9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Level 4 – B
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Conveys a basic understanding of the text, explaining how medicine has changed, things
doctors need to know, and their obligations toward patients. The response makes implicit
connections between information and ideas in the text and the assigned task (patients … need
your utmost care and want someone that they can rely on).
Develops some ideas more fully than others. The response uses specific and relevant details
from the text to discuss knowledge (keep up with new advances and know your own limitations)
and obligations (Patients need care … comfort and security) of doctors. Changes in medicine
since 1928 and the concept of vocation are less developed.
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the core of being a doctor. The response exhibits a
logical sequence of ideas following the order established in the introduction by first presenting
information about changes in medicine and then moving to what … doctors need to know and
their obligations … towards their patients. The response lacks internal consistency in paragraph
3, jumping from social and ethical learning to new advances.
Uses appropriate language, with some awareness of audience and purpose (Since we have been
discussing heath-care workers … their obligations). The response occasionally makes effective
use of sentence structure (One thing has remained unchanged and always will, according to Dr.
Heagarty).
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (proffessions, insite,
limitiations), punctuation (doctor which, learning it, do just), agreement (There has been many
changes, Medical research and technology has come, a doctor’s obligations to their patients),
and usage (shifts in point of view) that do not hinder comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 4 in all qualtities.
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