9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Level 4 – C
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Provides a reasonable interpretation of the critical lens, stating when writers write a story they
are not merely writing about people but … include a struggle between … ‘good and evil.’ The
response makes implicit connections between the criteria and both texts (Atticus is on the
‘good’ side … while the people of the town are on the side of ‘evil’ and Golding’s theme is that
all people have animal instincts within them, but society holds these instincts in a dorment
state).
Develops some ideas more fully than others. The response provides specific evidence
connecting the setting to the theme in To Kill a Mockingbird (this struggle is best seen … where
the children are ridiculed at school because their father … is defending a black man), while the
influence of the setting in Lord of the Flies is less specific (as time progresses on the island it
becomes harder and harder to live and follow the … rules of society). The characterization of
Atticus Finch includes his reasoning, while the characterization of Ralph is based on plot
summary.
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the critical lens, concluding the essay stating that the
power struggle that exists between good and evil is one that will continue to be the focus of
literature. The response exhibits a logical sequence of ideas, first interpreting the critical lens,
next discussing the literary devices of setting, theme, and characterization in one paragraph for
To Kill a Mockingbird and in another paragraph for Lord of the Flies.
Uses appropriate language (This setting is extremely citical to the development of the book) that
is occasionally imprecise (their for “there” and on the part of the black man), with some
awareness of audience (Evil is within all of us). The response occasionally makes effecive use
of sentence structure (Ralph, the leader of the good children … to … the leader of the hunters).
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (actuall, alogations,
univesitality) and punctuation (about people but, To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee and the
Lord of the Flies by, novels end) that do not hinder comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 4 in all qualities.
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