Bailey.Academic_Writing

2.13 Style 107
l) Avoid using two-word verbs such as go on or bring up if
there is a suitable synonym. Use continue or raise.
4. In the following, first underline the examples of poor style and
then rewrite them in a more suitable way:
a) Lots of people think that the railways are getting
worse.
b) Sadly, serious crime like murder is going up.
c) You can’t always trust the numbers in that report.
d) The second thing is that most kids in that district will
become criminals.
e) I think that there’s a big risk of more strikes, disorder
etc.
f) A few years ago they allowed women to vote.
g) Regrettably, the inflation in Russia led to increased
poverty, illness and so on.
h) Some time soon they will find a vaccine for malaria.
i) What were the main causes of the American
Revolution?
5. Rewrite the following paragraphs in better style.
a) These days a lot of kids are starting school early.
Years ago, they began at 5, but now it’s normal to
start at 4 or younger. Why is this? One thing is that
mums need to get back to work. Is it good for the
kids? Jenkins has studied this and says that early