9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
9502320 Comp English I Ja06 - JMap
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Anchor Level 6 – B<br />
Quality<br />
Meaning<br />
Development<br />
Organization<br />
Language Use<br />
Conventions<br />
Commentary<br />
The response:<br />
Establishes a controlling idea that reveals an in-depth analysis of both texts, stating that as<br />
people move on in life … strong memories of their youth stay with them as adults. The response<br />
makes insightful connections between the controlling idea and the ideas in Passage I (Even as<br />
she admires California’s beauty, the author misses her former home) and Passage II (John … is<br />
creating the memories which will stay with him always).<br />
Develops ideas clearly and fully, making effective use of a wide range of relevant and specific<br />
evidence. The response discusses the author’s contrast of her present home with her childhood<br />
home in Passage I, which allows the author to reminisce about her childhood. For Passage II,<br />
the response emphasizes the author’s use of description and imagery that brings the reader into<br />
his “childhood place.”<br />
Maintains the focus on memories of childhood places established by the controlling idea. The<br />
response exhibits a logical and coherent structure, first discussing Passage I and an adult<br />
reminiscing about a childhood place and then contrasting that with a discussion of Passage II<br />
and a child creating future memories. Transitions and devices are skillfully used (Even living<br />
with, especially, not only … but also).<br />
Is stylistically sophisticated, using language that is precise and engaging (remembrance of one’s<br />
childhood and imparted to the reader), with a notable sense of voice and awareness of audience<br />
(allow the characters to share their experiences with the reader). Varied length of sentences<br />
enhances meaning (The author in these sections describes how a childhood home can never be<br />
replaced and Through revealing childhood memories … both characters convey messages<br />
about childhood places to the reader).<br />
Demonstrates control of the conventions with essentially no errors, even with sophisticated<br />
language.<br />
Conclusion: Overall, the response best fits the criteria for Level 6 in all qualities.<br />
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