How to Write a Radio Serial Drama for Social Development- PDF
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186 Chapter Thirteen: The Value of Editing<br />
Editing <strong>to</strong> Heighten Scene Momentum<br />
Keeping the momentum going in a scene that is delivering important<br />
message in<strong>for</strong>mation can be difficult, as the following scene illustrates. In this<br />
excerpt from the Pakistani radio series, Sukhi Ghar (Happy Home), a health<br />
worker, Shaista, comes <strong>to</strong> consult an important village member, Chauhdri,<br />
about a scheme <strong>for</strong> providing women with a simple income-generating<br />
business. In the previous episode, Shaista tried <strong>to</strong> convince Chauhdri and his<br />
wife that their ten-year-old daughter, Razia, is <strong>to</strong>o young <strong>to</strong> be engaged and<br />
certainly <strong>to</strong>o young <strong>to</strong> be married. Chauhdri was prepared <strong>to</strong> listen <strong>to</strong><br />
Shaista’s arguments, but his wife was not. (In the interest of space, the name<br />
Shaista has been abbreviated <strong>to</strong> Shai in the script, and Chauhdri <strong>to</strong> Chau.)<br />
Original Version<br />
Edited Version<br />
1. SHAI: Chauhdri, I have <strong>to</strong> consult you.<br />
2. CHAU: Please do.<br />
3. SHAI: I desire <strong>to</strong> start a commercial training<br />
center <strong>for</strong> women in Sukhi Nagar.<br />
4. CHAU: What do you mean, center What<br />
would they do in this center<br />
5. SHAI: Skilled craft work...knitting, sewing,<br />
basket making...things like that.<br />
6. CHAU: They already do that in their homes.<br />
7. SHAI: Yes, but if they were <strong>to</strong> bring their<br />
goods <strong>to</strong> my shop in <strong>to</strong>wn they would<br />
sell easily and make a good side income<br />
<strong>for</strong> the women.<br />
8. CHAU: Why ask me, my son You and the local<br />
women should discuss it.<br />
9. SHAI: I am asking you because we need a<br />
suitable place <strong>for</strong> such a center, and I<br />
would like <strong>to</strong> use your premises.<br />
10. CHAU: That sounds fine. I’ll ask my wife. Our<br />
back yard is vacant. You can use that,<br />
and I’m sure my wife will want <strong>to</strong> be<br />
involved also. But I must warn you of<br />
something...<br />
11. SHAI: What is that<br />
12. CHAU: People here...what they have not done<br />
be<strong>for</strong>e, they hesitate <strong>to</strong> start...they have<br />
suspicions and misgivings.<br />
1. SHAI: Chauhdri, I have <strong>to</strong> consult with you.<br />
2. CHAU: Please do.<br />
3. FX. CHILD SCREAMING. GENERAL<br />
COMMOTION.<br />
4. SHAI: Whatever is that terrible noise<br />
5. CHAU: Just Razia...she’s a very willful child.<br />
Always screaming and carrying on. So,<br />
what did you want<br />
6. SHAI: I desire <strong>to</strong> start a commercial training<br />
center <strong>for</strong> women in Sukhi Nagar.<br />
7. CHAU: What do you mean, center What<br />
would they do in this center<br />
8. SHAI: Skilled craft work...knitting, sewing,<br />
basket making...things like that.<br />
9. CHAU: They already do that in their homes.<br />
10. SHAI: Yes, but if they were <strong>to</strong> bring their<br />
goods <strong>to</strong> my shop in <strong>to</strong>wn they would<br />
sell easily and make a good side income<br />
<strong>for</strong> the women.<br />
11. FX. CHILD CRYING LOUDLY AND<br />
CALLING OUT “NO."<br />
12. SHAI: She doesn’t sound happy, that little<br />
Razia. Is she upset about her<br />
engagement<br />
13. CHAU: She’s always like that when she<br />
contradicts her mother. It is nothing, it<br />
will pass. But...back <strong>to</strong> your idea...why<br />
are you asking ME about it