9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap

Part Anchor A — Paper Practice – Part Paper A—Level – A 5 – B
Anchor Level 5 – B
Quality
Meaning
Development
Organization
Language Use
Conventions
Commentary
The response:
Conveys a thorough understanding of the text, explaining how a doctor must take care of a
patient’s physical well being, as well as to make the patient feel mentally secure. The response
makes clear and explicit connections between information and ideas in the text and the assigned
task (a doctor should know what he or she is doing, ask questions, accept his or her own
limitations, comfort patients).
Develops ideas clearly and consistently, using relevant and specific details from the text to
explain what a doctor’s obligation entails (to be medically compotent, keeping up with medical
advances, your … interest, comfort them when they’re scared).
Maintains a clear and appropriate focus on how a doctor can successfully fulfill his obligations.
The response exhibits a logical sequence of ideas by presenting information about doctors’
competency and knowledge, moving to a discussion of their ethical mandates (needing to fight
for you), and concluding with their need to relate to you as a patient. Appropriate transitions
(For example, However, as well as) are used.
Uses language that is fluent (Moreover, patients should be correct when they assume …
therapeutics), with evident awareness of purpose (A speech … clearly outlines what a doctor
can do). The response varies sentence structure to control pacing (That skill is listening).
Demonstrates partial control, exhibiting occasional errors in spelling (compotent), punctuation
(reasons one, dont, this then), and agreement (a doctor … their, your doctor … They, there’s
three main things) that do not hinder comprehension.
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 5, although it is somewhat weaker
in conventions.
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