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IPCC WGIII Fourth Assessment Report, Second Order Draft
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(Government of European Community / European Commission)
Figure SPM 3, already included in the TS, is not useful in the SPM.
Key message is in the text page 1, lines 12-14 and is diluted in the
figure.
(Government of France)
A 3 0 3 0 Figure SPM 2 does not cary more essential information than the
text page 1, lines 11-12 and could be displaced to the TS. Too
detailed information confuses the main message given inthe text.
(Government of France)
A 3 0 0 0 Figure SPM.2 is complex and hard to understand. Change or delete
the figure. It doesn’t get the message through.
(Government of Sweden)
A 3 0 3 10 Figure SPM 2: The figure is hard to interpret, partly because of
jargon, e.g.,"gross domestic product at purchasing power parity
conversion factors"? (line 9). A simpler caption might also help,
e.g., "Factors underlying energy-related CO2 emission growth at
global scale".
(Government of Environment Canada)
A 3 1 0 0 Table SPM 2 --- My concerns about the meaning of this table (and
its counterparts TS.19 and 11-3) are detailed in my “General
Comments”, specifically: the estimates of achievable mitigation (by
2030) presented in tables SPM-2, TS-19, and 11-3, may not in fact
contribute to mitigation from baseline. The estimated achievable
emission reductions may be absorbed by the energy-intensity
reductions and decarbonization embedded in the SRES B2/WEO
(2004) baselines. If in fact estimated mitigation possibilities can
truly contribute beyond that which is already embedded in the
baseline scenarios, then that should be demonstrated in detail, not
simply assumed.
(Christopher Green, McGill University)
A 3 1 0 0 Figure SPM2 - this is not immediately clear to me. Perhaps if the 0
line was darker it would be clearer that some are decreases (perhaps
even arrows next to the colour blocks)
(Ann Gardiner, AEA Technology)
Expert Review of Second-Order-Draft
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See A-26 REJ: SPM3 is
useful
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See A-26 REJ: SPM2 is
useful – will try
to improve
See A-26 REJ: SPM2 is
useful
See A-26 REJ: SPM2 is
useful – will try
to improve
(1)
See A-26 Not part of
Chapter 1 –
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Chapter 3
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See A-26 Will be
improved
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