9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Anchor Paper – Part A—Level 5 – A
Anchor Level 5 – A
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Conveys a thorough understanding of the text, explaining why the obligations of doctors over
the years have remained centered on caring for their patients. The response makes clear and
explicit connections between information and ideas in the text and the assigned task (Not only
must they make a diagnosis … but they must provide comfort, support and care).
Develops ideas clearly and consistently, using relevant and specific details from the text. The
response explains obligations of doctors (staying true to their vocation) and what doctors need
to do (awareness of ones limitations, fight for patient’s best interest, provide comfort for their
patients).
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the role of doctors in providing care for patients. The
response exhibits a logical sequence of ideas, moving from doctor’s obligations to doctors’
attributes, although the distinction between attributes and obligations is sometimes unclear. The
response uses appropriate transitions (Throughout the past sixty years; true to their vocation.
Dr. Heagarty defines a vocation; although health care has improved).
Uses language that is fluent (Patients relied on their doctors … and doctors relied on what they
knew), with evident awareness of purpose (health care has changed … but the obligations of
doctors … has remained the same). The response varies sentence structure to control rhythm
and pacing (In a speech by Dr. Margaret C. Heagarty … workers).
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (perscriptions and
recognise), punctuation (ones limitations and medical care, they), and agreement (attributes …
is and a patient … their) that do not hinder comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 5, although it is somewhat weaker
in conventions.
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