How to Write a Radio Serial Drama for Social Development- PDF
How to Write a Radio Serial Drama for Social Development- PDF
How to Write a Radio Serial Drama for Social Development- PDF
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Chapter Thirteen: The Value of Editing 193<br />
The Other Side (original) Page 2 of 3<br />
Episode #1 Draft: #2<br />
<strong>Write</strong>r: Nelson Date: Oc<strong>to</strong>ber 1996<br />
Scene 2:<br />
32. FX. GENERAL MURMUR OF PEOPLE IN A MEETING.<br />
33. PREACHER: (OFF, IN BACKGROUND) And while we’re making our contributions—either here or at the<br />
Health Center, let us think about what we can do <strong>to</strong> protect ourselves and our village from this<br />
same disaster. And there are two things in particular that we can do: The first is, we must s<strong>to</strong>p<br />
cutting down the trees in our area. Without trees, we will lose the soil. And the second thing is,<br />
we should really start <strong>to</strong> think about the size of our families. Sister Maya can help you if you<br />
want <strong>to</strong> know more about how <strong>to</strong> space your children, or how <strong>to</strong> limit the size of your family.<br />
Because, we must face the fact that if we do not do something <strong>to</strong> help ourselves, we <strong>to</strong>o, could<br />
suffer the same fate as the people on the other side of the mountain.<br />
The following, edited version of the script demonstrates how the script was<br />
improved <strong>to</strong> show, subtly, the impact of population size on the environment<br />
rather than simply tell the audience about the link between the environment<br />
and family planning. Several changes were made:<br />
• The dialogue is considerably less didactic. The speeches are shorter and<br />
crisper.<br />
• Listeners are given “hints” about the personalities of various characters—<br />
such as Percy—but they are left with some sense of suspense as <strong>to</strong> how<br />
the characters will develop and the reasons <strong>for</strong> their behavior.<br />
• The message is introduced subtly and in a way that allows audience<br />
members <strong>to</strong> begin <strong>to</strong> think <strong>for</strong> themselves about the possible causes of<br />
the villagers’ problems.<br />
• As the s<strong>to</strong>ry unfolds, the listeners begin <strong>to</strong> build in their own minds a<br />
full picture of the inhabitants, their relationships <strong>to</strong> one another, and the<br />
problems they face. In this way, the characters in the drama become real<br />
people <strong>to</strong> the audience, rather than mouthpieces <strong>for</strong> a didactic message.<br />
The edited script <strong>for</strong> the entire episode is given below <strong>to</strong> illustrate how<br />
the message gradually unfolds over the course of several scenes and how the<br />
various plots show different aspects of the message in a natural manner.<br />
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