelled<br />
diplomat and soldier, and his fellowship with a broader<br />
European cultural tradition was an important influence.<br />
It was the confluence of these two (often contradictory)<br />
tensions that shaped his writing. As a poet, Sidney felt he<br />
could not ignore the works of the Continent, and as an<br />
English poet he felt that the future of English literature<br />
was to learn from the French and Italians, and to<br />
incorporate their forms and concerns into writings in<br />
our language.<br />
The result is the borrowing of many elements; a<br />
Petrarchan sequence, the character of the male lover, the<br />
representation of the lady, the rhythm structure of some<br />
poems, the enthusiastic descriptions of idealised beauty,<br />
the penchant for apostrophes, the rhyme schemes, the<br />
sensuality of the French, and the preoccupation with the<br />
conflict between virtue and beauty. However, what<br />
separates Sidney from the legion of English Petrarchan<br />
imitators is his superior understanding of the issues at play,<br />
and the English language, itself. Sidney takes elements of<br />
French and Italian writing and extends them, producing<br />
complex meta-fictional poems, more sophisticated than<br />
his models. He embraces an innovative rhyme scheme,<br />
perfect for English writers and a new voice, distinctly<br />
vivid, rich in irony, at times even mischievous. In some<br />
49 Ibid. 2, at p. 134<br />
50 Rowse, A.L., The Elizabethan Renaissance: The Cultural Achievement, London,<br />
Macmillan, 1972, p. 56<br />
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ways that is his greatest contribution, because this new<br />
voice resonated with poets that followed Sidney. It<br />
encapsulated something of the English tone. It made<br />
the sonnet English.<br />
Luca Moretti<br />
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To what extent was Roman society concerned about the<br />
political morality of its ruling class? Discuss with reference<br />
to Gaius Verres.<br />
‘The widening chasm between the upper and the lower<br />
classes was a major reason for the decay of the political<br />
institutions of the republic and for the role played by arms<br />
and violence in settling party strife’ wrote Taylor. 1 In this<br />
essay political morality is defined as referring to the<br />
normative ethics with respect to a Government ruling its<br />
citizens, and the inference that political immorality was<br />
frequent in Rome is supported. The question will be<br />
analysed, first with regards to the broader political and<br />
legal systems in Rome and then, to the trial of Gaius<br />
Verres. This essay will show that Roman society’s concern<br />
about their rulers’ morality was minimal, both as a<br />
consequence of the nature of the institutions and because<br />
it was a mutually agreeable status quo.<br />
It was widely accepted in Rome that ‘the political system<br />
... had become corrupt. Some of Rome’s richest families<br />
were able to control the government for long periods of<br />
time using their wealth to influence the elections of<br />
senators and magistrates’. 2 Indeed during Verres’ trial<br />
Cicero spoke in depth about ‘the dishonour and disgrace<br />
that have for several years past attached to this order (of<br />
senatorial jurymen)’. 3 Bribery, extortion and cronyism<br />
were ‘commonplace,’ 4 and so it was understood and allowed<br />
that such corruption was simply a part of political life.<br />
Both the psyche and the practices of the senate were<br />
observed in the law-courts, be it Verres’ various bribes and<br />
attempted bribes of Cicero, 5 or Cicero’s proclamation<br />
about the trial of Clodius that ‘the cause of the acquittal ...<br />
was the empty pockets and the itching palms of our<br />
jurymen’. 6 These were not isolated incidents. It was<br />
well-known, and this is reflected in Cicero’s statement in<br />
Verres’ trial that ‘novi locum; video ubi se iactaturus sit<br />
1 Taylor, L.R. 1968, Party Politics in the Age of Caesar, University of California<br />
Press, Berkeley and Los Angeles, p. 2<br />
2 Ackroyd, P. 2005, Ancient Rome, Dorling Kindersley, London, p. 34<br />
3 Taylor, op. cit., p. 105, cf. Cicero, In Verrem I.49 (Hereafter referred to by speech<br />
and section.)<br />
4 Tracy, C. 2007, The Life and Times of Cicero, Mitchell Lane Publishers, USA, p.<br />
21<br />
5 Clough, A.H [ed & trans]. 1969, ‘Cicero,’ in Plutarch’s Lives Volume III, Aldine<br />
Press, London, p. 191<br />
6 Lewis, J. [ed] 2003, The Mammoth Book of How it Happened: Ancient Rome,<br />
Constable and Robinson, London, p. 77<br />
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Hortensius’. 7 The predicted defence, a utilitarian<br />
justification that ‘C. Verres propter hanc eximiam<br />
virtutem in re militari omnia quae fecit impune fecerit,’ 8<br />
excuses corruption on account of the defendant’s military<br />
accomplishments. The recognition that such an argument<br />
is standard is combined with Cicero’s description that:<br />
‘eoque adduxit eos qui erant iudicaturi vehementer ut<br />
vererentur ne, quem virum fortuna ex hostium telis<br />
eripuisset, cum sibi ipse non pepercisset, hic non ad<br />
populi Romani laudem sed ad iudicum crudelitatem<br />
videretur esse servatus’. 9 These show a grudging<br />
acknowledgement in his speech that such corruption is<br />
widespread. It is little wonder that Cowie and Heitland<br />
affirmed that ‘equitable government ... and integrity were<br />
rarely displayed by Roman officials in the provinces’. 10<br />
This view is supported by Levens, who wrote that it was<br />
‘an age when a large part of the urban proletariat lived by<br />
selling its votes to the highest bidder ... there were<br />
unlimited opportunities for plunder open to those who<br />
saw in their provincial governorship a means of recovering<br />
the expenses of their election to office, and of building up<br />
a fortune for the future’. 11 Even more significant than this<br />
basic bribery and profiteering was the fact that among the<br />
multitude of Sulla’s laws from 82–79 BC was the Lex<br />
Cornelia de pecuniis repetundis, 12 which overturned the<br />
Lex Calpurnia. 13 This new law, according to Levens,<br />
meant that ‘the dice were now loaded in favour of corrupt<br />
governors,’ 14 and reinforced the sense that the political<br />
trend of Cicero’s time was an inexorable movement<br />
towards greater corruption. This much was clear in<br />
Cicero’s first case, Pro Roscio Amerino, where ‘even<br />
though Sextus (Roscius) had an airtight alibi, Cicero<br />
knew this was a case in which the truth would be<br />
7 II.5.2<br />
8 II.5.3<br />
9 II.5.3<br />
10 Cowie, H. and Heitland, W.E. [eds] 1876, Q. Caecilium Divinatio & In C.<br />
Verrem Actio Prima, Cambridge University Press, Cambridge, p. viii<br />
11 Levens, R.G.C. [ed] 2001, Cicero: Verrine V, Bristol Classical Press, London,<br />
p.xvi<br />
12 Ibid., p. xix<br />
13 Ackroyd, op. cit., p. 44<br />
14 Levens, op. cit., p. xix
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practically irrelevant ... (since) Chrysogonus, a close friend<br />
of Sulla, was behind the charges against the defendant’. 15<br />
It is evident in the cases in the law courts, many of which<br />
related to governance or the ruling class, that political<br />
immorality was prevalent and, more than that, promoted<br />
in Rome since it often suited those in power.<br />
This common corruption was reported in Verres’ trial by<br />
several sources, and while it was ultimately unsuccessful,<br />
it demonstrated how such vice permeated the courts and<br />
