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competing with other viable development objectives.’ U.S.
Government
(Government of U.S. Department of State)
31 A 18 16 18 16 To add: ¨.....climate change itself and appropriate or not response
policies...¨
(CRISTOBAL FELIX DIAZ MOREJON, MINISTRY OF
SCIENCE, TECHNOLOGY AND THE ENVIRONMENT)
31 A 18 17 18 19 Replace "positive" by "positively" and "negative" by "negatively".
A key question is whether the climate change and development
policies would really compete or not - or whether different sources
of money will be used for the two purposes.
(Rachel Warren, University of East Anglia)
31 A 18 19 18 19 Firstly, suggest to add after "other vital development objectives" the
followings; "such as poverty, hunger, health as agreed in the
Millenium Development Goals". Then secondly, suggest to pick up
sentences from p. 10, lines 21-24 of TS, i.e. "This leads to the
notion that climate change policies can be considered (1) in their
own right (”climate first”), or (2) as an integral element of
sustainable development policies (“development first”).
Nevertheless, framing the debate as a sustainable development
problem rather than a solely environmental one may better address
the immediate goals of all countries". The purpose of this addition
is to enhance the credibility of the IPCC assessment report,
showing we, experts of climate change, have broad eyes to pay
attention to other important issues and have in our mind to pursue a
good balance among them.
(Mitsutsune Yamaguchi, Teikyo University)
31 A 18 20 18 24 Start the paragraph with a pithier sentence: "Climate policy on its
own will not solve the climate problem."
(Harald Winkler, University of Cape Town)
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A 18 20 19 25 I do not understand this graphic or how these specific quantitative
values were derived. Are these annual emissions caused by these
policies. Or are they a measure of the potential to avoid emissions
through wise policies in these areas? Are these global levels? Over
what time period? Please consider dropping this from SPM as I'm
not sure the average reader of the SPM will be able to quickly grasp
the point trying to be made here.
(James Dooley, Battelle)
Expert Review of Second-Order-Draft
Confidential, Do Not Cite or Quote
UNCLEAR TIA, paragraph
has been
reformulated.
(Ch 12)
ACC TIA, paragraph
has been
reformulated.
(Ch 12)
REJ; too detailed for SPM ACCEPTED,
While paragraph
has been
reformulated,
sentence on
climate /
development
first
(Ch 12)
ACC; try and work in bold part ACCEPTED,
worked into
bold paragraph.
DISCUSS; Fig 7 is very
controversial and has to be
deleted; can we come up with a
table that captures the most
important points (based on the
notes) or simple text?
(Ch 12)
12 ACCEPTED,
Fig 12.7 will be
removed and
replaced by
table with
explanatory
text. .
(Ch 12)
Or by a few
lines in the text.
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