9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Part B — Paper Practice – Part Paper B—Level – A 4 – B
Anchor Level 4 – B
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Provides a reasonable interpretation of the critical lens that establishes the criteria for analysis,
stating that it is the strength of literature to make a statement on the power of situation. The
response makes implicit connections between the criteria and The Things They Carried (to
express the power the war in Vietnam, or any war, held over the soldiers) and Fences (to
display the power … in the inner city, during the midsection of the twentieth century).
Develops some ideas more fully than others, with references to specific and relevant evidence
from The Things They Carried to explain how the author’s confusing and inconsistant structure
mirrors the soldier’s confusion in war. The response is less specific about the conflicts of inner
city African Americans during the 1950’s. The discussion of literary devices is more specific,
giving examples of characterization (inner conflict and moral indifference), sensory images,
and symbolism (fences individuals put up within themselves).
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the idea that literature communicates power. The
response exhibits a logical sequence of ideas, presenting evidence from each work to support
the chosen criteria (the power the war held over the soldiers and The events … would not have
happened the same had “Fences” taken place anywhere else). The response concludes that both
works convey the strong messages Wilson and O’Brien seek to depict.
Uses appropriate language (inner conflict of war and enlightens the audience), with some
awareness of audience and purpose (depicts to the reader). The response occasionally makes
effective use of sentence structure and length (O’Brien appeals to the readers sences … is not
soon to leave the reader).
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (excersize, inconsistant,
acheive) and punctuation (soldiers mangeled, cant, it’s) that do not hinder comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 4 in all qualities.
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