9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Paper – Part B—Level 3 – C
Anchor Level 3 – C
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Conveys a basic understanding of the documents (Many die from … cuts on there back and the
rest are caused by … unknow or natural causes), but mistakenly attributes Beth Wright’s work
to an enviromeatal group. The response makes few connections between information and ideas
in the documents and the assigned task (They say the main cause of there population dropping
is because of watercraft collisions).
Develops ideas briefly, using some details from the text (30 percent of all manatee’s deaths,
2,000 manatees alive, a plan to save the manatees) and making minimal use of the table.
Establishes a focus on the Florida manatee as an endangered species (If you are planning …
watch out for the Florida Manatee’s). The response exhibits a rudimentary structure with some
inconsistencies (Since the Governor … the coalition of enviromental groups … 8 more areas).
Relies on basic vocabulary that is sometimes imprecise (there for “there” and witch for
“which”), with little awareness of audience and purpose (We can only hope for best). The
response exhibits some attempt to vary sentence structure or length for effect, but with uneven
success (Only four countries took that plan in affect … , and Citrus).
Demonstrates a lack of control, exhibiting frequent errors in spelling (comeing, scares for
“scars”, enviromental, partes), punctuation (human. Witch and killed The), grammar (Manatees
are a … creature and coalition … are), and proofreading (to creat to creat and at at) that hinder
comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 3, although it is somewhat weaker
in conventions.
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