9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Level 6 – A
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Establishes a controlling idea that childhood places can have a profound impact on … a
person’s view of life. The response reveals an in-depth analysis of both texts, making insightful
connections between the controlling idea and the ideas in each text (Whereas the first passage
reveals … the magic of a special place and The setting of these stories … helps to explain
certain sentiments about a location).
Develops ideas clearly and fully, making effective use of a wide range of relevant and specific
evidence from the texts (tree which was killed by lightning, viewing a farm at night, John …
has lived almost exclusively on a farm, the “magical” fog that she remembered). For both
passages, the response shows how the authors’ use of literary elements (Point of view, setting,
theme) develops how a special childhood place can impact a person’s life.
Maintains the focus established by the controlling idea on how childhood places affect a
person. The response exhibits a logical and coherent structure, using point of view, setting, and
theme to organize ideas. The response makes skillful use of transitions (a very different image
and The narration here) to connect ideas.
Is stylistically sophisticated, using language that is precise and engaging (haunts of their
childhood and a more mature perspective), with a notable sense of voice and awareness of
audience and purpose. The response varies structure and length of sentences to enhance
meaning (Although she “grieved as if it had been a person” when she was a child,… many years
later).
Demonstrates control of the conventions with essentially no errors, even with sophisticated
language.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 6 in all qualities.
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