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\\'ri<strong>ti</strong>ng rcfercnce (Paper 2)<br />
Essay<br />
Task<br />
You have had a class discussion on what people do in<br />
their free <strong>ti</strong>me. Your teacher has now asked you to<br />
write an essay, giving your opinions on the following<br />
statement:<br />
Shopping has little value as a leisure ac<strong>ti</strong>vity.<br />
Write your essay.<br />
Sample answers<br />
A<br />
De.s shopping have. /itt/e. vqtue. 4s q te.isvFe. aclivifi<br />
1 +hir:,R nesl- p.op/e, ar^e. re.a//y Reeh oh sh-,pFing<br />
&t+ is it re.a/r\1 v*.fv/<br />
For exqr^ple., if twe atsR s+vlen+s wAaf i'ley'ne goiag<br />
lo lo in a 6ig c-ifi, |he aswe.rs +re. alatos+ ahways<br />
'shoppingt, 4n/ fley /on'i +hinR a&otrf going to<br />
upsev.^s anl sght-see.ittg. /i,osi- |ovrisls go shopf;rtg<br />
so.ae<strong>ti</strong>.^e insleal of lo ee. lle fdtdts plqees a4/<br />
so *Aey loh'i le.qr4 a$ov+ ptaee.s tley visil.<br />
I'loweven,<br />
Fople who e-t1ioy shoppittg /iRe eve.ry st4ge.<br />
a6ov| sh.,pfing, froa winlow do2piet l.ryitp<br />
c-lo/hzs oh, +hihRitlg if |hey s,/lc,t/H by or t1o+, to<br />
6"yiry. 11e. finat st49e. is to k sq<strong>ti</strong>sfie.l wil.h eeiag<br />
whai they have bughl in the;. hovse or wearing it<br />
ih fron+ of t)*.in ainor like a fasAion sAow.<br />
1\is aelivity is pnove.l io 6e d eoaplele. leigtre.<br />
ae<strong>ti</strong>vill. Ia/ee/, 7 neql 4h qF<strong>ti</strong>ele. in a newspafr-.n<br />
c-a//e/ t Shopping is a .w1y +o ne.lqx'. Y{e shon/l 4// vse<br />
this niee Fe./qxalioh 4h/ ,p+ fee./ gvilty. Dohtt yov<br />
thihR so<br />
B<br />
I believe thaf shopping can be one of ttre<br />
importanf fhings people do, liLe eatng and<br />
sleeping, and for .sorne shopping is t#tc chance<br />
fo do their favourH<br />
meefing friends. re fhings like dalking and<br />
On the one hand, I think- that i.5 true thaf<br />
shopping ha.s no value in sare lifestSles. peoVle<br />
think of skopping ontg as a chance 1o ao<br />
y:y<br />
rhe3 Dant, and rten ir is an e3cdpe<br />
from doing fhings the3 should do. f mean<br />
people go shopping instead of do aocV_.<br />
Hotrever, o-the(3 think_ of if a.5 a chance to<br />
[.n: i"#;:r _.Llpff: l-" *^"<br />
d':cuss eve(3 da,3 problems - for example, if<br />
3ou have gof some problems, in that shopping<br />
<strong>ti</strong>me 3ou mighf listen +o oll_te(s problems and<br />
fhinL that uJoo(3 a:ce nothing compa.ed to<br />
lleics. ff can make<br />
aocv- vcessore and ="" i::"[il ";:rX<br />
oklo krave a hard 1ob and lifesnlle.<br />
In conclusion, it's tcur<br />
*ft. varue, u,r p"op"'#l*llhi.'.ln t*<br />
means that sknpping (,ill be priceless fo( some.<br />
mffi;<br />
Comments<br />
These answers are both Band 4, for different reasons.<br />
A This has clear organisa<strong>ti</strong>on. with paragraphs giving B This answers the ques<strong>ti</strong>on clearly and uses a wide<br />
points for and against the statement. However, the<br />
range of vocabulary and some good expressions (e.g.<br />
first sentence just repeats the task. There are some think that yours are nothing compared to theirs).<br />
good expressions (e.9. if we ask ... the answers are However, there are gramma<strong>ti</strong>cal mistakes (e.g.<br />
almost always'shopping') but also some gramma<strong>ti</strong>cal instead of do work). The style is appropriate. The<br />
mistakes (e.g.go shopping some<strong>ti</strong>me instead of to conclusion clearly returns to the ques<strong>ti</strong>on and gives a<br />
see). There is quite a good range of topic-related nice summary of the writer's opinion. lt has a posi<strong>ti</strong>ve<br />
vocabulary, but the style is too informal in places (e.g. effect on the reader.<br />
Don't you think so).lt has a posr<strong>ti</strong>ve effect on the<br />
reader.