9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Level 4 – C
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Conveys a basic understanding of the documents (There are a number of Different things that
Kill off the manatees … in the United States). The response makes implicit connections between
information and ideas in the text and the assigned task (Sence manatees cannot hear …hit by
passing boaters), but misinterprets some data from the chart (per year increase in manatee
deaths).
Develops some ideas more fully than others, using specific and relevant details from the
documents to discuss why the Florida manatee is endangered (boat motors, becomeing tangled
or ingesting Fishing or crab trap lines, getting caught in Flood gates and canals). The number
of surviving manatees is inaccurate (7000). The response mentions some things that we can do
to help preserve the Florida manatee’s, but discusses only one (“manatee protection areas”).
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on manatee endangerment. The response exhibits a
logical sequence of ideas, first establishing the problem of manatee mortality (There are only
about 7000 manatees … in the United States) followed by a description of “manatee protection
areas” to reduce the decline in population.
Relies on basic vocabulary that is sometimes imprecise (there for “their” and were for
“where”), with little awareness of audience and purpose (there are some things that we can do).
The response exhibits some attempt to vary sentence structure for effect, but with uneven
success (Sence 1976 the Deaths … mostly).
Demonstrates emerging control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (sence, susceptable,
useing), punctuation (floridas manatees; life. and; pneumonia cold), and the random use of
capitalization (Deaths and Boats) that hinder comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 4, although it is somewhat weaker
in language use and conventions.
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