political institutions. According to Cicero, Gaius<br />
Scribonius Curio, a friend of Verres, announced to him<br />
after Hortensius’ election as consul: ‘I hereby inform you<br />
that today’s election means your acquittal’. 16 In the same<br />
period Quintus Metellus claimed: ‘I am consul; one of my<br />
brothers is governing Sicily; the other is going to preside<br />
over the extortion court; many steps have been taken to<br />
secure that no harm can happen to Verres’. 17 Fortunately<br />
neither of these men was correct, but it is notable that<br />
most of the interest surrounding the case was concerned<br />
with the various elections of consuls, judges and other<br />
influential positions, rather than the attorneys’ cases. This<br />
is representative of widespread acceptance of the prevalent<br />
corruption in the legal system.<br />
It is also significant that there were no public prosecutions<br />
in Rome under the Leges Duodecim Tabularum, 18 and this<br />
had a considerable impact on society’s view of political<br />
corruption. It was a time when ‘the standards of honesty<br />
prevailing among Roman governors were deplorably low’ 19<br />
and ‘the prizes of empire enriched and corrupted the<br />
senators and knights, who together exploited the<br />
provinces, and at the same time impoverished the<br />
common people of Rome and Italy’. 20 The fact that it was<br />
up to individuals or groups to prosecute was a sign of<br />
Rome’s laxity in dealing with crimes, particularly of a<br />
political nature. Public prosecutions and government<br />
15 Tracy, op. cit., pp. 24-5<br />
16 Taylor, op. cit., p. 108, cf. I.19<br />
17 Ibid., p. 108, cf. I. 27<br />
18 Lewis, op. cit., p. 15<br />
19 Levens, op. cit., p. xxiv<br />
20 Taylor, op. cit., p. 4<br />
anti-corruption organisations 21 in contemporary<br />
Australian society enable a co-ordinated and effective<br />
fight against political, legal and other forms of corruption.<br />
On the other hand, Rome’s total lack of any such laws or<br />
institutions made it often difficult to deal with these<br />
issues, especially since the result of the trial was<br />
determined by participants’ relationships with the judge<br />
and jury. Furthermore, if a prosecutor lost a case, he<br />
himself was open to being charged under Lex Remmia de<br />
calumnia, 22 a type of defamation or libel charge. It was a<br />
significant deterrent against prosecutions, and the threat<br />
was particularly pertinent since the jury was expected to<br />
favour the defendant. Therefore both the lack of public<br />
prosecution and the calumnia charge were part of a system<br />
which was inherently inclined to prevent justice being<br />
done through limiting the cases which went before the<br />
courts.<br />
Conversely, the effort to provide some sort of an incentive<br />
for men to bring criminals to justice, 23 through the fact<br />
that ‘ancient criminal law, both Greek and Roman, provided<br />
for the bestowal of rewards on the successful prosecutor, 24 still<br />
created problems. This was a system which was abused in<br />
Athens and Rome alike 25 as barristers sought to undertake<br />
as many cases as they could in an attempt to climb higher<br />
and higher up the cursus honorum through their successful<br />
prosecutions. This shows a blatant disregard for the value<br />
of justice itself. Instead, the process was commercialised,<br />
since monetary rewards were common, and politicised.<br />
These incentives for bringing a prosecution illustrate<br />
Rome’s indifference towards the political morality of its<br />
ruling class, and its tolerance of that class constantly<br />
seeking personal rewards, often against the good of<br />
the State.<br />
Cicero stood to gain such a great deal from the trial of<br />
Verres, that it does not seem at all unreasonable to suggest<br />
that he undertook the case, not for any particular<br />
21 Such as the NSW Independent Commission Against Corruption (ICAC) and<br />
the Federal Corruption and Crime Commission (CCC)<br />
22 Taylor, op. cit., p. 113<br />
23 Apart from the simple wish to right wrongs that have been suffered<br />
24 Taylor, op. cit., p. 112<br />
25 Ibid., p. 112<br />
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To what extent was Roman society concerned about the<br />
political morality of its ruling class? Discuss with reference<br />
to Gaius Verres. continued<br />
love of political morality or desire to see justice prevail,<br />
but simply for his own personal profit. Firstly, in 70BC,<br />
the year of the trial, Cicero was campaigning to be elected<br />
aedile, 26 and Taylor argues that ‘this was a crucial time<br />
in the career of Cicero, and it must be admitted that he<br />
would not have taken the case if he had not been<br />
convinced that it would further his career’. 27 This was his<br />
first speech as prosecutor, 28 and was a highly publicised<br />
and well-attended trial since it was held in August, the<br />
same time as both the elections and votive games put on<br />
by Pompey. 29 Having previously served as quaestor in the<br />
small Sicilian town of Lilybaeum, 30 Cicero was<br />
disappointed by his lack of recognition, 31 so the trial,<br />
building on his earlier success defending Roscius, put<br />
him firmly in the public eye, and this was reflected in<br />
his election as aedile. 32<br />
Yet Cicero had far more to gain than just an election as<br />
aedile: he would gain Verres’ praetorian rank in the senate<br />
if successful in his prosecution. 33 This was not merely to<br />
increase his prestige, although this was a significant part,<br />
since he was given the privilege of wearing the toga<br />
praetexta and joining the praetorii at public festivals. 34<br />
Furthermore, Cicero was also given considerable actual<br />
power by his promotion. When the consul presiding in<br />
the senate put forth a motion, he called firstly for men of<br />
consular rank, and next those of praetorian rank, and, due<br />
to lack of time, senators of lower rank rarely had a chance<br />
to speak. 35 This meant that after the trial Cicero gained<br />
great influence in the senate as his voice was far more<br />
prominent, and he was able to make the most of his<br />
oratory in that forum.<br />
26 Forsyth, F. 2003, Cicero: Defender of the Republic, Rosen Publishing Group,<br />
New York, p. 45<br />
27 Taylor, op. cit., p. 102<br />
28 Ibid., p. 102<br />
29 Taylor, op. cit., p. 109<br />
30 Clough, op. cit., p. 190<br />
31 Forsyth, op. cit., p. 44<br />
32 Taylor, op. cit., p. 108<br />
33 Taylor, op. cit., p. 113<br />
34 Ibid., p. 113<br />
35 Ibid., p. 113<br />
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Cicero’s third benefit from undertaking the case was that<br />
he supplanted Hortensius as the leader of the bar, ending<br />
the latter’s ‘dominatio regnumque iudiciorum’. 36 This<br />
further enhanced Cicero’s reputation, and made him the<br />
most sought-out barrister in Rome, continually<br />
approached by equites and senators alike to aid their<br />
defence or prosecution. 37 Furthermore, Hortensius himself<br />
recognised his decline, and when they later worked<br />
together on the same side, he conceded to Cicero the<br />
honour of delivering the peroratio, the crucial summary<br />
speech in a case. 38 All these benefits for Cicero helped him<br />
to become the only novus of his generation to be elected<br />
consul. 39 Therefore, it certainly seems as though Cicero<br />
used the trial of Verres simply as a means to an end, a way<br />
forward for him to gain greater fame and power. It<br />
