9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Part B — Paper Practice – Part Paper B—Level – A 3 – A
Anchor Level 3 – A
Quality
Meaning
Commentary
The response:
Conveys a basic understanding of the text, stating that manatees … should be helped. The
response makes few connections between the text and the task (To help protect Manatees steps
can be taken) and alludes to the table.
Development Develops ideas briefly, using some details from the text (Since the year 1972 … 2,000
remaining, Ninety percent of them have scars … three hundred are killed per year, Govenor
Bob Martinez … proposed protection plans).
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on manatee endangerment and protection. The response
exhibits a logical sequence of ideas, establishing the potential extinction of the manatee,
followed by the reasons manatees die and ways they may be protected, and concluding with an
appeal to the reader. The response lacks a transition between the discussion of how humans are
responsible and how nature (pneumonia) is responsible for the deaths of manatees.
Relies on basic vocabulary, with little awareness of audience (If an ordinary person wated to
help). The response exhibits some attempt to vary sentence structure, but with uneven success
(They can also become entangled in nets which leads … to death also).
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (wated) and punctuation
(1972 the number; has been declining, today; boats motor) that do not hinder comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 3, although it is somewhat
stronger in organization and conventions.
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