9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
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Anchor Level 6 – B<br />
Quality<br />
Meaning<br />
Development<br />
Organization<br />
Language Use<br />
Conventions<br />
Commentary<br />
The response:<br />
Reveals an in-depth analysis of the documents, stating there are many factors, some natural<br />
and some human induced, that exist as dangers to the health of manatees in the wild. The<br />
response makes insightful connections between information and ideas in the documents and the<br />
assigned task (humans greatly increase the number of manatee deaths, mainly through actions<br />
that people are unaware of).<br />
Develops ideas clearly and fully, making effective use of a wide range of relevant and specific<br />
details from the documents to identify the natural causes from which manatees die (manatees<br />
are susceptible to diseases … caused by cold weather and stress, perinatal deaths) emphasizing<br />
human related deaths and discussing the effectiveness of current actions.<br />
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on the factors that present dangers to manatees. The<br />
response exhibits a logical and coherent structure initiated by a pair of questions (So why …<br />
killed every year? and And why … are the mortality rates not yet declining?). The response<br />
answers the questions by identifying the common environmental factors that result in manatee<br />
mortality and those caused by humans, suggests involving more people … in making the<br />
Florida waters safer places as a solution to the manatee’s decline, and concludes with a<br />
personal plea for a positive outcome. Transitions are skillfully used (That is why and may also<br />
be caught).<br />
Uses language that is fluent (Their inability to recognize … to avoid them), with evident<br />
awareness of audience and purpose (If we are doing so much … doing something about it?).<br />
The response varies structure and length of sentences to control rhythm and pacing (The Truth<br />
is … already established).<br />
Demonstrates control of the conventions with essentially no errors, even with sophisticated<br />
language.<br />
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 6, although it is somewhat weaker<br />
in language use.<br />
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