Guri and Gura's Three Stories

Perhaps the difficulty in making the same rhythm in English prompted the translators to
make new sentences. It was hard for me to back translate the English in this case.
“Fellas” is a word spoken in casual tones. Since the translators used “fellas” instead of
“mice” I too changed the reference to this casual style. However, the important point in
translating Guri and Gura is to maintain the good rhythms of the sentences so instead of
being literal, I attempted to match the rhythm.
Example # 2
Now I will consider the following lines from rhythm:
Original: 「とりかな」
「かぜかな」(p.7)
Howlett’s Tranlation: “Mast have been a bird!” say Guri.
“Maybe it was the wind!” say Gura. (p.7)
My Translation: 「とり だね!」とぐり。
「たぶん かぜ だと おもうな」とぐら。
First of all, I translated this passage close on purpose; please compare the original lines
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