9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Part Anchor A — Paper Practice – Part Paper A—Level – A 3 – B
Anchor Level 3 – B
Quality
Meaning
Development
Commentary
The response:
Conveys a basic understanding of the text (The main obligation of Doctors today is to serve the
needs of the patient, not only physical, but emotional also). The response makes superficial
connections between information and ideas in the text and the assigned task (The first thing that
… physical needs of the patient and The next thing … the patients emotional needs).
Develops ideas briefly, using some details from the text (A doctor must be able to show
comfort, care and support to their patients). The response offers some details about how
doctors can meet the emotional needs of their patients in paragraph 3, but fails to develop other
ideas it introduces (the physical needs of the patient and They must also know when to ask for
help and when not to), and contains occasional unjustified assertions (Her fathers methods of
Helping the patients was just common sense and a little Bit of care and There are many
obligations … But there are only two important ones).
Organization Establishes an appropriate focus on the obligations of doctors, but loses focus in paragraph 2,
shifting from patient’s physical needs to Doctor Heagarty’s experiences when she was sixteen.
The response exhibits a rudimentary structure but includes some irrelevancies (her father …
graduated from the University of Georgia in 1929).
Language Use
Conventions
Relies on basic vocabulary that is sometimes repetitive (She shows this, This is shown, A doctor
must be able to show), with little awareness of audience or purpose. The response exhibits some
attempt to vary sentence structure or length, but with uneven success (The next thing that
Doctors need to Do is taking care of the patients emotional needs).
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in apostrophe use (fathers methods
and patients emotional needs), grammar (methods was and doctor … their), and random use of
capitalization (in a Speech, be come a Doctor, a speech Given) that do not hinder
comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 3, although it is somewhat
stronger in conventions.
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