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204 Chapter Thirteen: The Value of Editing
Konoweeka Page 5 of 10
Episode #8 Draft: #11
Writer: Kiyingi October 1996
63. SSEKA: (AMUSED) You really are determined to
get at me today, aren’t you. Let me leave
you. (LAUGHING)
64. NSUB: How will you go
65. SSEKA: (FAR OFF) Just like this.
66. FX. NOISE OF MANY NEWBORN BABIES.
67. SSEKA: How are you today
68. MRS. S: The children are suffering with the cold.
Since they were born, they have never
worn clothes. (DELIGHTED. SEEING
THE CLOTHES). Thank you very much
indeed.
69. SSEKA: Mrs. Nsubuga sent these to congratulate
you on having twins.
70. MRS. S: It must have been. Where would YOU
get so many clothes from
71. NURSE: (COMING IN) Sir, why don’t you bring
some clothes for your children They have
been naked for two days now
72. MRS. S: He has brought the clothes, nurse.
73. SSEKA: (SPEAKING AT SAME TIME AS MRS.
S.) I have brought the clothes, nurse.
74. NURSE: What about clothes for your wife
75. SSEKA: I thought you were discharging her
today. I did not bring any.
76. NURSE How can she wear the dress she delivered
in We are discharging her tomorrow.
(GOING OFF) So go back home and get
her another dress.
77. SSEKA: (AMUSED) As though it is there!
78. MRS. S: (SORRY FOR HERSELF) You see other
women with different clothes to sleep in,
to change into during the day, but I have
only one in which to sleep and spend the
whole day in.
79. SSEKA: (THOUGHTFULLY) Actually, it
occurred to me to ask Aida to lend you
one of hers.
80. MRS. S: (ANGRILY) Why should she lend me
one
Does the scene end on question or note
of suspense
Is the scene change indicated sufficiently and
clearly through the dialogue
Will the audience know that this speaker
is the nurse
Is there any action developing in this scene, or is
the emphasis on talking