appears evident that Cicero, like so many Romans, was<br />
not concerned so much with Verres’ actions and the<br />
ruinous ethos of political immorality. Rather, he was<br />
focused entirely on his own career: for him the case was<br />
not about justice being done, it was about ‘making a<br />
breach in the fortress of the nobility and preparing the<br />
way for the entrance of his unknown name in the august<br />
annals of Roman consuls’. 40<br />
The view is enhanced by the knowledge that Cicero<br />
himself took a bribe from Verres during the case. Verres’<br />
bribery did not merely go out to the jury, but also to<br />
Cicero, whose suspected acceptance was completely<br />
hypocritical of his apparently moral and honourable<br />
intentions. It was Verres himself who suggested that he<br />
should keep for himself the profits from his first year in<br />
office and use the next two, more lucrative years for<br />
bribing purposes in a trial, 41 and this is exactly what<br />
happened. Plutarch recounted that ‘Cicero, who set the<br />
fine at seventy-five myriads, lay under suspicion of being<br />
corrupted by bribery to lessen the sum. 42 Taylor wrote that<br />
36 I.38<br />
37 Taylor, op. cit., p. 116<br />
38 Ibid., p. 114<br />
39 Ibid., p. 118. ie. The only man of his generation whose father was not elected<br />
consul to be elected consul himself.<br />
40 Ibid., p. 118<br />
41 Levens, op. cit., p. xx<br />
42 Clough, op. cit., p. 191
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‘Cicero was awarded the role of accuser ... at this time<br />
Verres tried to bribe him, but Cicero resisted ... (but) in<br />
fixing the fine ... Cicero was bribed to make it low’. 43 It is<br />
a great irony that in an extortion court the prosecutor was<br />
successfully bribed, but such was the Romans’ lack of<br />
concern about corruption.<br />
Verres himself typified the rampant corruption of so many<br />
Romans in the ruling class. Cicero highlighted, among<br />
other wicked acts, how ‘in Sicilia sacra profanaque omnia<br />
et privatim et publice spoliarit’. 44 The repetition of the<br />
plosive sounds highlights his contempt, while the<br />
elaborate rhetoric emphasises the multitude of crimes in:<br />
‘tu quos servos arma capere et bellum facere in Sicilia<br />
voluisse cognoras et de consilii sententia iudicaras, hos ad<br />
supplicium iam more maiorum traditos ex media morte<br />
eripere ac liberare ausus es? ut, quam damnatis crucem<br />
servis fixeras, hanc indemnatis videlicet civibus Romanis<br />
reservares’. 45<br />
Cicero’s superfluity of superlatives throughout his<br />
speeches, and his seemingly endless lists of witnesses<br />
and evidence piles upon Verres an incredible wealth of<br />
accusations of wrongdoings over his three-year term.<br />
While an example was made of Verres, 46 the volume and<br />
the permanence of his corruption, in almost full view<br />
of the people 47 was typical in a society which had learnt<br />
to accept and put up with blatant corruption. Indeed<br />
Manius Aquilius, a praetor involved in very similar<br />
actions to Verres, extorted tens of thousands of sesterces<br />
(though not as much as the millions of sesterces Verres<br />
extorted), 48 but was acquitted by a jury. 49 Had almost any<br />
other orator prosecuted Verres, he probably would have<br />
had the same fate.<br />
43 Taylor, op. cit., pp. 110-11<br />
44 II.5.1<br />
45 II.5.12<br />
46 Although he did flee to Marseille and live in relative comfort there, once again<br />
showing the laxity of Roman laws in the face of corruption.<br />
47 According to Cicero in II.5.1<br />
48 Levens, op. cit., p. xxxv. Both figures include the monetary worth of extorted<br />
goods.<br />
49 II.5.3<br />
It is clear that Rome was a corrupt state, one in which<br />
the patricians ruled over the plebeians in a conspicuously<br />
unequal democracy. The rampant immorality of the<br />
politicians was accepted by their like-minded equals for it<br />
provided mutual advantages and benefited the upper-class<br />
as a whole; it was endured by the society as they had<br />
become accustomed to it and had not sufficient power<br />
to overcome such a deeply embedded ethos.<br />
Rupert Coy<br />
Year 12<br />
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Beau Mayer<br />
‘Ushi’<br />
Year 8<br />
87
LANGUAGES<br />
Above<br />
Max Maunsell<br />
‘The Cow’<br />
Year 8<br />
88
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Above<br />
Jordan Turnbull<br />
‘Primary <strong>School</strong>’<br />
Year 9<br />
89
LANGUAGES<br />
Above<br />
Derrick Fang<br />
‘Dragon’<br />
Year 8<br />
90
BENCHMARK<br />
Above<br />
Blake Bullwinkel<br />
‘Sakura and Mount Fuji’<br />
Year 8<br />
91
LANGUAGES<br />
Below<br />
Kim Gallagher<br />
‘The Dragonfly’<br />
Year 8<br />
92
BENCHMARK<br />
Above<br />
Monty McPherson<br />
‘Spring, Summer, Autumn, Winter’<br />
Year 10<br />
93
LANGUAGES<br />
Above<br />
Hugo Martyr<br />
‘<strong>School</strong>s’<br />
Year 9<br />
94
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HISTORY<br />
What role does memory play in the construction<br />
of history?<br />
Synopsis<br />
This major work investigates the role of memory in<br />
constructing historical evidence with the Holocaust as a<br />
prime example. Through changing social values regarding<br />
historical interpretation, the role of memory has evolved<br />
and consequently been more readily integrated into the<br />
historical construction. As such, this selective practice<br />
regarding memory-based evidence has lead to the creation<br />
of a publically acknowledged history known as ‘collective<br />
memory’. Oral testimonies, the product of this memory,<br />
have been utilised by Holocaust historians such as<br />
Deborah Lipstadt in order to support a particular view<br />
of this event.<br />
Collective memory, based on Holocaust survivors’<br />
testimonies, has subsequently been propagated and<br />
embellished in various media presentations, such as<br />
documentaries and TV programs and thereby ingrained<br />
into the cultural subconscious. These modern<br />
representations have then ‘set’ history for posterity.<br />
This, in turn, will influence the personal oral testimonies<br />
of the ‘living historians’ because memory is heavily<br />
impacted by the personal identity of its ‘rememberers,’<br />
and identity is further influenced by cultural beliefs.<br />
Thus the relationship between collective memory and<br />
the ‘living historian’ is cyclic and a desire to examine<br />
this tension formed the basis of the project from the start.<br />
This project argues that the impact of trauma upon<br />
memory must be acknowledged and draws examples from<br />
the Holocaust. The concept of Nachtraglichkeit is shown<br />
to be an extension of this concern as it involves the<br />
distancing of the individual from the associated memory.<br />
This detachment from particular events leaves areas open<br />
for interpretation that can be utilised to support a<br />
particular version of the past.<br />
The project also indicates how the problematic nature<br />
of memory has been used to support the two conflicting<br />
Holocaust interpretations: the Holocaust historians or the<br />
Holocaust revisionists. These arguments, presented within<br />
Richard Evans’ book Lying About Hitler, based on the<br />
Irving/Lipstadt libel case, demonstrate how each party<br />
has utilised the inherant flaws of memory for various<br />
purposes in support of its argument.<br />
The project draws the conclusion that it is through the<br />
highly subjective nature of memory that we recognise its<br />
