SESSION ONE - JMap

Anchor Paper – Part A—Level 6 – A
Anchor Level 6 – A
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Establishes a controlling idea that reveals an in-depth analysis of both texts, stating that certain
significant places can stir up bittersweet emotions and that memories of such places evoke
feelings of both pain and pleasure. The response makes insightful connections between the
controlling idea and the ideas in Passage I (By the conclusion of the recollection, the reader
recognizes both the pain … and the pleasure … these memories trigger for the narrator) and
Passage II (For the narrator, the pleasure of Blithbury was the appreciation for beauty it
instilled in him; the pain of Blithbury was its impermanence).
Develops ideas clearly and fully, making effective use of a wide range of relevant and specific
evidence from Passage I (College afforded the narrator the daring opportunity to transition
from family farm to city life and He realizes much has changed, but he is accepting of it) and
from Passage II (the narrator shares his fond recollections and he returns us abruptly to the
present, when he reveals that the house has been destroyed). The response uses irony in
Passage I to show the narrator’s attitude toward change and flashback and sensory imagery in
Passage II to show the details of the house which provided comfort to the narrator.
Maintains the focus established by the controlling idea on the emotional impact of childhood
locations. The response exhibits a logical and coherent structure, moving from the initial
emotional reaction of each narrator (initial feelings of discontent and Just a view of the house
… gave him a feeling of security and well-being) to their later reactions (He seems eager to
make his own changes and The last line of Passage II is sadly nostalgic). Appropriate devices
and transitions are skillfully used (Usually, Moreover, Just when).
Is stylistically sophisticated, using language that is precise and engaging (paint word pictures,
shaped by the limitations, lured the reader), with a notable sense of voice and awareness of
audience and purpose. The response varies structure and length of sentences to enhance
meaning (Returning to a place of emotional significance and finding it gone is difficult).
Demonstrates control of the conventions with essentially no errors, even with sophisticated
language.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 6 in all qualities.
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