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IPCC WGIII Fourth Assessment Report, Second Order Draft
1 A 1 10 1 12
and Technology)
This wording for policy-makers should be modified and simplified,
with less reliance on technical terms from economics. Surely GHG
emissions are not directly caused by GDP per capita or reduced by
less energy use per unit of GDP; they are caused by absolute
increases in fossil fuel consumption and other anthropogenic
emissions. GDP represents one way in which to characterize these
nett increases.
(Stephen Sheppard, University of British Columbia)
1 A 1 10 1 15 This section needs to make its POINT and not get bogged down in
metrics. It mixes too many ratios and message is unclear. It needs
to say in layman’s terms that emission growth has continued
despite significant achievements in reducing emissions/energy
intensity (i.e. the SPM states a 40% decrease in C02
emissions/GDP) because of: population growth, economic growth
and the carbon intensity of energy supply (the drivers of this
emission growth). Let Figure SPM2 deal with technical terms.
Change to: "This has occurred because increases in population and
GDP per capita have outweighed, particularly in some countries,
significant decreases in energy use per unit of GDP". If “carbon
intensity of energy did not change much” means that energy is still
predominantly fossil fuel based, state this in clear terms.
(Government of Environment Canada)
1 A 1 10 1 15 specify growth CO2 emissions from fossil fuel use
(Government of The Netherlands)
1 A 1 10 1 12 The sentence "This has occurred …….. change much" may be
modified as .. .."This has occurred because increases in population,
GDP per capita and energy intensive consumption behavior have
outweighed decreases in energy use per unit of GDP, while carbon
intensity of energy did not change much".
(Government of India)
Expert Review of Second-Order-Draft
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Response suggested by cochairs
TIA; use “economic activity” in
stead of GDP
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REJ: TSU and
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TIA in reformulating Agree with TSU
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text suggested
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See A-134 See preceding
comment SPM-
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TIA in reformulating See comment
SPM-137
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SPM- 1 A 1 10 1 0 Stating emissions growth since 1970 might be misinterpreted. REJ; too technical REJ: Math is
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