9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Level 6 – B
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Reveals an in-depth analysis of the text by emphasizing the unique responsibilities and
awesome burden doctors have, as well as the altruistic motives which have led them to this
great profession. The response makes insightful connections between information and ideas in
the text and the assigned task (doctors must immerse themselves in the scientific advancements,
It is always honorable to ask for help, The final facet … is the personal connection between a
patient and doctor).
Develops ideas clearly and fully, making effective use of a wide range of relevant and specific
details from the text to discuss each obligation mentioned (they opt for a vocation … an,
“idealistic need or calling to serve; Dr. Heagarty advises doctors to have a comprehensive
awareness of their limitations; a doctor vows to act in the patient’s best interest, regardless of
the cost).
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the idea that doctors must always keep in mind their
responsibilities to both the physical and mental/emotional well-being of their patients. The
response exhibits a logical and coherent structure, building from the general to the specific (The
science of medicine … Doctors owe it to their patients to ensure they are up to date).
Appropriate devices and transitions (In spite of the aforementioned burden and To fulfill this
final requirement) are skillfully used.
Is stylistically sophisticated, using language that is precise and engaging, with a notable sense
of voice (present state of sophistication and intensifies to a panic level) and awareness of
audience and purpose. The response varies the structure and length of sentences to enhance
meaning (Patients do not wish … they wish and “Comfort, support, and care,” asserts Dr.
Heagarty, are the basics of proper bedside manner).
Demonstrates control of the conventions, exhibiting occasional errors in agreement (When one
decides … they opt, A doctor … their pride, he/she … their continuing responsibility).
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 6, although it is somewhat weaker
in conventions.
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