culpability on history. However, historians remain heavily<br />
dependent on memory for evidence in supporting any<br />
given historical discourse and as such it has been utilised<br />
to construct a popular interpretation considered to be a<br />
‘true history’.<br />
Essay<br />
The construction of history is, by its nature, multi-faceted<br />
and is influenced by a combination of internal and<br />
external prejudices. Any given event can therefore be<br />
viewed from multiple perspectives, with each viewpoint<br />
containing its own truth, reality, lies or distortions, which<br />
become incorporated into memory. Recent historians, not<br />
surprisingly, given societal changes and developments in<br />
literacy, education, communication and accessibility, have<br />
come increasingly to use personal narratives and oral<br />
testimonies, the products of memory, as the foundation<br />
for historical argument and discourse. This is also due to<br />
the mounting pressure for additional verification from<br />
the general public of events that may be deemed to have<br />
shaped the collective psyche, most notably war and<br />
genocide. Nicola King (2000, p11) states that ‘memory<br />
can create the illusion of a momentary return to a lost<br />
past’. In this way a personal account of an historical event<br />
can be used as a tangible link to an intangible past.<br />
However, memory at the same time plays a significant role<br />
in the formation of one’s identity and is itself shaped,<br />
moulded and distorted by one’s psyche and experience as<br />
well as the society or community in which one lives, or<br />
has lived. Memory can also shape, and be shaped by, the<br />
changing moral and ethical values within which<br />
historians develop their work and will thereby influence<br />
the way in which they perceive, interpret or reconstruct an<br />
event. The Holocaust of the 1940s provides an example of<br />
this process.<br />
Memory can be divided into two distinct categories: an<br />
individual and personal memory, or a shared perception of<br />
an event known as collective memory. Collective memory<br />
is typically defined as the conglomeration of personal<br />
recollections that creates a sustainable group subconscious.<br />
This concept explored by Maurice Halbwach (1950) views<br />
memory as both a creator and product of a cultural<br />
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climate and as a result is embodied in a society’s morals<br />
and values. Wertsch states that collective memory ‘results<br />
from a productive tension between the media of memory:<br />
school textbooks, monuments, and films, and the human<br />
agents that create and use those media … [thus] collective<br />
memory is constantly shaped, negotiated and reshaped by<br />
the interactions of its ‘rememberers’ (Rester, n.d, p4).<br />
Memory’s influence in the construction of history is<br />
impacted strongly by social morals and values regarding<br />
historical interpretation. In recent decades there has been<br />
a shift away from traditional diplomatic, economic and<br />
political history toward innovative approaches,<br />
particularly social and cultural studies. This has arisen as<br />
a result of the escalating awareness of equality and human<br />
rights that became prevalent in the 1970s, 1980s and<br />
1990s. As a result it is in a society, which has become<br />
increasingly reflective, both socially and culturally, that<br />
memory has become essential in establishing the nature of<br />
significant events, such as the Holocaust or the Vietnam<br />
War. The recent role of memory in the construction of<br />
history has been challenged by postmodernist scholars in<br />
their belief that memory irrevocably destroys the<br />
authenticity of history. Tom Dixon describes the<br />
‘postmodern cultural historians’ view [as considering] bias<br />
unavoidable in whole or even in part’ (cited by McCallum,<br />
1996, p133). Dixon believes as a result ‘there is a growing<br />
willingness to arrange and edit facts in a way that<br />
supports the message of a particular historian’ (McCallum,<br />
1996, p139) primarily achieved through the selective use<br />
of memory as it provides a definitive view of an event.<br />
Postmodern scholars view historians as ‘not just [being]<br />
dispassionate chroniclers. By their selection, ordering,<br />
highlighting, attribution and analysis of facts they fashion<br />
a particular version of the past’ (The London Times,<br />
4/4/02, n.p). Therefore when Holocaust historians such<br />
as Deborah Lipstadt, select only oral testimonies from<br />
Jewish survivors, the evidence is highly subjective and<br />
supports the established historical view. However, the<br />
ideas presented by Postmodernist scholars support the<br />
Holocaust deniers’ argument. Jewish historian Peter<br />
Novick suggests that the American government<br />
experienced a post-war guilt as a consequence of their role<br />
as a spectator during the Holocaust and therefore their<br />
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‘support [in] the founding of Israel was an act of moral<br />
expiation’ (Russell, 2000). The survivors, aptly named<br />
‘living historians’ by a society that revered them, became<br />
crucial in providing evidence for Holocaust history. The<br />
oral testimonies provided as evidence formed a collective<br />
memory that influenced the greater society. History in<br />
this sense is, as Grobman and Sherman describe, the<br />
‘combined product of actual past events and the discovery<br />
and description of past events’ (2000, p8).<br />
It is in society that people acquire and sustain a collective<br />
conscious that will in turn influence a personal reflection.<br />
Individuals will ‘recall, recognise, and localise their<br />
memories’ (Halbwachs 1992, p38), and as a result the<br />
‘social memory causes an inertia in social structures …<br />
these interactions are at the base of identity creation and<br />
maintenance’ (Kalman, Page & Stevenson 2008, Slide 5).<br />
Through the creation of an identity, both personal and<br />
national, an event can find continuity and therefore<br />
commemoration. Collective memory is evident in the<br />
memorials that a government erects in commemoration<br />
of an event. These memorials present a specific perspective<br />
of an historical event that is supported by a government<br />
for various intentions. These monuments serve as a daily<br />
reminder of a country’s perspective and therefore the<br />
perspective is cemented into the national identity.<br />
Additionally, it is through these ‘publicly available<br />
com-memorative symbols, rituals, and representations …<br />
[that] the Shoah has been politicised, trivialised and<br />
commercialised’ (Junker, 2001, p2). The creation of a<br />
collective memory by a previous generation, indicated by<br />
the monuments erected, lead to a sustained perception of<br />
an historical event by the larger population. The<br />
Holocaust has become such an event through America’s<br />
construction of over one hundred monuments that Peter<br />
Novick describes as reflecting the rise of Zionism in<br />
America (Russell, 2000, n.p).<br />
Collective memory plays a fundamental role in<br />
influencing individual memory and thus enhances the<br />
subjectivity associated with oral testimonies. Collective<br />
memory ‘simplifies; sees events from a single, committed<br />
perspective … [reducing] events to mythic archetypes’<br />
(Novick 1999, p4) inevitably resulting in the loss of<br />
individual experience for one historical consciousness.
