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Chapter Thirteen: The Value of Editing 187
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13. SHAI: I understand. We are all bound by
traditionalism...customs and
conventions. It may take time to shake
them off.
14. CHAU: But, we will listen to the advice of a
prudent person, such as you. We
should adopt that which is
advantageous to us.
15. SHAI: I hope I can help.
16. CHAU: You have helped us understand that
even if we have engaged our 10-yearold
Raiza to be married, we should
defer the marriage till she comes of age.
17. SHAI: Chauhdri Sahib, I hope you can now
convince your wife.
18. NOORI: (ENTERS BREATHLESSLY) My
mother has sent me to get both of you
to come right away.
19. SHAI: We’re coming.
20. NOORI: Razia was trying to jump into the well.
Mrs. Chauhdri held her by one arm,
and sister-in-law held her by the other.
21. SHAI: Come along, Chauhdri Sahib. It is now
imperative that we go. The matter has
apparently become serious.
22. CHAU: This is what happens when you engage
a mere child at a tender age, and the
mother will not listen. Why not allow
time for the boy and the girl to
understand each other Let there
develop discretion between the two
youngsters. No need to hurry.
14. SHAI: I am asking you because we need a
suitable place for such a center, and I
would like to use your premises.
15. CHAU: That sounds fine. I’ll ask my wife. Our
back yard is vacant. You can use that,
and I’m sure my wife will want to be
involved also. But I must warn you of
something...
16. SHAI: What is that
17. CHAU: People here...what they have not done
before, they hesitate to start...they have
suspicions and misgivings.
18. SHAI: I understand. We are all bound by
traditionalism...customs and
conventions. It may take time to shake
them off.
19. CHAU: But, we will listen to the advice of a
prudent person, such as you. We
should adopt that which is
advantageous to us.
20. SHAI: I hope I can help.
21. CHAU: You have helped me understand about
Raiza. Even if we have engaged her at
ten years of age to be married, we
should defer the marriage till she comes
of age.
22. SHAI: Chauhdri Sahib, I hope you can now
convince your wife. I am very worried
about that little girl.
23. NOORI: (ENTERS BREATHLESSLY) My
mother sent me to get both of you to
come right away.
24. SHAI: We’re coming.
25. NOORI: Razia is trying to jump into the well.
Mrs. Chauhdri is holding her by one
arm, and sister-in-law by the other.
Please come.
26. SHAI: Oh, my God. Now perhaps Mrs.
Chauhdri will listen. Quick, Let’s go,
we must save her.
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