e-asTTle writing generic exemplars

Prompt 19:Exemplar 1:The day things started disappearingMy iPodELEMENTIdeas R1–R6 R3Structure and language R1–R6 R3Organisation R1–R7 R3Vocabulary R1–R6 R3Sentence structure R1–R6 R3Punctuation R1–R7 R3Spelling R1–R6 R3RUBRIC RUBRICCOMMENTS COMMENTS EO1901RANGE CATEGORYThere is a main storyline with some development. The ideasdo not have the complexity required to move to category R4.Opening sentences give a clear orientation – when, what andwhere. Language features are mostly appropriate: use ofdialogue, past tense (though not maintained through text),nouns related to the event (beglar [burglar], Police, bag);linking words to show sequence of events (Later that day).Ideas are sequenced to show the order of events, butparagraphs are not used. Tense across the text isinconsistent, moving randomly between past and present.This interrupts the flow.Uses a range of everyday words and phrases, with a smallnumber of precise words and phrases to add interest anddetail: ‘at 5:25 pm my $100 doler notes disappeared’.Errors in verb tense and word form cause problems withsome sentences in the first part of the text (e.g., thesentence beginning ‘Whill I was going to buy …’. The secondhalf of the text contains many short, correct sentences withsome variation in length (I skremnd) and type (e.g., use ofdirect speech).Some sentences in the first part of the text are correctlypunctuated with capital letters and full stops. Sentencepunctuation is missing in the second part of the text. Noother punctuation attempted. Some random use of capitalletters throughout the text.A range of high-frequency words is correct. Attempts atother words demonstrate use of phoneme–graphemerelationships (miss plast [misplaced], skremnd [screamed],posabol [possible]).«=jáåáëíêó=çÑ=bÇìÅ~íáçå=OMNOm~ÖÉ=NU===