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The issue arises as indicated by Jeffrey K Olick (2007, n.p)<br />
that these collections provide the materials for the<br />
production of a singular memory and prod the individual<br />
into recalling particular events and forgetting others. In<br />
the creation of one perspective, the actual ‘truth’ becomes<br />
lost and is replaced with an artificial perception. This<br />
alternate version of the ‘truth’ is embedded into the<br />
following generation and therefore influences the current<br />
and future construction of history. The Holocaust is a<br />
preeminent example of the influences of collective<br />
memory on the construction of history through the<br />
growing reliance on personal testimonies from living<br />
historians. Arguably this perception has generated an<br />
image of the victimisation for the Jewish people, with a<br />
sense of hagiography in the portrayal of the survivors’<br />
experiences. Simon Wiesenthal describes the manipulative<br />
use of the Holocaust as ‘the Holocaust works every time’<br />
(Junker, 2001, p6). Peter Novick additionally claims that<br />
this collective memory has been used by the Jewish people<br />
as ‘a moral weapon … in the political fight for recognition,<br />
privileges and rights’ (Junker, 2001, p5) in the attempt to<br />
win the gold medal in the ‘Victimisation Olympics’. This<br />
collective memory has been established by the Jewish<br />
people as ‘marking the Holocaust as the climax of an<br />
irrational, eternal Gentile hatred of Jews [and this itself]<br />
exerts a pernicious influence on scholarship’ (2000, p1).<br />
Holocaust survivor and writer Primo Levi’s works based<br />
on ‘the warmth and humanity of his writing had made<br />
Levi a symbol to his readers of the triumph of reason over<br />
the barbarism of genocide’ (New York Times, 1987, n.p).<br />
Primo Levi was a major contributor to the collective<br />
memory in his writings on the year which he spent at<br />
Auschwitz. Levi focused his work on the strength of<br />
character and the will to survive, thereby empowering the<br />
apparent survival stance of the Jewish survivors through<br />
the utilisation of his personal experience. It is through the<br />
projected view of collective memory that the individual<br />
experiences omit and supplement details generating a<br />
falsified construction of history.<br />
The procedures deemed appropriate in the construction<br />
of history fluctuate with any given society. History in the<br />
first half of the twentieth century was written, as Leopold<br />
Von Ranke describes, ‘the way it happened’<br />
(Historiography: The Writing of History, n.d, n.p). Ranke<br />
emphasised the necessity of primary sources with ‘proven<br />
authenticity’ in recording historical events. This idea,<br />
entitled ‘Empiricism’ remained paramount within<br />
society over the early decades of the twentieth century.<br />
Nevertheless, the issue arises in specific cases where<br />
there is little to no physical evidence to draw upon.<br />
The reliability of memory in constructing history<br />
therefore has to be questioned. As Ann Curthoys and<br />
John Docker state, ‘where were the distinctions to be<br />
drawn between legitimate alternative views, ideologically<br />
driven [unconscious] distortion and outright lies and<br />
fabrications?’ (2006, p213).These historiographical issues<br />
associated with the Holocaust, have sanctioned the<br />
Revisionist historians, particularly Ernst Zendel and<br />
David Irving, to argue against the established perceptions<br />
of an event that resulted in the annihilation of six million<br />
Jews in Europe. During the Nuremburg Trials, that<br />
immediately followed the cessation of the Second World<br />
War, survivors’ testimonies and experiences were neglected<br />
in preference to physical evidence. Memory was seen to be<br />
an unimportant facet of the Holocaust particularly in<br />
determining the relevant punishments for crimes against<br />
humanity. This forced the Jews ‘after the war [to]<br />
practically hide themselves … remaining invisible in a<br />
culture of victors, war heroes and faith in progress, no-one<br />
was interested in their stories’ (Junker, 2001, p5).However<br />
this general, neglectful approach to the surviving Jewry<br />
of the Holocaust was addressed by David Boder, a<br />
Jewish-American academic who focused on recording and<br />
preserving oral testimonies and survivors’ accounts in the<br />
immediate post-World War II society. His work would be<br />
continued by Steven Spielberg years later, who by utilising<br />
the newest recording technology, would collect and record<br />
these personal narratives for the modern world.<br />
The transition from the predominant use of written<br />
sources as evident in the late 1940s, was heavily<br />
influenced by the accelerating rate of technology and<br />
visual media that in turn supported the Americanisation<br />
of the Holocaust in the 1960s and 1970s. Memory began<br />
to fill the ever present gaps in the Holocaust debate with<br />
oral testimonies becoming increasing vital to the creation<br />
and preservation of the Jewish victim dogma. As the<br />
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survivors began to reach retirement age, a heavier<br />
emphasis was placed on collecting and recording their<br />
memory before they had passed away and it was lost. This<br />
ideology supported the funding for Steven Spielburg’s<br />
‘The Shoah: The Last Days’ – a collation of oral<br />
testimonies from survivors. Spielberg, financed by a<br />
multitude of Jewish families, was instructed to create a<br />
documentary that in essence would establish a record for<br />
posterity on the atrocities of the Holocaust. Memory has<br />
slowly been developed as the global benchmark for<br />
evidence regarding the Holocaust, an event that lacked<br />
physical, primary evidence.<br />
The increase in technology in the 1980s allowed<br />
historians to begin to collect and record crucial pieces of<br />
evidence in new ways, thus generating a new sense of the<br />
collective memory. Oral testimonies and memory were<br />
traditionally used by ancient historians such as Herodotus,<br />
to record significant events of their time. Through<br />
inscribing practices, many survivors of these ancient<br />
events were questioned about their experiences and as a<br />
result the recordings we have of these events are similarly<br />
subjective. However, ‘technological advances [have<br />
permitted] increasingly electronically mediated<br />
viewpoints … [leading to] new generations, [feeding] on a<br />
diet of instantaneous information, [possessing] new<br />
expectations of how the past should be viewed’(Hoskins,<br />
2003, n.p). The new generation has adapted to the<br />
technological innovations at the time with a culture that<br />
feeds off the media for ‘factual’ information. Visual<br />
media in particular has become the benchmark in<br />
providing evidence and constructing history for the<br />
greater population. It is efficient in its ability to<br />
encapsulate seemingly non-subjective evidence and<br />
provide an argument to influence the mass population,<br />
contributing to the sense of collective memory. The 1978<br />
series on the Holocaust was an example of the newfound<br />
dependence on oral testimony and memory through<br />
television. Through the recording of Holocaust survivors<br />
and their experiences for future generations, personal<br />
narratives have undertaken the predominant role as<br />
evidence in all social institutions. Holocaust survivor Elie<br />
Wiesel condemned the documentary as a ‘trivialisation’ of<br />
the Holocaust and an insult to its survivors. Through the<br />
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power of increased technology, memory has been elevated<br />
to be considered accurate and truthful while neglecting<br />
the various historiographical issues and complications.<br />
Trauma has a profound impact on the reliability of oral<br />
testimonies and personal narratives. The emotional<br />
reaction to particular events and experiences can cause<br />
individuals to intentionally detach specific details, making<br />
the experience easier to process at an older age. Trauma<br />
centres itself on the ideology of ‘mourning’ which Freud<br />
describes as ‘the reaction to the loss of a loved person, or<br />
to the loss of some abstraction …’ (Freud, 1957, p244).<br />
The notion of revisiting a past experience is embodied in<br />
the concept of ‘Nachtraglichkeit,’ literally meaning<br />
‘afterwardness’. This idea is interpreted by psycho-analysts,<br />
Laplanche and Potalis, as ‘experiences, impressions and<br />
memory – traces may be revised at a later date to fit in<br />
