developing_writing

elative pronoun. Rewrite the paragraph and substitute that for which
or who.
What is the worst thing which ever happened to you? The worst thing
which ever happened to me was this. When I was a little girl, we had an
old icebox which we kept in back of the house. It belonged to the people
who had lived there before us. It was small, and it had a door which
closed tight. There was a shelf which had held large pieces of ice. The
shelf was always empty, for nobody used the icebox any more. The shelf
made a little seat which was very comfortable. I liked to sit there. It was a
habit which almost cost me my life. One day I was sitting in the icebox,
and my brother closed the door. There was nobody who could let me
out. Soon the air which was in the icebox was almost gone. I screamed
and made noise until my mother opened the door. It was an experience
which I will never forget. Now I have a great fear of closed places, and I
always will.
VII. !ontrolled !omposition Organizing ideas
The sentences below can be arranged into two paragraphs describing
how people can lose their phobias. However, the sentences are out
of order now, and they are not in proper paragraph form. Arrange the
sentences into a clear order and copy the paragraphs.
“Losing a Phobia”
Paragraph 1
The fear started when she was four years old.
My sister has ochlophobia, which is the fear of crowds.
She was very upset.
We were in a crowd of people at a fair, and she got lost.
She was lost for four hours before we found her.
Paragraph 2
Every day he goes with her to a crowded place.
Now she is 18 years old.
The first day they didn’t go very far into the crowd.
She is seeing a doctor to help her lose her fear.
She is becoming less afraid every day.
The second day they went a little farther.
The third day they went even farther.
Soon she will be able to live a normal life.
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