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IPCC WGIII Fourth Assessment Report, Second Order Draft
6 A 7 1 7 1 Final sentence seems more general than the bolded sentence. U.S.
Government
(Government of U.S. Department of State)
6 A 7 2 7 4 What does the phrase "the use of the projected investment" mean
here? Was this supposed to say "the wise use of the projected
investment"? It seems as if there is a word or an idea missing here.
(James Dooley, Battelle)
6 A 7 2 0 0 Don't think the second sentence necessarily follows on from the
first - remove therefore?
(Ann Gardiner, AEA Technology)
6 A 7 2 7 4 The sentence starting 'Therefore the use of…' is a bit confusing. It
could be rewritten eg "Therefore, how the $16 trillion, projected to
be needed for BAU energy supply and infrastructure till 2030, is
invested is critical if there is to be significant penetration of low
carbon technologies." or it may need split in two.
(Kirsty Hamilton, Chatham House; UK Business Council for
Sustainable Energy)
6 A 7 2 7 5 To avoid any possible confusion, I would suggest cutting this
sentence in two parts: "Investment… is projected…; taking
advantage of such a capital stock turn-over is critical for the
penetration, etc…"
(Cédric PHILIBERT, International Energy Agency)
6 A 7 2 7 4 The sentences in bold are very important and should be kept here
with some adjustments. However "energy supply" in the sentence
starting with "Therefore the use" seems very broad telling nothing
about the carbon-intensity and nothing about the use of energy and
Expert Review of Second-Order-Draft
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ACC; para to be reordered; see
from UNFCCC.
(4)
Rejected. But
also A-463
the last sentence
was maintened
and amplified.
(4) See ch 4
proposals
TIA in reformulating Accepted. We
replaced
projected by
effective.
(4)
TIA in reformulating Noted and the
full paragraph
will be
redrafted.
(4)
TIA in reformulating Accepted and
the full
paragraph will
be redrafted.
(4)
TIA in reformulating Accepted. See
comment SPM
467A
(4)
REJ; this applies to energy
supply in general
Rejected. The
16 trillion value
is the BAU
investment and
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