with a new stage of development … endowed with not<br />
only a new meaning but also with physical effectiveness’<br />
(1973, p111–12).This is explored by Nicola King (2000) as<br />
she suggests that the living historians have presented their<br />
experiences for the specific purpose of defending the<br />
Jewish integrity of the Holocaust in today’s context.<br />
Memory has been fabricated and reproduced to appeal to<br />
the sense of humanity and by extension mould a pro-Israel<br />
view in the West. Trauma in the memory is additionally<br />
considered to result in complications in the view of the<br />
self. Memory is influenced by our perception of our own<br />
identity. However, traumatic experiences may result in as<br />
Dori Laub describes, ‘a split self’ … the inherit trauma<br />
has caused a ‘split’ between the self who experienced [the<br />
Holocaust] and the self who ‘survives’’ (King, 2000, p19).<br />
In this manner, the individual has separated themselves<br />
from the events in the attempt to make the event<br />
unattached to themselves. Experiences lead to the creation<br />
of identity and it is the self-perception of identity which<br />
influences memory. It is in this manner that we recognise<br />
the importance of memory in constructing historical<br />
evidence with the influence of trauma on it leading to<br />
flaws that are exploited by Holocaust revisionists.<br />
It should be recognised that the Holocaust revisionist<br />
argument is based on the subjectivity of memory and oral<br />
testimonies. Holocaust denier David Irving specifically<br />
targets the regurgitation of evidence by historians that
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form the collective memory. Memory has become the<br />
foundation of the Holocaust historians’ arguments,<br />
particularly seen in the work of Deborah Lipstadt. Irving<br />
states his belief that all historians have relied on an<br />
‘inter-historian incest’ (1977, p10) when researching the<br />
various Holocaust resources available. In the light of so<br />
few resources, Irving’s finds provide a new and equally<br />
justifiable argument on the Holocaust. Richard Evans in<br />
his appraisal of the 1996 Irving – Lipstadt/Penguin case<br />
over libel states that Irving claims, ‘each successive<br />
biographer of Hitler has repeated or engrossed the legends<br />
created by his predecessors … they had never bothered to<br />
visit the surviving relatives of leading Nazis’ (Evans, 2001,<br />
p16). Irving’s claim of the biased nature in the selection of<br />
oral testimonies indicates the primary focus on only<br />
interviewing surviving Jews, thus supporting the already<br />
widely recognised view of anti-Nazi stance in Western<br />
society. This therefore underlines that memory itself has<br />
been selected and tailored to meet the necessary<br />
arguments of the historians presenting it, with various<br />
other elements of these sources being omitted to sustain a<br />
particular view. The case was viewed by many to be in the<br />
‘protection’ of history as Irving challenged the established<br />
view of the Holocaust, which was regarded as the only<br />
‘true’ history.<br />
John Hope Franklin theorises that ‘the writing of history<br />
reflects the interest, predilections, and even prejudices of a<br />
given generation’ (Historiography: The Writing of History).<br />
Consequently, memory due to its fickle nature is<br />
continually adapting to the multiplicity of factors that<br />
influence it. As a consequence the significant role memory<br />
plays in the construction of any historical event can be<br />
regarded as highly subjective. Carl Becker amply describes<br />
the definition of history as ‘the memory of things said and<br />
done’ (Historiography: The Writing of History), rather than<br />
actual historical truth. This oral-based history has been<br />
propagated as historical truth and thereby assumed within<br />
popular culture. As society has developed socially and<br />
culturally, memory’s role has become increasingly<br />
ingrained into this historical process as a key piece of<br />
evidence on an event such as the Holocaust. Technology<br />
and the influence of visual media are often exploited when<br />
creating a collective memory through accounts of<br />
survivors. However due to memory’s personal nature, oral<br />
testimonies such as those associated with the Holocaust<br />
have been condemned as unreliable. Memory is generally<br />
exposed to the collective memory of society and personal<br />
preoccupations and therefore is altered. It is apparent<br />
however, that regardless of the subjectivity surrounding<br />
the reliability of memory, that oral testimony and<br />
personal narrative have played a pivotal role in defining<br />
the perception of historical truth and thereby have created<br />
the popular interpretation of a ‘true’ history.<br />
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Year 12 History Extension Major Work<br />
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What motivated Julius Caesar when he crossed<br />
the Rubicon, thus starting the Civil War?<br />
Synopsis<br />
This essay addresses the question: ‘What motivated<br />
Julius Caesar when he crossed the Rubicon, thus starting<br />
the Civil War?’ This question developed following an<br />
in-depth examination of Caesar’s life where patterns of<br />
behaviour indicated consistent motivation for reform and<br />
ambition. However in the case of the Rubicon, his<br />
motivation was somewhat ambivalent.<br />
The essay begins with an examination of Caesar’s life<br />
before the Rubicon and by using Caesar’s contemporaries<br />
and modern historians it is found that reform and<br />
ambition were key motivators. The essay presents an<br />
analysis of Julius Caesar’s The Civil Wars. In this text<br />
Caesar does not overtly reveal his personal ambition,<br />
focusing instead on his reforms and defending the rights<br />
of the Tribunes. The Civil Wars is then compared with<br />
texts written by Caesar’s contemporaries, who argue that<br />
he used reform as an excuse to start the war. Modern<br />
historians are examined in order to discover a more<br />
objective view of the issue. It is found that they focus<br />
upon the conspiracies of Caesar’s enemies and the<br />
influence this had upon the decision Caesar made at<br />
the Rubicon.<br />
The essay then analyses Caesar’s actions after the Rubicon.<br />
After reviewing Caesar’s contemporaries and modern<br />
historians, it is found that whilst he implemented a<br />
number of key reforms there were issues concerning his<br />
desire for a war in Parthia and his aspiration for kingship.<br />
The essay draws upon the contemporary authors such as<br />
Plutarch, Suetonius and Appian. Plutarch in particular<br />
strongly puts forward the view that Caesar used reform as<br />
a tool to begin the Civil War. The following modern<br />
historians were the most useful in informing this essay:<br />
Philip Freeman, Theodor Mommsen, and Michael Parenti<br />
present the case that Caesar was driven by reform; Adrian<br />
Goldsworthy, Ramon L Jiménez, Ronald Syme, Matthias<br />
Gelzer and Howard Hayes Scullard predominantly argue<br />
that he was driven by ambition.<br />
The conclusion of the essay is that while Caesar was<br />
motivated by both ambition and reform when he crossed<br />
the Rubicon, the desire for reform was his primary<br />
motivator.<br />
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Essay<br />
In 49 BC Julius Caesar knew that by crossing the Rubicon<br />
he was breaking Roman law which forbade a general<br />
leading an army into provincial Italy. His decision would<br />
eventually lead to the collapse of the Roman Republic and<br />
the rise of the Roman emperors. The facts, importance<br />
and repercussions have been studied by historians, past<br />
and contemporary. However, what is in contention<br />
amongst historians is what was driving Caesar: was it his<br />
ambition for power, reputation and glory or was it his<br />
belief in reform? The polarities between these two schools<br />
of thought are reflected in the accounts of Caesar and his<br />
contemporaries. The ambiguity in regards to Caesar’s<br />
motivation has continued for the past two thousand years<br />
and makes it impossible for there to be agreement among<br />
modern historians. However, an analysis of how historians<br />
examine Caesar’s life shows that the answer is reform.<br />
Caesar’s life before 49 BC must be examined to find<br />
evidence for discerning his motivations when he crossed<br />
the Rubicon. If Caesar was a reformer he follows other<br />
reformers of the period, such as the Gracchi brothers and<br />
Sulla. Caesar was born in 100 BC into the illustrious Julii<br />
clan who claimed relation to Aeneas of Troy and his<br />
