9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Part B — Paper Practice – Part Paper B—Level – A 5 – C
Anchor Level 5 – C
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Conveys a thorough understanding of the documents, establishing the dangers manatees face
and the efforts to help them. The response makes clear and explicit connections between the
information and ideas in the documents and the assigned task, observing that while the effert to
protect manatees increases, so does the destructive behavior that harms them.
Develops ideas clearly and consistently, using relevant and specific details from the documents
to explain the several dangers manatees face, from boat related collisions to natural
phenomenon, like the red tide, and then explores the efforts to aid these gentle giants.
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the necessity to come to the defense of the helpless
manatee. The response exhibits a logical sequence of ideas by establishing the problem
(manatees are headed quickly for extinction), describing the many causes for this, seguing into
the efforts to help the manatee, and concluding with a call to combat extinction with wild life
protection. Appropriate transitions are used (second leading cause and Other causes).
Uses appropriate language, with some awareness of audience and purpose (Can humanity find a
solution to the problem?). The response occasionally makes effective use of sentence structure
and length (Despite the glowing sucess of the hospital, rehabilitating these animals is a
daunting task).
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (thier, speices,
technologie, dissapear), punctuation (oceans gentle giants; heart wrenching; red tide also;
rehabilitated,awareness), grammar (one of the most … creature and calfs for “calves”), usage
(cause for manatee deaths), and proofreading (due the) that do not hinder comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 5, although it is somewhat weaker
in language use and conventions.
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