9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Part B — Paper Practice – Part Paper B—Level – A 6 – A
Anchor Level 6 – A
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Reveals an in-depth analysis of the documents by connecting information from the text (the
population … fewer than 2,000 remaining) and the table (Other human related causes …
fishing lines) to explain the danger to the manatee. The response makes insightful connections
between information and ideas in the documents and the assigned task (In most cases, humans
aid … species … with the Florida manatee, however, this is yet to happen).
Develops ideas clearly and fully, making effective use of a wide range of relevant and specific
details from the documents to discuss humans as the cause of the manatee’s decline (flood gates
and canal locks; litter, poaching; watercraft collisions) and ways to further the welfare of this
species (slow-speed zones, boater education, legal action).
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the manatee as an endangered species and the
effective means to save it. The response exhibits a logical and coherent structure, moving from
a consideration of wildlife on this planet to the plight of the Florida manatee, to efforts
underway to protect it (Florida has ordered … protection plans”). The conclusion reconnects
the manatee with other endangered animals, placing the responsibility for saving it on humans.
Transitional devices are skillfully used (Therefore, In fact, With cooperation and organization).
Is stylistically sophisticated, using language that is precise and engaging (While the incentive …
forced by law to act), with a notable sense of voice (A greater awareness … wonderful animal)
and awareness of audience and purpose (Of course … have unleashed). The response varies
structure and length of sentences to enhance meaning (It is clear, therefore, that human
development and carelessness are leading to the extinction of the manatees).
Demonstrates control of the conventions with essentially no errors, even with sophisticated
language.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 6 in all qualities.
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