mother, the goddess Venus. As with all Patrician families<br />
ambition was inbuilt into the men of the family and this<br />
was emphasised for Caesar when at sixteen, he became<br />
head of his household following the death of his father.<br />
Caesar was, for a time, in hiding from Sulla because of his<br />
refusal to marry his daughter and was later known for his<br />
womanising. He was involved in a number of military<br />
actions, won the Citizens Crown for bravery and rose<br />
through the ranks of the Senate. He proved his great<br />
oratory skills and was involved with the Populares’ cause<br />
which sought to bring reform to Rome. Caesar brought<br />
about the first Triumvirate with Pompey and Crassus to<br />
gain his first Consulship, advancing his political career<br />
and implementing a number of reforms. His time as<br />
Consul saw him become enemies with the Optimates who<br />
disliked the attacks he made on their power. He served as<br />
the Governor of Transalpine Gaul and started a ten-year<br />
campaign into Gaul which resulted in it being conquered<br />
and Caesar becoming a hero of Rome. This indicates that
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throughout Caesar’s life both reform and ambition played<br />
a role.<br />
Every aspect of Caesar’s life has been analysed by<br />
historians in an attempt to understand what motivated his<br />
actions. Freeman argues that given Caesar grew up in the<br />
Subura, a poorer area of Rome, he had a greater<br />
understanding of the plebeians (Freeman, 2008). Parenti<br />
points out that Caesar showed morality over ambition<br />
when he refused Sulla’s offer to marry his daughter and be<br />
elevated into the dictator’s circle (Parenti, 2003).<br />
Goldsworthy suggests that, ‘It is even possible to see<br />
Caesar’s womanising as an extension of political<br />
competition, sleeping with other Senators’ wives to prove<br />
that he was the better man in the bedroom as well as the<br />
forum’ (Goldsworthy, 2007, p105). Plutarch and<br />
Suetonius make references to an event when Caesar<br />
viewed a statue of Alexander the Great and became visibly<br />
distressed (1983, 1989). According to Plutarch, Caesar<br />
then said in regards to Alexander, ‘Do you think I have<br />
not just cause to weep, when I consider that Alexander at<br />
my age had conquered so many nations, and I have all this<br />
time done nothing that is memorable’? (Plutarch, 1983,<br />
p255). This event in Caesar’s life gives the impression that<br />
Caesar was desperate for glory. Mommsen argues that<br />
Caesar was the leader of the Popularis faction (Mommsen,<br />
1854). Scullard writes that the triumvirate was a product<br />
of ambition for Consulship and power, ‘Three men,<br />
backed by armed force, by the urban populace and by<br />
many of the Equites, imposed their will on the State and<br />
destroyed the power of the Senate … The State and<br />
constitution were now at the mercy of dynasts, principes,<br />
who strove for potentia and dignitas’ (Scullard, 1970,<br />
p118). However, Jiménez argues that Caesar needed the<br />
triumvirate as, ‘The hidebound Senate, headed by its<br />
Consuls elected by the nobility, had always been the<br />
graveyard of reform’ (Jiménez, 2000, p47). Parenti argues<br />
that Caesar’s reforms prove that he was focused on<br />
bringing down the Optimate oligarchy (Parenti, 2003). In<br />
regards to the Gallic Wars, Dio claims that some of the<br />
soldiers complained that the war against Ariovistus had<br />
not been authorised by the Senate, so that they were<br />
risking their lives purely because of Caesar’s personal<br />
ambition (Goldsworthy, 2007).<br />
The first source available on the crossing of the Rubicon is<br />
Caesar himself in The Civil Wars. In this account, the<br />
Civil War was unavoidable because of the actions of his<br />
enemies in Rome who were conspiring against him: ‘…<br />
enemies were assembled in the Senate. Their words and<br />
their numbers frightened the less resolute and emboldened<br />
the hesitant, but robbed the majority of the power of free<br />
decision’ (Caesar, 1966, p4). Caesar argues that his<br />
enemies were preparing for war, ‘The remaining business<br />
was immediately brought before the Senate: to institute<br />
recruitment in the whole of Italy, to send Faustus Sulla<br />
urgently to Mauretania, and to give money from the<br />
treasury to Pompey’ (Caesar, 1966, p6). He mentions how<br />
he wished to avoid war: ‘… (Caesar) was awaiting a reply<br />
to his lenient demands, in the hope that, with some sense<br />
of equity, a peaceable conclusion might be reached’<br />
(Caesar, 1966, p11). He was forced, ‘To assert the freedom<br />
of himself and the Roman people who had been oppressed<br />
by a small fraction’ (Optimates) (Caesar, 1966, p35)<br />
which was shown by ‘… the tribunician veto was being<br />
censured and suppressed by force’ (Caesar, 1966, p7).<br />
Caesar therefore viewed the crossing of the Rubicon as<br />
something that was unavoidable and the right action<br />
to take.<br />
This view was disputed by many of Caesar’s<br />
contemporaries who saw Caesar’s motives as<br />
predominantly about his own personal ambition. Plutarch<br />
around 90 AD argues against Caesar saying that he used<br />
reform as a tool for his ambitious aims. Plutarch writes in<br />
regard to the dismissal of the Tribunes, ‘… insulted<br />
Antony and Curio and drove them out of the Senate in<br />
disgrace. So of his own accord gave Caesar the best<br />
possible excuse for taking action’ (Plutarch, 1983, p 275).<br />
Plutarch focused on ambition by comparing Caesar to the<br />
highly ambitious Alexander the Great, as he wished to<br />
make the point that Greeks and Romans had more in<br />
common than they liked to admit (Plutarch, 1983). This<br />
idea of reform was continued by Suetonius, who wrote in<br />
the first century while in charge of the imperial archives<br />
under the Emperor Hadrian, ‘Force was, in effect used<br />
and the Tribunes fled towards Cisalpine Gaul: which<br />
became Caesar’s pretext for launching the Civil War’<br />
(Suetonius,1989, p26). Lucan, who wrote in the first<br />
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century, suggests that Caesar could not accept Pompey as<br />
an equal, as he had to be the first man of Rome and so felt<br />
compelled to go to war with him (Goldsworthy, 2007).<br />
The only near contemporary of Caesar who does not put<br />
all the blame on Caesar is Appian, who argues both were<br />
evenly at fault. He wrote during the reign of Antonius<br />
Piso in the second century AD that the war had now<br />
begun on both sides. Appian believed that Caesar was<br />
driven by ambition when he stated, ‘In pursuit of his<br />
ambition he was prodigal beyond his means’ (Appian,<br />
1996, p69), but this was not referring specifically to the<br />
Rubicon. The fact that these historians wrote hundreds<br />
of years after the event, questions the reliability of their<br />
accounts.<br />
Over the last two hundred years historians have been<br />
similarly divided in their views on what motivated Caesar<br />
when he crossed the Rubicon, but they recognised the<br />
need for reform in the Roman government. All of the<br />
historians referred to are reliable in that they proffer a very<br />
substantive basis to their views. They extensively reference<br />
ancient and modern sources and all of their views are<br />
substantiated by historical fact. All (including the Nobel<br />
Prize Winner, Theodore Mommsen) explore the various<br />
views on the motivations of Caesar at the Rubicon.<br />
Ramon L Jiménez, who has written extensively on Ancient<br />
Rome, makes reference to a number of events which<br />
support the view that Caesar was being conspired against<br />
by those in Rome by making reference to how ninety<br />
percent of Senators on 1 December agreed to Caesar’s<br />
disbarment proposal but it was blocked by twenty-two<br />
Optimate Senators who manipulated the majority of the<br />
Senate (Jiménez, 2000). Jiménez also states, ‘Although the<br />
Senate’s vote was not a decree, Marcellus was on dubious<br />
legal ground. Nevertheless, Pompey, so long accustomed<br />
to responding to such calls to arms, began recruiting more<br />
troops and preparing for war’ (Jiménez, 2000, p60),<br />
indicating their desire for war. Theodor Mommsen<br />
expresses the view that Caesar was the heroic reformer.<br />
Mommsen was one of the founders of the liberal Deutsche<br />
Fortschrittspartei (German Progressive Party) in 1861.<br />
He compared the Optimates of Caesar’s time with the<br />
Prussian Junkers of his own period (Mommsen, 1865).<br />
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Howard Hayes Scullard argues that there were tyrants on<br />
