9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
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Anchor Part B — Paper Practice – Part Paper B—Level – A 5 – B<br />
Anchor Level 5 – B<br />
Quality<br />
Meaning<br />
Development<br />
Organization<br />
Language Use<br />
Conventions<br />
Commentary<br />
The response:<br />
Conveys a thorough understanding of the documents, explaining that manatees are affected by<br />
the oftentimes reckless things humans do. The response makes clear and explicit connections<br />
between the information and ideas in the documents and the assigned task, noting that humans<br />
must take responsibility for their actions as well as correct this massive problem.<br />
Develops ideas clearly and consistently, using relevant and specific details from the documents<br />
to discuss human factors that contribute to the endangerment of manatees (90 percent of<br />
manatees … have been afflicted with scars from boats and people have destroyed manatee<br />
habitat), steps that have been taken to alleviate the problem (three hospitals … care for<br />
wounded manatees ), and drawbacks of each effort (expensive undertaking).<br />
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the problem of the manatee. The response exhibits a<br />
logical sequence of ideas, first acknowledging the problem, then addressing its causes<br />
(proliferate use of high-speed water crafts) and current solutions (law suits), and ending with an<br />
appeal for action. Transitions are appropriately used (If even thirty, Thankfully, Other steps).<br />
Uses language that is generally fluent and original (could ever replicate, deaths have escalated,<br />
marine mammals), with evident awareness audience and purpose (our actions affect the world<br />
in lasting ways), but sometimes lapses into personal asides (Math is not a virtue of mine and<br />
Math whiz or not). The response varies structure and length of sentences to control rhythm and<br />
pacing (Unfortunately, getting support in this movement is not a simple task).<br />
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (measely, legistically,<br />
rediculous), use of the hyphen (collision induced, human caused, seventy five), and use of<br />
prepositions (on total and $30,000 a year in each manatee’s food) that do not hinder<br />
comprehension.<br />
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 5, although it is somewhat weaker<br />
in conventions.<br />
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