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Improving Student Writing Skills
downstairs, where his big brother was already .
scarfing Cheerios.
“Yo, bro. What’s up?” John’s big brother
mumbled.
“I’m up!” John crowed. John heaped two
gargantuan teaspoons of moist brown sugar on
his Cornflakes and grinned, pondering what was
sure to be a splendid day.
Sentence Fluency
Help students notice the repetitious, short sentence
length and the repetition of the first word, I. To revise,
show students how they can vary the sentence structure
by combining two or more sentences using commas.
Make sure your revision also deals with the issues of first
word and sentence length.
Voice
Lead students in revising the example to come up with a
version similar to the following:
Once upon a time there was a cow named Betsy.
Betsy stood around all day eating grass and thinking
about nothing in particular. She liked eating grass
but couldn’t help thinking there was something
missing in her life. So Betsy decided to take over the
world.
Organization
After revising, the class should come up with a paper
similar to the following:
Skateboarding is an activity many students enjoy
and, despite the fact that some think it can be .
dangerous, should be allowed on the school .
playground. Allowing skateboards on the playground
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