both sides, ‘The hands of none of the leaders were spotless:<br />
behind them all gleamed the corrupting influence of<br />
power. No real principles were at stake. That was the<br />
tragedy. It was a struggle for personal power, prestige and<br />
honour, without regard for the libertas of others’ (Scullard,<br />
1970, p143). Scullard and Ronald Syme write that Caesar<br />
did not want the war as it showed his failing as a politician<br />
and Pompey and the people of Rome did not desire the<br />
war either, but the Optimates did (1970, 1974). Adrian<br />
Goldsworthy suggests that ‘Caesar had not fought the<br />
civil war to reform the Republic’ (Goldsworthy, 2007,<br />
p459) but that Caesar recognised the problems that the<br />
Republic Government had, ‘The Republic had become<br />
dominated by a faction who ignored the normal rule of<br />
law and particularly refused to acknowledge the<br />
traditional powers and rights of the tribunate’<br />
(Goldsworthy, 200, p459). Michael Parenti, a Marxist<br />
historian who thinks the Optimates were to blame, writes<br />
in regards to the dismissal of the tribunes, ‘They<br />
(Optimates) had used armed force to abrogate the power<br />
of the people’s tribunes. They had passed a harsh<br />
ultimatum that normally was reserved for suppressing<br />
mutiny or violence – for which there had been neither’<br />
(Parenti, 2003, p126). Parenti reflects the Marxist<br />
dialectic of the continuous class war. Philip Freeman<br />
shares a similar view that the responsibility for the war<br />
lay with the Optimates who wanted to bring down the<br />
reformist Caesar, ‘On the other hand, they (moderates<br />
of the Senate) saw the Optimates as reactionaries whose<br />
unreasonable devotion to the status quo was pushing<br />
Caesar and the Populares movement into open<br />
rebellion’(Freeman, 2008, p234).<br />
It is all very well that Caesar claimed to be fighting for<br />
reform, with the breaking point being the removal of the<br />
tribunes, but the following actions need to be analysed to<br />
understand if he truly was fighting for the reasons he<br />
publically announced. After Caesar advanced past the<br />
Rubicon he quickly took over Italy, sparing many of his<br />
enemies as he proceeded. He was successful in his wars<br />
against Pompey in Greece, Cato in Africa and Pompey’s<br />
sons in Spain ending in 45 BC. Caesar then carried out a
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large number of reforms before he was assassinated on<br />
15 March 44 BC.<br />
Caesar wrote in regard to the clemency of his campaign,<br />
‘Let us see if in this way we can willingly win the support<br />
of all and gain a permanent victory … This is a new way<br />
of conquest; we grow strong through pity and generosity’<br />
(Caesar, 1966, p9). This implies that Caesar wanted to<br />
bring about reforms in his new government that would be<br />
long lasting. The effect that Caesar’s clemency had upon<br />
Romans is best shown by Velleius Paterculus. Writing in<br />
the early first century AD he describes how it went<br />
beyond comprehension when Caesar pardoned his<br />
enemies. Goldsworthy argues that his clemency was not<br />
about bringing about lasting reforms but, ‘formed a<br />
central part of Caesar’s propaganda campaign’<br />
(Goldsworthy, 2007, p473). However Scullard makes<br />
reference to how even during the civil war Caesar still<br />
managed to carry out a number of reforms (1970).<br />
This evidence indicates that Caesar did indeed wish to<br />
reform Rome.<br />
Gelzer (1969), Freeman (2008), Goldsworthy (2007),<br />
Scullard (1970) and Suetonius (1989) all make reference<br />
to the numerous reforms that Caesar brought to Rome<br />
during the period in which he was Dictator, such as the<br />
reforms to the grain dole, the banning of luxury items and<br />
the harsher penalties for patricians and equestrians who<br />
committed murder. Gelzer suggests that ‘Caesar was<br />
unlike other Roman statesmen in that his political activity<br />
was not bounded by the city state, but by the Empire’<br />
(Gelzer, 1969, 273), shown by his introduction of new<br />
colonies which Goldsworthy believes were much needed<br />
(Goldsworthy, 2007). Syme reported that Caesar had no<br />
desire to reform but found that with the death of so many<br />
Senators he had to rebuild the crumbling Roman<br />
government through reform (Syme, 1974). Jiménez makes<br />
the point that most of these reforms would not aggravate<br />
the Optimates as they did not increase the democracy of<br />
Rome (Jiménez, 2000). Parenti disagrees with this point<br />
saying, ‘Caesar’s concern was not to lord over the common<br />
people but to outdo a powerfully entrenched aristocratic<br />
oligarchy’ (Parenti, 2003, p164), but he admits that<br />
‘Caesar never intended to level the rich and the poor but<br />
he certainly wanted to roll back some of the worst class<br />
abuses perpetrated by the wealthy’ (Parenti, 2003, p164).<br />
This evidence indicates that Caesar brought in the<br />
reforms he promised, thus making him the reformer<br />
he claimed to be.<br />
Caesar’s last actions are also important in determining<br />
what motivated him. Gelzer suggests Caesar knew he<br />
could not manage the affairs of a great empire on his own,<br />
so he took steps to increase the number in the Senate to<br />
almost one thousand members (Gelzer, 1969). Stephen<br />
Dando-Collins argues, ‘In fact, Caesar was merely filling<br />
the senate with men beholden to him for their elevation<br />
and who would outnumber the aristocrats who sat in the<br />
senate’ (Stephen Dando-Collins, 2010, p32). Scullard<br />
proposes that Caesar merely did it because the Senate was<br />
not large enough for the empire and needed to be<br />
replenished before he began his campaign into Parthia<br />
(Scullard, 1970). Gelzer (1969) and Philip Freeman<br />
advocate that ‘… the greatest reason for an eastern<br />
campaign was Caesar’s unquenchable ambition … Caesar<br />
now in his mid-fifties, still dreamed of conquering new<br />
worlds’ ( Freeman,2008, p384). This evidence indicates<br />
Caesar clearly had ambition for further military glory at<br />
the expense of carrying out his reforms personally.<br />
Caesar’s absolute power was seen as a threat to the<br />
Republic. Scullard puts forward the view that ‘Caesar had<br />
acquired autocratic power, but whether he intended to use<br />
this authority to overthrow the Republic and become king<br />
remains uncertain’ (Scullard, 1970, p155). Plutarch<br />
disagrees with this view writing that Caesar’s desire to be<br />
king was the reason that he became hated not only by the<br />
aristocracy but also by the people. Plutarch writes, ‘This<br />
was indeed a tyranny avowed, since his power now was<br />
not only absolute, but perpetual too’ (Plutarch, 1983,<br />
p296). Plutarch gives the example of when, ‘contrary to all<br />
custom, Caesar remained seated like a king while the most<br />
respected body in ancient Rome stood and addressed him’<br />
(Plutarch, 1983, p300), to prove that Caesar thought too<br />
highly of himself. Suetonius said that Caesar ‘took other<br />
honours which, as a mere mortal, he certainly should have<br />
refused’ (Suetonius, 1989, p46). Jiménez writes, ‘By now<br />
it had become clear, if it had not been clear before …<br />
Caesar had no intention of restoring the Republican<br />
institutions that he had claimed to be defending five<br />
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years before at the Rubicon’ (Jiménez, 2000, p230).<br />
However, as Appian makes clear that in Caesar’s will ‘to<br />
the people were bequeathed his gardens for public use and<br />
also seventy-five denarii to every adult male Roman’<br />
(Appian, 1996, p146), supporting the idea he did care for<br />
the people. This evidence suggests that Caesar may have<br />
been corrupted by power and turned away the reform he<br />
claimed to be defending.<br />
In conclusion, Caesar was clearly motivated by reform<br />
when he crossed the Rubicon, starting the Civil War. It is<br />
true that Caesar was an ambitious man and he exhibited<br />
this ambition throughout his life. Many of the important<br />
choices that Caesar made were borne out of his great<br />
desire for power, reputation and glory. However, in the<br />
case of the Rubicon, Caesar found himself in a war he did<br />
not want but fought it for the greater good of Rome.<br />
Caesar was forced to act as a result of the corrupt acts of<br />
the Optimate Senators, who made the war unavoidable.<br />
As Caesar said, ‘Still I am prepared to resort to anything,<br />
to submit to anything, for the sake of the Commonwealth’<br />
(Caesar, 1966, p 17).<br />
Jack McDonogh<br />
Year 12 History Extension Major Work<br />
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