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IPCC WGIII Fourth Assessment Report, Second Order Draft
SPM-14 1 B 1 8 1 8 The word "covered" is ambiguous, as only Annex I emissions are
"covered" by the Kyoto Protocol. A footnote might help to clarify.
(Jean-Pascal van YPERSELE, Université catholique de Louvain
(Belgium))
SPM-15 1 B 1 8 1 8 Change the egining of the sentence to:"Since the preindustrail era
global emissions ..."
(Government of Switzerland)
SPM-16 1 B 1 8 1 15 This paragraph is incomplete in that it provides Annex 1 countries’
share of world population (20%) and GHG emissions (46%) but
does not provide their share of other global metrics, such as
economic output that are equally if not more relevant. This results
in a misleading comparison. Also, why no indication of GHG
emissions intensity over the period, which is many ways a more
useful measure? U.S. Government
SPM-
130
SPM-
131
SPM-
132
(Government of U.S. Department of State)
1 A 1 9 1 9 I suggest to change source by gas emission in the following
manner: ¨....being the largest gas emission , having grown by
about....¨
(CRISTOBAL FELIX DIAZ MOREJON, MINISTRY OF
SCIENCE, TECHNOLOGY AND THE ENVIRONMENT)
1 A 1 9 1 10 "increased by more than 50%, with CO2, being the largest source,
having grown by about
60%", there are conflicts between this sentence (two figure 50%
and 60%) and the chapter1 P9L47 (75%and87%). Please carefully
check them and correct to be consistent.
(Government of China Meteorological Administration)
1 A 1 10 1 11 please write '... increases in GDP per capita and in population have
outweighted ...' because from Fig SPM.2 we see that recently (and
this is the more interesting period), i.e. 1993 - 2003, the wealth
influence was higher than the one from population growth. On page
16, lines 2 and 3 of Chapter 1 is already the 'correct' order.
(Manfred Treber, Germanwatch)
Expert Review of Second-Order-Draft
Confidential, Do Not Cite or Quote
Response suggested by cochairs
Action
for
chapter
Considerations
by the writing
team
REJ
prescriptiveness.
See SPM-125
(1)
REJ; no reliable data and not
needed
REJ: Data
presented start
in 1970
Identical A-127 REJ: See SPM-
127
(1)
REJ; not good English Agree with TSU
(1)
ACC; make fully consistent
with ch 1
(1)
1 ACC
(1)
TIA in reformulating sentence Agree with TSU
(1)
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